~Just a love story~ ss-completed

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Yesterday I was reading I too had a love story by ravinder singh and I still cant stop my tears a memorable story of khushi and ravin which ended tragically and it was the first story which I didn't wanted to end tragically , I donno why but the incomplete love struck me so here is a short similar story to make you see the concept so that you go ahead and read the novel which was heart wrenching .. a salute to the man who wrote his true life story
The plot is similar mostly similar but it's in my words and feelings
i have wrote it down i am posting it one by one

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Posted: 14 years ago
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Part 1

Prem juneja the iit Delhi boy who had dreams to be successful has finally got what he wanted
He is now a high level official in a MNC , had gone to many trips all around the world and has achieved more than he thought but he is in confusion now , sitting infront of his laptop he thought of last night when his parents told him their desires , they wanted him to settle down which meant to get married but for him it seemed impossible , how can he just marry somebody and then go on his merry way all around the world and above all things how will he know that the girl he will be marrying will be the perfect one for him

While he was immersed in his thoughts his eyes went to an advertisement that was moving in front of his eyes on the website and a girls photo was there and beside that it was written … "if you like to connect then join shaddi.com today"
The girl had fine long hair and brown eyes and her face showed simplicity
And without giving a thought what he was doing he went to the website to find a 100 of photos of girls with their biodatas but if he had to connect he had to pay and guess" everything comes with a price"
He subscribed in and left a message on the email id of heer , yes her profile name said heer mann , a girl two years younger than her , she herself is in IT sector and almost all her requirements matched his and above all he liked the way her profile was made and she even looked good ,aw that's an understatement she looked dazzling
Prem even left a few more girls some messages but after talking to a few he mostly ignored them and in few cases they ignored him as he didn't know how to flatter girls

The sole reason of joining that website was that girl but week passed and no reply came so he thought that the girl might have ignored him and his curiousness to visit the website went low
He immersed himself in the work taking that thought out of his mind but still a part of hi conscience wanted her to reply to him and finally it happened
He was busy in a conference when his cell phone received a message

"hey I am heer
Sorry I can't reply earlier
I saw your messages they are good
You mind calling me now"

And seeing the message a sense of relief and excitement went over prem and he replied

"I am in a conference, you mind if I call you half an hour later"

And he immediately got a reply

"Yeah sure"

The meeting was a pure torture as his mind was going screwed with excitement as well as nervousness, he has never talked to a girl like this and now he is going to do that





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Part 2

After everyone left he went to his cabin and dialed her number and within first two rings the phone was picked up and a melodious and sweet voice replied from the other end

"hello"

"hii this is prem juneja here"

"Oh hey, you free now"

"Yes, sorry for the delay"

"No no problem I too had a few chores to complete"

The formal talking changed its flow and they talked about their birth dates, birth places, family and hobbies and coincidentally many things were there which they shared commonly
They talked about everything and nothing except than marriage
That's the first candid talk with a girl prem juneja did

They talked for an hour and finally prem had to stop the call as his battery was on the verge of giving up

"Listen my battery is going to give up soon I hope we will be in contact "

And the reply he got was quite unexpected
"Your battery"

And that followed a sweet laughter and he too cant stop himself from laughing

" I mean my mobiles"

"Kidding yaar . o.k. take care"

"You too"

With those words he finished his talk but the conversation played in his mind all the day and even at night , and he felt the urge to call her up again but his brother's voice rang in his ear ,preet always said
"Never run after a girl. Don't let her think you are desperate as a dog"

And he gulped down his urge to call her

And slept with the hope that a new day will bring her beautiful voice to him again




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Posted: 14 years ago
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Part 3




The next day he waited till evening to get her call and when he didn't got one he shrugged off his brothers advice and dialed her number and again that sweet voice replied from the other side and they talked again and he found out that she was busy as her little sister was home ..

Days passed and they interacted more often and their confort zone increased but both were too shy to bring the word marriage but finally heer came out of her shy world and asked him about marriage

"You know prem I talked to my parents today"
It was like I told them that I met this guy on shadi.com and we are talking and blah blah blah

"aww so you told them , good"

"yeah it was awkward you know , even we never mentioned that but our sole reason to interact is marriage right"

"very right heer , I wanted to talk you about it but I thought you might feel uncomfortable"

"well anyway so when are you talking to you parents"

"soon heer soon"


This was another landmark in their journey a step which took them forward to love and marriage




A lot of things changed around prem , he slept out of conversations to dream about heer , he talked more and slept less , his phone bills are reaching heights , he use to sit and smile to himself like fools and he had a new how do I look problem too

An iitian is linked to internet and prem was happy that the 21st century gadgetry helped him find heer

The same week prem went to home to talk to his parents about heer but every time he went to talk something or other came up and he has to be quite but finally he said to himself
"prem you have to do it , nor she will cry like hell"

And then he just jumped into the war field

"mom and dad …

And tthen the next words were blurred as prem didn't even remembered what he blabbered out and finaly showed her picture

His parents were quite shocked to hear that they were chatting on cell from last 2 months and his son was on shaadi.com that came as shocker on which his brother hooted like a wolf making the situations worse for prem but his parents understood him and agreed to talk to heer and her parents and that is where the family bonding started



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Posted: 14 years ago
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Part 4

our relationship was quite funny , I would quarrel with her and end up saying that I wont call her and it will be me only who will call her and she wil laqugh
I would ask for punishment and she would make me kiss her on phone infront of the full office and everyone would stare at me as if m some maniac
And we called each other with names and that made me go all mad with desires the way she use to call him shona or munchkin or something else made him think think and think lol because he cant do anything sitting in Mumbai and she in delhi

Everyday they made new contract and rules like they will have dinner together, if she gets angry he will hug her, and the list was never ending

Prem would ask her sometimes to not call after 11 as he would be studying but as in human nature we like to do whats not to be done , so he would call her himself and say that he needs to talk and has put his leg on the axe by telling her to not to call and she would applaud his honesty with a giggle or a flying kiss all the way from Mumbai to delhi

After chitchatting for four months finally the day came when they decided to meet
Prem flew down from delhi to Mumbai to meet her and her parents so that baat aage badhe
All the way he was nervous and got different thoughts
What if she is not so beautiful??
What if she has big teeths?
What if she is not so cheering?

But as his flight landed on the airport and he got a first look of her , he was dead
The dreamgirl cant be more perfect
The same hair , the same beautiful eyes no photoshop tricks
A beautiful figure and above all she is the heer he knows
She came with her little sister meher and her best friend rajveer to receive him from air port and soon they went for hotel hunting
Finally after he got settled in his hotel room he took a nice swift glance at heer who too was looking at him shyly but their gazes were broken by the twoo others who were standing in his room like some demons who cant be pissed prem wanted to kick them out and his expression matched heers and after giving many dirty looks to them , they finally surrendered and went out saying they need to eat but the demons giggled all the way out like some maniacs and finally the prince was in peace with the princess

Finally she broke the silence and asked
"koi parehsnai to nahi hui na safar me

It was full too bollywood movie question like suniye ji and all

Prem looked at her for a few minutes and after that both burst into laughter
'
" huh I was nervous heer"

"I am still nervous prem"

"you are beautiful"

"thanks"

We both sat on the bed not knowing what to do , so this time I started the convo

"huh I still cant believe that finally I am with you and let me tell you I am madly in luv with you"

Prem looked at her taking her chin in his hands to make her face him and they sat their spell bound without moving , prem thought whether to kiss her or not and finally when he moved forward to tilt his face the cell phone of heer rang and both jumped out startled
The screen flashed rajveers name and I cursed him about his timing in my mind

It was time for me to meet her family so I locked my room and we walked hand in hand to the car again to meet her family

I stayed with her family till evening and all I did was eat and eat and eat
Her mother was similar to my mother with all affection and love and I can see that she approved of me
She had a big sister too ashlesha who was married and she and her husband too came to see me and I was compared to her husband in different fields and I was even asked that I can cook or not and first time I understood the irony of the situation I was in , never go to visit you inlaws alone , you will be in total mess

When I didn't answered their cooking questions they all burst into laughter saying they were just kidding , I felt home sweet home
That day for the first time I even got to eat the food cooked by heer and she was brilliant and she even whispered to me that it doesn't matters if I cant cook , she can cook and if she is tired we will take home delievery , she is such a sweetheart
It was evening when I took the permission to leave but when I started to rise I got a sms by meher
"prem ji don't leave now we will be going with you so wait"

I didn't understand what was going when suddenly meher spoke mom I have a doubt clearing class at intituion and heer di too so prem ji don't worry we wil leave you in your way bekar mein taxi karne ki koi jarorrat nahi hai

Several eyebrows were raised and I can bet my life that her mother caught the lie but
instead of scolding she looked at me and said yes and both the girls ran to get changed
and three of us left to leave meher in the institution and I and heer went back to my place to spend some time


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Posted: 14 years ago
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part 5


we went inside the hotel room and I locked the door and we both went and sat on the bed , heer by the time was fiddling with her dupatta and that act was quite sensuous
she kept looking at her dupatta and I kept looking at her , he neck was slender and elegant and I kept staring some more
her beauty was freezaing my senses and I don't kow from where that urge came and I kissed her on her neck and after a few minutes we were on a ride of sensations leaning against the bed but after a few minutes when I opened my eyes I saw her staring at me and I understood that she was in fear and a small smile touched my lips seeing her innocence I took her hand and smoothed her hair
"don't worry heer I wont do anything which our conscience and values don't allow , I will not make you do anything which you will regret later , I love you and more than that I respect you"
And that's when my angel wrapped me in her arms all fears vanishing and we stayed there in each others embrace till the time when I have to go back and drop her home

Next day I had to go back because I had work and when I started to leave I saw tears in her eyes and to reassure her I told her and her parents that my parents will be coming to tlak marriage within and week and I can see her smile back on her face and It felt amazing

After that everything was on a rush my parents met her parents they fixed the engagement date and it came near I took holidays from work
Whenever I called her she would be singing about her dresses and how happy she was and I felt happy when she was happy
At times she would tell me that how will she live without her mother and I would say I need dowry and your mother will be my dowry and she will laugh

She made me imagine things which made me crazy for her
We would talk about how cute she will look in her saree and then how we will escape the guests to meet alone and then when we will be on the verge of kissing she will remember about her guest and we will be running down to join the engagement
Everything seemed planned and I packed my things to go down her house
When all of a sudden a call disrupted ours life




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Posted: 14 years ago
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Part 6

I was packing my things that evening when suddenly I felt an urge to listen to her vvoice and I dialed her number which wasn't picked up by her but it was a crying meher telling that heer has met with an accident , her car has been hitted by the truck causing the driver to die on the spot and she was in ICU struggling for her breath
The world around me fell apart I heard my parents talking to her parents and the next thing I know that I was on a flight to her state
And the next moment I was standing outside her ICU seeing her , she was mostly covered in bandages and bedcovers but her face was cut in many places and she was lying still and that moment all I wanted was to get her back , I wanted her to just keep breathing , I wanted her to be alive I don't cared if she cant be what she was , I didn't cared if the accident left marks on her body I just wanted my heer back

She wa having blood clotting in her brains and her chances was mimimum and all I wanted was to see her once I was standing alone near the ICU mamma was sitting near and heers dad took meher home as she was sick crying
The doctor was entering the ICU when I caught holded of his hand

"will she be okk"

The doctor looked at me and asked
"who are you"

" I am her fiance I mean we were going to be engaged"

"well we are trying to save her her face brain and entire body has suffered so much damaqge"

"it doesn't matters just save her"

"I am trying , just send her best wishes , she needs them and her family needs your support"

Saying this the doctor went past me and I stood their motionless for several minutes


That night I sat beside in the chairs near the ICU and prayed for her and when I opened my eyes she was sitting beside me in her wedding saree looking at me with hope and I don't know if that was pain
I was still struggling to unertsand whats happening when very innocently she touched my shoulders and then inched her face to rest it on my shoulder

"I missed you"

I heard myself saying to her , it felt as if I am in some dizzy state

"I know , and I know thazt you are shocked but I came just for you , don't ask questions I don't have time just let me ffeel you as I am dying to be yours , so prem juneja are you going to marry me?

I felt myself nodding when suddenly a buzz caught me offguard and I looked all around myself I was stil sitting on the chair aqnd doctors were running past me and her parents were asking what is happening that's when the doctor I talked to came out and looked at me and said I am sorry she is no more

" I wanted to tell them that she is there , she was with me just now but my world just froze there"

…………………………….

Its been two years since her death and everyone wants me to move forward but I cant , after her funeral when I went back home my office colleague who didn't know about her joked to me that I was bound and all but I cant say a word and when they heard what happened they were sorry , I too was sorry , I was sorry that I cant make her mine, cant protect her
Everyone says I need a psychologist , I am acting like a machine , I just work and don't have emotions , well she took the emotions and everything from me and I don't have anything else ….

The memories hurted me badly , I stopped opening internet as everytime I did I can see the advertisements of shadi.com which bring back the past infornt of my eyes
But as said you cant run away from life
I was coming out of my office that evening when a small girl fel infront of me so I picked her up and she said thanks and when I asked her name
"she said I am heer"

And a fresh stab of pain hit me and all I can say was
"nice name"

It was a name of the girl whom I cant marry ….


welli didnt wanted it to be tragic buti cant help it the story was so perfect in itselfi cant help it but ifi will be given apower theni would make the lovers united

friends this is purely taken frm the book the plot is the same so dont say tht its frm tht and all but i wrote it in my words and i know thts allowed ...




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Posted: 14 years ago
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You know straight after reading ur SS I found out that my friend just passed away in the exact same way as Heer did. I had cried whilst reading this SS but then the tears just flushed back when I heard about my friend. I loved the way u described their feelings and all towards each other they really loved each other didn't they. I hate tragic endings always leave sad with tears on my eyes but u done a great job. BTW what's the name of the book n is it in english??? I wanna read it.

Thnx for the PM and plz do pray for my friend I'd really appreciate it.
Edited by Xxcoolchick1xX - 14 years ago
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Posted: 14 years ago
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Dearest Aishu,
As I said here I go with my fav lines...

@she even looked good ,aw that's an understatement she looked dazzling
@And the reply he got was quite unexpected
"Your battery"

And that followed a sweet laughter and he too cant stop himself from laughing

" I mean my mobiles"

@I would ask for punishment and she would make me kiss her on phone infront of the full office and everyone would stare at me as if m some maniac
@first time I understood the irony of the situation I was in , never go to visit you inlaws alone , you will be in total mess
@At times she would tell me that how will she live without her mother and I would say I need dowry and your mother will be my dowry and she will laugh
BRILLIANT LINE IS THIS ONE:
I wanted her to just keep breathing , I wanted her to be alive I don't cared if she cant be what she was , I didn't cared if the accident left marks on her body I just wanted my heer back
AWESOME!!!! Heart Wrenching
@Everyone says I need a psychologist , I am acting like a machine , I just work and don't have emotions , well she took the emotions and everything from me and I don't have anything else Lovely and Touching...

Dunno about the book but I loved this in ur style...it was very touching and a tear jerker...Wish their love story was a happy ending...But lovely SS Aishu.Yes, I m in a mood 2 cry now...
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Posted: 14 years ago
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u in a mood to cry ndd i hv ued a whole box of tisue since i read tht i cnt stop my tears frm yesterday u know those last 5 pages i cnt see beyond my tears i used my words but his words were more heart wrenchinggg

i know m gonna get juttas and belan fr another tragedy but ths was so perfect yaar i cnt tell u how i feel m gonee all sentii

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