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Posted: 14 years ago

Chapter 13

As per plan ria enters the haveli…as a new day dawns. At the breakfast table of the haveli..dadi and shiv consume breakfast gauri serves, while anupam enters with his usual evergreeness. Noticing ria by her side gauri smiles welcoming her yet that comfort doesn't last for long when shiv gets up to welcome ria…not only formally yet with a hug.

Watching from a distance…gauri finds it strange, more so it seemed to effect her. his clossness with her made a mark on gauri but she controlled herself. It was only a hug.. why was she feeling this way?. She had already determined that she no longer could love him then why was she feeling this way.

As shiv seemed overjoyed or at least pulled off that he was he gave Ria a seat next to him on the breakfast table and watched to envy in gauris eyes with a smile.

As gauri walks the corridors of the haveli getting close to shivs bedroom, shiv peaks from the partial open door and swifty gets in place in front of ria..

"Ab dekho ria…tume vahi karna hai jo meine kaha hai.. " with a certain firmness to his voice shiv made sure that ria was aware of what he wanted. standing in a loose attire of a white shirt..shiv unbuttons his shirt a little form the collar and then with a tug..pulls at his buttons. Intentionally riping two of them off as this was going to be the basis of there role play. Giving Ria neede and thread he gave her a certain nodd as gauri approached the door……

in fact both of them were very good actors..as gauri happened to catch a glimpse of Ria and shiv close she stopped and watched and that's just what shiv wanted.

a little in character …ria complains at shiv……

shiv sidhe khade raho naa…

shiv says nothing..just pretends to smiles as ria..sews the button onto his shirt. The way in which shiv let this ria get so close annoyed gauri. who did she think she was?, stringing the button to his shirt…and then finishing it of by steeping even closer to him and bieting away the remainder of the thread really got to gauri. gauri's eyes shaped to an irritated, anger and envey.. how she would like to give that girl a piece of her mind..walking off in a determined strop shiv noticed the way gauri stormed off and then parted from ria. With an arkward moment between them a distance was made and shiv made his gratadute felt.

Thank you Ria, Ria nods in acceptance and then softly adds… "sir lekin..aap ko lagta hai key eh sahi tarika hai.. " shiv on looks gauri walking away and his expression showed that he was unsure but he wouldn't give up. Placing his hands into his pockets he simply smiled.

Outdoors of the haveli anupam sits on a bench amongst secluded greenery seemingly chewing on the top of a pencil trying to think of an idea for his novel when a very angry looking gauri takes a seat next to him. even without asking she says her pecice and anpuman is a little surprised of the anger that can rise from such a small figure.

……….." woah aapne aap ko kya samaj ti hai..! itne chote chote kapde pehen kar unke aage peche ghum rahin hai. woh mere pati hai aur woh Unke shirt par button laga rahin hai!"

Anupam begins to realise that shiv had put his plan into action and finds gauris irritation amusing. She had so much love for him..she just didn't realise it.

A silence fell after she had said her piece and anupam had an apt line in response.

'Agar tum chaho toe mere shirt ka button laga sakti ho.' His line did put a smile on her face and the way in which he pointed out mission buttons from his shirt was more memorable.

……….As two days pass the repeated closeness of Ria and shiv plays a toll on gauri. from cooking for him to spending considerable time in his room…gauri had seen there long conversations into the night as she passed his room for water. The way in which he gave her importance in the haveli.. took her shopping.. sight seeing in the village. Gauri felt envious of ria…but she had learned to bare it. Putting plucking at soar wounds would always lead to blood in the form of tears and tonight was that night.

12.30pm struck on the haveli clock..and gauri had been sitting at the dinning table in wait of shiv all night. As per her tradition she would wait for shiv to eat before she consumed food yet tonight shiv was not present. Resting her head over her arms at the table In front of her sat shivs plate. Full of food …she had covered it in his wait and it sat there for hours.

Sometime later as shiv walked into the haveli with a rather loosened look to his attire he noticed how gauri was in wait of him and his expression creased in concern. Maybe this had gotten all little too much..he didn't like to see her this way. As gauri heard his footsteps approach she prompted herself lifting her head from the table she straightened her look and spoke appropriately.

Mein aap hein ka intaasar kar rahin thi…

For a moment shivs heart melted for gauri, he knew she wouldn't have eaten but then those words of his to gauri echoed through his mind and as shiv kapoor would he took a more stern approach with hesitance.

"Meine Ria ke saath dinner kiya hai.. tum khalo aur ienda mera intaasar karne ki koi sarurat nahin hai." shivs words were quite harshly sounded and with all gauri had seen over the two days this had really hurt the spot.

As shiv walked away from the table and up the staircase he stopped at the balcony just to see if gauri would eat…yet his thoughts were not wrong…she didn't touch the food….. instead her eyes filmed with tears and she cried. Gauri wasn't on her own..watching her ..Listening to her sob from a distance shivs eyes began to cup in tears too.

As anupam entered the haveli the next day..the atmosphere was silent.. sitting amongst the haveli lounge dadi and shiv are in the accompaniment of playing cards but the atmosphere is almost morbid.

Anuapm comes in time with his cheery mood..today seemingly biting an apple with his entry he comes and takes a seat next to shiv whole concentrates on his card game.

Dressed in a white kurta..a little like dadis white saari the outlook was a little dull according to anupam. Kya hua koi mar gayay kya?? Aur ria kaha hai.? taking his share of cards from the stack on the table this was a sign that anupam wanted inn.

Shiv looks at anupam with a stern slience and then adds.. use meine vapas behjdiyay hai

Anupam is surprised,but all was going so well wasn't it.? "par kyun?"

"Yeh sab natak se gauri ko taklif ho rahin thi aur koi asar nahin ho raha tha." it looked like dadi agreeded after all she was aware of the plan and it looked like she was on shivs side.

Anupam nods in vain…shiv was rubbish at this sort of art.

"Tum boahat jaldi haar maan jate ho shiv." Shiv didn't like that comment all..after all he was shiv kapoor and more so he was thakur now. There was no way in which he would accept defeat. A little out of the blue..very much in shiv kapoor style shiv answered anuapms critisum in his own way.

Calling out for gauri..gauri enters the lounge at shivs call and waits for his words yet as always shivs is swept away by her bueaty. Today she was dressed in a pale yellow that added to her perfection In all ways. As shiv crossed that diversion..he spoke with an intense calmness ..yet he avoided looking at gauri and concentrated on the card game at hand.

Mein ria ko is ghar ki bahu banane ki soch raha hoon, tumara khyal kya hai?
gauri impedidtalty thought shiv was talking about ria and anupam and anupam and dadi too were a little shocked but kept silent. Gauri simply nodded..what objection would she have?.

Jaisa aap anupam ke leighyey theekh samje was gauris reply..but as shiv dropped his cards and took a deep look at gauri there was a imminent twist to shivs words.

"Mein anupam ki baat nahin kar raha..mein apni baat kar raha hoon. Is ghar mein ek choti thakurian lane ki baat kar raha hoon." All expressions freeze at shivs words and gauris heart sinks…she is unable to say anything and simply leaves.

Dadi and both anupam look at shiv in disbelief and then watch him walk away.. in the back of there minds they new shiv was going to resovle this…and the moment of gauris confession was due to arrive.

……… Gauri retreats to her bedroom, naturally a sadness prevails..sitting at her bedside gauri lets her sadness melt in the form of tears….she had so much pain yet she didn't realise that it was all just a form of love for him.

shiv gives gauri some time on her own and then approches her bedroom, stopping at the entrance he sees how gauri is sat at the other side of the bed..with her back to him..and he walks in silently.

Hearing his footsteps into the room..gauri knew the farmilarity of those footsteps and wiped her tears. She didn't face to turn him…she kept still.

As shiv stopped at a distance he took a pause and put his words very tactfully.

Shiv: 'Tume is shaadhi se itraaz hai.??"

Gauri said nothing…

Shiv: "Ria pasand nahin hai?."

Gauri again was silent

"Ya phir jalan ho rahin hai ke woah tumari jage na le leigh…"

Something with gauri sparked irritation…an overhelming feeling of anger. With sadness.and for the first time she showed it..

Turning to shiv..gauri walked a pace closer to shiv and for the very first time looked into this eyes. Those eyes that were cupped with tears, that had gone a shade of red with all the crying…the intensity in her expression shadowed her love and shiv watched her expression as her eyes spoke with love yet her words cried out with frustration.

"hah itaaraz hai is rishte se

kyun ke aap mere pati ho …

itaaraz hai kyun ke koi aur aapke pass jayey waoh mujse bardash nahin hota..

itaaraz hai kyun ke mein aapse pyar karti hoon bohat pyaar karti hoon."

She stopped as she realised what she had just said.. dropping her eyes in realisation of the way she was speaking to him gauri stepped back…but shiv had achieved just what he had set out to do. His expression melted seeing gauris love for him..Stepping closer he looked down at her with a sense of comfort …. "Ek baar phir se kaho?"


........Now i'm hoping that you guys didn't find that too bad..i do feel some of it was dragged a little but somewhere i felt the need for it. I've got one or two chapters left which i think you guys will enjoy as they will be more romance orientated ..please let me know what you think.

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Posted: 14 years ago
finally the confession....the part was really great....anupam's part was funny....do update soon....waiting for the next part....continue soon....please...
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Posted: 14 years ago
😳😳wow!!!!👏👏👏...2 updates woh bhi back to back....a bonus for me😉😃...
anyways....i luved the update!!!! all my complains of last times updates have vanished...
luved the focus being fully on Shiv-Gauri😳😳😳....
Anupam is a sweetheart...gave Shiv such a lovely idea....3 cheers for their friendship😉!!!!
Shiv finally is showing who Shiv Kapoor is n i like that😳😳...the way he tries to make Gauri jealous...i luved the way Shiv reacts during the Dadi-Gauri conversation, the way he stops her n confesses his luv for her😳😳😳...
the show stopper for this update for me is Gauri...loved her reactions ,from being firm tat Shiv is her hubby n she only respects him, to the variation on hearing n seeing Ria n Shiv together...the button-needle scene was too gud...(my naughty brains-imagine if Gauri wud have pulled Ria's hair, n a catfight to follow...uff😆)...anyways she is Gauri, she is too refined for such harkats😆😆
i luved the last scene...luved it...n the dialogues...too gud 'hah itaaraz hai is rishte se ...kyun ke aap mere pati ho ….itaaraz hai kyun ke koi aur aapke pass jayey waoh mujse bardash nahin hota..itaaraz hai kyun ke mein aapse pyar karti hoon bohat pyaar karti hoon." n then Shiv responding,'"Ek baar phir se kaho?"...😳😳😳😳😳hai my dil beating dhak dhak(don't mind, i'm gone crazy😆)...
Thank u so much Jagruti for this update!!!! eager to know aage kya hoga...plz update soon😳
Pria
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Posted: 14 years ago
awesomeeee!!!!!!....
loved that scene when anupam had to nudge shiv so that he can allow gauri to come in!....
shiv did the right thing in agreeing with anupam's plan because it was necessary for gauri to realize her love for shiv!....
poor gauri!...she was so jealous and irritated!....
when shiv said that he was marrying ria i was a bit shocked at the sudden change of plan but then again this is SHIV KAPOOR!....HE CAN NEVER LOOSE IN ANYTHING!...
the way gauri expressed her feelings to shiv was mindblowing!...finally shiv's plan succeeded!....
you have ended at the wrong time!....
can't wait 4 the next part!
plzzzzzzzz continue soon!
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Posted: 14 years ago
{Shivs eyes take to darkness yet…even with his eyes closed he sees gauri before him. her expression smiles lovingly at him..failing to determine reality from illusion shiv opens his eyes in a startle and looking around from a sudden open of his eyes he sees the surroundings of his room and realizes that it was just his mind playing games. Shiv knew that this all added to his feeling of love for gauri…there was slow growing thirst for gauri. Feeling this strange feeling shiv seems to ease to a smile.}
This para was well written.
But the part which captured my heart d most is

{"hah itaaraz hai is rishte se

kyun ke aap mere pati ho …

itaaraz hai kyun ke koi aur aapke pass jayey waoh mujse bardash nahin hota..

itaaraz hai kyun ke mein aapse pyar karti hoon bohat pyaar karti hoon."

She stopped as she realised what she had just said.. dropping her eyes in realisation of the way she was speaking to him gauri stepped back…but shiv had achieved just what he had set out to do. His expression melted seeing gauris love for him..Stepping closer he looked down at her with a sense of comfort …. "Ek baar phir se kaho?"}

Don't no wht 2 say.its awasome,touchy & lovely.Beautiful dialogues.Cud c yash pallu
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: karna91

finally the confession....the part was really great....anupam's part was funny....do update soon....waiting for the next part....continue soon....please...




thank you very much. glad you enjoyed it.. i tried to add a little comic element to it..will try
update soon.
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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: pria4ever

😳😳wow!!!!👏👏👏...2 updates woh bhi back to back....a bonus for me😉😃... thank you..i needed to make up for the time loss again...however ive not spoken to you in a while..hope your ok.

anyways....i luved the update!!!! all my complains of last times updates have vanished... .good thats what i had hoped for
luved the focus being fully on Shiv-Gauri😳😳😳.... .yep i guess its nice to read on them..i think the forcus will remain on them till the end.
Anupam is a sweetheart...gave Shiv such a lovely idea....3 cheers for their friendship😉!!!!.i dont know if it was a good idea though.. little bit harsh.did make gauri cry after all.
Shiv finally is showing who Shiv Kapoor is n i like that😳😳...the way he tries to make Gauri jealous...i luved the way Shiv reacts during the Dadi-Gauri conversation, the way he stops her n confesses his luv for her😳😳😳... .yep i guess that is very much like shiv kapoor and the magic never fails.
the show stopper for this update for me is Gauri...loved her reactions ,from being firm tat Shiv is her hubby n she only respects him, to the variation on hearing n seeing Ria n Shiv together...the button-needle scene was too gud...(my naughty brains-imagine if Gauri wud have pulled Ria's hair, n a catfight to follow...uff😆)...anyways she is Gauri, she is too refined for such harkats😆😆

...your right..i tried to show a few sides of gauri in that update.. from simply being his wife for moral..to expressing that she loves him. is a big leap..found it hard to express it in my words.
it would be funny too see a cat fight.
i luved the last scene...luved it...n the dialogues...too gud 'hah itaaraz hai is rishte se ...kyun ke aap mere pati ho '.itaaraz hai kyun ke koi aur aapke pass jayey waoh mujse bardash nahin hota..itaaraz hai kyun ke mein aapse pyar karti hoon bohat pyaar karti hoon." n then Shiv responding,'"Ek baar phir se kaho?"...😳hai my dil beating dhak dhak(don't mind, i'm gone crazy😆)...

.lol sorry for that ..at least you know your heart is still beating..everythings fine.. your alife..lol
i think that was the best part of the update for me too.

Thank u so much Jagruti for this update!!!! eager to know aage kya hoga...plz update soon😳
...thanking you.!
Pria

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Posted: 14 years ago

Originally posted by: sweet scorpio

awesomeeee!!!!!!.... ...thank you..! glad you liked it

loved that scene when anupam had to nudge shiv so that he can allow gauri to come in!....
...actually that was a very small part of it..didn't think you guys would notice that but...wow it shows how particular you guys are with the smallest details. thanks for that!
shiv did the right thing in agreeing with anupam's plan because it was necessary for gauri to realize her love for shiv!.... yep although he might not have liked it as such..it had to be done.😉
poor gauri!...she was so jealous and irritated!.... do ya blame her???😆
when shiv said that he was marrying ria i was a bit shocked at the sudden change of plan but then again this is SHIV KAPOOR!....HE CAN NEVER LOOSE IN ANYTHING!...
...yep i guess that was his last card there..he just wanted to push gauris feeling off the edge i guess.
the way gauri expressed her feelings to shiv was mindblowing!...finally shiv's plan succeeded!....
...success at last..but we all knew he would win in the end!
you have ended at the wrong time!.... sorry! will continue asap.
can't wait 4 the next part!
plzzzzzzzz continue soon! thanks

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Originally posted by: jasminerahul

{Shivs eyes take to darkness yet'even with his eyes closed he sees gauri before him. her expression smiles lovingly at him..failing to determine reality from illusion shiv opens his eyes in a startle and looking around from a sudden open of his eyes he sees the surroundings of his room and realizes that it was just his mind playing games. Shiv knew that this all added to his feeling of love for gauri'there was slow growing thirst for gauri. Feeling this strange feeling shiv seems to ease to a smile.}

This para was well written.
But the part which captured my heart d most is

{"hah itaaraz hai is rishte se

kyun ke aap mere pati ho '

itaaraz hai kyun ke koi aur aapke pass jayey waoh mujse bardash nahin hota..

itaaraz hai kyun ke mein aapse pyar karti hoon bohat pyaar karti hoon."

She stopped as she realised what she had just said.. dropping her eyes in realisation of the way she was speaking to him gauri stepped back'but shiv had achieved just what he had set out to do. His expression melted seeing gauris love for him..Stepping closer he looked down at her with a sense of comfort '. "Ek baar phir se kaho?"}

Don't no wht 2 say.its awasome,touchy & lovely.Beautiful dialogues.Cud c yash pallu



wow thank you for this.. glad to see that you enjoyed the update. sorry for taking so long in updating and again thank you for you feedback. means alot to me ..the way in which you have picked out the bits you liked has really highlighted the kind of fiction you guys like.
i think your too kind with your words..hopefully i can carry on writing updates that you will enjoy.

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Posted: 14 years ago
waiting...waiting for ur next update😃

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