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Posted: 5 years ago

Okay, so I have edited the second chapter... Do check and tell me if it is okay or not...

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Posted: 5 years ago

Originally posted by: Nikki_srk

Okay, so I have edited the second chapter... Do check and tell me if it is okay or not...

Where have you edited it? Is it in the Piyansh thread or somewhere else?

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Posted: 5 years ago

Originally posted by: nushy1995

Where have you edited it? Is it in the Piyansh thread or somewhere else?

The new post that you made for the TS...

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Posted: 5 years ago

Found it.

Edited by nushy1995 - 5 years ago
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Posted: 5 years ago

It's perfect! smiley31


The terrace was full of plants of different species. The walls were covered with creepers... It looked more or less like a small botanical garden. "The last time I saw so many plants was when Piya was possessed by Visharika..." Ansh was surprised. He started looking for Piya and finally found her sitting in the centre on a small seat, talking to a small plant and making it grow bigger by her powers.


However I think you should change the bold line a bit too. Like the hair part - you said he was trying to sound normal and showed excitement.


So here you could write that he felt a chill down his spine but tried to ignore it and stay positive or something like that. I mean, let's make it like he was trying hard to neglect the possibility of Piya's transformation but the blue scratch was the last nail in the coffin. smiley15

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Posted: 5 years ago

Originally posted by: nushy1995

It's perfect! smiley31


The terrace was full of plants of different species. The walls were covered with creepers... It looked more or less like a small botanical garden. "The last time I saw so many plants was when Piya was possessed by Visharika..." Ansh was surprised. He started looking for Piya and finally found her sitting in the centre on a small seat, talking to a small plant and making it grow bigger by her powers.


However I think you should change the bold line a bit too. Like the hair part - you said he was trying to sound normal and showed excitement.


So here you could write that he felt a chill down his spine but tried to ignore it and stay positive or something like that. I mean, let's make it like he was trying hard to neglect the possibility of Piya's transformation but the blue scratch was the last nail in the coffin. smiley15

Chalo theek hai... Ise bhi change kar dete hain. 😈

Give me two minutes...

Edited by Nikki_srk - 5 years ago
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Posted: 5 years ago

Okay, I have added a line or two... Although, I am not fully satisfied with it.

Do check and let me know what exactly should I put there...

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Posted: 5 years ago

Originally posted by: Nikki_srk

Okay, I have added a line or two... Although, I am not fully satisfied with it.

Do check and let me know what exactly should I put there...

It's okay! 👍🏼

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Posted: 5 years ago

Chalo... Phir theek hai.

Finally editing business complete...

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Posted: 5 years ago

Originally posted by: Nikki_srk

Chalo... Phir theek hai.

Finally editing business complete...

Yup! Aur waise bhi, we still have time. Agar editing ka keeda kat le, kabhi bhi edit kar sakti ho. 😎


I am quite annoyed right now, I saw the forum ranking. It was stuck in a place forever and suddenly today Jinn is higher than Nazar. I mean how in the freaking world? They have almost deserted that forum since lockdown started. 🤬

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