FF- Destiny's Play Chap 4 Pg 127 June 16

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Suvika.

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Posted: 11 years ago

#371

Hi Suvika ,

Good morning, waiting for Friday.

vidya

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Hi Vidya.. Good morning.. Me too waiting for Friday.. Haven't typed a word of my chapter till now..

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vshenoy

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Posted: 11 years ago

#372

Originally posted by: Suvika.
I know

Sometimes I wonder how you manage with so much with two kids, some times it is difficult for me with one👍🏼.

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Suvika.

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Posted: 11 years ago

#373

Originally posted by: vshenoy

I think 2 is easier than one.. Esp if they are of the same gender.. These two don't need me much actually.. In their own world most of the time.. But I do need to act as a referee sometimes though 😆

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creativebird

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Posted: 11 years ago

#374

Originally posted by: Suvika.

Sometimes????

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Suvika.

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Posted: 11 years ago

#375

Yes.. Only sometimes.. Neither one of my kids is destructive.. So my house is safe too.. Lol

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Jayasree

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Posted: 11 years ago

#376

Originally posted by: Suvika.

Thank you Jayasreeji.. Double message kis khushi mein?? 😆

1st post mein hi spamming ka message aaya tha, usi khushi mein.

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Shari30

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Posted: 11 years ago

#377

Hello Writer Jee,

I sincerely bow down to your talent. I made a sketch of something and you are fast developing it in a work of art. More that Nidhi I am loving the way Ashu is shaping up, it's almost as if you managed to see what I wanted and now is putting it to words.

The way the subtle battle of heart and mind has been fantastic. buhahah loving Armaan and Ranga as devil's advocate. More than anything the idea of destiny playing with man is starting to take shape, albeit in the form of help from the two santa's helper that are Armaan and Ranga. Ashu choose to go on a lecture tour to escape yet the pull is too much he comes back, back to the scene where it all started and ended. He had the choice to stay there but the attraction was too much to bear.

The hide and seek scene , wonderfully depicted, it is almost a revisit of the crime scene. You have to be heartless if you do not feel for ASHU, he is almost like the drowning man craving for help, Seeing Nids is a flash of a the dream he wanted. It is all bitter sweet for both but the need to be together is clearly depicted in between the lines.

Both have hurt each other and been hurt by each other, let us see how this will unfold.

I am absolutely loving it.

Shari

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Suvika.

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Originally posted by: jayasree.rao

1st post mein hi spamming ka message aaya tha, usi khushi mein.

😲 aap ko bhi spamming ka message?? Has IF begun to target all my readers?? I don't even see your review let alone spamming pages Jayasreeji 😆

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creativebird

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Posted: 11 years ago

#379

Knock, knock, review is here...

First of all no comments on concept and story of the FF as you are rewriting Shari's concept but as usual I love your writing. So here I'm.

First chapter has been left out with lots of originality by itself and it was thoughtfully written anyways. So i didn't mind. You know I'm being greedy here to read your originality, so don't mind my words now😉. Frankly, I wasn't expecting beginning of the story from the same point when you said you are rewriting the story!

Your second chapter made it up. Your touch is felt in the story with reasonable fillings like reason of Dr. Ashutosh's early return, practicality of Nidhi's career stage and her being Neurologist! In short, great setting of the story...

Excellent job on masking two protagonist's real emotion under their stiff behavior on their first unexpected encounter.👏. It is very clear that Dr. Ashutosh is acting little greedy to satisfy his heart and eyes by holding back Nidhi under professional grounds without realizing two different set of people are planning to change their destiny over his little liberties. Nidhi's decision still unexplained? I'm sure yet to come so won't wonder any more.

I can still feel the glimpse of Ranga and Armaan from the show with your texting scene! Hilarious😆...

It appears to be more realistic with all other gaps filled in.

P.S.: Shari, story has been written very beautifully before but left without conclusion. Looking forward for it in Sujatha style now.