Avneil OS: Pain, love and your company (UPDATED at pg 4 04/10)

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This is my first os, hope you like it.



The lines in black colour are
for what Author is thinking and speaking, Red colour ones are for song.


Note: avni gets her periods in
this os.

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Author's POV


In night around 12 am(this os takes place after avneil's marriage,
after they had shifted in new khanna mansion and before sending dayawanti Mehta
jail)



The scene
starts in avni and neel's room, neel is sitting on the couch and working on the
laptop, while after finishing her novel, avni gets up from the bed to go to the
dressing table to get a hand cream.


When she is
walking, suddenly avni feels unbearable pain. Avni clutches her stomach and falls
on her knees, and cries of pain escapes her mouth, her head bends forward till
it reaches the floor. It happens very quickly, and neel doesn't get enough time
to react. While avni is continuously cursing her unexpected guest, her period,
which doesn't even tell her beforehand before coming, usually due to her pms
she used to get prepared at least, expect this time. As soon as he sees avni's
head down he gets up and runs to her, but she collapses on the floor and is
lying on the floor on her side and wails. Neel gets very scared seeing avni's
wails. Neel sit on his knee by her side, he asks "avni what happened tell me
please, you are freaking me out. But avni ignores him due to her pain. When he
is about to touch her to hold her and carry her, avni shouts "DONT TOUCH ME. Neel
don't know how to react, what to do, here avni is crying and also shouting. These
two emotions are confusing neel in addition with her condition. He gets up and
calls neela ma thinking only she can help him right now.


Neela ma
picks the call after few rings.


Neel says "hello
neela ma his voice is full of tension


Neela ma sensed
his tension behind his voice and says what happened neel, is everything
alright, why you called at this odd hour, neel say something you are scaring me


Neel says "neela
ma, actually avni


Neela cuts in
between and says "what happened to avni, is she alright, neel, I am asking you
something


Neel says I don't
know


Neela says "what
do you mean by you don't know neel


Neel says "ma,
actually avni is crying in pain, I don't know what happened, she was perfectly
fine sometime ago and now lying on the floor and crying. She is not letting me
touch her so that I can carry her to the bed. I don't know what to do neela ma
his voice is shaking as if he is on the verge of crying.


Neela knew what
has happened to avni, she says with confidence "neel don't worry, just listen
to me very carefully and do as I say


Neel says "tell
me ma listening to neela, neel gained confidence


Neela says "neel,
first find avni's clutch, that golden one, he runs to the cupboard, opens it
and finds the clutch and says "now what ma


Neela says "open
it, there you will find two tablets strips, you have to give avni these two
tablets with warm water, okay


Neel says "I got
it ma, you stay on line, while I get the water


Neela says "okay


Neel takes
out the tablet strips and places it with the clutch on the table, and then he
goes out of the room to get warm water from kitchen.


Neel comes
after few minutes, as soon as he comes in the room; he is welcomed with low
screams and sobs. He gets hurt hearing avni, he is not able to see her pain; he
picks up the phone and says "yes ma, I have got warm water.


Neela says "good,
now go to avni, very slowly put her head in your lap and give her tablets and
force her to drink all the water, she will deny but its your responsibility to
make her drink


Neel says "okay
ma


He puts the
phone on table and takes the tablets in his hand, then he goes to avni and very
slowly touches her head


Avni says "don't


Neel doesn't listen
to her and says "quiet and moves her head very slowly and puts her head in his
lap. He says "open your mouth


She opens her
mouth and he feeds her the tablet and then makes her gulp down the water, after
few sips she refuses to drink more water but he forcefully makes her drink it. He
stretches his hand and grabs the phone.


Neel says "ma
I have fed her the tablets


Neela says "good,
now very gently carry her to bed, and cover her with a warm blanket and put the
AC on the minimum temperature, Neel also please get her a hot water bag. And two
more things you have to get


Neel says "what
are those


Neela says "crape
bandages and volini


Neel says "okay
ma


He puts his
phone down, then gently puts avni's head on floor. Then he goes on her side and
gently, slowly and very carefully he carries her and takes her to bed while
avni is wailing very much, there he makes her lie down. On the contact of her
back with the bed, avni screams, not very loudly that everyone will get awake,
just that much loudly that her voice will not go outside the room. Even a little
movement causes her pain. Avni is crying and screaming very much due to pain. Neel
gets worried and sad seeing avni's condition. Then he covers her with blanket
and changes the AC temperature. Then he runs out of his room to get the hot
water bag, crape bandages and volini. After 5 mins, he comes running in his
room. There he finds avni lying on her side and crying very loudly while
clutching the pillow.


He picks his
phone and says "ma, I have got all the things. Now what to do


Neela says "now
you have to tie the crape bandages on her legs and arms, for legs you have to
tie from the stating of her thighs and you also have to apply volini on her
back, especially on her low back. As for the hot water bag, put it near her
back, but don't let it touch her, she will cry more if it gets touched to her
back. Neel avni is in pain and even a little movement causes her more pain. Neel after doing all this, you have to make
her sleep by singing to her, her favourite lullaby and caressing her hair, also
let her hold your hand, it will pain you but don't pull out you hand under any
case as she will rub your hand very roughly. Neel one last thing sleep near her
but don't let yourself touch her until she falls asleep.


Neel says "okay
ma, I will do all this, thank you, and sorry for disturbing your sleep now
please sleep, good night


Neela says "your
welcome neel and don't be sorry its my duty to help you kids, good night ,one
thing, if she wake up in middle of night then give her another pain killer that
yellow one


Neel says "ok
ma, I will, but what is the other tablet for


Neela says "its
a sleeping pill


neel says "okay
bye ma


neela says "bye
neel


neel cuts the
call and goes to the bed and places the hot water bag near her back but not touching
avni. Then he takes the crape bandages and lifts her blanket and her nightgown.


Avni when
feels her nightgown getting lift, gets shocked and says "neel,what are you
doing


Neel says "avni
don't worry, I am just tying crape bandages and she nods and allows him to do
so.


Neel then
somehow ties the crape bandages while getting shy and while blushing hard. To avoid
more awkwardness he tries his best not to see and touch avni's legs but by mistake
it get touched many times because he is not seeing her so sometimes he sees to
see whether he is doing right way or not. Neel after finishing this work covers
her legs with her gown and blanket, also he ties crape bandages on her arms. Then
he takes volini spray bottle in his hands and thinks how he will apply this. Then
after thinking so much he removes her nightgown's covering shrug a little and
moves his hand inside her nightgown from the starting opening of the back of
the gown and sprays volini on her back, all the time his hand was in touch with
her back making both of them blush.


After that he
goes to the other side of the bed and lies down facing her, she is still crying
very much, he wipes off her tears and says "now don't cry, I am here with you ,
now the pain will go and he smiles. He removes the pillow from avni's hand and
replaces it with his hand. And avni starts to rub his hand with hers, it is her
reaction with she is feeling pain. It pained him, not the rubbing but the
thought that avni is baring so much pain. With the other free hand he starts to
caress her hair and says close your eyes and avni does as he says.


Neel sings:


<font color="#ff0000">Aa leke chalu tujhko </font>(avni opens her eyes in disbelieve
but neel nods no and she closes it again)
<font color="#ff0000">
Ek aise desh mein

Aa leke chalu tujhko

Ek aise desh mein</font>


<font color="#ff0000">Milti hai jaha khushiyan

Pariyon ke bhesh mein

Milti hai jaha kushiyan

Pariyon ke bhesh mein</font>


<font color="#ff0000">Aa leke chalu tujhko..</font>


<font color="#ff0000">Ho chaand chahe aadha

Ho phir bhi roshni (x2)</font>


<font color="#ff0000">Umeed jo na chhute

Har baat hai bani

Raato ke sur se nikle

Subah ki ragini</font>


<font color="#ff0000">Lori tujhe sunau

Lori tujhe sunau

Bachapan ki ek mein

Lori tujhe sunau

Bachapan ki ek mein</font>


<font color="#ff0000">Milti hai jaha khushiyan

Pariyon ke bhesh mein

Milti hai jaha kushiyan

Pariyon ke bhesh mein</font>


<font color="#ff0000">Aa leke chalu tujhko..</font>


<font color="#ff0000">Mein aasam ko khidkiyon se

Ghar mein laayi hu (x2)</font>


<font color="#ff0000">Saare ke saare taare

Yahan chunke laayi hu

Sapno mein rang man ke

Yuhi bharte aayi hu</font>


<font color="#ff0000">Har dard bhool jaau (x2)

Yuhi khel khel mein

Har dard bhool jaau

Yuhi khel khel mein</font>


<font color="#ff0000">Milti hai jaha khushiyan

Pariyon ke bhesh mein

Milti hai jaha kushiyan

Pariyon ke bhesh mein</font>


<font color="#ff0000">Aa leke chalu tujhko..</font>


<font color="#ff0000">Dena tu man ki shakti

Maalik mere mujhe (x2)</font>


<font color="#ff0000">Meri katha vyatha

Hai sab pata tujhe

Mein jab bhi dagmagau

Tu thaamna mujhe</font>


<font color="#ff0000">Chhode hai swapn saare (x2)

Teri deh rekh mein

Chhode hai swapn saare

Teri deh rekh mein</font>


<font color="#ff0000">Milti hai jaha khushiyan

Pariyon ke bhesh mein

Milti hai jaha kushiyan

Pariyon ke bhesh mein</font>


<font color="#ff0000">Aa leke chalu tujhko</font>


And he lulls her to sleep, at the end at the song he finds avni
dozed off, and then he also sleeps.



In the
morning



Avni wakes up
naturally and finds neel sleeping with his mouth open, she finds him cute and smiles.
She touches his face and starts to caress his hair. Neel smiles and wakes up, seeing
neel waking up avni draws back her hand. Neel looks in her eyes and says "I was
loving it, please don't stop doing it and he takes her hand and places it on
his hair and she slowly starts to caress it while flushing and smiling. He also
smiles. Her this strange behaviour is the gift of her periods as in them all
the emotions, feelings, moods, mind in short everything gets imbalanced.


After a few minutes
of caressing his hair, neel asks "how are you avni


Avni says "better


Neel says "I think
I should get up now, else I will be late and avni draws back her hand and
watches neel sit up.


Neel asks "you
want to get up?


Avni nods and
neel helps her sit up, avni after sitting rests her back on the bed.


Neel says "Wait
I will get green tea for you, it will sooth your cramps avni nods and think
that neel knows about her being on her periods. He gets up and after wearing
his slippers he starts to walk, before reaching the door he hears avni's voice
and he turns. Actually avni has seen something which is something that wont go
unnoticed.


Avni says "neel
stop, you cant go outside


Neel gets
confused and says "why


Avni blushes
and says "because your track-pants are strained


Neel then
sees his track pant and sees a big red patch, he too blushes and they both
stare each other in embarrassment and awkwardness. Neel then looks away to
avoid more awkwardness between them, what just happened to avni was not at all
something out of the box, it was something normal and something common, but
with their relation it became something embarrassing with both of them. Avni never
stayed with boys very much and not shared this type of thing, so it was her
first experience when neel helped her in her cramps and knows about it. Also with
neel, this was his first time to be with someone who is on her periods, that
too this close.


Neel then quietly
goes and sits and the couch while avni removes her blanket and gets up from the
bed. When she got up, she and even neel sees a very big strained patch on the
bedsheet. Avni gets conscious and thinks that her clothes would be ruined too because
of this unexpected guest who didn't even give notice to her to get her prepared,
and thinks that neel would have seen her like this and turns to face neel, she
is blushing very much, in a colour crimson red. Neel gets up and says "don't worry
I will clean this up, you go and get changed, avni doesn't argues and nods in
agreement.


Avni walks as
fast as she could so that she couldn't face neel after so much of embarrassment
without getting another wave of cramps as with avni, movement can cause her
pain, though in reality she is walking very slowly, towards the cupboard to get
her stuff and runs to bathroom soon.


Neel says "wear
something comfortable today and not saree


Avni nods
without looking at neel she grabs her pink suit and her necessary stuff and
goes to the bathroom to get herself fresh and clean.


Meanwhile neel
changed the bedsheet and puts the dirty one for the laundry, also he gets his
clothes out of the cupboard.


When avni
comes out, neel says "avni pack your bags because I am leaving you at neela ma's
house till you get fine,avni nods and neel goes to the bathroom. And avni
starts to pack her stuff.


After getting
ready both goes downstairs for breakfast at the dining table, there neel
informs that today avni is going to neela ma's house.


As soon as
they finish their breakfast they leave the house and drives for neela ma's
house. When they reach there, neel leaves avni there and goes to work. The whole
day avni and neela enjoys a girly chit chat time.


Avni after
talking with neela ma after lunch, goes to her room, when she come inside, she
goes to her cupboard and finds some comfortable clothes. She goes to the
bathroom and changes into a pink coloured short shorts and a white coloured Mickey
Mouse full sleeves loose short top, not crop top.


She goes to
her bed and sleeps with her favourite heart shaped pink pillow and white teddy
bear.


Meanwhile she
is sleeping; neel comes to neela ma's house.


Neela opens
the door and finds neel standing on the door.


Neela says "neel,
what a pleasant surprise, come inside


Neel says "thank
you ma, by the way, where is avni


Neela teases
him and says "you are missing your wife already that you cant stay away from
her for long or you don't trust me that I
will take care of your wife properly, mr you must remember I am her mother, so don't
worry about her taking care


Neel says "its
nothing like that ma, I know that you will take care of her better than anyone
else, thats why I have left her here before going to work. Actually I was
worried about her health and also I finished my work soon so thought to come
here and stay with you tonight, I have gotten my clothes too, see he shows her
his small luggage bag.


Neela says "she
is fine now, and its good that you thought to stay over, and your avni is
sleeping in her room, you can go, her room is upstairs, a white coloured door
with a A' on the door.


Neel says "ok
ma


Neel runs
upstairs, when she enters her room, he finds her sleeping so peacefully, and
then he takes out his comfortable clothes from his bag and goes to change. When
he comes back, he thinks to sleep on the couch but when he hears neel' from
avni's mouth in her sleep, he goes to the bed and sleeps next to her. After sometime
he finds avni hugging him in sleep, then he hugs her back and they both sleep
peacefully in each other arms.


In the night, Avni wakes up and finds herself in
a cuddling position with neel. She blushes and hugs neel and hides her face in
his chest, neel is awake but pretends to be asleep. Neel hugs her back, avni
senses it and pushes him away, avni says "why are you pretending to be asleep,
now I wont talk to you. She sits up and rests her back on the bed and looks
elsewhere and pouts.


Neel sits up
and smiles, he says "I wake up when you wake up


He leans
closer to her and murmurs in her ears "why don't you wear these shorts at my
house, I want you to wear them there as well avni blushes hearing neel and with
this he hugs her and she hugs him back.


Avni says " I
am feeling sleepy and she yawns


Neel says "lets
sleep


Avni says "no
first cuddle me and she pouts, neel smile


Avni thinks
that she will regret what she has done and has asked neel to do later but for
now she is doing because of her mood swings and hormones and she is enjoying
being there with neel. She is enjoying being so childish with neel. She is
enjoying every moment with neel except for being in pain of course.


Then they lie
down and sleep while cuddling each other, sleeping so peacefully like they are
unaware of the world outside their own.



Neela is in
her room and talking to the stars from her window.


She says "Ayesha
ji, see our daughter has got a perfect life partner in neel, he will keep her
happy and she will get all the love that she deserves from neel


Then she goes
to sleep as well .


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This is my first even avneil one shot. Hope you guys like this, if
yes don't forget to hit the like and commemt down below please. I love
comments, so please comment and don't forget to hit the like button who so ever
read this, its a humble request.


Sorry for any grammatical error or any other error.


Thank you for reading


Love you all


Mehak


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Beautiful Os.make it two shots
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This was so cute...Loved it
Plz write 2nd part too
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Originally posted by: shikhsk

Beautiful Os.make it two shots

thank you so much... i will if you help me with the idea of second shot.. suggestions are needed
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thank you so much
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thank you so much
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Originally posted by: pri12

This was so cute...Loved it

Plz write 2nd part too

thank you so much... i will but you have to give me suggestions.. you have to help me here
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Awesome
Neil can't see Avni in pain
He took care of Avni very well
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Lovely dear
Neil can't see her in Pain
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You have beautifully penned down an important concept.You have great hand in bringing out such potential topic.Period-one of the most sensitive and crucial moment of a woman's life and if it is not handled meticulously and isnt offered with love and utmost protection,the Time becomes the worst one and can be proven a very bad experience,even a fatal one to health,specially after marraige,when you have to share the theme with an opposite gender who will never have such experience.Here,you have brought all the things out perfectly and I guess every girl would enjoy it with utmost satisfaction...So,I am sparing my two minutes here and having a lovable applause for you...love you dear
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