Tanhai (FF) Short Part p3

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hey guys,

i am currently writing two fan fictions, and well one of them is Tanhai.....(at fan fictions) sounded perfect for Khwaish, so i just changed the names around and a few things...and i will be writing it here and at fan fictions...do read and tell me if you think it is interesting..😛

Chapter 1:

You see a girl in a white salwaar kameez crying in a corner of her room. A tear fell down her eyes as she once again thought of her past, that past that once gave her happiness, but today it only left her with tears. Just a few moments before she would have been married off to the love of her life but now she was only left waiting at the doorstep to see him, come and take her away. But no, destiny had something else in store for her.

~ TWO YEARS LATER ~

Maya: Amanat, please kuch karo, main apni bachi ko aisa aur nahin dekh sakti, doh saal ho chukhe hai…who isihe sadme se baare kab ayegi…ya allah meri bacho ko bacha loh…Amanat: who ayegi wapas…kuch nahin ho gah osihe….kuch bhi nahin…Maya: Amanat…please…do something…main apni bachi koh kohna nahin chaate…

Amanat just hugs her…and tries to console her…but someone else needed all the love and support…we see her once again and this time as a

stone…who forgot how to live….

You see her eyes red from tears, her lips dry, her ears dying to hear her name from the love of her life, her

hair wrapped up in a bun, you see her entire face…her eyes dreadful and the look on her face as if she were being laid in a coffin….

Maya and Amanat come upstairs into her room and looked at her with hope and tears in their eyes…Maya finally spoke and said….afreen….afreen bheta…..

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Posted: 17 years ago
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Sounds cool sukhi!! I was thinking about writing an ff on this show too, cept u know i have three ffs, i cant handle three, hw will i handle 4? 😆 and i suck at writing! anyways! cont soon!
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Originally posted by: erier101

Sounds cool sukhi!! thanx madiha...and how are you feeling now...better...I was thinking about writing an ff on this show too,really i cant wait.... cept u know i have three ffs, i cant handle three, hw will i handle 4? 😆 i have to handle 5....am helping write one...that will be posted soon, one in my book...wont be up for a while, 2 tanhai's and pkhh....so were on the same boat...😆and i suck at writing! no you dont you do a wonderful job at it... anyways! cont soon! i will and thanx hun...

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😉thanx erier hun....oh and HURRY UP AND UPDATE UR FFS....me waiting😆

Edited by Mimi_Rani - 17 years ago
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CHAPTER 2:

Maya: Afreen…mujhse baat karo main tumhari ma hoon, dekho…yeh papa hai…betha kuch toh bholo
Amanat puts a hand on his wife's shoulder and kneels down…and says afreen…please bheta baat karo, hum tumhe khona nahin chaate…afreen please…dekho main tumhare liye kya lekhar aaya hoon…GUITAR…jo tum mujhse maang rahiye thi…Maya breaks down in tears and runs from there…Amanat goes after her..leaving krip alone, with a tear coming down her cheek…"I love you kabir" she says and slides down the wall.

*************

FLASHBACK:
Afreen: Kabir mujhe who choodiyaan chaaiye
Kabir: ha.ha, loh tumhe pasand hai, yeh humari shaadi waale din tum phe bhote khoobserat laghe ghi
Afreen: kyon..ab nahin lagte
Kabir: ha…leking osihe din zyada acha laghe ghe kyonki hum ek ho jaayenge
Afreen: Kabir...I love you..
Kabir: I love you too, Afreen, I love you too
END OF FLASHBACK:

Afreen: Kabir tum mujhe kyon chor kar chale gaye..kyon wapas ah jaho Kabir..wapas ah jao

[( SCENE CHANGES)]

Doctors are all over the place…the patients heartbeat is rising…
Doctor 1: nurse, grab the mask, hurry…
Doctor 2: Doctor…hurry up we have to save him, he was so close to being able to live…
Doctor 1: oh no, his breathing is sinking…bheta wake up…utho my child..oh no he is
sinking…DOCTOR….

preview - cant remember😆

Edited by Mimi_Rani - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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awww plz continue..its is very good and interesting
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Posted: 17 years ago
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nice ff 👏 👏 👏 !!continue soon
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Part 3:

You see a man combing his hair and then putting gel on he then sprays cologne on and walks out of this room. Downstairs you see two men watching t.v.

Guy 1: guys what the heck are you doing to my living room?
Two Men: bhai jaan…we were just watching t.v.
Guy 1: You sure…because it doesn't look like that from here, what the hell? Did you guys have a party here…
Two Men: no….we…uh…we were just (cut off)
Guy 1: having a party without me…
The two men smile and take a sigh of relief, they slowly get up and walk over to him and say you really got us today Azaan, dude but that was really scary.
You see his eyes, lips and then his entire face its none other then AZAAN.

~ IN THE BACKGROUND ~
BLUFFMASTER….BLUFFMASTER

Azaan: Salman tumhe apni shakkal dekhni chaaye thi (grabs his stomach and points) ha..ha
Salman mad after being laughed at notices the other guy laughing and puts his hand up…the other guy notices this, stops laughing and goes to stand by azaan…azaan and salman both notice and burst out laughing holding each other for support…azaan finally says roshan your such a chicken you should have seen your face….
roshan: now red from humiliation finally says shut up guys…just shut up…you guys are freekn annoying…azaan and salman both go up to him and say sorry by grabbing his cheeks and pulling them…to which roshan runs after them in the entire house….

Preview - none! 😃

Edited by Mimi_Rani - 17 years ago
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Posted: 17 years ago
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thank you to all who liked my fan fiction...it really means a lot you guys 😛

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