Sau Dard Hai - My New RS (NOTE on Pg 51)

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Na1na

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Posted: 13 years ago

#51

Originally posted by: neetha
awesoem update nimmi..anya n pain was well portrayed..do continue

thanq neetha! glad u lyked it!!

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Na1na

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Posted: 13 years ago

#52

Originally posted by: crazzymoon
Superb RS Naina, the pain Navya going through is explained very nice. Waiting for ur next update.

thanq!! 😊

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Na1na

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Posted: 13 years ago

#53

Originally posted by: dmgfan
WOW a good start!! Totally reminded me of good old Navya days. Sigh!! Thanks for bringing it back😃Waiting for the next part. Continue soon!

aww...thanq 4 saying dat!
means a lot!

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Na1na

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Posted: 13 years ago

#54

Originally posted by: --Sapphire--
nice start to the RS...liked the update 👍🏼...but I have to admit Majnoo Bajpayee's behaviour has pissed me off 😵...but then I guess being aggressive and impulsive is in his nature...Nabbya rani is being a meek-goat as always...and no comments abt Sugi 🤬..though our CVs cudnt meet our expectations 🤔...I would really like to look forward to see how U handle the track..will be waiting for UR next update

hey neelu!
thanx 4 lyking dis!
actually d thing is dat i dint wanna take u guys far off 4rm d reality...
i wanted it 2 b hw navya was...n navya was lyk dis...

im nt going in a totally opp direction 4rm d cv's...at least nt nw...
im trying 2 go wid dem...but i jus thot dat if at all dey had 2 introduce sumthing lyk dis in d track den dey shud hav dealt wid it in a better way...dey shud hav shown d emotions of anant n navya n shud hav focused on dem rather dan d oder characters so much!
n dast wat u hav seen in d rs so far...

but 4rm here...cv's r out of d picture!!
im taking d story in my hand...
jus hoping dat u all wnt b disappointed!

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Na1na

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Posted: 13 years ago

#55

Originally posted by: -diva-shamya-
waiting..

updating shortly!!
jus hoping dat u lyk it...

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ClumsyIntrovert

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Posted: 13 years ago

#56

Originally posted by: nimmi

hey neelu!
thanx 4 lyking dis!
actually d thing is dat i dint wanna take u guys far off 4rm d reality...
i wanted it 2 b hw navya was...n navya was lyk dis...

im nt going in a totally opp direction 4rm d cv's...at least nt nw...
im trying 2 go wid dem...but i jus thot dat if at all dey had 2 introduce sumthing lyk dis in d track den dey shud hav dealt wid it in a better way...dey shud hav shown d emotions of anant n navya n shud hav focused on dem rather dan d oder characters so much!
n dast wat u hav seen in d rs so far...

but 4rm here...cv's r out of d picture!!
im taking d story in my hand...
jus hoping dat u all wnt b disappointed!

yes,I get it..UR trying to take-up d story which d CVs have churned out for us and mould it in UR way...eager to read it ...will be waiting for UR next update 😊

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Na1na

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Posted: 13 years ago

#57

Originally posted by: --Sapphire--

yes,I get it..UR trying to take-up d story which d CVs have churned out for us and mould it in UR way...eager to read it ...will be waiting for UR next update 😊

EXACTLY!!
ya...update reaching u all in minutes...

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Tacker_Holic

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Posted: 13 years ago

#58

How did I miss this!!! 😲 It was amazing! 👏 I am speechless for words you made me jump, cry, feel sorry for Navya but is was beautiful! 😳 😭 👏 Im shocked at Anant's attitude and how he is not looking at Navya! 😡 Feel sorry for Navya she didnt do anything wrong but still she suffers! 😭 Hate BD and Baba! 😡😡😡 Lovely start thought I love it! 😃

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Na1na

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Posted: 13 years ago

#59

hey guys...
1stly...thanq all so much 4 appreciating dis...i kno i hav already sed dis a numerous tyms...but i felt d need 2 say it again!...

till nw i had been following d cv's ...
but 4rm here onwards i hav slowly started changing d track!
hope u all will find it interesting n lyk it, n i dnt disappoint ne of u!
here it is!

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Sau Dard Hai - Part 2

At the dinner table whenever Anant wanted something Navya reached it before him and served him. There eyes met for a second untill Anant glanced away, but Navya was happy enough that atleast he was eating the food served by her.
Meanwhile Buadadi was happy too. "Haan haan...kar lo jitna seva kar sakti ho apne pati dev ki...ab tum iss ghar me kuch hi dino ki mehmaan ho...phir to tumko ee mauka bhi nahi milega Nabhya raani..." She looked at Baba and both of them were pleased to see Anant's attitude towards Navya.

In there room Anant had turned in the opposite direction from Navya. He seemed to have slept but Navya knew better. She pulled the blanket and looked across the room. "Ek time tha jab iss room me har waqt khushiyan aur pyaar ghar karte the...aur ab...sirf tanhaayi..." she thought to herself. Praying to God for a better tomorrow she finally fell asleep.

"Aaj hume ek khaas ghoshna karni hai..." said Baba in his authoritative tone. Everyone looked up from there breakfasts the next day. "pichle kuch dino me hamari publication ko kaafi nuksaan jhelna pada..." Everyone looked at Navya angrily. Navya felt embarrased and so did Anant. "Par koi bhi nuksaan aaj tak Vedant ki neev ko nahi hila paaya hai...Aaj bhi ye vishwaas aur samridhdhi ki raah par chal raha hai. Aaj se do din baad Vedant ke 25 saal pure ho jayenge. Iss avsar par hum ek bade se samaroh ka aayojan kar rhe hai aur hum chahte hai ki aap sab isme apne apne doston ko shamil kare. Jisse bhi nimantran de sakte hai de dijiye...Hum chahte hai ki sab hamari pragati aur unnati ko dekhe. Kaafi bade log bhi aa rahe hai...uss din sab kuch achche se ho jaana chahiye."

Everyone nodded and left the table. The men got ready to go to office. Navya smiled at Anant and wished him a good day but he didn't respond.

Later in the evening when he came back and reached his room. Hearing Navya's voice, he was very taken aback. She hadn't sounded so happy in a while and Anant wondered what had happened. She exclaimed in delight. "Kya?! Sach me!?! Mujhe to yakeen hi nahi ho rha hai...Akshat...vo bhi itne saalo baad...kab aa rha hai vo?"
she listened on the other line..."wow! achcha theek hai...mai rakhti hoon. Haan...bye"
She turned around and looked at Anant. "Vo Appy thi...mere school ka friend waapas India aa rha hai..." she told him. Pretending to be not so interested he just murmured a "hmm..." and went to have bath. After coming out he noticed that Navya had gone downstairs. Just then his cell phone flashed. It was Ranbir.
"Ranbir..." Anant greeted him.
"Hi yaar...Kaisa hai...? kaam waverah...?"
"Sab theek chal rha hai...actually maine tujhe call kiya tha..."
"Haan...vo...sorry mai recieve nahi kar paaya...Ritika ke saath baahar gaya tha..."
"Ohh..."
"Par mujhe tera call tabhi le lena chahiye tha...kam se kam ye sab drame se to bachta!"
"Drama? Kaun kar raha hai drama?"
"Arre ye Ritika aur Appy! Aur Kaun?! Pata nahi innka koi bachpan ka dost aa rha hai Boston se...Jab se Appy ka call aaya hai tab se Ritika meri baat sun hi nahi rahi hai...Koi Akshat hai...tab se uss naam japp japp kar kaan me ched kar diya! Abhi tak Navya ko bhi bata diya hoga inn dono ne...Ritika keh rhi thi ki Navya se bahot close tha ye Akshat...Usne tujhe kuch bataya kya?"
"Haan...bas mention kiya..." Ranbir could feel something in his voice so he asked further...
"Tere aur Navya ke beech me abhi sab kaisa hai...?"
Anant didnt reply instantly and Ranbir understood everything.
"Yaar tu Navya se itne dino tak naaraz kaise ho sakta hai...? Tujhe pata hai ki usne kuch bhi jaan boojh kar nahi kiya...phir bhi? Maana ki tere ghar waalo ko thori bahot problem ho gayi, business ko thora nuksaan ho gaya...par apne aur Navya ke rishte ke baare me bhi to soch!"
"Ranbir...please yaa...mujhe iss baare me koi baat nahi karni..."
"Theek hai...mat kar! par maine jo kaha uske baare me ek baar thande dimaag se sochna...ab bata tune call kisi khaas wajah se kiya tha?"
"Haan...vo hamari publication house Vedanta ke 25 years complete hone par ek badi si party hai...tum sab invited ho...do din baad..."
"Wow! thats great yaar...congrats! Hum sab zaroor aayenge!..."

All the preparations for the party were in full swing. Navya was always busy at home. Appy and Rits, who had planned a get together were very frustrated. Finally Appy decided to call Anant.
"yaar...tumhaari aur Navya ki phir se shaadi ho rahi hai kya?!"
"Kya?! Nahi! kyu? Ek function hai maine tum log ko iss baare me bataya tha na!"
"Haan to ye Navya madam aise kyu behave kar rahi hai jaise kuch dino me uski shaadi hone waali hai?! Seriously yaar...jaise ek hone waali dulhaan ghar se nahi nikalti na...Navya bilkul waisa hi kar rahi hai! Agar ek din humare saath baahar aa jayegi to kya ho jaayega? Kal Akshat aa raha hai...Hum teeno milke usse surprise karne wale the par ye Navya mana kar rhi hai...samjhao na!"
"Achcha...hmm...theek hai..."
"Navya ka aana bahot zaroori hai...hum log usse 15 yrs ke baad mill rhe hai aur bachpan se...matlab atleast jab tak Akshat hamare saath tha...Navya uski favourite thi! Please convince her..."
Appy continued with her rant but Anant didnt hear the rest. That one sentence was echoing in his mind... "Navya uski favourite thi..." He wondered how Navya was friends with a guy. She never talked to boys in college and from what he knew, Appy and Rits were her only friends. But this guy...he was her friend. Anyways...Navya had refused to go. For his family. Navya cared so much about everyone...then how could she be so irresponsible. "Par galtiyan bhi to insaan se hi hoti hai na..." and his behaviour too cannot be exactly called mature "Shayad maine hi iss baat ko zaroorat se zyada aage badhaya..."
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Edited by nimmi - 13 years ago

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Na1na

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Posted: 13 years ago

#60

Originally posted by: Sonia17
How did I miss this!!! 😲 It was amazing! 👏 I am speechless for words you made me jump, cry, feel sorry for Navya but is was beautiful! 😳 😭 👏 Im shocked at Anant's attitude and how he is not looking at Navya! 😡 Feel sorry for Navya she didnt do anything wrong but still she suffers! 😭 Hate BD and Baba! 😡😡😡 Lovely start thought I love it! 😃

aww...thanq sooo much Sonia!
im so glad u lyked it!
thanx a lot!!
hope u lyk d 2nd update 2!!