New FF:Pyaar Ka Rishta.updt 8#page 21

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Posted: 15 years ago
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HIIII guys.ok i tried a new FF today..i just got a random thought and developed it for fun.you know i am terrrible in writing so bear with me.
part 1:page 1
part 2:page 3
part 3:page 6
part 4:page 9
part 5:page 12
part 6:page 15
part 7:page 19
part 8:page 21
At Manali....

The morning sun blazed red and finally the rays got past the window panes onto the room which looked too clean and warm for such a handsome young man lying on the bed but Prithvi Saxena is forced to act older when he is barely 10yrs.Now slowly waking up and stretching his body, he looked like a greek god out from clouds.His eyes are still closed...he got up, took a deep breath and started his routine walk to the room next to his.That room is much smaller and looked like nature's heaven with many paintings and flowery decorations.Prithvi moved towards the old bed where a small figure is still sleeing with blanket closing her from head to toe.He slowly removed the blanket to half and opened his eyes to see his sister's face which glowed with the same innocence and purity that filled his heart with warm emotion.He said sweetly, "Goodmorning Avni".Avni opened her eyes finally and touched his face tenderly and said,"Happy Birthday Bhai".Prithvi hugged his little sis and said,"thanks avni,today is the birthday of my life...a new beginning".
A loud voice came from downstairs "AVNIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIIII,BHAIYAAAAAAAAA".....both of them jumped from the bed and exclaimed,"ROSHNIIIIII....".

Now faraway from manali into the midst of mumbai...we enter into beautiful Gujral Mansion...

There is lots of rustling at the pool side....... true there are many giggling girls surrounding a good-looking guy in the pool.They are laughing merrily,wearing silly jokes to eachother.Then suddenly a roar came from the house , "SAMEERRRRRRRR" and gave a start to Sameer Gujral.He exclaimed, "what the hell did i do this time????", "ok girls see ya in eveng gotto to go otherwise papa chops gets mad...bye" and came out of the Pool but all the girls screamed, "Sam stay back", "love you sammy","oh nooo",:....but sameer went on to meet his father smiling to himself ectastically,thinking "This is my world and it is heaven....and nothing changes for me... never.....".Poor dude don't know he gonna meet hell in next 24hrs....

Hingorani GUjral is fuming and upon seeing his son he blasted,"what the heck u think u r doing???how dare u kick my manager yesterday just bcoz he refused to give u your check???i don't care what rubbish you do outside but don't mess with my office people",he stopped seeing samz smiling,"when will you be serious??i am dying to bring some sense to you!!!!"...
sitting on the sofa,samz said,"come on dad why do give the same lecture baar baar......try something new". Hingorani said even more angrily,"Stop it,you should be ashamed of yourself...your sister is more responsible than you.."
Just then Damini Gujral in a complete corporate look came down talking on her cell,"I know what is right and what is wrong with my company.I can't put the companies reputation at risk.close the deal and no further talk.",she gave back the cell to her secretary beside her .."Goldie..don't make me talk to that party again."and goldie nodded..
Samz seeing his sis brightened up and called out,"diiiiiiii.........."
Damz came forward and said,"come on papa,it is his birthday.can't you leave him for today and anyways i don't like that manager myself..gotto remove him sooner or later.so why care??"
Hingorani said "you always come with an excuse to protect your bro..you too are spoiling him like your mother did.ohh i am helpless..." and went away from there seeing he can't say further infront of damini .
samz gave a innocent baby look to damz which made her laugh and say,"ok sammy,r u going to sulk like that or go and see your sister's b'day present???".He stoped acting and shouted,"what is it dii???".
damz took him outside to show his new Yamaha series imported bike.samz was jubiliant and hugged his sis.."Thanks diiii.wow my 30th bike.yippeeeee .i am looking forward to this..."."where are the keys di???"
damz said,"Well not here bro..".
samz said,"then where?????"
damz replied,"In manali"
samz:---"WHATTTTTTTT??????"


P.S:k just tell me if u liked it or not.i know i am not great imaginary person so all sort of comments are welcome.


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hira_123 thumbnail
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Carie...👏...👍🏼...

I am not supposed to be foruming but u babes...GOSH love this FF compelled me to log in and comment...😃

Its really different the way u changed the brothers and sisters like

Prithvi, Avni and Roshni

Damini, Sameer and Varun

I am looking to this one babes....plz do continue its really innovative

way to go girl...😎...

And u do write well trust me u r better than me...😃

P.S..Sameer Gujral sounds really funny lolz..but I like it and their dad's name Hingorani...😆....its really cool

Bless u and do continue babes..mwah..xXx

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Posted: 15 years ago
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Wow! Switch of characters haan!
Really cool idea carie...keep it up sweets! LOVED it!
Do continue and let me know when ur on the second part!
Rach
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Posted: 15 years ago
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@hira:thanks soo much babes🤗really u made my day.....plz come back soon to foruming.missing u a lotttttt and so is savni😳.will deffo continue especially for u😊.hey roshy is not privni's sis and varun is deffo not gujral....wait for next part for their entry story😉
@rachel:so sweet of you rach😊.thanks a lot for commenting.will deffo tell u when i update it.k
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Posted: 15 years ago
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really nice introductions! keep it up dear!
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So cuteeeeeeeeee i like it plz pm me next time so cute i like prithvi as a brother of avni and roshni
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Carie!
Great idea, babe!! Cool switch... LOVED it!!
Waiting to read more... Please add me to your pm list if you have one.
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Posted: 15 years ago
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ToTally new Idea WoWie !! 🤗

kool damz n samz sis n bro ??!! kool !! 👍🏼

n pri - avni n rosh siblings ..awwwww.. prfct !! 😳


cnt soon swts !! 😃

- Luv Niki..😊
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Posted: 15 years ago
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Hey carie...

what a FF start.. loved it...
Pri --- greek god.. of course he is...hahahha
Pri-Avni bro-sis.. sooo cutteeee
Damz-Samz bro- sis.. hahaha...
HIngorani Gujral... hahaha

so why Damz said "manali??""..

waitng for ur next part..

do PM me please...

-- Mru
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Posted: 15 years ago
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hi!i'm not a regular member of this forum.i just read the written updates from the forum b/c i don't have much time to watch the drama.i m free today that's why i have read your fic.it is AMAZZZZING.i don't know that if u have time to read this comment but plzzz can u put me in your pm list.PLZZZZ update next part soon.waiting for next part.

fatima

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