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Posted: 11 years ago
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@ muthu... thanks for your valuable feedback...

actually., even I felt it later that the words used might have given wrong sense... 'that his happiness is his daughter now' nu.. it was supposed to mean that., 'he is very happy now with her daughter around' and NOT she is his only happiness...

There is no such gap between KR.. I thought of revealing it later.. probably next part will have more of Raji..

Thanks again for ur genuine thoughts.. I've taken it as a proper feedback... 😊

Keep supporting me...
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: ramyvijay

@ muthu... thanks for your valuable feedback...

actually., even I felt it later that the words used might have given wrong sense... 'that his happiness is his daughter now' nu.. it was supposed to mean that., 'he is very happy now with her daughter around' and NOT she is his only happiness...

There is no such gap between KR.. I thought of revealing it later.. probably next part will have more of Raji..

Thanks again for ur genuine thoughts.. I've taken it as a proper feedback... 😊

Keep supporting me...


Great! Your optimism and receptive attitude simply amaze me. Have noticed such a positive reaction from you to a few other constructive feedback as well in this forum. Keep up this wonderful attitude, am sure it will take you places. Cheers.
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Posted: 11 years ago
#83
@Ramya:You are to the right point..Yes..
Ennaku romba pidichaa song..love you for that..

Ennaku silaa nostaligic memories ellam you have given by this name..Thanks for that...

As usual you rock..

Silaa neraam time irukradhulaa..thapaa ninaichukadheenga..Will try commenting actively...


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Posted: 11 years ago
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Originally posted by: Nankri

Waiting for the next part



Just now I updated another FF, so this might take another 2 days..
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Posted: 11 years ago
#85
Hello Friends... with the feedback from you readers., I thought of bringing in a change in a scene of the previous chapter..

You would have guessed by now...

Yes., it is about the bonding between the kid and the father..

Thanks to muthucheenu and sathya who made me think upon again on that scene...

Next post have the revised version, with the text highlighted in pink has the changes... the rest are the same portion...

Let me know if you find any flaws or confusions here...

Edited by ramyvijay - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
#86
Kaadhal enum maaya valai

Part 3 : (revised version)

Worried Karthik doesn't know what to do.., sat beside his daughter and kept trying Raji's number.. She didn't pick it up..

As her program got extended, she thought of apologizing in person rather than attending the call...

It was time for the maid to leave but she is concerned on baby's health and said that she will stay back that night...

But Karthik had hope that Raji will definitely come as said as it's their daughter's birthday.


Karthik gives the child to the maid and says that he'll be back soon.. But the child wanted to be with her father not allowing him to leave..

'syrup stock illa nu sollirundhaanga.. ippo vandhirukkum.. vaangittu varalaam nu kelambunaa..'

'avlodhaane.. naan poi vaangittu vandhiduren' maid says...

He then tells her the location of the medical shop and hands her the prescription and money...

The caretaker goes out to get medicine and she saw Angel on her way back and when she inquired, the lady stated that the kid is fallen sick...


'ennamaa... velai mudinju veettuku poittu irukkeengalaa? '
, Angel

'illamaa.. Sara kutty ku udambu sariyilla.. marundhu vaangi kuduthuttu poven' she says..

'oh... ennaachu? '


She says the condition of Sara..

On hearing that, Angel closes her eyes for a minute and prays for her recovery...

Maid goes and gives the syrup and takes leave...
He gives the syrup and made his kid sleep..

Now Angel on her way back., thought of visiting the sick child... But she was double minded as if it would be nice to go now..

She somehow decides to go.. as its on her way home..


Karthik who was in half sleep, gets up and opens the door hearing the calling bell.

'vaa Raji... nee vandhiduva nu kandippaa theriyum..'
saying so he looks at the person standing in front of him..

'Angel... nee eppadi? ' asks in confusion...

But she entered moving him aside without answering him...

Angel touch the kid and feels the fever.. Sara was sleeping as she took the medicine...


Angel signals Karthik not to speak anything and she comes out after some time when the child is into deep sleep...

Now the fever has come down.

'ippo paappaa ku paravaa illai karthik..'
, Angel

'romba thanks Angel.. nee paakka vandhadhukku'


'nee thanks sonnaa enakku pidikkaadhu nu theriyum la? ' she says...

After a pause, she says 'late aayiduchu karthik.. naan kelamburen'

His face changes and asks her if she could stay back...

'illa Karthik... adhu sarivaraadhu...'

'ippa thaniyaa poga koodaadhu... naanum ivala thaniyaa vittuttu vandhu unna drop pannavum mudiyaadhu... better you stay back..' ,
Karthik

'aanaa Rajiii... ?' Angel

'Raji vandhaa naan deal pannikkuren.. ' Karthik

'naan velila paduthirukken.. edhaavadhu venumnaa kooppidu'
saying so he closes the door keeping it open slightly..


Next Day morning :

Karthik asleep in the sofa.. as he slept late.. He wakes up when the maid rings the bell...

'Paappaa ku ippa eppadi thambi irukku?

'cha... romba neram thoongitteno? ' saying so he walked towards their room..

He is stopped by the voice from kitchen.,

'naanga inga irukkom...'
Angel with cup of milk feeding Sara..

'Daddy ku good morning sollu' she says...

Sara just folds her hand and greets him..

Karthik was very happy to see his chutti daughter back..

'oh.. nee paakka vandhiyaamaa... ? naandhaan thambi ivangala nethu paarthu sonnen..', maid..

'oh.. appadiyaa ? ', Karthik

Angel just smiles and brings Sara and pass on to Karthik

She has made sweet for her birthday..

'nethu paappaa voda birthday... kutty ku innaikku fever illala... so... Birthday kondaadalaamaa?'

'hmmm... cake..' Sara kutty is excited...

'nee Daddy kooda poi... ready aayitu vaa.. naan ready panniduren..' she says..

She then keeps that kesari in a bowl, turned it upside down on a plate.. and made her cut..

Sara was like a doll in that dress..

The maid is also super happy on seeing the kid happy and likes Angel as well..,

'kesari ya ve cake aakkittamaa.. pramaadham'


Though Karthik is happy about Sara and her happiness., he misses his wife Raji at this time..

Angel then takes leave as she has to leave for work.. When she was about to step out, Karthik calls her...

'un number sollu' by having his mobile ready to her number..

'edhukku Karthik..?'

'unkitta konjam pesanum' he says

'adhellaam vendaam..'

'I have to.. un ammaa va pathi...'
she is stopped by his words


to be continued...




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Posted: 11 years ago
#87
Dear Ramy, you're simply chanceless. You're amazing, this update is very nice, upholds our KR's love. cheers. 👏
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Posted: 11 years ago
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The revised portion sure does make it better!! 😉


Looking for a soon update!


Look in your PM! 😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
#89
Next part will be updated today... if not tomorrow..
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Ramya sis, hats off to you dear 👏. This is your story , you can just give us the next update without the revised version. But you didnt and its shows us that you care about our feelings and feeback. Love you sis ❤️ Thanks dear.😊

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