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Posted: 13 years ago
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it was my first ff give me some feed back frnds nd excuse me having mistakes
now i start the ff from kgh where nidhi day by day come close to ashu without knowing that she is in love with him nd mallika warns nidhi about ashu then nidhi realises that she is in love then continues ...
nidhi in capeteria take some snacks comes nd passes away seeing ashu name on his door nd blushes silently enters into common room mallika watches her and follw her to take a class
no one is there in cm room only nidhi nd mallika they stare each other some time as usual mallu waste looks nd cming there talk
m:nidhi yeh kya hoh raha hai tu abtak samji nai ki tu kya galat karny jarahu
n:kya dr,m mai kya galat karti hu aap kis baremey batkartihai may kuch samji nai
m:kya mai apki baat manuki aapko kuch nai pata ye bahut galat hai nidhi ashutosh aur tum kabhi ek nai hogi woh tumsey kabhi pyar nai karega
n:to aap is ki barymey dabang deny aayithy,kya dr.m pyar apki marjisey hotahey kya pyar hojatahai kisiko patanai chalta honykybadi patachalta
m:mai ashuko barasalsy janta hu aur intazar karta hu o yesa kabhi nai karega
n:dr,m mujhe aap par rahem hotahai pya jo hona hi ta toh o palbarmeybi hojata jab na hota toh jindagibarbi nai hota jiskeliye barasal intazar karna kaise baath agar pyarho to barseconndbhi kafi hai
m:nidhi tu pagal horahi hey ashu tumara kabhi nai manega woh tumse kabhi pyarnai karega
n:ye to vaqthi batayega dr,m shayad ashu ka dil abhi tak unsy bataya nai woh kya chahaty hai.she is in dream just furiosly mallika leaves the room.
ashu by passing the way overhears there entire convo nd get back to his cabin lost in thoughts...
so frnds sory for borin with my part next time try to make up with intresting as per ur views plzz report me

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Posted: 13 years ago
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Gud bt pls give spaces in between as its cnfusing ,try 2 write it in full gud English or Full Hindi, dnt use HinGlish without spaces.
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Posted: 13 years ago
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Good start, anything about ashni is always welcome.
next time please give space between every word. It would be easy to read.
Please do continue, would like to read your FF.

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