Devakshi OS - Last Breath updated on pg1 and pg 3

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hello, lovely people. I am Sam and I am a big fan of our beloved Devakshi. I don't know how this scene came to my mind. maybe I was just overloaded with emotions but I don't know how the scene would come out here. criticisms r always welcomed and if u like it, u can surely hit the like button and drop a comment with ur views. I'd be really happy, reading ur beautiful comments. now here u go with the os.
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Sonakshi's POV:-

The ticking of the machine, kept beside my bed was slowing down, indicating that my heart was failing and I would not live for long. I heard the doctor saying that there were no chances left for my survival. I only had a few minutes to live. I knew that he was speaking the truth about me but before dying I wanted to meet him once. I wanted to just see him before dying. I had no family of my own before I met him. He was the only one whom I could call my own. My Dev.
Gently I opened my eyes and saw a group of two to three doctors standing around my bed. one was checking my heartbeat, one was looking at the ticking machine and one was dressing my would. All had masks on their faces which was why I was not able to recognise any of them. I could see that my room was converted into an operation theatre with all the machines, equipments and doctors and nurses present there. But that one person was missing who always used to be by my side. Breaking my train of thoughts, one of the doctors shifted his gaze to my face and was surprised. He might had seen my eyes open. he told his fellow doctors about it and they all rolled their eyes towards me. Getting this much attention was a little awkward for me but I could do nothing about it. The only familiar face which I could see among the doctors was the face of my friend, Khushi. She was having her eyes fixed on me as if she was looking at my face for the one last time. I looked at her with assurance in my eyes that I would not leave so soon.
I slowly, with trembling hands, removed the oxygen mask which was covering my face. looking at my actions, the doctors went still. They might be wondering about what I was doing but none of them spoke a word. The were just staring at me, standing still. I tried to speak but my mouth was unable to form words. I tried a little more and managed to say, "I want to see Dev." though i tried to say it out loud but what came out from my throat was a mere whisper. I tried saying it again loudly but Khushi assured me that she had understood my words. Removing her mask, she immediately ran outside. My lungs were slowly giving away with my heart but I needed to stay alive until I see him once. One of the doctors insisted me to wear the oxygen mask as i was dying without it and it would help me to live a little longer. in the hope of seeing Dev soon, I agreed with the doctor. After two minutes of complete silence, I heard Khushi speaking to the doctors, asking them if they could leave the room for sometime. All of them nodded.
After the room was empty, I heard a faint sound of footstep coming from behind the door. It took me less than a second to recognise the person. slowly, the door opened and there stood Dev in his most vulnerable state. his face was not clear because of the darkness outside the room. Though I could not see him, I could sense his hesitation upon stepping into the room. But fighting his feelings, he slowly took a step in. coming into the light, his face became clear. Those red puffy eyes and messed up hair showed his condition upon hearing the news.
Looking at me, he tried to smile a bit but it didn't reach his eyes. He knew that i was leaving him for forever but still he was trying to remind me that i was alive, lying on the bed in front of him. In between that smile, a lone tear escaped from the corner of his eyes. As soon as it rolled down his cheeks, he tried to wipe that out but to his disappointment, another followed it and soon he was crying again. He quickly turned around hiding his tears from me. I removed the oxygen mask and tried to say, "Dev." even that inaudible sound made him turn back and come closer to me. He immediately came near my bed and caressed the back of my head, saying, "Yes, Shona. You want to say something?"
His voice seemed melodious than ever, soothing my ears. I closed my eyes to feel his voice. Tears escaped my eyes too but he wiped it quickly with his hand. As his hand touched my cheeks, I held it and felt its warmth. Understanding my feelings, he caressed my cheeks lovingly and placed a kiss on my forehead. I opened my eyes and looked towards him.
"Dev...don't cry...please", I said. Listening to my broken words, he immediately wiped of his tears.
"Oh, its nothing like that Shona. See, I am not crying. Its just that something went inside my eyes and maybe because of excessive rubbing its looking red. I am not crying at all, Sonakshi."
"Dev..you know...that you are...not good...at lying."
"I am not lying, Shona."
Another drop of tear escaped his eyes.


sorry guys for pausing here. I'll definitely continue it but later as i have some important work to do. I'll finish it today only, I promise...
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Continued:
"Dev don't...cry please...I know that...you cried. Please...don't be sad...that...I am leaving you", saying this, I lifted my hands with difficulty and wiped his tears. He took my hand into his and kissed it.
"Sonakshi, you are not leaving me anytime soon. How can you leave me here alone? you know that I can't live without you for even a minute. Then how can you even think of leaving? No, you are not going anywhere. You will have to stay for me and for our baby."
"Dev please understand...I cannot...live for long...you cannot prevent my...death...And I also want...to stay with...our baby. But...you know the...cruel game...which God has...played with us...", again a lone tear escaped my eyes before I completed my sentence.
"I will not let anything happen to you, Shona. You promised me that you'd stay with me forever. I'll not let you break your promise", he nearly screamed at me.
He was really angry with me but I knew that because of his love for me, there was anger in his eyes. He hugged me very tightly, indicating that he was not ready to lose me. He wanted me to stay forever but now I couldn't do anything. I was dying and no one could stop it. But its said that everything my remain balanced throughout. A life should be given in exchange of another life. I gave birth to our daughter today. If I was leaving then my daughter stepped into this world in place of me. she was a piece of my heart which I was eager to see right now. I wanted to feel her, touch her, see her and bring her closer to my heart. I wanted to just love her once. After all she was my daughter.
After Dev left me, I asked him about our baby. He nodded and went out of the room. Though it only took a minute for him to bring her to me, but it felt like hours of waiting.
As Dev helped me to sit upright, leaning a little on the bed top, and handed our baby to me, I felt her softness. Oh my God! Her skin was so soft, just like feathers. Her eyes were pure brown, so watery and beautiful shining like a crystal. The feeling of immense happiness came to me as I held her heart closer to mine. She had Dev's eyes but her smile was like mine. When dev brought her into the room, she was crying very loudly but when she came into my arms, she stopped crying and gave me her beautiful smile. She was calm which seemed as if she knew that she was in her mother's protective arms. I hugged her delicate body and kissed the back of her head as it was the last time I could touch her or shower my love on her. I could not believe that she was once a part of my body, breathing inside me. She was my angel.
Tears started flowing again from my eyes and seeing our situation Dev's eyes welled up too. Now he could also realise that my time was coming to an end here. He silently took out his phone and captured our moment together.
"Have you...named her...yet?" I asked Dev, while our daughter was peacefully resting in my arms.
"No, I wanted us to name her together", he replied, wiping his tears.
"I've thought...of a name...Its a combination...of mine and yours...Her name would...be Dishi. our Dishi", I said caressing my daughter's hairs. Dev finally smiled but it was soon replaced by a sad expression.
Suddenly, I started coughing. Dev immediately took our daughter, made her lie beside me and moved his hands on my back, trying to calm me down. But both of us knew that this would not help, I was nearing to my end. My will was the only thing which kept me alive till now but after seeing my daughter and Dev for one last time, my wish was fulfilled. Now my heart was slowly decreasing its speed. I was content with whatever I had in life. I felt happy that I fell in love with Dev and started my life. I felt happy that I got to see my baby whom I nurtured in my womb for about nine months. Though it was a little bad that I could not see her growing infront of my eyes but I knew that Dev would take care of her all his life just like an ideal father. I knew that he would give her the best future possible and would not let her feel my absence. She was the symbol of our love. So what if I couldn't stay with her? I would stay in her heart always in place of her loving mother.
I caressed her forehead and gave a kiss there. Then I turned to Dev who was just sitting there looking at us.
"Its...time Dev...Time to say...goodbye", I struggled hard to speak even this much.
"No...No, you cant go Shona", he said and hugged me again, very tightly.
"I have to go, Dev", I whispered in his ears. His hold tightened on me as if he didn't want to let my soul escape my body.
"You'll be fine, Sonakshi. you'll live", he said, crying loudly. He was so loud that Khushi entered the room to see us.
"Dev, I love youu and I love our daughter too", I said and closed my eyes. That were my last words. My soul was slowly leaving my body. My grip on him was loosening and then I finally became still for forever.
Edited by samara_raichand - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Do continue... Great work... This made me cry.😭
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Posted: 9 years ago
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well, I just wanted to tell that I have updated the full Os. Have a look at it and please press the like button and drop a comment if you liked it. and if you want Dev's point of you on this, I'll try to update that soon. For now its complete...thank u
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Sam
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Posted: 9 years ago
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It was a heart touching story. Very well written.Cheers!😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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God! So heart wrenching...beautifully written but heart wrenching...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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heart wrenching and very emotional os .😭 you just nailed it 👏

keep writing and do more os of devakshi 😛
Edited by krystle123 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: .FlyingClouds.

Its lovely...

Plz cont soon


Thank you dear..and I have updated it. Have a look
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Originally posted by: JyotiBThakur

<font face="Verdana, Arial, Helvetica, sans-serif" size="2">Do continue... Great work... This made me cry.😭</font>


thank you dear.. even I cried when I read it after writing..
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Originally posted by: kennashreign

It was a heart touching story. Very well written.Cheers!😊


thank you dear...Cheers to you to..

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