FF: Ek Boond Asmaan...LAST PART+EPI, PG-34 - Page 10

very lovely part.So i was right from the start.......KW is bani's child...

hey dhani,

great part.. OMG what a weirdo nachiket is!! lol

thank God bani rejected him then and there..

the last part was great, bani having dinner with jai and krishna..

continue soon

nadia

heyy..
great part..
krishna is so cute..
bani having dinner with jai and krisna...that's great..
plz cont.soon

she is bani's kid!jb interacting!natchi scene too funny

Amazing how the first thing JW notice about Bani, were

the similarities between her and Krishna's eyes.

Dhani, simply fabulous chapter, continue soon, now the mother

in Bani is coming out with Krishna, after being told she lost her baby

so long ago.

Getting curious to see how the story will unfold.

All the best and take care.

Hope you finish all your exams.


*Have a Merry Christmas and a Happy and Healthy 2010*

Hey Dhani,
Good luck with your exams. We know u will pass with flying colours as u come across not only very intelligent but very systematic and methodical girl. Hats off to u for managing your exams and still providing entertainment to your readers.
Merry Christmas and a very happy and prosperous new year. I hope we r going to get a treat of multiple ffs/ss once u r free from your exams. I am not imposing, I hope u go out and enjoy yourself too but there is no harm in wishing for a treat.
Now coming to the story, I am simply loving the way it is woven. But I would also love to see if Sonali's character was Bani's. I know it would have been too depressing, it still is, but somehow we know that our main character is Bani and all sympathies are for her. How about if it was other way around. It's nothing that i want to see that and get depressed, i was wondering how would u have changed the story line.
I am loving the little Krishna, but like some people are guessing, I think would not it be too cliched if she turns out to be Bani's daughter. Again i started with what if? Anyways, me and my eccentric thoughts!
don't worry yourself with them, and enjoy writing what u have planned.
cheers
Shweta

Is Krishna ban's daughter? Was there babay swap without Jai's knowledge?

Or Bani is just attracted to her as she is exactly same age as her daughter?

Good to see JB Krishna meeting outside school.

Nachiket was so irritating...good bani got rid of him.

oww i love it

Just read the last two parts. I loved them. Thank God Bani rejected Nachiket at first sight. Glad to see her and Jai and Krishu meeting out of school. Please continue when you can. Good luck with the exams.

"We know u will pass with flying colors as u come across not only very intelligent but very systematic and methodical girl. Hats off to u for managing your exams and still providing entertainment to your readers..."
Hey shweta...LOL!!! To be absolutely shameless...I can agree with the intelligent one or else surviving in Mumbai University is impossible... systematic, I can't say, I am more spontaneous... but yes I am quite methodical, I have this mad obsession about keeping things in order. It's not a great deal dear... I don't study 24x7...I believe in quality studying rather than quantity... My dad really gets scared seeing me roaming around chit-chatting half a day before the exam...he thinks I am nuts...but I think that once you are through with what you have done what is the need to take tension and stress.

Your different idea seems good, but I had thought of this story in this way...too much of emotion and drama... (I still can't beelive I am writing it). Please do except lots of stories, I am going to make you all read and cooment, brace yourself for the torture after 6^th Jan...

Merry Christmans!!!!

PART-10

Bani inserted the keys in the knob, opening the door of her house, she was least bit surprised to find her mother sitting on the chair, gruffly, cutting the vegetables with so much speed that she felt pity for those innocent potatoes and tomatoes...

"Maa, araam se...haath kat jayega..." bani said keeping away her bag, getting herself a bottle of water from the fridge...kiran stayed mum, banging the knife against the wooden cutting board...

"Maa..." bani reprimanded her, snatching the knife from her hand...

"Kya kar rahin hain aap...main karti hoon..." bani started chopping...

"Nachiket ne pushkar ko phone kiya..." kiran said, so Mr. Pompous Pumpkin had already informed, bani thought, unwaveringly cutting the vegetables...

"Kuch bol..."

"Sukhi sabzi banon ki kuch aur..." bani asked looking up...

"Haan, aise hi baat kiya hoga use...aur woh, bechara..." kiran wailed dramatically...

"Woh koi bechara nahin tha...aur maine kuch nahin kahaa...bas itna kahaa ki aapko mujhse better ladki mil jaayegi..." bani got up...

"Kya zaroorat thi...kitna acha rishta tha...hey ram, ab aisa ladka fir kahaan milega..."

"Maa, woh pagal tha...rehne do..." bani shouted from the kitchen...

"Tujhe toh sab pagal hi lagte hain...sifaye apne, main, pia, pushkar, sab pagal hain jo tera bhala chahte hain..." kiran screamed back...

"MAA..." bani chuckled despite upsetting her mother...

"Aur itne der kahaan thi...uss ladke ka phone aaye do ghante hogaye hain..." kiran said...bani didn't want to say she was with Krishna and Mr. Walia...not knowing how her mother would react...

"Woh...main bas aise hi...beach pe chali gayi thi...bore ho rahi thi..."

"Tu ghoom rahin thi aur bechara woh ladka, kitna bura laga hoga usse..." kiran started again, bani shook her head, searching for some cotton to stuff into her ears...
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Bani tossed in her bed...her mother was snoring away to glory...but her mind and heart weren'tbeing able to dethatch themselves from Krishna and today's evening...it was simply perfect...the beautiful sea-side, she was so impressed by Jai Walia, he himself fed Krishna, cleaning her, talking to her in a child-like voice...he was so handsome, more than just physically, the way he spoke, the way he fathered and mothered Krishna, the polite way he thanked his staff for their service, the courteous way he made her comfortable, and physically also he was handsome too, with the few pecks of white strands, barely there, near his temples adding to his untouchable aura... she never had such a nice evening till now, maybe the last was with Daksh when they had a pani-puri competition between themselves, and she had won, the other day she had got an upset stomach and was teased by Daksh endlessly...Daksh, she didn't know what she felt for him now, maybe he too was lost like so many other things in her life... there were times when she only thought about him, but not today, he was a memory soiled in dust and she never regretted her love for him, at least she had loved him truly and whole-heartedly... ...

She touched the spot where Krishna had pecked her cheek and wished her good night, coming out of the car, when Mr. Walia dropped her home...it was so pure that she would have cried there if not composing herself just in time... ... she repeatedly kept asking herself the same question again and again... Why was she getting so attached to Krishna??? Why her motherly instincts which were long bruised and dead were now breathing again??? She raked her mind to come up with a rational answer but all rationalism and realism eluded her, she just wanted to believe in the unblemished love she had for Krishna... and maybe Krishna also had for her...
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Jai switched off the light...after a round of Bani Miss, Krishna was finally asleep...jai came out...Krishna seems to have really bonded with bani...and bani, she was so enamored by Krishna, the entire evening she was quietly listening to Krishna's banter, occasionally talking to him...What future this newfound relationship had?? This question surely bothered him...Krishna was young, motherless, she was bound get attached to a lady who was showering so much love...but bani...she was a young girl, she should be enjoying life with her friends, or boyfriend or maybe get married and settle down in her life but Why was she so smitten by Krishna? And the sadness which sparkled in her eyes... he was mesmerized by its magnetism... there was so much sorrow and depth, yet it wasn't pitying or sympathetic, it was compassionate as if she was happy with the sorrow, as if she drank that grief which nestled in her bosom safely...it was so resonating, you couldn't cry even if you want to, you couldn't reach out and wipe her tears but just look at her and admire... admire the beauty of it... ...

"I told you...she needs a mother..." masi's voice disturbed his insightful thoughts...

"Ji..." jai looked at her unsurely...

"Krishna... she needs a mother..." masi said again...

"Masi, not again..."

"She is getting so attached to bani... she is seeing her mother in bani..." jai stood mutely not able to counter it, she was right...

"Jai, understand, she is a little child, her mind doesn't understand all this, she wants a mother...please jai..."

"Masi mujhse nahin hoga...aur fir kaun shaadi karega, agar usne Krishna ko maa ka pyaar nahin diya, main aapne aap ko kabhi maaf nahin karpaonga..." jai said frustrated...

"Agar...jai...agar woh ladki bani hui toh..." masi said, a penetrating silence fell...she had seen bani once or twice when she went to pick up Krishna, she was a good-looking girl and also seemed to be cultured...

"Masi, yeh nahin ho sakta...she is a young girl...aap aisa soch bhi kaise sakti hain...hum iss bare main aur nahin baat karenge... bas..." jai paced away to his room... XXXX
A Month and a half Later...

"Aur Cinderella hamesha uss rajkumar ke sath khushi kushi thi...zindagi bhar ke liye..." bani finished narrating the fairy-tale of Cinderella... all the children sitting in zap attention, clapped once the story ended... ...bani's eyes fell on Krishna...she was silent, unlike her playful self, today she hadn't even asked her round of questions... ...

"Ishaan, dekho krihsna aise kyun baithi hain..." bani asked Ishaan, Krishna's friend ishaan quietly went and patted Krishna, she shrugged him off...

"Miss..." ishaan shrugged his shoulders...

"Kissine humari Krishna ko kuch kahaa..." bani asked, trying to get some reaction for Krishna...

"Nahin miss...!!!" everyone said in unison...

"Toh Krishna kyun roothi hain...kal se chuttiyan hain na...sab kitni masti karenga..." but Krishna sat stoically, her arms folded across her chest, looking out of the window...

(gum sum gum gum sum ho kyun tum
gum sum gum ghum kyun ho tum) - (2)
aankhon se chhalake hai ghum ghum, honto se muskaan gum
ruthe kyun ruthe ho hardam, keh do kya bachche ho tum
(gum sum gum gum sum ho kyun tum
gum sum gum ghum kyun ho tum) - (2)

Bani sang, asking all the children to join in...All the children got up making a circle around Krishna...bani went near Krishna holding her...but Krishna frowned... ...

hum inako samjhaaye kaise, jine ke lamhe hai kam
iss pal ki kimat badi hai, iss pal ko kar lo jatan
maathe pe silwat ka gehana, har chehare ne kyun hai pehana
haaye kyun bhaaye hai inako chinta ki nadiya mein behana
has do na, has do na
aao na dhdkan ke lete gaao na tum dhumpichak dhum
(gum sum gum gum sum ho kyun tum
gum sum gum ghum kyun ho tum) - (2)
hum inako batlaaye kaise jute hai inake abb hum
main main main main main na karana, todo na saare bharam
ambar se barase jo baadal, chhaate mein kya chhupake rehana
haathon mein haathon ko thaamein dukh sukh ki bundon ko sehana
has do na, has do na
aao na dhdkan ke lete gaao na tum dhumpichak dhum
(gum sum gum gum sum ho kyun tum
gum sum gum ghum kyun ho tum) - (2)
aankhon se chhalake hai ghum ghum, honto se muskaan gum
ruthe kyun ruthe ho hardam, keh do kya bachche ho tum
(gum sum gum gum sum ho kyun tum
gum sum gum ghum kyun ho tum) - (2)

The children made a ring around Krishna, cheering her up, finally she smiled...the bell rang and all the children picked their small bags, running outside... wishing 'Happy Holidays...'

Bani noticed Krishna picking her bag, moodily...

"Kyua hua Krishna..." bani asked bringing her closer, sitting on her knees to face her...

"Sab, ishaan, stuti...bunty sab apni mummy papa ke saath chutti pe jaa rahen hain..." Krishna complained...

"Haan, toh papa bhi aapko le jaayenge na..." bani tried to console her...

"Par...Meri mummy nahin hain na..." bani's heart broke, she didn't know what to say...

"Main bhagwaanji se har roz pray karti hoon ki mummy ko de den par..." Krishna started to cry...bani hugged her to herself, patting her back...

"Nahin rote beta...bhagwaangi aapki baat zaroor sunenge..."

"Nahin woh bohot bure hain..." Krishna said stubbornly...

"Aisa nahin bolte beta..." bani wiped her tears with her kerchief...

"Toh...aap meri mummy banogi...pleaseee..." Krishna said...of course she didn't know what she was speaking...life was not so simple as she made it to be or thought to be...

"Beta..." bani was rendered speechless...

"Pleaseee...." Krishna's pleading eyes picked her heart... before she could say anything she heard a stern voice...

"KRISHNA!!!" it was jai walia standing at the entrance of the class-room, he was waiting outside the gates, but Krishna was not coming anytime soon...all the children had come out, worried he came inside to see Krishna talking to bani... for a moment Krishna stood stunned, trembling...

"Mr. Walia..." bani got up, trying to make him understand...

"Krishna abhi jao aur gaadi main baitho..."

"Papaa..." she cried even more...hiccupping...

"Yeh koi tarika hain apni teacher se baat karne ka...aapki mamma kabhi nahin ayegi...kabhi nahin...JAO..." jai's voice was so firm that even bani felt scared... Krishna ran from there, throwing her bag...

"I am sorr..." before jai could apologize bani snapped at him...

"I can't believe you shouted at Krishna..." she raised her voice...

"Ms. Dixit, she wasn't supposed to talk to you like that..." jai said...

"She is a kid for god's sake Mr. Walia...I thought you were sensible enough..."

"Please, you better keep away from Krishna; she seems to be too attached to you... either you change your job or I will put Krishna in a new school..." jai said curtly...

"She is a small kid and that too motherless... I..." bani felt at loss of words, struggling to understand why she was feeling so bad when Krishna's own father scolded her, he had every right to do so and she a non-entity...

"You don't need to teach me how to look after my child..." jai said quite rudely...

"Children are not coloring books that you can paint them as you wish, they need to be nurtured with care Mr. Walia...there was no need to talk to her like that...and I am not going anywhere neither is Krishna...I will make her understand once she is back..." bani said walking past him in a huff, jai stood bewildered by her audacity... ... no one had ever talked to him like that... ...
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God bless
dhani