FF:The Key~Part 1 pg-1 (July 5th)

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Okay..umm I had this dream and slowly it formed it self into a story and I just had to get this out of my system or else I wouldn't be able to sleep tonight. So here it is'it's very short.

Prologue:
"Good morning mom!" I called into the kitchen wearing my usual weekend outfit a pair of sweats and my dad's baggy shirt. "Isn't it too early for you to wake up?" She asked with a hint of smile on her lips. Early?" I questioned as I headed towards the counter to make my self a cup of coffee to refresh my brain. "I thought it was 10..wasn't it?" I asked in confusion. She finally turned around to give me a pat on the cheek, " think it's too early for you to wake up!" I acted to be stunned by her statement. "Close your mouth and go open the door because someone is going to ring a bell in just one minute and seven seconds." I silently obeyed her instruction and opened the door to only discover dad with mail in his hands. "I hate mom's special power of being exact in everything." I muttered to my dad. "Hey is that how you say good morning to your father?' He asked while I stared at him to continue. "Heer, I don't know how to tell you that you are more special than any of us. You are the key!" He explained and toned down his voice at the last part to add more effect. As for me, I stood there with a puzzled look on my face as I always did whenever my father declared me as a key. A key to what?
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Posted: 16 years ago
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very nic intro ...liked

cntn soonnn
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Originally posted by: nitzi

nice one..upadte soon

Thank you! Part one is comin up!

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looking forward to this

Thank you!

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very nic intro ...liked

cntn soonnn

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Posted: 16 years ago
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Thank you for leaving a comment. it really menas alot to me! Okay umm.. here is the first part and i am just continuing from the prologue and it's pretty short!

Part 1

"Mom, it's only dad." I explained and headed towards my own room to give my parents some privacy. I was just about to listen to music on my ipod when my phone beeped. It was a text message from Savanna, my best friend for the last six years.

"Let's go 2 da mall, I'll pick u up,"
I read aloud.

" Gimme 5 min. n I'll be ready,"

I texted back.
With that said, I flopped off my bed and slipped into a pair of ripped jeans and a turquoise top.
"Mom I am going to the mall with Savanna." I shouted while I made my way to the front door.

" Stop right there young lady!" A voice bellowed from behind me. I stopped dead on my track thinking, what did I do now. "You forgot your coffee sweetie." My dad said in a mellifluous tone. I turned around and grabbed the coffee from my dad's hand before I pecked him on his cheek. I rushed through the door to the parked pick up truck that was blaring it's horn over and over again on our driveway.

"Where is the fire?" I asked while I jumped onto my seat. She turned towards me and gave me her affable smile; that would frequently attract several guys in the neighborhood.

~*~

"Is there anything else that you think you need to buy?" I inquired and sighed at the bundle of bags that I carried . "I don't know, I think I am missing something," She answered while scratching her head.

"Mom don't you think this shirt is a bit too small for me?" It was a voice of a man standing with his back facing me. There was something different about this man. His voice, it felt so velvety, so charming, so genial. Wait! What am I thinking ? I barley know this man and he already has an effect on me and that too with just his voice.
"Heer! what happened?'" Savanna asked and in reply I just shrugged and pointed to the man standing in the Gap kids section of the Gap store. She started laughing, and I stood there amazed at the guy who was arguing with his mom about how small that shirt is and how he is too big to even come here.
That's when I caught on at what she was laughing at. The man who I gave a dreamy look to was shopping at the Gap kids section. No wonder Savanna was already on the floor, clutching her stomach from laughing so hard. I joined her when he tried using sarcasm to explain his mom how that one shirt was 'too' big for him. And in reply she ended up measuring his original shirt with the 'too' big shirt. My eyes watered and my stomach throbbed from laughing so hard.
After a moment, me and savanna stood against the railing watching the young man arguing with his mom while passing the popcorn to one another as a snack for our entertainment.
I giggled when his mom bought a new shirt for him to try on. Poor guy, I really felt sorry for him. But, my laughter subsided when he turned around to glare at me. I felt something melt inside of me. The atmosphere changed into a more warmer temperature. His brown eyes had something in them that pulled me towards him. Am I attracted tot his guy? No, I can't be. That's not even possible. I turned around to leave and dragged Savanna with me but, for some reason I felt the need to look back. I felt as if he was waiting for me to turn around.
I turned and there was no one. Was I dreaming or was there actually a Greek god standing there and staring at me?

Please leave a comment or press the like button. It would really encourage me to continue this story.

Edited by Iqra238 - 16 years ago
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Posted: 16 years ago
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Very Nice Interesting I Really Like It
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Posted: 16 years ago
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wow...ur fanfic is amazing...i cant wait to read more...if u have a pm list plz add me to it and plz plz plzzz continue soon...great job 👏
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heyy.... luv ur theme very intereseting can't wait for the next part..
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Posted: 16 years ago
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hey
i just read ur update
awesum
loved it

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Posted: 16 years ago
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aweesome!!...superb..but i'm totally confused!!
the key??..is that supposed to be something big??...i'm guessing..since it's the title!!
The Gap kids section?!!!..lmao!!
update soon!
nitya

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