Break of Dawn: Abhi-Pragya One Shot - Page 2

Tia!!! Thank you SO much!!!! This is amazing and lovely and perfect and thrilling and also very satisfying to read. You've executed the idea so beautifully! And there are so many really excellent phrases and expressions ❤️ 👏 ⭐️

Loved the careful way you explored Pragya's thoughts and explained about her googling. You conveyed her vulnerability and self-consciousness in such a subtle way. By the time she was thinking about dressing differently for him, I was convinced that it was something that made sense for her.

The post-conflict stage of relationship that you described seems so sweet and really fitting to how it might be when they finally just get to be friends. The strong sense you created of Abhi taking care of her and cherishing her just stole my heart honestly! It was more than just words on the screen, you really made me feel their good new dynamic. Left me swooning. Aapas mein banti hain, finally!!

Uff the lace satin gown! Thanks for making it green btw, my favourite colour! Heehee.

Idk why but I really liked the moment of Abhi impatiently knocking on the closet door. Maybe because there was no special reason for him to do it, just an everyday moment of AbhiGya friction, but in the best possible way. Sweet and innocuous. Idk I just really liked that moment!! Haha 😆

Ok and then the hot turn at the end! The build up was just beautiful and then this part was something else, thrumming with energy and tension, and such a satisfying resolution!!

I really liked the detail of locking his fingers with hers. And the whole visual of against the wall!!

Aww Abhi's explanation was great. Waiting for her to make the first move out of self-doubt!! On the one hand it's hard to imagine short-fuse Abhi being that patient, but on the other hand it's perfectly easy to imagine how he would hold back because he wanted her to actually want him. The way you have explored this contrast was really compelling to me! ❤️ ❤️ ❤️

Uff chatri-wala line!! *dead* Like you know that picture Riyyu always posts with the suit guy's feet 😉

Oooh interesting idea about the letter. I wonder what she wrote! How steamy did she get? Because she was really frustrated right? 😲 But then I'm sure it was full of love and affection too. Oh how I would like to know what she wrote and what Abhi thought!

But omg thanks for not making them wait until morning to move forward! Pragya feeling like she finally had a right on him was...honestly, I felt triumphant along with her, if that makes any sense. And finally she had the confidence to just claim what is hers! I love it!!

Abhi's sleepy response to the kiss! I can just imagine that! Silly and adorable, coming from the deep sense of comfortableness they have with each other. But good thing she shocks him out of that and they move on to more exciting things. Sweetness has a time and place...hotness has a time and place 😃

Aww dog tag mention!! Nice!! 😆

And the ending. The loveliest fade to black I have ever read. I wasn't even annoyed that you didn't show further; it felt perfectly right to leave them at that moment, and I could imagine just how much they enjoyed and discovered together and how it brought them to a new, even more fulfilling stage of their relationship. You built the story so strongly and ended it on just the right note ❤️ ❤️ ❤️

Oooh Tia I wish I could extract all these delighted feelings/thoughts I am having about this lovely story and like, give them to you in a bottle or something, because words don't seem enough. That was probably weird, forgive me. Anyway this was a really meaningful gift for me to receive and I am so so so grateful! Thank you so much, really!!

I feel that this had a bit of a different tone/style than your other pieces and I would love to see more of it! Well, more of your writing in general, of course. Remember once you had mentioned a "getting carried away" scene at Arora house with someone's inability to control their vocalizations??? Came up in my mind the other day...make that story your next project?! Hee if the muse cooperates of course. But yeah after seeing how you have managed to balance emotionally fulfilling development with pure hotness, I am even more eager to see that scene from your hands!!

So ok, thank you thank you thank you! I will print this out and keep it on hand to read when I need cheering up. It's just a beautiful little bite of suggested romance and sensuality, with so much satisfying emotional heft to support it. Love it beyond words and feel so thankful that we have connected over the last few months on the forum! You're the best, thank you again!! ❤️ ❤️ ❤️

Originally posted by: ssafdar

Amazing!!!!!

I loved how Abhi liked the new dress but Loved her old style.

hhhooottt ...amazing... beautiful... Passionate...Abhi loves her the way she is... nice

Aww!! I really wanted to see Abhi saying that he loves how she is, and loved how you left us to wonder what happens next 😳 But I love how u explained Abhi's POV, it all felt so real. And Pragya looking up his previous gfs on Google was soo cute

Originally posted by: SaaraDON

WOW 👏. Superb stuff Tia. It's really difficult to make me read 😛 especially on forums 😆 But your piece of writing caught hold of my attention. Very well sketched and written.

Arey, makes me happy my story compelled you to read and comment. Best reward that is!!

I just loved how you initially gave a round up of their relationship & how it has shaped up until now and then put in your imagination about how they might end-up shaping in near future. 👏

Yes, future prediction of sorts, but hope something comes true of it.
I have skimmed through a few FF's/OS's at times and the writing gets to obscene for my liking 😛 but i loved it how you kept the composure and left a few things on the readers imagination.

Ahh thank you. I am glad it came out as I wished it to.
1. I would actually love to see Pragya googling Abhi's ex-GF's...😆 [How funny that would turn out to be...more comic element in the show]

Hain na.. Abhi does so much googling.. why not Pragya?😆

2. "It started with hatred from his side and helplessness to stay in the marriage due to social pressures from her side."

Perfect reply for all those saying Pragya is weak or dumb and calling her character senseless. Social pressures can be nerve-wrecking in real life.

😳

3. "You look so delicious, I want to eat you up. But I need to know. You know what I mean? And one more thing, Chashmish in her chatri like dresses is way sexier than this. Because I keep imagining what's hidden in those meters and meters of clothing that I can't see" Abhi whispered in her ears sending her senses over the edge.

This bit just sent me in splits...🤣 Knowing Abhi and is witty side. This was so him.

😆 Thanks.

4. "Love me till the break of dawn" she said in barely a whisper.

I can not imagine Pragya saying this to Abhi in the show...😆 Knowing her hesitant nature. But it was apt for the OS.

I hope Pragya surprises us! She has a fiery side to her too, hmm? Hopefully that comes out when she is not bound by obligations.

PS. If possible, lets mail this piece of writing to Ekta Kapoor? 😛 Because i would love to see this whole scenario on the show...😳

Originally posted by: Rozy77

amazing, wonderful and passionate 👏☺️
really enjoyed reading it😃
pragya was such a sweety😳
and abhi was too nicee...😉😆

ASDFGGHJKL!

Originally posted by: Anbhigya

Awsum as always Tia..:):):) prags googlin abhi's ex-gf's... Ha ha.. Dats funny... N abhi insistin dat he likes her da way she is...:):D i luved it n m sure b'dy gal is sooo gonna like it!!!!:)

Originally posted by: MsTiara

WOW! WOW! WOW!

This was sooo good, Tia! Amazing!

I'm speechless... You should definitely write more often!

Abhi loves her the way she is & that's true love!

Originally posted by: lasyap3

A.M.A.Z.I.N.G.

B.E.A.U.T.I.F.U.L.

Splendid job dear 👏 👏 👏 👏 👏