Hey Suja, main hamesha sochti hoon ke ek din aaram se baithoongi, will reread u chapters and give u good detailed reviews, lekin vo din na jaane kab aayega so, here I m trying to write whatever comes to my mind for ch-1 to 4. and trying to give u detailed reviews for ch-5 & 6.
CH-1-4:
I probably said this before but I like the finesse and a more.. polished touch that u have given to these chapters. I am so glad that I read ksmk so long ago that I don't remember word to word.
And yes the small changes give a fresh look to it.
Liked the way u used that song 'banno ki saheli" and loved Ashu's self thought : God why did I even come! Silly and ridiculous and juvenile of me to let Nidhi provoke me with her challenge. And she knew what she was doing too. I should have just ignored the whole thing
lolzz he realizes too late what nidhi did.
And poor guy - he is total goner when he sees nidhi dressed up in a saree with her hair open and the works.
ye raaten is my fav. song and as far as I remember it was also there in ksmk 1. (I am so glad that I read it long ago and dont remember it word to word.)
And liked the last scene of the ch4 esp, these words :
(Her face tilts up as she looks at the star studded sky and her lips form the most beautiful smile on her face.) Dr Ashutosh Mathur..what are you up to?!
Ch-5:
I really love the way u introduced the log factor here - the gossips behind their backs, etc.
So, is chapter se roses ka silsila shuru!! good good - I liked this roz rose ke dastan in this ff- subtle romance, exactly my taste. I think u added his noticing her antics outside his cabin in this one - it was not there in the original right?
And u also added this scene na, where she gives him the address of the orphanage. it was a cute scene. And he visits the place the very next day? kya baat hai?
Liked the change in the way u have presented anji-nids scene where she tells anji abt being in love...
I also like the way this time she buys two gifts for him - one for now, one to be kept in reserve 😉
SO this time, it is medical camp not paper submission. good change - that way they can be together more.
Like the way their eyes rest only on each other. Loved ashu's self thought while looking at nidhi.
ranga's predicament well brought out - Na boss se kuch kehsakta hoon na Nidhi se. I neither want to be skinned alive by my boss nor by Anji.
Ch-6:
Loved the first scene - beautifully written. florist and detective dialogue was too good as was nidhi's retort - that kabhi time milne pe internship...
The entire scene with both their expressions, reactions etc. v. well done.
liked the way nidhi helps him get a memory of his mom smiling.
Kya baat hai - his completely opposite reaction from his usual one in return from camp - love changes one completely na?
his reaction when bb makes him realize that he is in love - v. v. well written buddy.
his cold aloofness to nidhi - v natural given his state of mind..
and then the scene where the man has hit his child and ashu ka gussa towards him - I liked the polished way u presented that scene as compared to original version.
Very well written chapter.
chalo, done finally...phew!
and yes, a big sorry for the delay
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