my poem

Rabzonedge

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Posted: 11 years ago

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chidiya ki pankh se
nahi dhakta hai dinkar
surya ke sameep jati
chidiya lagataar udd kar

dinkar-sun sameep -near

garmaai ke aule padte
chidiya ke pankho par
bina dare bina thake
gagan ko naapti hai par

gagan-sky

tinke ki pukar le jati
usse uske manzil ki or
man ki dridhta deti
door udd jane ki zor..

dridhta-strength

jo karna hai wo karna
hai phir ye kaisi der
nikal chalo issi raat ko
raaste mein hoga saber...

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Bhavit Kapoor

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Posted: 11 years ago

#2

Very nice and thoughtful poem Rabzy 👏

What a way to express the living shore !

Aapne is poem mein bahut hi khoobsurati se udhte pankhon ko ek ehsaas diya hai jisme savera zaroor dikhega bas ek disha mein chalne ki deri hai

I hope i have written right in hindi..😳

An inspiring kavita.. thanks for this thoughtful message ⭐️

Edited by bawaswift - 11 years ago

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Bhavit Kapoor

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Ek chidiya, jo unmukt gagan mein khule se ghoomti hai.. aur uski dridhta usse uski manzil ki aur le jati hai . Wo bina dare chalti rehti hai.. savere ki ore..

Beautiful lines .. 👏

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parmarA

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Posted: 11 years ago

#4

Beautiful poem Rabzy.

Aapki kavita ne ek hausla diya hai ki zindgi me kuchh bhi na ummeed sa nahi hai.

Zindagi ke har ek saas ke saath ummmeed ki halki si roshani hoti hai

Jaroorat hai toh apne dil ke bal ko samazneki

Aur aruk chalne ki

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rayafan17

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Rabzy.. fantabulous..

You have given me my inspiration for the day..much needed one today.

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-rhythm-

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Posted: 11 years ago

#6

lovely rabzy..

tinke ki pukar le jati
usse uske manzil ki or
man ki dridhta deti
door udd jane ki zor..

👏

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Rabzonedge

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Originally posted by: bawaswift
Very nice and thoughtful poem Rabzy👏
What a way to express the living shore !
Aapne is poem mein bahut hi khoobsurati se udhte pankhon ko ek ehsaas diya hai jisme savera zaroor dikhega bas ek disha mein chalne ki deri hai
I hope i have written right in hindi..😳
An inspiring kavita.. thanks for this thoughtful message⭐️

thanks Bawa a lot it means a lot for me...

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Rabzonedge

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Originally posted by: bawaswift
Ek chidiya, jo unmukt gagan mein khule se ghoomti hai.. aur uski dridhta usse uski manzil ki aur le jati hai . Wo bina dare chalti rehti hai.. savere ki ore..
Beautiful lines ..👏

wow u made it more bful...

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Rabzonedge

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Posted: 11 years ago

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Originally posted by: parmarA
Beautiful poem Rabzy.
Aapki kavita ne ek hausla diya hai ki zindgi me kuchh bhi na ummeed sa nahi hai.

Zindagi ke har ek saas ke saath ummmeed ki halki si roshani hoti hai

Jaroorat hai toh apne dil ke bal ko samazneki

Aur aruk chalne ki

thanks alka ji kesi h aap