~||Aaliya/Neil OS - One Night in Delhi||~ by mina - Page 2

OMG!!! I loved this wasn't expecting Neil to be so caring tho I really thought he would've asked to stroke him but he was such a gentleman about the whole thing... even though i don't like neil or aliyah but they make a heck of a couple and they'll look so damn hot tgthr wish tht she cud really hook up with him in the show n fall in love n be nice ppl... if its not too much to ask can you do something like this on abhi and pragya too (the maturity content I am talking abt) 😉

Mina - first a confession. I read this one a couple of days ago. And made a mental note to come back and comment. Finally made my meandering way back.

And second - so since i am commenting a few days after the read, i might miss out on some (lots) of details. But, but but - i HAVE to comment on this OS.

Third (or First, however you choose to take it) - hats off to you to think of and then write about this pairing. I don't follow the show too closely - i follow the FFs more 😆. They are just better written you see. So perhaps that's why i don't have the same antagonism towards Neil - or rather, i can accept his pairing up with someone without any qualms. And like you, i am NOT condoning rape - or even the threat of it. I am pretending that entire scene never happened.

The whole night was... serene. Amazing though it is to connect that word with this pairing. But it is. Aliyah needed some peace and so did Neil. And who would have thought that these two almost-strangers could find solace with each other?

The best part for me was the care he showed for her. Going slow, accepting and then revering that she was a virgin and had selected him as her first. Not many men are capable of that. And then Aliyah was willing to return the favour...

I may be in the minority here. I see that even though this story deserves way more likes, it has a precious few only. One of the disadvantages of writing fan-fictions... Like i was saying, i may be in the minority, but i really want to know what happens when they meet up again. Add another part or two to this one will you? Please?

Originally posted by: kdsubs

Mina - first a confession. I read this one a couple of days ago. And made a mental note to come back and comment. Finally made my meandering way back.

And second - so since i am commenting a few days after the read, i might miss out on some (lots) of details. But, but but - i HAVE to comment on this OS.

Third (or First, however you choose to take it) - hats off to you to think of and then write about this pairing. I don't follow the show too closely - i follow the FFs more 😆. They are just better written you see. So perhaps that's why i don't have the same antagonism towards Neil - or rather, i can accept his pairing up with someone without any qualms. And like you, i am NOT condoning rape - or even the threat of it. I am pretending that entire scene never happened.

The whole night was... serene. Amazing though it is to connect that word with this pairing. But it is. Aliyah needed some peace and so did Neil. And who would have thought that these two almost-strangers could find solace with each other?

The best part for me was the care he showed for her. Going slow, accepting and then revering that she was a virgin and had selected him as her first. Not many men are capable of that. And then Aliyah was willing to return the favour...

I may be in the minority here. I see that even though this story deserves way more likes, it has a precious few only. One of the disadvantages of writing fan-fictions... Like i was saying, i may be in the minority, but i really want to know what happens when they meet up again. Add another part or two to this one will you? Please?

Thanks so much for your thoughts Kat! I saw your like a few days ago and was wondering what your response was. Really appreciate you coming back to say all this!! Glad you enjoyed the serenity and that you appreciated the dynamic :)

So, yes, I absolutely have more in mind for them! It's on the backburner until I finish my AbhiGya story The Hookup, but this pairing caught me hard and I really really want to write more of them. They might turn a little too good in my version, because I have an odd instinct for fluff. But I do want to explore what made Neil so unusually respectful - and in this backstory I'm working on, the thing with Bulbul did happen as shown on the serial and is part of why he responds to Aaliya as he does here.

Anyway I will probably PM you when it is posted because your feedback always leaves me thinking! Will probably be a few weeks though. 😳

And thank you again for your kind words. This is one I definitely wrote mostly for myself, and for my friends who requested it (credit goes to Lk and Trish for thinking of the pairing, not me!). I didn't expect it to be of general interest to the forum, and I really appreciate everyone who does take a chance and reads it - and even more so when they leave a comment to let me know :)

Originally posted by: Javeria3991

superb

Thanks for reading!! 😊

Originally posted by: lasyap3

Fantastic OS !!!

So glad you liked it, <3 to you 😊

Originally posted by: simsim25

loved it!!!

Thank you simi! So happy you read and enjoyed it 😃

Originally posted by: Kesha_H.

OMG!!! I loved this wasn't expecting Neil to be so caring tho I really thought he would've asked to stroke him but he was such a gentleman about the whole thing... even though i don't like neil or aliyah but they make a heck of a couple and they'll look so damn hot tgthr wish tht she cud really hook up with him in the show n fall in love n be nice ppl... if its not too much to ask can you do something like this on abhi and pragya too (the maturity content I am talking abt) 😉

Haha, you're right! Neil as he is on the show is absolutely the kind of guy who would ask for returned favours. So glad you like this hot jodi and I too wish they could connect and redeem themselves! And I know you've checked out The Hookup by now...not sure I'll be writing anything else with mature content in the near future, but probably there will be more eventually 😛 Thanks for reading and commenting!

HOLY Shit!!! When did you write this?!! RES!! Excited😉

Originally posted by: renukha871

HOLY Shit!!! When did you write this?!! RES!! Excited😉

aww I thought you saw it already! or decided not to read it for whatever reason. anyway was hoping you would check out what a treat i found for aaliya 😃

tell me what you think k plz thx bai 😆

Originally posted by: -mina-

aww I thought you saw it already! or decided not to read it for whatever reason. anyway was hoping you would check out what a treat i found for aaliya 😃

tell me what you think k plz thx bai 😆

Originally posted by: -mina-

Thanks for reading!! 😊


So glad you liked it, <3 to you 😊


Thank you simi! So happy you read and enjoyed it 😃



Haha, you're right! Neil as he is on the show is absolutely the kind of guy who would ask for returned favours. So glad you like this hot jodi and I too wish they could connect and redeem themselves! And I know you've checked out The Hookup by now...not sure I'll be writing anything else with mature content in the near future, but probably there will be more eventually 😛 Thanks for reading and commenting!

Originally posted by: renukha871

HOLY Shit!!! When did you write this?!! RES!! Excited😉

Unres!!

Babe, you know I would read anything you write! Even it's Purab/Bulbul or Sarla😆 And that is saying something!!😉 Really sorry that I stumbled upon a little late!! But better late than never!!

Okay, when I first saw Neil, I thought he'd look good with Aaliyah too!😉

I love this story. Interesting, they had a common ground! Their hatred for Aroras! They are a very physical-based relationship and you've written that part so incredibly well!!😳

But my shipper heart in between your stories wanted her to stop what she's doing and run to Purab's arms. Yeah, apparently I haven't abandon that sinking ship. Regardless, this story is just as amazing as your rest ones!!😳😃

XOXO!!! <3

thank you renu!! nothing to be sorry about omg no worries. anyway, haha if i ever write rabul i am 99% sure it would only be as backstory for eventual subul or anybody-else-bul :P and sarla...lol yeah i don't feel likely to inflict that on you 😛 but so good to know you'd be there for that too 😉 🤗

glad you liked the story! and aww, after the way you put it, i almost want to try to write aaliya running back to purab after all - there's something powerful in that "wait no this is the wrong guy!" moment. the only thing is i can't imagine purab's arms being open, or that he even deserves her coming back to him 😕 that ship is so off course, i can't even feel the waves anymore 😭

ahem. thanks again renu, i appreciate your reading and commenting <333 😊

Originally posted by: Kesha_H.

you should tho I told you you're really good at this mature writing thing dude when I had more spare time I thought about writing a mature ff on AbhiGya I had the plot n everything sorted it was just putting them into words and then procrastination kicked in lol

aww!! well i hope you find a chance to get back to it kesha, i bet it would be awesome and lots of us would want to read it 😉