MAYUR ONESHOT...UNCONDITIONAL LOVE..COMPLETED.... - Page 8

WOW! Aisha

Ur Mayur one shot was awesomeeeee!👏⭐️

I loveddddddddddd it jaan!❤️😳😳

Wonderfully written and very well expressed…👏👏

I loved how u put in those one liners..(well not necessarily one liners…but..😛)…like the comment about "madhoo makhee…" and nupur's "By God"😃 and "Morena Express" and "ab yeh mayank sharma konsi bala hai"😆 and "books were like sleeping pills which made me dizzy"😆 and "sadoo"😛 and "lagta to akdoo hai per phir bhi gurd se bhi ziada meetha hai"😳 and mayu's comment about "life wud be much better without me😭…n then Friends Forever😊" and the last bit "my sapno ka rajkumar…my sweet Mayu"😍…each of which made this one shot even more mastiful, exciting and meaningful!⭐️👏

Lmao😆😛…I cracked up at nupur's comment about the excel girls' clothing: "n most girls wearing half cloths…'haye kyun..lagti to ache khaase khaate peete gharanon se hain per kapre khareedne main itni kanjoosi kyun'.." lolz😆…gud one!😉😛

You have truly captured nupur's character really well jaan👍🏼…amazing job!👏👏👏

Loved your use of color codes as a technique to differentiate b/w the scenes…excellent idea!😊👏

The transition from present to flashback and then back to present…was also brilliantly done…I literally loved❤️ the ending bit w/ Mayur marriage: "MAYANK is still my dream man and he is the only one who filled the empitness in my life and completed me....with his UNCONDITIONAL LOVE"😳😳…Wonderfully put dear! 👏👏

Now as for your overall one-shot: it was superb, fabulous, incredible, fantastic, outstanding and mind blowing👏…I'm giving u a 10 on 10 for it hun⭐️…Honestly! While reading ur one-shot…I was able to re-live all of the beautiful memorable moments b/w Mayur from the beginning till now all over again😍…n for that a very, very, very *BIG HUG* 🤗to you from my end😳

Keep up the rocking job…👍🏼

and continue to shower us with more n more of these one shot…😳😛

"adhoori saans thi..dhadhkan adhoori thi..

adhoore hum......

magar ab chaand poora hai falak per..

aur ab poore hain hum...." *sigh*😍

Love ya loads! 🤗

~*LiSa*~

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Originally posted by: KHJL

WOW! Aisha

Ur Mayur one shot was awesomeeeee!👏⭐️

I loveddddddddddd it jaan!❤️😳😳

Wonderfully written and very well expressed'👏👏

I loved how u put in those one liners..(well not necessarily one liners'but..😛)'like the comment about "madhoo makhee'" and nupur's "By God"😃 and "Morena Express" and "ab yeh mayank sharma konsi bala hai"😆 and "books were like sleeping pills which made me dizzy"😆 and "sadoo"😛 and "lagta to akdoo hai per phir bhi gurd se bhi ziada meetha hai"😳 and mayu's comment about "life wud be much better without me😭'n then Friends Forever😊" and the last bit "my sapno ka rajkumar'my sweet Mayu"😍'each of which made this one shot even more mastiful, exciting and meaningful!⭐️👏

Lmao😆😛'I cracked up at nupur's comment about the excel girls' clothing: "n most girls wearing half cloths''haye kyun..lagti to ache khaase khaate peete gharanon se hain per kapre khareedne main itni kanjoosi kyun'.." lolz😆'gud one!😉😛

You have truly captured nupur's character really well jaan👍🏼'amazing job!👏👏👏

Loved your use of color codes as a technique to differentiate b/w the scenes'excellent idea!😊👏

The transition from present to flashback and then back to present'was also brilliantly done'I literally loved❤️ the ending bit w/ Mayur marriage: "MAYANK is still my dream man and he is the only one who filled the empitness in my life and completed me....with his UNCONDITIONAL LOVE"😳😳'Wonderfully put dear! 👏👏

Now as for your overall one-shot: it was superb, fabulous, incredible, fantastic, outstanding and mind blowing👏'I'm giving u a 10 on 10 for it hun⭐️'Honestly! While reading ur one-shot'I was able to re-live all of the beautiful memorable moments b/w Mayur from the beginning till now all over again😍'n for that a very, very, very *BIG HUG* 🤗to you from my end😳

Keep up the rocking job'👍🏼

and continue to shower us with more n more of these one shot'😳😛

"adhoori saans thi..dhadhkan adhoori thi..

adhoore hum......

magar ab chaand poora hai falak per..

aur ab poore hain hum...." *sigh*😍

Love ya loads! 🤗

~*LiSa*~

Originally posted by: preethis

wonderful dear.......

Originally posted by: sree_27

amazing, lovely😊..keep writing more!!👍🏼 n pls do pm me whn u write ur next ff..

Originally posted by: cherrgirl2711

dis is wat i call an ALLROUNDED, SIMPLE YET SWEET oneshot .... and the ending was really cool cause wen i ws reading ur update i was so into it dat i couldn't wait for the ending and i hope to read sum more of ur work...tc

Originally posted by: urvimjht

BEAUTIFUL!

Originally posted by: sajan_monaya

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sorry ashu

i have to urgently leave

will cum 2morrow and comment

sorry again

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wow ashu....................loved it

soooooooooooo sweeeeeeeeeeet

awsum job done

do continue wid this work

very well written