NEW FF MANNANT UPDT Part 7 Pg8 (APRIL 30th)

hey guyz,,, well i m just starting a fanfic.... i had hthis story in mind for quite a while but today i goa chance to get the first part done.... let me noe how u felt about it.. please do comment and reply😳

Teji: sunde ho ,, ap abhi tak uthe nahi. Haye rabba.

Yelled Teji draggin the blanket from Balraj. Balraj Mann the farmer who owns most of the land in Ambala'' down to earth and a caring husband and a lovely father''

Balraj: ki hoya ? son dey naa.

Teji: haye mere rabba' main kab se chilla rahi hon k uth uth jao. Par nahi meri to koi suntan hi nai hai'.. aj yaad nai mannat dene jana hai gurudawara sahib' aaj bhool gaye heer ka janamdin hai'

Balraj: kya??? Tune mujhe pehle kyun nai uthaya' haeyo mere rabba. Teji tum kabhi koi kaam dhang se nai karti. Maine tumhe bataya tha ne k mujhe jaldi utha dena'.

Teji tried to say something but Balraj was already through that door'she smiled on balraj's reaction. She was used to it now'. Since it was like this wen it comes to heer'

Balraj came back and leaned to the door'.he cleared his throt just to let teji noe that he was there.

Teji smiled: haan g, Ab kya bhool gaye?

Balraj: main kuch nai bhoola bas yeh poochne aya tha ki heer kahan hai?

Teji: woh toh subhe hi chali gayi meher k saath gurdawara sahib..

Balraj: meri bachiyaan' chalo hum dono saath hi chalet hain gurudwara..

Teji smiled along wid her husband' while walking they talked'

Balraj: Teji, hamari betiyann kitni badi ho gayi naa' lagta hai kal ki hi baat hai.. heer ko jab maine pehli baar god mein liya that toh usne mujhe who ehsaas dilaya jisne mere andar ek nayi jaan bhar di' mujhe aaj bhi yaad hai main anaj mandi gaya tha or Lalit mujhe lene aya tha wahan yeh batne ke mere ghar ek nayi roshni ne janam liya hai''

Teji blushed over this wen Balraj indicated her as Roshani of his house'..because he used to call her Roshnai wen they were newley married'

Teji: haan ji'. Maine jab pehli baar use chuna chaha to laga k jaise chand ko choo rahi hoon'.

We see a girl climbing the stairs of Gurudawara' and other one is running just to beat her in race'

Balraj: who badi badi ankhen jab usne pehli baar kholin aur mujhe dekhakar who pehli baar muskraayi to pehli baar baap hone ka ehsaas dilaya'.

Then we see two almond shaped eyes' looking closed praying '.

Teji: aur kiske aane ke baad mujhe mamta ka aur aise rishta mila jab mehar is duniya mein aayi.

Balraj: oh haan Mehar , usse to bhulne ka sawwal hi paida nahin hota' who toh mere dil ka ek aisa tukda hai jo heer ke saath jud kar mujhe jeen ki ek wajah deta hai'.

We see two pairs of closed eyes and hand folded with their head covered'

Teji: han ji,,,, yehi toh hain who do kaliyaan jinhone hamari zindgi mehka di hai'. Aisi betiyaan jiski hon unhe toh jeete g sawarag mil jaata hai..

Balraj: tu theek keh rahi hai' meri in bachinyoon par pure Ambala ko naaz hai'. Aur aise betiyan pa kar mein kissi aur cheez ka to armaan bhi nahin rakhta. Siwaye'.

Balraj suddenly stops talking and his eye welled up wid tears'Teji understood and she placed his hand on his shoulder trying to console him'.

Teji: tusi fikkar na kro g.. who apna waada zaroor nibhyenge'.. mujhe poora vishwash hai'. Waheguru upar bharosa rakho g app. Lijiye baatien karte karte we have reached the destination g'

Balraj laughed on this. He always do wenever Teji says something in English' she always used a different funny tone while speaking in English'' they walked toward the gurudawara and covered their head'. They reached inside the gurudawra and sat down along with two girls and folded their hands'.

Balraj(while praying) happy Bday Heer puttar''.

We see the those big eyes opening slowly and turned toward his father.. we see a smile appering on pink lips''.. and then the full face is show its one and only HEER!!!!!!!!!!!!

Heer: bauji.. ap aa gaye. She finished her prayer and got up and tried to touch his father feet.

Balraj: arrre arre ' kya puttar.. maine kitni baar kaha ki betiyaan pair (ffet) nai chooti who toh apne bauji ko a bearhug dettin hai.(saying this balraj spreading his arms.)

Heer: awwwwwwwww bauji'(she hugged him tightly)

Teji: Jldi karo g,, janam to maine hi diya haii. Maine bhi who walli japhi (hug) leni hai heer se'.

Heer: awwwwwwww mummiji'(she hugged her tightly)

Hey' no fair.

A sweet voice came out from nowhere'

What about me??? Even though its not my bday but I still want a hug'.

Heer: another awwwwwwwwwwww for my sweet lil sister Mehu..

Dats what heer calls her sister the one is shown rite now running toward her heer didi'.

They both yelled: bear huggggggg(slowly)

Teji: inko kissi ki nazar na lage'

Balraj and teji smiled at eachother and then their daughter who were now hugging their parents..

Balraj: chalo is saal ki bhi Mannat de di maine na janne aur kitne saal'

Teji: koi baat ahi ji hum toh rab ka shukariya adda karten hain ki unhone hume itni payaari bachiyaan diiii'

Balraj: han yeh toh hai

And they both shared a laugh.. and watched their daughters as they folded their hands and closed their eyes to pray one last time before they leave for their home'

Well dats it for now' plz tell me how was it'. And please do leave comment'.

Luv

Tina

Originally posted by: urworstnitemare

me first!!!! 😃

reserved..will comment after reading:P

*unreserved*

Sorry it took so long, i'm a bit slow at reading hindi/punjabi in english lol..but i understood it all *taps self on back..now to your FF....

Awwww shucksssss!!!!! it was adorable!! I love Teji and Balraj's relationship, its so cute!!!!😳

I could imagine everything even the little baby Heer, her big cute eyes when she was a baby and her closed eyes now, amazing 😆 The part was very well written and i absolutely loved the introduction of both of the sisters lol..usually the main focus is only on Heer but you managed to bring in our Meher too!

Good .... no great job!!😆 please update soon and if u do make a PM list..please add me!?!?! -blahblah

Originally posted by: pooji123456789

hey
nice
super interesting

Originally posted by: blackdaughter

Hey Tinu (don't mind me calling you that, do you? 😳)!!!!! *hug*

Hey, it looks good so far!!! Are the characters going to be a lot different, or the same, is the concept similar or does it have it's own twists and turns..... (As you can see, i have a looot of questions)!!!! 😉😆

I like it so far, continue!!!! Best of luck with this ff and if you plan to make a PM list please add me!!!!!!

Originally posted by: zaibun

very interesting hope to read more of it soon

Awwwwwwwwwwwwwwwww thanks a lot guyz ' well I can say I have some readers here.. thanks a lot for you support.. here is the next part hope u will like it'. hugs for evey1🤗🤗🤗

Part 2

After a long rainy night the sun started to smile at this big city of Canada, Edmonton. The golden rays touched the beautiful house built in most expensive houses' one of those houses was now called a home. A home with a family who luv eachother.. family of

Lalit Juneja' a businessman who owns about 93% of hotels all over India and Canada.

Lalit: (angerily) why don't these things work wen u want them to work''Gaya3, Gay3

Gaya3 : ji aayi

Gaya3 is Lalit's loving wife. She is the person who we can call a perfect mixture of wife, friend and a mother..

Gaya3: Kya hai g?

LaLit: dekho to k main sahi number dial kar raha hoon ya nahi' I cant get connected there' pure 2 saal ho gaye jab bhi yeh number dial karta it never gets connected.

Gaya3: number to sahi dial hai.

LaLit: toh why it is not going thru? Why does is say that number is not in service??

Gaya3: hey bhagwan'.itna panic jyun ho rahen hain ap? Aur not in service mean toh not in service hi hoga na'.

LaLit: main kya karun gaya3? Do saal ho gaye hain , meri india baat nahi ho rahi? Who pata nahin kaise honge ?

Gaya3: app chinta mat kijiye. Aur phir hum bhi toh majboor hai na. hum dono ne jab naye ghron min shift kiya tha who bhi saath hi kiya tha. Humara number bhi to change hua hi naa.. toh unka bhi ho sakta hai'

Lalit was quite now but the expressions on his face worried gaya3. Lalit has been acting weird lately. He is always thinking about something and always in cranky mood.

Gaya3: kya hua g? kuch dinno se dekh rahi hoon ap kuch preshaan lag rahen hain?

Lalit got up and went to a pic. It's a pic of his family. Lalit is standing behind the chair where gay3 is sitting in red saree. There are 2 kids in this pics one is about 4 year old held by lalit and other one is about 2 years old who is held by Gaya3 in her lap. It's a picture from their 7^th wedding anniversary.

LaLit: gaya3 hum jab apna sab kuch chod k yahan aye the toh kyat ha hamre paas.. jeb(pocket) mein $123.43 , or 2 saal ka prem'

We see some1 takinga shower and muscular arms are shown lookin for towel which came out from behind the shower curtain'.

Gaya3: issi prem ki khaatir toh hum apna sab kuch chod k aye the , so we can provide him wid a better life and education to built his future'

Lalit: wen prem came into this world nd I held him for the first time in my arms, it felt like my all dreams become true. His chocolaty brown eyes gave me a hope dat I can pursue all those dreams that I cudnt do for myself' and dat smile told me that he knew I m his bauji

We see those cute chocolaty eyes'..which were half covered with wet hair'.. and a smile appearing over smexy lips..

Gaya3: haan who maa banne ka ehsas main kabhi bhi nahin bhool sakti'.because of him I wanted to have another child. So he can play wid some1' and who came in my chotu baby Preet..

We see some1 sleeping. And we see his lips who have a lil smile.

Lalit: yeah how can we forget dat Nalayak'.

Then lalit let out a loud laugh.. gaya3 gets a lil scared from this lil reaction of his'

Gaya3: kya hua???

LaLit(controlling his laugh): remember prem's reaction and preet was born.

We see the some one tiptoeing toward the guy who is laying on bed'

Gaya3 too let out a laugh.. and she nodded her head.

Gaya3: don't make fun of him,, he was just a 2 and could barely talk' and it was u who promised him to get a puppy wen mommy comes back from he hospital so he tot I went o the hospital to get a puppy'..

LaLit: (in a childish voice) why dis puppy haz no tail?? He tot that preet was the puppy we got him'

Gaya3: it was kinda cute.. u noe he gets really embarrassed wen we tease him. Even preet Teases him about this'

Gaya3 then turned to Lalit who was starts looking at her and admiring her love for the kids' Gaya3 remebers something and nodded wid a smile.

Gaya3: main bhi na'. I m suppose to listen to want u wanted to say but started this. Now tell me wat do u wanted to say'.

Lalit(came closer to gay3): I don't wanna say anything but I want to ask something'

Gaya3: what is it?

Lalit: gaya3 I was wondering that it is time for us to move back to india now. Is that okay wid you?

Gay3 paused for a second then she smiled.

Gaya3: ofcourse I would luv to go back'

Lalit: nd what about the kids? They have never been there? Will they agree?

"AHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHHH"

We see two ppl running across the hallway coming toward lalit and gaya3' one is all wet running away form the other one who is holding the jug of water'.. we don't see them completely yet

Gaya3: well why don't u ask them urself'.

Maa, Bauji HELPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPPP!!!!!!!

And we see a guy who is all wet hides behind the couch where gay3 is sitin.

Gaya3: aarre bhai yeh sab kya ho raha hai???

Ssddnly the guy with jug stops running' and hids the jug behind his back'

LaLit: (pretends to be angry) Prem yeh sab kya ho raha hai??

And we see our cutie pie PREM.

Prem: kuch nai bauji bas who Preet was thirsty so I was trying to give him some water but I don't noe why he got scared?

Gaya3: prem beta yeah sab kya hai.. tum log itne bade ho gaye ho but still acting like 5 year old one'

Prem: sorry maa

And he puts the jug away.

Prem: u can come out now Preet. I have dropped my weapon now'.

We see two cute eyes looking over the couch just to see if the coast is clear'. And then he comes out from the behind .. we see those two cute lips muttering something under his breath'. And water is still dripping from the hair'. And he walks toward prem.

Prem: arre Preet!! Tum inte geel kaise ho gaye??

And now we see our cutie pie PREET. Who is breathing heavily nd brust his anger out.

Preet: why did u do this to me? Wat did I have ever done to you. I was having the most beautiful dream of my life' I was standing into the fields spreading my arms and a girl is running toward me almost hugging me and then suddenly some1 splashes my faces with cold' icy cold water.

Prem: it was ur bath after u came back from ur game??

Preet: (in a crying kinda voice) but why ???? why did u have to spoil my dream? Spoil the beautiful scene just like on from DDLJ. The gurl almost had hugged me and b4 I oculd see her face. SPLASHHHHHHHHH!!!! u came in and ruined it.

Prem: dats because u were living my dream. Well not the gurl part but I do want to run around those farms just like DDLJ'.

Preet turned over to his mother who was smiling to this situation. Andhe spread his arms

Preet: mommmmmmmmyyyyyy

He spread his arms towards his mother and hugged her just like a lil baby whose toy has been destroyed'

Prem and lalit laughed over it'. Suddenly Lalit remembered something'

Lalit: speaking of running in the fields''.

both prem and preet looked at him'

Lalit: would u guyz like to live that dream'.. like in reality?(asked raising his eybrows)

Preet got up and stood by prem.

Preet: PB be ready to catch if needed'umm What u r exactly trying to say????

Lalit: umm I was wondering if we can move back to India '..

Preet felt it hard and he looked at prem and told him to hold him as he is about to faint.. but prem himself didn't paid attention to him as he was also shocked. It was the one thing he wanted to do for so long go back to place he was born and he had planned a trip there after taking permission form his parents since preet really wanted see his homeland too. His thots were broken when he heared a THUDDDDDDDD!!!!

It was preet on the floor rubbing his bummy because it went hard on him'. He looked angrily @Prem who was trying not to laugh at this situation.

Prem: ( muttered) uhhh sorry'.

Well dats it for today plz comment or criticize watevr u want '' but do reply and if u want me to add to PM list just let me know.

Thanks

Luv

Tina

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