AvNeil OS Best Birth Day

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hey guys . this is my first AvNeil OS . Hope you guys like it and if there are any mistakes tell me because I have to improve my English .

After exposing Dayawanti Meheta . Avni and Neil went to find the remains of her late father Ashish Meheta who was brutally murderd by his own mother and brother . While everyone else went to do preperation for Ashish last rights . When they reached the location Avni was so heartbroken . Till now she was hating her father for not standing for her mother and for her . She didnt want to beleive her father was no more . She wished that she didnt found that box so she could avoid seeing her father brutally murder . Only she knows that she couldnt hate her father after doing all these things . She was heartbroken that how could her father put such a big crime on her . Doesnt he trust her . Doesnt he know he was his daughter and his daughter could not do anything like that . But today she knows her father knows she was innocent . And she feels guilty that she kept hating her father for those years without knowing he is not alive . How can she . All these thoughts were running through her mind while she was digging the sand . When some thing caught her attention it was her fathers watch on his skeleton hand . This was enough to give Avni a reality check that her father was no more . She froze in her postion . Just like that her body stoped working . Neil who was close to her saw that she had frozen so he went close to her to console her . He doesnt know what going on in Avni mind but he knows she devasted to know that her father is no more . Without wasting a second neil went and hugged her . It was enough to break Avni from her frozen postion she started crying .

Avni : Neil my father is no more . Why did he had to die . I want my father . I want to tell her how much i love him . How much his superstar needs him . How i have forgiven him . How i couldn't hate hate after whatever he did with her . How much amol needs his father . I want my father Neil . I want him .

Neil: shhh . Avni he knows how much you love him . You have to be strong avni . For amol . For Neela aunty . They need you Avni . Amol has not seen his father . Imagine how much devasted he will be . He got to know that his mother and father was killed by Dayawanti Meheta . Who he was worshipping . He needs you . So be strong

Avni : you're right neil i have to be strong for neela manma and amol . They need me . Thank you Neil for always tacking care of me .

Neil: no need to thank me wifey it was my duty to protect you . Lets go and finish the last rights .

When they reach the venue they saw everything was ready so avni and amol started doing what the priest was telling them to do . After lightening avni stood there.

Avni : i love you dad . I know you are ashamed of your deeds but i know you are happy and with mom . There is no one in there who can seperate you from mom so please take care of mom . Dont make her cry . I just hope in next birth we all can be togeather as a happy normal family . Tell mom me and amol love her and miss her . I will also fulfill the promise i made to her . I will reform amol and make her your aman .

Neil came to her and they went to her home . When she reached her room she was suprised to see the room decorated . Neil came behind her and wispered on her ears

Neil : Happy birthday wifey

Avni : How did you know

Neil : You are forgetting i am a cop

Avni : yeah yeah maa ka ladla supercop tillu .i know that

Neil : You wont stop calling me that will you

Avni : nope after all that was the first impression your mom gave me about you .

Neil: i know you are planning to leave after this but i dont want you to leave me avni because i love you avni .

Avni was speechless

Avni: Neil i lo...

Neil doesnt let her complete her sentence qnd star his rambling

Neil: i know you dont have time for love . You were only thinking about Dayawanti Meheta it okay of you dont love . Its okay of you leave me . Its ok...

Avni puts her hand in neil mouth to stop his rambling

Avni: will you let me complete my sentence .

Neil just shook his head and avni pulls her hand

Avni : dont speak till i am done . I know i said love has no place in my life but It changes the moment you came neil i love you too neil . I love you .

Neil pulls her to hug without speaking which was enough for avni because she loves his hug too much . That night was best birthday avni had in a long time .
Edited by -Mairaa- - 8 years ago

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Yeah ... hete its thr bst birthday ... but onscrn it was d worst bday that any one could imgn ... short and cute ... keep writng mariaa ... i want new wrtrs .. as i love to read ...☺️ maa ka laadla suprcop tillu ... he is too cute yaar
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: vidz2122

Yeah ... hete its thr bst birthday ... but onscrn it was d worst bday that any one could imgn ... short and cute ... keep writng mariaa ... i want new wrtrs .. as i love to read ...☺️ maa ka laadla suprcop tillu ... he is too cute yaar


Thank you i think i will write more . Yeah he is too cute 😳
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Super dialouges, the love between them is so cute. You write beautifully please write more. I would love to read your work!
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Lovely mairaaa.keep writing more n more in that was two task will be completed.we will read more Os n like you said you wanna improve ur English.jus lil things you need to take care is right usage of his n her n lil bit tenses.rest is fine.keep up the good work n the title u need to come up since u know what made you write that particular part
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Wonderful os... do write more... i loved it... such a perfect avneil happy confession that to so soon ... 😊
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: Somewhatwriter

Super dialouges, the love between them is so cute. You write beautifully please write more. I would love to read your work!

Thanks and will write more
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: shikhsk

Lovely mairaaa.keep writing more n more in that was two task will be completed.we will read more Os n like you said you wanna improve ur English.jus lil things you need to take care is right usage of his n her n lil bit tenses.rest is fine.keep up the good work n the title u need to come up since u know what made you write that particular part

Thanks . Oh i easily get confuse where to use it . Mostly i use unnecessarily . I will keep that in mind . And i dont understand the tense when i am writing
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: mehak4

Wonderful os... do write more... i loved it... such a perfect avneil happy confession that to so soon ... 😊


Thanks mehek . Will write more
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Maira wow you should write more n more you will be improved automatically

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