NEW FF- PIRIYATHA VARAM VENDUM PART 5 CLIMAX UPDATED,PG 10 - Page 6

Created

Last reply

Replies

93

Views

17.2k

Users

17

Likes

303

Frequent Posters

shiningstar77 thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Sparkler Thumbnail Networker 1 Thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
#51
oruthavanga irukara varaikum avangaloda arumai puriyathunu nalla purinjukiten, puriya vechutanga en APPA AMMA...nanum purinjukiten
neeyum thalli poi ninnu enaku atha marubadi unarthatha raji...
tears from his eyes wet her hand...

wow...enna lines ithu...very true..😳.


nee thappa unarndhuta nu enaku puriyudhu... manika mudiyatha thappu onnum nee panidla... apdi patha nan kooda thaan
susan ku aniki thappu paninen... prachana athu ila
indha vishayam nu ila..oru prachana vandhuchuna atha epdi solve panrathunu thaan pakanum..orutharuku oruthar yaravathu thappu panina
aaruthala irukanume thavara...kuthi kaati vedhana padutha koodathu... nee vedhana paduthinathoda... na venamndra mudivuke vandhuta.
athu epdi apdi oru mudivu nee edupa...??...avasarathulayum aatharathulayum edukara mudivu kandipa thappa thaan irukum karthik

ithu raji's feelings mattum illai...engalaloda feelingsum than ...

Dhivya...ella dialoguesayum paarthu paarthu perfecta eluthirukeenga...GREAT JOB...👏👏
shiningstar77 thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Sparkler Thumbnail Networker 1 Thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
#52
@Dhivya...eppadi storya neenga mudika poreenganu romba aaravama kaathukittu iruken...
update soon...😛

n dont forget to write another FF after this great job...its my request,pls😊
Gayathri30 thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
#53
Firstly thanks for updating as you said. I loved this part karthik saying sorry the dialogues wrre apt could imagine it happe ing...

raji her asking those questions 100% correct
Her fear was correctly portrayed and karthik not being able to answer felt sorry for him
Your writing of the dialogues were simply super well done

hope raji and karthik reunite soonn... waiting for thursday thanks
Gayathri30 thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
#54

Originally posted by: shiningstar77

n dont forget to write another FF after this great job...its my request,pls😊[/DIV]



I second that shiny 😊 dhivyaa please do start another ff
Archana03 thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Voyager Thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
#55
Hi dhivya... gud start matching the current office serial..
In fact I thought it will be nice if it happens in serial but
For sure it won't happen... so u continue ur story... all the best..

Waiting for d next update...
dhivya8 thumbnail
10th Anniversary Thumbnail Navigator Thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
#56
thanks all😊
ll start a new ff soon 😊
dhivya8 thumbnail
10th Anniversary Thumbnail Navigator Thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
#57
PART 4


k was sitting all alone in his home... recollecting wat r spoke in the hopital
k thought hard and concluded that he can win raji's heart only by kindling her possesiveness on him..
he dint want to do that,, but he had no other go,.. to make her realize the love he has for him.. he must do that...

he contacted lakshmi and sought her help...lakshmi was working in other company
karthik appointed her as his PA in VDATA...

r was n leave and lak started early dat day... r asked where was she going and lak answered dat she s gonna join her company..
raji scolded her for not informing this to her earlier..and congratulated her..
r : nee munadiye solirukalamla...
lak : ila paravala d,, no prob..
r hugs lak, and wish her all success
lak : hey nee thaniya manage panipa la?? na venumna leave podava??
r : hey motha naale va leave poduva, na pathukaren lakshmi, iniki naane office vara vendiyathu, vishwanathan sir strict varakoodathunu soltaru
athaan...
lak : ok dear,,take care...
r : hey epo interview elam attend panina? neriya competition irundhurukume??
lak : athelam ila d..directaa boss select pantaru..
r : directaa va?? yaru?? vishwanathan sir aa
lak : cha cha un boss ila..en boss..
r : un boss a??
lak : karthik boss...
r shockd..
l : avaruthaan avaroda PA va enna sethukitaru...
time aaguthu raji na kalambren byeee
r doesnt like the last sentence she uttered...she hated her regarding him as BOSS...
periyaaa karthik boss...she imitated her and started cursing him
r : PA va paiyana vechukka koodathunu sattam iruka enna?? indha aambalaingale ipdi thaan...
manipu ketane..inoru tharava keta koranja povan?? athukula aalu select pani velaila erangitan korangu...
cha ipdi thaniya polamba vitutane...
r kept on speaking to herself...


lak comes in two wheeler and by mistake while parking her scooty she hit a car..
it started raising alarm...vishnu rushed to that place , ...
lak was irritated to meet him again..
lak mind voice : poyum poyum ivan car ah ya idichom,...cha
v : pochu pochu en car pochu yarathu idichathu...idichutu oditiya..dhairiyam irundha vaada...dei engada pona
he started shouting...
lakshmi munadi scene podalam nu sound jaasthiyave vittan vishnu
lak : hello nanthaan idichen...sry ...
she apologised unwillingly
v : enanga neengala idicheenga???? v reduced his voice//
lak : aamanga sry theriyama idichuten..evlo aagumnu solunga na pay panidren...
v : chi chiii car ku onnum ilanga summa scratch thaaan...
lak : enga poi solreenga..indha velaiyelam venam...ipo kaasu venam nu soltu indha sapppa saaka vechu pinadi ,propose panlam,kooda suthalam
nu plan elam pota enaku pudikathu...olunga evlo aachunu solunga
v : hellloo ena neenga patu pesreenga...apdi endha idea vum enaku ila..na pathukaren neenga polam
lak : onnum theva ila..thappu en mela..amountaa solunga...
v : hmmm 50,000 kudunga
lak : 50,000 aa?? enanga pagal kollaiya iruku??? itha vechu na pudhu scootye vanguvene
v : aana na puthu car vanga mudiyathey..summa kathinala..kaasa kudu
lak doesnot know wat to do...athuvandhu srynga..iniki thaan modha naal vela..oru maasam olaichutu..samabalatha kuduthudren sryngaa
she pleaded now..
v : oru maasathukula varla ...meter vaddi poduven..athu kutti podum..ithelam manasula vechuko puriyudha
he ordered
lak mind voice : avan po sonape pesama poirukalamo...avasarapatutiye lakshmi cha...
vl left the place...


r couldnt be in home after hearing that lak was k's PA..she bathed, dressed up and rched office...
lak was in k's room...
lak : ithu workout aaguma karthik???
k : i hav no other go... neenga cooperate panina nalla irukum, plz
lak : i hav absolutely no prob karthik...
k : ipo PA nu sonathum nambitala?? ethavathu difference therinajatha ava face la??
lak : ava onum react panla karthik.. na sonatha ketalanu kooda theiryala..un pera sonnale gaandagara...
k was upset hearing ds... he put his face down..
lak : vidu karthik pathukalam..
k nodded his head and looked outside and his face gloomed...raji was entering the office...
his joy knew no bounds...
she dint go to her room instead she was looking at his room, he can clearly see that,,.
he said that to lakshmi and both came outside...on seeing them coming outside, she doesnot know how to react
so she simply sat on the chair nearby, fixing her eyes on them...
they acted as if they are planning to improve the company revenue, and paid no concentration on her...
she was ignored...she dint like t...she dint like her husband talking to another lady..,and ignoring her...
she thought f grabbing his collar and shouting at him... but she couldnt..k was enjoying dat sight..
k and lakshmi was shaking hands...dats all...she couldnt take dat anymore and went furiously inside her room..
they both gave a HI-Fi as their plan worked well...


canteen

lr are eating,, k comes,signals l...
l : excuse me raji..boss vandhurukaru, if u dont mind na avaroda ukandhu saapdaren,
saying this she gets up..
r : i do mind...
r said sternly
l : wat?????
r : dont u hear me??? I DO MIND...
l : but u divorced him..then why do u mind ??
r : its not because of him...we r good friends..n we are eating together...how can u suddenly join ur boss leaving me all alone.??
l : its not like dat raji..this is my frst day..so i hav to create a gud impression..i hav no other go..m sry
r : r u sure...
l : m sorrry..i dont mind,,if u mind...
saying ds l leaves...raji bangs the table...
l reaches k's table and feels bad...
l : pavam karthik ava..
k : enakum kashtama thaanga iruku,, vera enna seiya


v joins r

v : ennana raji unga munnal kanavanum , unga innaal friendum onna ukandhu saapadranga enna vishesham??
r : avalum munnaal friend thaan..
v : enga enachu nallathaana pesitrundhenga
r : ava yarunu theiryuma
v : unga friendu... r stares... v : seri unga munnaal friendu...
r : vilayadatheenga vishnu,,ava thaan karthik oda PA..
v : enathu PA va??? r : aama
v : enanga ithu epo la irundhu??
r : iniki la irundhu thaan...
v : adapaviii paaka rough and tough aa irundhu panra velaya parunga
r : en pasangala elam PA va vechuka koodathunu ethana rule iruka enna??
v : raji ivanuku matum enga irundhu raji amayudhu?...raji avan ungala verupetha ne indha velaya pakran raji
r : avan eva ta pesina enaku enna??...
v : aana paavam paiyan matinan,,athu seriyana thimiru pudicha ponnunga..
r : apdi elam illa...
v : aana thimiru irundhalum paaka azhaga latchanama thaan iruku..karthik machakaran..
r : ipo enna sola varenga??
v : ila PA amaivathellam iraivan kodutha varam...v sings
l coughs,...k taps her head...r fumes... goes away from the place...
k laughs and follows raji...
now v joins lakshmi..
l : enna
v : onum ila ethuku thaniya ukandhu oru table waste pananumnu inga vanten..
l gets up..
v : neenga ukaralam na thappa eduthuka maten
l stares..
v : enga neena committed ah??
l : enathu?
v : ungaluku aalu iruka?/
l : iruku... lak lied to him...
v : avaruku enoda aazhndha anuthabangala therivichudunga...saying this...v leaves
l gets angry and looks at v



next day ...celeb @ office..all in traditional dress

k was excited to c his wife in saree, he was getting ready in pattu veshti satta..
lak was dressing up but r wasnt interested, r was in formal wear..
lak asked the reason,, as she was not interested ...she dint compel her..
lak and raji reached office...
on seeing lakshmi,vishnu widely opened his mouth...before l noted him,, he closed his mouth..
k was watinggg to see raji n saree and to his disappointment, she wasnot wearing saree,.. k went to his room
vishnu completely ignored lakshmi and lakshmi felt strange...she wanted him to immerse in her beauty but he dint..
lak mind voice : ivana purinjukave mudiyalaiye..
r was testing k whether he is feeling for her or not..
k came outside..went towards lakshmi and praised her beauty...
v was fuminggg so does raji..
k and l took selfie,..they were posing.,,
k : podavai la ivlo azhaga na yarayume paathathila
lak : thanks boss
k : boss elam venam nee karthik ne kooopdalam..
their conversation went on,, raji went to her room..
the celebration started and was organised by vishnu
lakshmi was looking at him, the sense of humour he has, has definitely affected her..
she kept on looking at him , d way he keeps everyone happy, d way he mingles with everyone..
and vishnu saw her ...went near her...
v : enna mulungara mari pakara
l : apdilaam ilaye..
v : athaan na pathene
l remained silent..
v : pudichuruka?
l : ennathu
v : events pudichuruka?
l : hmmm
v : events nadatharavangala?
l : pudichuruku
v : thanks...
l : na ungala solala
v : athuku thaan thanks...
again she started fuming,... dey were like tom and jerry, v was north pole n lak was straight opposite,, but opposie pole attracts each other
both dint know whethere they like each other or hate each other...

r came out of the room, lak became happpy, raji was all dolled up in a black designer saree, her colour tone was white
and the black saree added to her beauty, lak reached her and hugged..
lak : hey en kanne patrum raji ,..alra po
r laughs
lak : hey kedi,, enta interest ila ila nu soltu ..podavaiya eduthutu vandhiya neenu
r laughs again
lak : hey enake una sight adichute irukanum pola iruku d., iniki pavam paiyan gaali
r : yaara solra
lak : ila ila pothuva office la irukra pasangala sonnen ma,,enna aala vidu,.
raji's eye searched for her hubby, lakshmi's compliments doesnt matter to her..
she wanted her hubby to praise her... her eyes was searching for him...but culdnt find him

v came near r
v : enanga neengalum podava mathiteengala?
r : aama en vishnu?
v : ila summathaan keten
nalla iruku raji ungaluku podava, apdiye oorkara ponnu mari latchanama irukenga
r : sonnalum solalanalum oorkara ponnu thaana., thanks vishnu
v : sari vanga events la participate panlam...
r was disappointed ..she thought that karthik had left the place...
but she dint note karthik who was just staring at her, from d corner of the room,as if eating her through his eyes ..
he wanted to hug her immedidately and kiss her continuously...his wife was looking like an angel...
and he felt bad as he culdnt express dat to her directly...she was more pretty n saree than he imagined...
his mind wavered, his wild imaginations starts to mount,,..he wanted her in his arms rite now,..he culdnt control his emotions..
the loud applauding noise broke all his imaginations and he reached the place where the celebrations were going on...
raji was searching for karthik...
at the same time karthik was busy perlustrating her beauty...
he knew that if he stares her his conscience will b overpowered by the uncontrollable feeling ignited inside him,,
so he wantedly averted his gaze from her...
all those who were present praised her beauty but she wasnt satisfied...
her thought was filled with the remembrance of a similar day,,,,few months back...

/**************************
raji : amma...ammmaaa inga vaayen...itha seri panni vidu
amma : seriya thaan iruku raji..ethana tharava seri panuva..
raji : amma na nalla irukena..
amma : en kanne patudum pola... en raasaathii...
raji : en friendsku elam pudikuma amma???
amma : ipothaan motha tharava podava katra mari panra.. enachu unaku??
raji : ila office ku motha tharavala athaan...
amma : apdiye kalyana ponnu mari iruka da ... pothuma??
raji : kalyanam elam venam...ponnu paka varapa irukara mari irukena???.
amma : apdi thaan kannu iruka...
raji : apdina paiyanuku pudikuma???...
amma : enathu?????
raji : ila ila...onum ila...
amma : hmm nee onnum seri ila...
raji : amma,..na poitu varen...
raji was super excited,...she has worn sari many times,, but today she was very much concerned with her looks...
she reached vishnu's home,..
raji : vishnu...vishnu...time aaguthu vishnu...office la pooja aarambichuduvanga...vishnu...
vishnu : ulla vanga raji...oru two mins...sry sry
raji entered...she wandered here and there...suddenly karthik came from a room...
both looked at each other...
butterflies were flying inside raji's stomach..and karthik was astounded...
both remained silent...
k held her hand and dragged her to a room...
raji was locked inbetween his arms.,, she was breathing heavily...
k : raji... he said huskily...
k : podavaila epdi epdilam iruka koodatho apdi apdi elam iruka d...
r's cheeks turned pink...
k : apdiye thaali katirava??
r : katiru..
k : en kooda kootitu poirava???
r : kootitu poiko...
k laughs...
k : selaila kovilpati azhagu konjam thookalave iruku...
r : seri vaa polam...
k is not leaving her...
k : avlo seekram elam po mudiyathu ma...
saying this he luks at her lips,, goes near..
r escapes...
r : poitene ...ipo enna panuva???...
k laughs...

***********************/
r is worried...
she left the office disappointed...
r reached home...she went to the terrace and stared at the sky..
r mindvoice : avana vitu tholaiva vandhachula apram en avanta yaravathu pesina ethuka mudiyala??
en avana thedi manasu poguthu??
nejamave namalala avan ilama iruka mudiyuma??
ilana iruka mudiyumnu namalaye namma emathikaroma??
kadavule enaku oru vazhi sollu...
DO I STILL LOVE HIM??

yes!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! she heard a voice...
she was shocked and turned to luk at the owner of the voice...


to be continued...

sry for dragging this part,
i culd hav written better, but i assure u that next part wl b good
thanks and pudichurundha plz let me know...
ilanalum kandipa solunga..

Edited by dhivya8 - 10 years ago
Gayathri30 thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
#58
Thank you pavithra😊
omg loved this update hahahaha, the jealously card always plays well with KR soo cute, karthik using lakshmi to wind raji up and get her feelings out was simply superb. Karthi feeling when lakshmi said she is getting angry whenever she mentions his name and him getting upset could feel the emotions 😊

VL scenes so nice, completely different and vishnu as his usual self this dialogue "pochu pochu en car pochu yarathu idichathu...idichutu oditiya..dhairiyam irundha vaada...dei engada pona"🤣
i could actually imagine him saying that. loool.

Celebration day, karthik wanting to see raji come in saree the whole scene and the flashback scene was all nice to see. the flashback scene was too cute😉 karthik romba kurumbu thaan.
Lastla who came? waiting for next update😳
Gayathri30 thumbnail
11th Anniversary Thumbnail Dazzler Thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
#59
the dialogues and the emotions portrayed in your story was perfect, the story is absolutely fine 😊once again thanks for the update😃
dhivya8 thumbnail
10th Anniversary Thumbnail Navigator Thumbnail
Posted: 10 years ago
#60

Originally posted by: Gayathri30

the dialogues and the emotions portrayed in your story was perfect, the story is absolutely fine 😊once again thanks for the update😃



thank u thank thank u for the immediate response,..thanks a lot
actually gayathri i sent 2 msgs to u,,,but alert msg vandhuduchu,.. m sry..
25 post kamiya irundha i cant send more thaan 10 pm it seems,..

thanks again...

@shiningstar77 i sent a pm to u too reg the update, ...
sry but it dint get delivered...

Related Topics

Top

Stay Connected with IndiaForums!

Be the first to know about the latest news, updates, and exclusive content.

Add to Home Screen!

Install this web app on your iPhone for the best experience. It's easy, just tap and then "Add to Home Screen".