Avneil TS:'The IMPERFECT Yet PERFECT PROPOSAL' (P2, 2 Nov) - Page 3

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Posted: 7 years ago
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Beautiful! Please write a sequel and write more stories!
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Man this was insane ! Kaash we were so lucky to watch this in screens .
Him giving a love bite on bullet wound ☺️ That was perfect . I had imagined it in many angles .🤪 This was just beautiful . And his dialogue after that was master piece 👏With This I Marked u Mine Avni.! This is no longer a Scar of Ur Horrified Past But a Permanent Love Bite of My First Kiss on Ur Soul.❤️

"No I wont have ur Disasterous Breakfaste eveyday, Coz I will be the one Making that for US and i will Rightfully Demand My Reward for the same, that my dear Wifey, will be a Kiss from u. And Mind u if u try to cheat, the Number of Kisses will increase exponentially, do the Rest of Calculations in ur Head." He said nuzzling his Nose against hers and his pulp of fingers can feel warmth beneath them, exactly over her cheeks.

"And what U said about ur Heart.? Small.? Huh.? How dare u to even think like that.? Ismey To Itna Pyaar hai Jitna Iss Sea me Pani bhi nahi hoga. Or Ye Pyaar Ab Mera hai Mai kisike sath share nahi karunga" He said Forging slight anger while Avni's eyes rolled at his last line. "Ohkay maybe thodasa Share kar sakta hu vo Bhi Srf Neela Ma or Family ke sath. Ur Heart is My Home and i'l be a Permanent Unpaid Tenant to u."He completed smiling.

"But dont u assume that this Cute little puppy face of urs will buy u an easy escape for Troubling me whole day. U, My dear Wifey, will be punished." He said narrowing his concentrating eyes with a slight flavour of naughtiness in His Voice . ⭐️⭐️ This was so good . The possessive Neil + Naughty Tillu is a treat What a sweet revenge ! Will we ever get this 😔

"I have always been in Love with u Avni, will continue to do so till my Last Breath." He said still with heavy breaths directly eyeing her. She carresed his cheeks smilingly. "I Cant contain My feelings inside, not for another single sec, as My Heart will Explode otherwise, enlightening u with all My Weired Fantasies and those hormone induced dreams filled with desire. U will surely know the way i wanted to touch ur belly curves when they swayed along with towel while u dry ur hairs every morning, the pull game ur Off shoulder revealing blouses play with my poor heart, the desires to pull u into a hard kiss whenever u lick ur lower lip out of a mere habbit, Just like the way U are doing now." 👏👏👏
This was best . Romantic besharam Tillu ☺️

I want u now ☺️ I was dead there .
Your dialogue are mind-boggling ❤️👏
Keep writing more . Will await your next work 😃
Loads of love 🤗
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Posted: 7 years ago
#23
superb
loved it dialogues are mind-blowing 👏👏
continue soon
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Posted: 7 years ago
#24
Oh my my,wat an update.I love this.pls continue soon.
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Posted: 7 years ago
#25
that was superb
loved it
do write more
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: prathe

very well written yaar👏😳

uss din sach mein agar mein cvs hothi sach mein dono ko giradethi aur asani se chuhi mukt hothe😆
just like their opening entry iss barr tho as hubby wife kirte toh🤪


Thank u so much.
Agar sach me firse Gir jaate to ek or Naamkeen beach Romance dekhne Mil jata.. 😛
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Posted: 7 years ago
#27

Originally posted by: prathe

very well written😳 u ended it very well👏


Thank u so much for taking time to read and Comment
Means a lot to me.
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Posted: 7 years ago
#28

Originally posted by: neeraja91

Beautiful! Please write a sequel and write more stories!


Actually i havent thought about the sequel yet..! Will ponder over it for sure.
About more stories, will try to write. I m completely disappointed with the response here so resisting to write but then Avneil are Irresistable 😆 😉
Thank u so much for appreciation.
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Posted: 7 years ago
#29

Originally posted by: AgnesFan

Man this was insane ! Kaash we were so lucky to watch this in screens .

Him giving a love bite on bullet wound☺️That was perfect . I had imagined it in many angles .🤪This was just beautiful . And his dialogue after that was master piece👏With This I Marked u Mine Avni.! This is no longer a Scar of Ur Horrified Past But a Permanent Love Bite of My First Kiss on Ur Soul.❤️
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"No I wont have ur Disasterous Breakfaste eveyday, Coz I will be the one Making that for US and i will Rightfully Demand My Reward for the same, that my dear Wifey, will be a Kiss from u. And Mind u if u try to cheat, the Number of Kisses will increase exponentially, do the Rest of Calculations in ur Head."He said nuzzling his Nose against hers and his pulp of fingers can feel warmth beneath them, exactly over her cheeks.

"And what U said about ur Heart.? Small.? Huh.? How dare u to even think like that.? Ismey To Itna Pyaar hai Jitna Iss Sea me Pani bhi nahi hoga. Or Ye Pyaar Ab Mera hai Mai kisike sath share nahi karunga"He said Forging slight anger while Avni's eyes rolled at his last line."Ohkay maybe thodasa Share kar sakta hu vo Bhi Srf Neela Ma or Family ke sath. Ur Heart is My Home and i'l be a Permanent Unpaid Tenant to u."He completed smiling.

"But dont u assume that this Cute little puppy face of urs will buy u an easy escape for Troubling me whole day. U, My dear Wifey, will be punished."He said narrowing his concentrating eyes with a slight flavour of naughtiness in His Voice .⭐️⭐️This was so good . The possessive Neil + Naughty Tillu is a treatWhat a sweet revenge ! Will we ever get this😔

"I have always been in Love with u Avni, will continue to do so till my Last Breath."He said still with heavy breaths directly eyeing her. She carresed his cheeks smilingly."I Cant contain My feelings inside, not for another single sec, as My Heart will Explode otherwise, enlightening u with all My Weired Fantasies and those hormone induced dreams filled with desire. U will surely know the way i wanted to touch ur belly curves when they swayed along with towel while u dry ur hairs every morning, the pull game ur Off shoulder revealing blouses play with my poor heart, the desires to pull u into a hard kiss whenever u lick ur lower lip out of a mere habbit, Just like the way U are doing now."👏👏👏
<font color="#333333">This was best . Romantic besharam Tillu☺️</font>
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I want u now☺️I was dead there .
Your dialogue are mind-boggling❤️👏
Keep writing more . Will await your next work😃
Loads of love🤗


Wohhh..!!! This was such a beautiful gesture from u.!
Thank u so very much from the bottom of my heart.!
Really Means a lot to me.!
I have put in a lot of efforts for this particular story to make it as Perfect as i can but was really disappointed with the responses here. This made my day. Such a lovely response.
I always look forward for an appreciation for my dialogues, greedy me😆

Thank u so much again
Keep reading, keep commenting.
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Posted: 7 years ago
#30

Thank u dear..! 😊

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