Choota Rishta... - Page 2

Originally posted by: sareeta

Hello Everyone...

Jus penned some random lines and felt they related to Shiv's situation at the moment...

Dekhe the
Nazare
Aakhon se
Tere...

Paayi thi
Panaah maine
Dhadkanon mein
Tere...

Chala tha yun
Sang tere
Thaame tera
Daaman

Choota jo
Tera daaman..
Dekha
Choota saath
Zindagi ka...

-Sareeta

Di, you write with such ease... Anything you write, has such a calm flow. That was beautiful... very poetic. I liked the way you refer from Shiv's side to Gauri's in the way she completed him. The last lines always leave me breathless... This is no exception. 👏👏 Ties it all together, yet the flow is still continual... Very apt to Shiv's situation. A heartfelt paigam, dil ko chuh gaya... Thanks for sharing Di!

Cheers,

dc

sareeta dii....😃 i read ur poem this time...and guess what...i love it...😳😆 and this line 'Choota saath Zindagi ka...' is really cute...😳 thankoo diii for penning these lines...😳

amu~

Originally posted by: apapap

hey sareeta...tht was really nice yaar...so much conveyed in such simple terms..bhai hum to ho gaye fida :D

Awww, thanks Pri! Arre yaar tum bhi na... fida tho main hogayi hoon... aapke fida hone ke andaaz pe! 😆

Originally posted by: desi chic

Di, you write with such ease... Anything you write, has such a calm flow. That was beautiful... very poetic. I liked the way you refer from Shiv's side to Gauri's in the way she completed him. The last lines always leave me breathless... This is no exception. 👏👏 Ties it all together, yet the flow is still continual... Very apt to Shiv's situation. A heartfelt paigam, dil ko chuh gaya... Thanks for sharing Di!

Cheers,

dc

Aww, thank you so much for the kind words DC.! So glad you enjoyed it! Aap ki kahi baatein mere dil ko chu gayi! Thank you! 😊

Originally posted by: *Spandana*

sareeta dii....😃 i read ur poem this time...and guess what...i love it...😳😆 and this line 'Choota saath Zindagi ka...' is really cute...😳 thankoo diii for penning these lines...😳

amu~

Hey Amu, long time, buddy! Glad you liked it so much! THanks!

very nice keep up the gud work 👏 😊

Originally posted by: Suhaan

very nice keep up the gud work 👏 😊

Thank you Suhaan ! Glad you liked it! 😊

Sareeta,

Very beautiful lines. Wish i had the skills to write poetry like you... 😳