The Red String Theory (Chapter 17 updated on page 59) - Page 46

Originally posted by: dilse14

hi nailaud soon

TRST .. chap~ 17

Hi naila,

Erhhmmm, dekh.. cut the looks, at least I got here.. dekh meri life bhaut busy hai.. world's busiest body is hammie! apne ko saans lene ki bhi phorsaat nehin.. now do I qualify for your awww? Ok as you wish.. but me now looking forward to a good read!

Naila..just finished reading .. what a tear jerker..very moving the scene between father and daughter.. A strange, connection exists between them.. long before they even come face to face.. she notices him, or feels his presence? Being her father he takes the birth right to veer his child away from danger.. that of her committing a huge mistake of marrying the wrong guy..

Interesting.. no one's persuasion of abandoning her marriage to the jerk, mattered to Nakusha.. accept that of her unreliable excuse of a father's plea.. he supports his argument well.. uses familial references.. that usually soften 's the heart..

Your words convey very well the predicament of a father who faces the fact of rearing a baby.. what Sheila does is something not unheard of in our culture.. siblings.. admirably accept the task of rearing and nurturing their siblings child.. that's how much the new life matters.. rather than hand over the baby to a stranger to be brought up.. it's preferred that the baby is reared within the family, by a blood relation..

You subtly brought out Ganpat and sheila's relationship too.. I would find it a bit difficult to accept it otherwise.. too..

Somehow reasons for both Ganpat and Sheila going off the rails were woven well.. at least eventually Nakusha begins to understand why things pan out the way they did.. the truth did set both father and daughter free!

The chapter, is well narrated .. the dialogues between father and daughter are credible and cover so many varied emotions, of, desperation, pleas for forgiveness and compassion.. gratitude, rejection.. coming around.. and tranquillity.. mind you it ends on a cheery note.. looking forward to Nakusha living life to the full.. she deserves it.. I see her as loving daughter,one who cared, honoured her foster mother till her dying day.. and heard her dysfunctional father out..

Thanks Naila , please continue , for sure want to see what goes on next.. much love hammie. 1.5.15

Originally posted by: jedy25

hi nailathanxs for anno ud soon

Originally posted by: Hamlet53

TRST .. chap~ 17

Hi naila, Top of the mornin' to ya Hamlet (Although it is like 11.50p.m, as I tyep this!)

Erhhmmm, dekh.. cut the looks, er what looks, my "puss in boots" waley? at least I got here.. dekh meri life bhaut busy hai.. world's busiest body is hammie! Bas, Bas Bas saas lelo! apne ko saans lene ki bhi phorsaat nehin..See, maine kaha tah! now do I qualify for your awww? You'll always qualify for my AWWW Ok as you wish.. but me now looking forward to a good read! ME lookign forward to your extensive reply!

NO honestly, Hammie take your time, I have no qualms ok! I'm just super elated that you read it! It means sooo much 😳

Naila..just finished reading .. what a tear jerker..Yes, this chapter is quite "dark"-for the lack of a better word-not like the rest of the updates. But it had to be done. very moving the scene between father and daughter.. It was really hard for me to write them together. There was so much I wanted to show. Like, the guy has just crash landed back into her life, surely it will take time for her adjust to that, but I didn't want to write too much, it would have detracted from the bigger picture. While her father is a key player int he plot, he is only one layer, and I could not give to much emphasis to this one meet: especially when the entire meeting will be dissected in the oncoming updates.

A strange, connection exists between them.. long before they even come face to face.. she notices him, or feels his presence?YES. That was something I wanted to make clear from the onset. Being her father he takes the birth right to veer his child away from danger.. Interesitn choice of words "birth right" < do you recall the time those words were used in this fic in relation to parents: It was Dutta remembering what his mother had said to him and how disgusted he was at it. *something to mull over, for my fellow detectives following this story* that of her committing a huge mistake of marrying the wrong guy..

Interesting.. no one's persuasion of abandoning her marriage to the jerk, mattered to Nakusha..Yes and No. I won't say those opinions didn't matter. They did, in their own way, perhaps not as much as thye should have but they did matter. Otherwise she would not have lied to her bestfriend when she went to meet the Jerl's family, nor would she have plucked up the courage to tell Dutta how she felt about him, moments after he told her to drop the jerk like a hot potato-of course the latter blew up her in face as the noose on his finger made her abruptly stop. accept that of her unreliable excuse of a father's plea..But yes it would seem as though it is her father who does what both Leela and Dutta failed to do. he supports his argument well.. uses familial references.. and this is the key: makes you wonder whether it is actually becuase of Ganpath or maybe it is the affection and now heightened respect she has for Sheila that made her change her mind. OR maybe it is entirely something else??? what? it's no fun if I can't mess around with you guys. that usually soften 's the heart..

Your words convey very well the predicament of a father who faces the fact of rearing a baby.. i'm glad youve said that, as I have no experience on this matter. it purely came from my imgination, I just hope it has come across at least a little bit believable.

what Sheila does is something not unheard of in our culture.. siblings.. admirably accept the task of rearing and nurturing their siblings child.. that's how much the new life matters.. rather than hand over the baby to a stranger to be brought up.. it's preferred that the baby is reared within the family, by a blood relation..yes, and here there was another reason, one I only slightly hinted at, as I would much rather my readers make their own mind up on those facts. it is entirely up to you, how you see their dynamic.

You subtly brought out Ganpat and sheila's relationship too.. I would find it a bit difficult to accept it otherwise.. too..sometimes subtly is the key-and as I have said above, when it comes to Sheila-Ganpath-Nakusha(snr) i'd rather you make up your own mind of what their relationship was like.

Somehow (somehow? lol, it's as though you doubted I'd wind everything up lol. Have a lil faith Hammie. It maybe madness but I have a method to my madness)reasons for both Ganpat and Sheila going off the rails were woven well.. at least eventually Nakusha begins to understand why things pan out the way they did.. the truth did set both father and daughter free! I'm glad you've said that because this encounter was supposed to be liberating for Naku, so that she could finally put down that weight and burdens he has been carrying on her shoulders regarding her (mother- sheila) and for ganpath it was supposed to be the beginning of his "atonement" (incidentally what I nearly named this chapter)

The chapter, is well narrated ..Thank you the dialogues between father and daughter are credible That means so much to me, and cover so many varied emotions, of, desperation, pleas for forgiveness and compassion.. gratitude, rejection.. I am happy to hear that!!! coming around.. and tranquillity.. mind you it ends on a cheery note.. Yes, I thought that was NEEDED after how dark the chapter gets. looking forward to Nakusha living life to the full.. aaah yes, but the story is now ending. she deserves it.. I see her as loving daughter,one who cared, honoured her foster mother till her dying day.. and heard her dysfunctional father out..and that's what I wanted to portray. She may ot have had the ideal parentage but she made the most of it and tried her best to see the world from other peoples eyes.

Thanks Naila , please continue , for sure want to see what goes on next.. much love hammie. 1.5.15 Hammie thank you so much for your continued support. I loved reading your comment, so thoughtful and and sincere! Pleasure is entirely mine!!!!!

Originally posted by: dilse14

waiting

Originally posted by: .LionHeart.

Damn, I've got lotsa catching up to do 😆 Well well well, look what the cat dragged in.

I popped in to see what's going on over here :P Aloha, Alice I think you just fell into a parallel world huh?

I shall be back soonish...ishh haha LOL I know what Soonish means LOL ( use it often hehe)

Catch ya laters! Yes hopefully soon, this thread is in dire need of recolouring ;p ya know because our chats are so colourful, Tahera would agree! ;p

Originally posted by: goody2shoes