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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: Armu4eva

ENTRY 5

KTLK - Diwali Dilon ki
[TUM BIN JAAOON KAHAN]


"I'm so sorry Ashutosh, Nidhi. I had filed your application for divorce. But it couldn't be forwarded because of the Diwali break at the Court... You both have to wait for the next one or two weeks", Anji, the close friend of Ashutosh and Nidhi said sighing and leaning against the backrest of the office chair in her law chamber...

Ashutosh, who had with an anticipation to hear his divorce with Nidhi get forward, looked at Nidhi plainly. She was quietly listening to what her best friend was saying... On hearing what Anji had to say, Ashutosh nodded his head as a response to what she said, stood up and quietly went out to his car to leave for his office, not even looking behind at the lady who still is his wife.

Ashutosh Mathur, a businessman at profession, running a fairly well IT Software business in Ahmedabad, with his business partner, Ranganath, his old time friend and their lawyer Anji's husband... Things were all running smoothly in his Bachelor personal and professional life, until the new Intern, and later one of the Junior Software Engineers in his firm; Nidhi came into his life. From an Employer-Employee relationship, he never knew when this bubbly intern in his firm changed his atmosphere and turned into a dear friend, and slowly a beloved for him... His small family of Father, mother, and younger brother Armaan did not take much time to accept her into their family and was married to him in a high profile affair...

Things couldn't have been better for them; every little hurdle was crossed beautifully in the initial stages of their nuptiallife, until after a few years the patience and tolerance among both of them start losing... A happy and supporting family,successful business were just not enough, the sense of independence and busyness was slowly taking toll... Even an entry of a little child was not a factor to resolve the issues, but to add on to the quarrels... With Nidhi managing both office and home and the little baby, Ashutosh started getting even busier... And there started the parting of ways... Nidhi couldn't give time to Ashutosh, and Ashutosh couldn't to his family... And here they were sitting in a law chamber to know the progress at their divorce case...

Ashutosh came out of the alley of memories as his sub-conscious mind by itself put brakes on his car in front of his office... Handing over the keys of his car to the valet he hopped over the stairs quickly to get immersed into the flood of his work to forget for some time that his divorce has still not happened, and he still has a quarrelling wife...


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Nidhi who sat quietly on the visitor chairs in front of Anji in her chamber, with her head bowed with her fingers entwining and detangling with each other every now and then...

She had nothing to say or any strength to stand up and walk away, coz the sympathising eyes of her best friend told she cannot walk away today without having a talk with her... And within a few seconds Anji came around the table, and occupied the chair that a few minutes back Ashutosh sat on... Putting her hand on Nidhi's she softly spoke- "Nidhi... Yaar tujhe ek baat frankly bataaoon? Teri ye shaaditere aur jeejaji ke alaawa aur koi nahi solve kar sakta... Kaise karna hai solve wo tum dekho... Try to indulge him in the family, and see if things improve... Tum aise kaise haar maan sakti ho?"... Hearing Anji, Nidhi looked up with tear filled eyes, yet nodded... Clearly she did not wanted to separate with her husband, but circumstances are forcing her to... But on some encouragement by her bestie, she stood up with a resolution to whole heartedly try once to solve the grieveances...

After Nidhi left, Anji picked her phone and dialled to Ranganath- "Hello, Ranga... I need your help baby."


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"Ye kya hai Ashutosh???" Ranga threw a set of papers on Ashutosh's desk... Ashutosh picked them up to see some mistakes from his side that could have caused some consequences for the firm... Though Ranganath knew about how disturbed Ashu was, and always made sure to recheck the work done by him to ensure that not much damage is caused... But this time it was an order from his wife, and he too could not see his old friend so lost and sad... Deep inside he knew however the stress is between both of them, Ashutosh still loved his wife somehow, but couldn't muster up courage to stop the divorce that was coming their way...

Ashutosh just stood up bowing his head in shame that he had been so distracted that he was going to cause harme to his firm... And Ranganath too wasn't leaving any stone unturned to act before him how angry he is... And continued with his rant- "Yaar agar kaam nahi ho raha hai toh break kyu nahi le lete thoda kaam se... (Running his hand in his hair) Ek kaam karo Ashutosh... Please Diwali tak tum ghar par hee raho... Main sambhaal loonga... Please..."

Ashutosh who was already feeling bad quietly walked off the office, not risking to further angry his old friend... And since there was no other option, he went to his house...

It was the eve before Diwali... On the door itself he could hear his baby daughter's giggles... He went in and after freshening up, sat on a chair in the hall... His little baby was trying to crawl over the carpeted floor... He kept watching her for many minutes, when he unknowingly started smiling at his daughter's antics, and opened his arms for her, and his baby crawled up to him and sat my his feet, asking to be picked up in her father's arms... Ashutosh suddenly felt a sense of so much belonging that his little baby loves her father so much... Amidst playing with his daughter, he looked at the house with the corner of his eyes... Nidhi was busy instructing the maids to clean the house for Diwali... And sometime later, he could smell Gujiyaas being prepared in the kitchen... The more he smelled it, the more his stomach grumbled... Nidhi was preparing one of his favourite sweets... How many times a year did Nidhi made this and he unthankfully ate them, not realising how much love was put into it...

His daughter wriggled out of his hold to again start crawling, and he left her to play, while he walked up to the kitchen, where Nidhi was busy preparing many of his favourites, all smiling, talking to his family along... Ashutosh couldn't help a rueful smile... However he had made their lives stressful, Nidhi hadn't made the home stressed that they have made with so much love... He just stood leaning against the threshold witnessing the love filled home they lived in...


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It was the eve of Diwali, Nidhi wearing a beautiful Orange and Golden saree sat on the steps of his home lighting the dias all over his home... The last two days have made him so overwhelmed to see his wife spreading so much love inspite of them thinking over divorce, and moreover whenever she caught him looking at her, her eyes held such love that was far away from the wife he thought she had become, Pestering, nagging or something... He really was cherishing the family time he was spending, and starting to realise what he had been missing for so many days, and months... This is all she had wanted him to... To spend some of his precious time with his family... What more had she asked...?

Ashutosh came and sat with Nidhi on the stairs, and started lighting more of lamps with her... Nidhi looked at him with a pleasantly surprised look... but he just bent and kissed her forehead, and with an apologetic look muttered a sincere- "I am sorry Nidhi... It's so hard to imagine our lives without you...", and Nidhi too did not know when her eyes welled up too... "I too am sorry... I cannot live without you Ashutosh... Even if we divorce our ways, It's impossible to divorce our hearts..."... Ashutosh hugged her tight to him and told- "Toh lets bot divorce!!! HAPPY DIWALI" "Happy Diwali Ashutosh!!!"

And the festival of lights brought lights in the lives of our beloved ASHNI!




⭐️ Very well written. Sorry. Yesterday night I did not have time to write a full length one.
AshNi's pain was so well expressed... I really felt Nidhi's tears... and little baby crawling and smiling at daddy... made me smile back...So palpable. thank you so much for writing so well🤗

The daily grind of working couple is the best topic you pointed out.. there is no ending to it.. what would have happened , had they really went ahead with divorce... what a lacklustre life it would have been . Your story is such an eye opener!!!👏👏👏
Edited by mudraswathi - 10 years ago
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Teacherji entry no 3 is by shirley no 1 by Tasha
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: -deepali17-

Teacherji entry no 3 is by shirley no 1 by Tasha



Oh is it?😲..I will change. thank you Dee
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Mudra... I m jumping up n down... 😃😃😃
mudra ka itna acha review mila mujhe... aaj mere zameen pe nahi hain kadam...😃
but on a serious note, I was not even gonna participate in this contest... it came at a wrong time for me as I said. but then I tthot that if each additional entry wud only pave the way to new contests of this kind, thus keeping the forum active..
but given my preoccupation, my mind refused to come up with a concept.. i knew it wud not be a Diwali concept - cud think of nothing relating to Diwali...so theme 2 it had to be for me - that set me thinking - wat to write abt Ashni after a gap of 10-15 yrs, nothing came to mind.. obviously there wont be any problems between them at that phase, a separation n reunion? no, the idea dint appeal to me, a prob related to kids? but what prob?? a life threatening disease like leukemia? ... on on i went, coming up n rejecting ideas...
finally this concept struck on 29th night... but cud not write then.. becoz had to get up at 6 in morning (nothing short of an ordeal for me) because my cousin was coming from another town, so had to be with her (n totally on my toes - dint even get to lie down for a minute even) for almost 14 hours.
so by the time i started writing, i was drained physically n mentally. so i just wrote in a hurry n sent it.. dint even bother to correct the typos/... was too drained to even proofread n it was already 11.30 pm.
to be frank i dint even expect 2-3 votes... but got so many... so HUGE THANKS TO ALL WHO VOTED FOR ENTRY 3.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: sshirley

Mudra... I m jumping up n down... 😃😃😃

mudra ka itna acha review mila mujhe... aaj mere zameen pe nahi hain kadam...😃
but on a serious note, I was not even gonna participate in this contest... it came at a wrong time for me as I said. but then I tthot that if each additional entry wud only pave the way to new contests of this kind, thus keeping the forum active..
but given my preoccupation, my mind refused to come up with a concept.. i knew it wud not be a Diwali concept - cud think of nothing relating to Diwali...so theme 2 it had to be for me - that set me thinking - wat to write abt Ashni after a gap of 10-15 yrs, nothing came to mind.. obviously there wont be any problems between them at that phase, a separation n reunion? no, the idea dint appeal to me, a prob related to kids? but what prob?? a life threatening disease like leukemia? ... on on i went, coming up n rejecting ideas...
finally this concept struck on 29th night... but cud not write then.. becoz had to get up at 6 in morning (nothing short of an ordeal for me) because my cousin was coming from another town, so had to be with her (n totally on my toes - dint even get to lie down for a minute even) for almost 14 hours.
so by the time i started writing, i was drained physically n mentally. so i just wrote in a hurry n sent it.. dint even bother to correct the typos/... was too drained to even proofread n it was already 11.30 pm.
to be frank i dint even expect 2-3 votes... but got so many... so HUGE THANKS TO ALL WHO VOTED FOR ENTRY 3.

shriley aap ne mare ss ke last 2 aur 3 chapter read kiye
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Thank you so much Aunty... This was the only written review on the forum for my petty work... 😃
No wonder why u are called a Teacher... I learnt a new virtue from u, no matter u win or lose, appreciate everyone... 👏
And I shall remember this all my life...
Reminds me of my Maternal Grandfather... When he lost his one and only election by just a mere 1 vote, even to congratulate his fellow participant, who won, he whole heartedly embraced him and congratulated him for the win.
Thank you for the valuable lesson you taught me... 😃
As for the review, thank you again aunty, dunno how far I was good in dat... But writing an almost divorce, and love and family pulling them together was what I had been thinking to write since a long time, but the college and all didn't let me do this, n in a crisp, smallest form I could manage this much...
You all appreciated, is all I can thank for Aunty... Thank you very much! 😃

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