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Posted: 19 years ago
Waise Aditee...did you see the awesome response to your ff? 👏 Yaar you are so ready to switch career paths! 😃 Just keep your undettered faith in our JW and the words will just flow! 😉
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Posted: 19 years ago
Awesome fOursome.
Here u go.............
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Mujhe payment chahiye IN CASH 😉
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Lets say Bani's silent admirer in the resort company is Tarun Seth.
Jai has been noticing them a lot at work either both working at Bani's desk or Tarun's and is not happy at all, every time he visits Mr.Aggarwal's office, he finds them together working ofcourse, but together........ He has shot his famed arrows at his wife thru his eyes, she has gotten the hint, but just chosen to ignore him..... His patience was already running thin..............

They have some serious issues to address, theya re separated right now, but both wont let the other go..........

Bani's co-worker at Mr.Aggarwal's company, Priya had gotten engaged that nite and the whole "lunch crowd" attended to congratulate the couple. Priya, especially close to Bani had been with her the nite before and both had gone out and gotten mehandi in their hands.............

The engagement was at Mr. W's hotel (where else? incidentally the pix Ekta shows to be JW's hotel is Oberoi Towers in nariman Point Mumbai, lets assume its that......), the event goes of smoothly, the drinking and dancing happens until after midnite......... Bani is hanging out with her friends andhaving a good time tho she does not drink ;-)

Its time to go, Tarun offers to share her cab and drop her off first, she agrees, they step out of the hotel, Tarun goes off to hail a cab, Bani wanders around the jogger's path....., Tarun realizes he is missing his cell phone, remembers having lent it to a friend for a call, goes off inside the hotel to get it,..............

Bani waits and walks around, not realizing, two creeps have been watching her every move since she stepped out of the hotel........... ........ Walk up to her and ask who she is waiting for, seeing them decently dressed, she actually responds and tells them she is waitingf or her friend

Then the guys get more creepy leave her no room to walk, sidling up against her, saying "Agar aapke husband busy hain to hamare saath chaliye"
Bani's face pales, she seems to have lost a her voice,she opens her mouth and just exhales air, fear grips her as the guys get more insistent.............
Just then Mr JW's car makes its way out of the basement, she doenst know that, she is busy trying to get away........... the guys start following her briskly........
She starts cursing tarun under her breath, as to why its taking him so long, she is scared and starts sweating breaks into a run .................


One of the creep's fat hand clamps around her wrist and an obscene smile splits his rubbery lips.....
Bani becomes the object of the welcome rescue as Jai instructs his driver to stop, gets off his car and tackles creep number one first, whose has his hand around Bnai's wrist, Bani is too stunned to react at first and later realizing who her rescuer is relief turns into shock.......... She utters "Mr Walia aap" hoarsely

In the meanwhile JW and his chauffer are busy punching the creeps black and blue, JW swearing away........., one of them lays in a heap on teh sidewalk, while the other is getting some solid punching from Mr JW. His chauffer is busy calling the cops.

JW: Dharshan ACP ko phone karo, thaane mein nahi
D: Sir number?
JW : 98*********
D dials.........
A squad car doing rounds in the area shows up in minutes, grabs the guys and JW spits some pithy instructions to the guys about having spoken to the ACP.......
Mr. JW has appraoched her by then,
J: Bani tum theek ho na (totally worried)
Bani ack with her eyes:-) running her hands up and down her arms and shuddering wondering what might have happened had JW been a few minutes late...........

Bani though cannot believe her good fortune, suddenly realizes that tarun must be looking for her, just then the phone rings

T: Kahan ho tum, main hotel ke gate ke bahar tumhara intezaar kar raha hoon
B: Woh kuch gunde mere peeche padh gaye the
T: Kahan ho tum jaldi batao

JW grabs her phone and barks into it "Dont bother!" and hangs up for her

Bani is suddenly outraged..........

J:(standing before her, hands on his hips, thru his teeth) Get in the car Bani
B: before she can open her mouth)
J: GET IN THE GODDAMN CAR RIGHT NOW!

B:Main Tarun ke saath aayi, main usi ke saath jaaoongi (sulking away as she slowly walks to hsi car)
J I want u to be very careful what u say right now Bani, main tumse abhi bahut khush nahi hoon (his eyes boiling over)
B: Aap kab mere se khush the Mr walia
J: Shut up and get in Bani
J: Darshan chalo..............
B's phone rings again
J: Agar tumhaare hero ka phone hai usko bolo, phir se chhup jaayega
B does not pick it up.........
The car makes its way thru the almost empty roads of downtown Mumbai.........
J: Raat ke 1 baje hotel ke bahar kya kar rahi thi tum?
B: Thanks for your help, but its none of your biz
J: Tarun ke saath tum hotel aayi thi ?(accusingly)
Bani looks away
J: Tum apna mooh pher logi to main gaadi se disappear nahi honga Bani, ANSWER ME
B: woh aaj Priya ka engagement tha, Sunflower Room mein wahan aaye the hum sab log
J: Incredulously) Kaun sa aadmi ek ladki ko Mumbai mein raat ke 1 baje sadak par chhodkar gayab hota hai?
B: (righetously defending Tarun) Tarun gayab nahi ho gaya Mr Walia, woh apna cell phone bhool gaya tha, he asked me to stop a cab in teh meanwhile.........
J is even more agitated and annoyed
J: He left YOU on the street to look for a cab?

He buries his face in his hands and swears........... runs his fingers thru his hair and looks at her exasperatedly.................
J: Baneee,Do you realize agar main nahi aata to kya hota?
Bani starts sobbing, he gently puts his arm around her shoulders and holds her tight and lets her sob away................. into his chest............flips open the glove compartment which is at the back side of the CD conatiner between the two front row seats, gets hers oem tissues..........
She accepts them with a nod, furiously rbbing her swollen red eyes...............

Darshan assuming Bani wants to go to her apartment ahs pulled over in front of her builduing
JW steps out, opens her door..........
She steps out and they walk towards teh elevator.
J: We need to talk
B: Thanks for the ride (hinting for him to leave)
J: Dont be ridiculous
They reach home, J gets the key from her opens the door, flips the light switch .......
Sends her off to the couch, gets her more water............ Jai takes off his jacket, yanks his scarf out and undoes the second button on his shirt and rolls up his sleeve in a move to relax or get ready for war Bani doesnt know which.......... Bani's eyes lock on his, her face freezes...., Jai's eyes dont leave her as he proceeds to drape her chair with hsi jacket and scarf..........

She has calmed down almost fully, waiting for him to leave. He wont budge
J: How long have you been seeing Tarun (trying to sound inscrutable)
B: Mere saath kaam karta hai, I am his friend, aur kuch nahi
J: kya is "friend" ko maloom hai ki USKI friend shaadi shuda hai
B flushes
B: (guiltily) nahi...........
J: kyon?
B: Maine kisi ko Mr Aggarwal ke office mein nahi bataya
J: mujhe aur kisi se matlab nahi hai, why DIDNT U TELL TARUN (barks)
B: Mr Walia woh sirf mera dost hai
J:(with an expression that cud have strangulated Tarun had he been there)Kitna kamaal ka dost hai! he goes around with MY wife, endangers her life and
B(defending Tarun yet again) woh apna cell phone lene........
J: stop it bani, dont say one WORD...............
J: I want this guy fired! (smugly)
B: No!
J: um abhi bhi sochti ho Tarun ki aaj koi galti nahi thi?
B bends her head down guiltily
J: Thats what I thot! (nastily)


J forces himself to calm down........ walks over and sits down by her on the couch...........
J: Tum yahan akeli, main wahan kaam mein busy, I just cannot let the situation be like thsi Bani
B: Main theek hoon
J: You have to make a decision soon, ya to tum mere ghar aa rahi ho ya main yahan...........
Bani blushes stunned!
J: I wont allow thsi Bani, bahut ho chuka tumhara khel
B: i dont want to live with you (lying......... sulkily)
J: Tumhaare paas koi choice nahi hai, aise hi lagi raho tum Tarun ke saath, aur ..................
J suddenly realizing............turns angrily towards her and demands
J: Has he touched you?
B: (before she cud make up her mind to lie or give him a flippant answer........ blurts) NOOO!
J: Good! Usko apne haath pair ki zaroorat hogi, naukri karne ke liye

Both dont say anything.............
Just look at each other
Bani's mind working overtime to send him home.......... some how make him leave
J: You shud rest (gently smoothing her hair back from her face)
B: Mujhe movie dekhna hai
J softens
J: Kaun si
B:Woh kal Priya ne diya
J walks over to her TV, opens her DVD box, plugs it in
Walks back to the couch
B: Mujhe popcorn chahiye
J amused.........."OK"
B: popcorn, microwave ke oopar waale shelf mein hai
Few mins......
J: Yeh lo
His cell phoen rings
J: Haan laakar mujhe de do aur chale jao
Doorbell rings Darshan brings his laptop bags hands him the car keys and leaves
B is officially scared on seeing that

J brings her popcorn
B: Mujhe lights nahi chahiye
J: Bani lekin mujhe kaam karna hai
B: Mujhe lights nahi chahiye
J exasperated
J turns off the living room light and leaves the kitchen one on
J joins her on the couch turns on his lap top and turns to her
J: Aur kuch? (before he starts working)
B: (pretends to think............) Hmmm blanket?
Bani smiles to herself in a wicked sorta way, the great JAI WALIA has been reduced to a mere house help today, Bani's own personal slave, wonder what Jigyasa will think about it she wonders...........
J (smiles mockingly) sets his laptop back on the coffee table
goes over to her bed brings her fave blanket............. tucks her in, she merely nibbles on the popcorn.........
J : aur kuch? ..............May I (pointing to his laptop)
B: remote kahan hai?
J cannot take it anymore, his wife being so maddening was quite new to him.......... no body leave alone, no woman had ever made THE JW slave like this:-)
Picks up the remote from the coffee table and mock-menacingly bends over to her, she brings her hand up from under the blanket and takes it............ he notices her mehandi
and slowly pulls her other hand out and holds both wrists and starts LOOKING like a project file:-)
Turns sideways and meets her nervous eyes............ and asks "Dono haath mein ek design banate hain ya alag alag"
B: (Where does he think of such questions kinda look on her face) shrugs flirtatiously..... "meri marzi"
J traces the design on her right palm with an index finger... creating all sorts of feelings inside her. she quickly shuts her palm, trapping his finger........
J: Banee......Its beautiful, aisa lag raha hai shaadi tumhari hui hai
B turns beetroot red looks away
J: I never saw ur mehandi after our wedding..........
J and B's hands begin to tussle, him trying to open her palms her refusing to relax her fist, her bangles tinkle and he laughs huskily at the fight she is putting up............ JW obviously the stronger of the two letting her take the lead:-)........ and the tussle continues, her triumphant laughter, mixing with his husky ones over the tinkle of her bangles

He looks at her, bends down further and nuzzles her face while she tries to avoid his lips
J (sensuously looking at her lips.......) maine poocha tumhe aur kuch to nahi chahiye...
B: (avoiding the inevitable)haan
J: (still trying to beat his wife in the game, hovering over her face, everywhere except her unattainable lips) kya?
B: You need to shave!
J: Nice try Bani, I am not falling for it this time!(and then with consummate ease brings his lips down on hers his kiss deepening and lengthening........ drawing her trembling body toward him)

P.S. Being the JW he is he wud have dragged her home tonite itself but I decided to lengthen their separation to torment both a lil more 😉


Edited by aditee - 19 years ago
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Posted: 19 years ago
And torment us as well eh Aditee?
Wow that was AWESOME! 👏 I could so see it all...then again with my imagination I could see some more as well 😉
I LOVED the scene at home...JW the slave! Man you kept him true to his JW character yet defined new lengths for him! THAT WAS TRULY BRILLIANT!
And I was of course stuck at 2 points:
1) He ran his fingers through his hair....you have no idea how sexy that is! I've been waiting for Kekta to make JW do this from day 1 and well at least it worked in the ff! 😃
2) He undoes the 2nd button of his shirt and rolls up his sleeves...well you got me and AD on a leash now Aditee!
😳 (too bad there isn't an icon for drooling coz well now's the time for it!) Aditee tum ne mujhe itna khush kar diya ki poocho mat! 🤗

That was an awesome part though! I loved the jealousy JW depicted yet firmly held his ground and exercised his authority over his wife. Whether they live together or not he's still her hubby 😉 I also loved the entire scene at Bani's place! 👏 Keep 'em coming Aditee! You could prolly bring a whole new angle to their relationship 😉
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Posted: 19 years ago
Superb! I feel like i am reading a real M&B! Aditee.. you HAVE TO CONTINUE! ASAP!!!!

I am so impressed. Its great! I love that these are vignettes of sorts. Each scene adds to the story.. and yet are stand alones also. Love it!
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Posted: 19 years ago
Aaawwww! Thanks Pi,
Itni der type karne ka saara pain tumhara msg padhkar chala gaya...........
How nice of you

It just feels great to hear from u all, feels like I am writing some cerebral literature on US-India foriegn policy or nuclear disaramament or India's foriegn debt!

You girls are the best any body cud ever ask for

Ya, I decided to leave things status quo
We'll just take both over the edge before, JW "claims" her 😉

Thanks for the comments, Oh Boy! u do read every word dont u............
Ya the collar thing and wrist thing was a spl treat for my awesome chick pals:-)
How I wud like to see him that way too 😭
Edited by aditee - 19 years ago
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Posted: 19 years ago
Aditee.. I also have to second what Pi said (sorry to be redundant yaar)..but that shirt/sleeve thing was was sexy! WAY! SEXY!!! So, JW....

Now, maybe we can have a watch mention (something to make Pi smile?;) Love his watch and that gorgeously tanned hand.... woo hoo...

Please, please, please continue.. ASAP!!!

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Posted: 19 years ago
Basically, Aditee.. I think you captured the essence of JW... and have sorta developed him in a way that we can't really see on screen sometimes cause of crap dialogue, and exploding bombs.. we get the best of both. I like the sassy Bani as well. She's not the wilting flower in his arms girl. But, yet, so completely in love!! the contrast is endearing...

Question.. when are you going to shed light on what brought them to be seperated, yet so in their lives...

Soap
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Posted: 19 years ago
THANKS! SOAP.
Kassh mere paas voice recognition sofware hota, I cud have just spoken into MS-Word and it cud have taken 😭
Roz 10 scenes likhti main..........
JW aakhir hamara lone M&B ranger jo hai:-)
I tried my best to put a desi spin to it all, I avoid writing the physical stuff like plague........... I am not such a seasoned writer afterall I guess, plus, there is a thin line separating sensual, genuine passion and voyueristic p**n stuff so I am too scared to tread that 😲 😳
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Posted: 19 years ago

Originally posted by: aditee

Aaawwww! Thanks Pi,
Itni der type karne ka saara pain tumhara msg padhkar chala gaya...........
How nice of you

It just feels great to hear from u all, feels like I am writing some cerebral literature on US-India foriegn policy or nuclear disaramament or India's foriegn debt!

You girls are the best any body cud ever ask for

Ya, I decided to leave things status quo
We'll just take both over the edge before, JW "calims" her 😉

Thanks for the comments, Oh Boy! u do read every word dont u............
Ya the collar thing and wrist thing was a spl treat for my awesome chick pals:-)
How I wud like to see him that way too 😭


Hey don't thank me....it was just an instinctive reaction to the fabulous ff!
Arre yaar yeh kya koi cerebral literature se kam hai? Yahan itna sochna padta hai emotions ke baare mein, relationships ke baare mein, characters aur dialogues ke baare mein.....yeh toh poori psychology ki thesis hi hai! 😉
I like the idea of taking them both over the edge....seems like something JW would do to Bani and something Bani CAN do to Jai 😉
Thanks for the special treat Aditee....absolutely LOVED it! 😃😳 I would love to see him that way too....who knows love can change people so maybe he'll start wearing different clothes soon! 😕 (well wishful thinking wasn't banned at the forums so I continue!) 😛
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Posted: 19 years ago

Originally posted by: aditee

THANKS! SOAP.
Kassh mere paas voice recognition sofware hota, I cud have just spoken into MS-Word and it cud have taken 😭
Roz 10 scenes likhti main..........
JW aakhir hamara lone M&B ranger jo hai:-)
I tried my best to put a desi spin to it all, I avoid writing the physical stuff like plague........... I am not such a seasoned writer afterall I guess, plus, there is a thin line separating sensual, genuine passion and voyueristic p**n stuff so I am too scared to tread that 😲 😳


Aww I can understand Aditee....but maybe you can do it in parts....write it over the course of the day and then post it so you don't have to endure the pain of writing it all together at once. Sorry for being pushy....we just LOVE your ff so we get a little out of control 😳
Don't worry about crossing the line...you def haven't so far and then again with my imagination tumhe woh sab likhna nahi padta hai yaar! 😉😛 No wonder they keep tabs on our posts.....I'm so bad! 😈 But genuine passion it is! 😃

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