MaNan SS:FANGIRL [Chapter5{Pg15}] - Page 3

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Posted: 9 years ago
#21
Character sketch was awesome. Loved the way u penned it with nandini' pov.each character was beautifully explained.Continue soon.thanks for pm
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: archu_asok

Character sketch was awesome. Loved the way u penned it with nandini' pov.each character was beautifully explained.Continue soon.thanks for pm

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Thanks for the comment glad u lyked it!!!😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Very interesting characters..
Thnxx for the pm...
Continue soon..
Looking forward to read further parts..
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Very interesting characters..
Thnxx for the pm...
Continue soon..
Looking forward to read further parts..


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Chapter 1 [Good Morning????]

SINGHANIA HOUSE :

@6am

Alarm clock : Trrr...

On a white bed a girl covering her face with the blanket stirs in sleep...
The fresh morning bri8ness starts escaping her room curtains...

Girl : ufff itni jaldi subeh ho gyi... (n reaches her hands to the alarm to stp it)

Then she uncovers her angelic sleepy face n stretches her hands...n sits up.

Girl : Good Morning Nandu ...ahh...(sighs) itni raat tk online rhegi to yahi hoga ... Chal uth ja
(Then she picks up her HP Slate 7 from beside her pillow opens her twitter.. N posts a Good Morning post...)

Post was like :

Good Morning guys...!!! Have an awesome days!!!
And a special wala morning to my Rockstar!!!! @ManikMalhotra

************

Then she jumps out of her bed into the washroom get ready in her school dress
<in the media box>
Ties a pony with a simple chotu puff...
N wears her shoes takes up her bag n goes down!!

Down Stairs :

She runs down heads towards the kitchen

@Kitchen :

Nandu : hey chaand jaan wassup???

[Chaand Bibi a.k.a :- Chaand Jaan (Nandini's Nanny) ]

Chaand : uth gyi ???

Nandu : I'm all ready ... So aj kya hai mere foodie tummy ko Shut Up krwane k liye????

Chaand (chukkled) : paneer sandwiches with mango shake

Nandu : wow awesome!!! (said excitedly) now jaldi serve na ...

Chaand Bi took out sandwich from the oven till the Nandu had started drinking mango shake then they walked out )

@Dinng Area

Nandu kept her bag in the table n sat on the table with sandwich in her munching it n mango shake on the table...n she was doing something in tablet
Seemed that she was writing some poem or song... Chaand Bi went back to the kitchen
Meanwhile a lady in her late 40s came down from the stairs as soon as she came near the dinning area Nandu saw her she said :

Nandini's POV :

As soon as I saw mom I thot to wish her... Jo v ho she z my mom na

Me : Good Morning mom (I said smilingly)

Mom : Nandini is this the way u sit on the dining table??? (she said angrily)

Me : sorry mom (n I stood from the table )

Then mom ne or kuch notice kiya I'm damm sure her eyes tell me

Mom : aese khate hain????( she again scolded...n I started checking ab kya gadbad hui...tb tk again she said) Ghar mei plates ki kami hai that u r dirtying ur hands...u r so indisciplined (she scolded phirse )

Me : wo...main wo mom mujhe school k liye late ho Rha tha isliye jaldi jaldi mein (I said like a chicken...she was looking scary yaar)

Mom : school ...oh haan ... Robin ne bataya when I went to Mumbai u dint went school for 2 days kyu???? (she asked with a serious xpressin...lag Rha tha ab mujhe thapad padega )

Me : yeah... Wo interschool competition hai... So we were preparing for our performance aj uska 1st round hai (I xplained casually) ... 12th standard mei surf v were there n school mei juniors are practicing so we thot to practice at home

Mom : u thot??? (OMG!!! Angry mode back) tm sochti ho???? Kyu sochti ho???...padhai toh krna hota nai hai surf school nai Jane k bahane

Me : nai mom...sachi we asked the teacher too... Sanjana Ma'm gave us permission (I tried to justify)

Mom : shut up... Mujhse behes mat Karo...I knw ur tendancies ...sirf padhai na krne k bahane hai ... (she said angrily now was lyk boht ho gya it was imp n I never kept studies aside y she reacts like this so I said )

Me : plz mom main bol rhi hun na it was important...n I never kept studies aside...I give equal importance to studies ... Y do u have to always react like this (now my voice rose)

THDDD n she slapped me

Mom : mujhse behes krne ki him at kesi ki... U will teach me guardianship kya hoti hai????... Jao upar...2din tm apni marzi se school nai gayi 2din meri marzi se nai jaogi (she said angrily...I was in tears)

Me : mom plz...aj Jane do...today is very important... Aj competition Ka 1st round hai plz aj Jane do (I spoke crying...till then dad also came )

Dad : kya ho Rha hai ???

Mom : uske wajah se kuch acha toh hoga nai (she spoke angrily)

Dad (he then looked at me) : y r u crying????

Me : papa wo mujhe mom school Jane we mana kr rhi hain (I spoke crying all the time )

Mom : phir bolo tm ..ap meri baat suniye ...usko padhai wagera mei interest nai hai ...ap iska name hatwa dijiye school se

(How can she speak like that)
Me : nai papa..I will study I'm studying ...

Mom : Nandini ek or thapad padega ab gussa mt dilao... (She roared) n then she narrated everything to papa

Dad : tmara bilkul padhne Ka man nai hai na???...kyu hmlogo KO itna pareshaan krti ho... Nai padhna hai boldo ... Padhna hai ya nai???... BOLO (he also shouted )

Mom : jao upar tm aj school nai jaogi ... Jao

Me : mom papa plz...ESA mt Karo...plz aj meri performance hai ...plz let me go ( I literally begged with tears flowing all the time...BT they dint listen...)

Mom : Robin (she shouted) aj Nandini school nai jaegi car ander krdo

Me : mo...(BT I was cut in between by papa)

Pa : upar jao...ek baar mei baat samjh nai ati (he said with eyes spitting fire)

(N I ran upstairs I cried cried n cried in my room how can they do that to me...aj meri performance thi... How can they do that mom needs meri Good Morning ka jawab bhi nai diya... She turned my morning to the worst morning...y god y...mere saath esa kyu????...ap bhi jante hona I study...I do both Tue things then mere saath esa kyu kiya apne?????... Y...n I kept crying hugging my knees sitting in the carpet of my room beside my bed )


Writer's POV :

Chaand Bi came to Nandini 's room after 1hr with the food n saw her sleeping in the floor hugging her knees... Tears dried in her face... This made her eyes moist

Chaand Bi : Ya khuda... Iss bachi ko tune bachoan se sirf dard diya hai... Kitni raatein royi hai jitni raatein tadpi hai ... Aj tk meri bachi ko wo pyaar nai mila...Maine boht koshish ki lekin hun to main ek Naukar hi... Aey..mere khuda Rehem kr...
(She prayed n closed the room )

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Hey guys sorry I told I'll update yesterday bt cudnt cz of some network isuues...
BT now here I am wid the chappy my xams now will start so don't expect ny updates...
I'll update only after 25th Feb or maybe in between let's see..
If I get time...

So now coming to the update/... Hope u lyked it
Manik will be coming soon!!!!
Now shower me with ur comments n likes!!

All the critism welcomed!!!!
If u want to ask something or suggest something u r most welcomed!!!

Stay Happie Stay Blessed
Okay Thanks Byee

Love Vidushi

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Posted: 9 years ago
#26
Loved your story...pls pls pls update soon
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Posted: 9 years ago
#27
amazing how can her parents b like this update soon take care ty for pm
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Posted: 9 years ago
#28
Made me cry. Why do her parents behave like this?
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Posted: 9 years ago
#29
Awesome update. Such an emotional one. Nandini's character was well penned. Her convo with her parents showed her hurtful state. Eagerly waiting for next update. Continue soon.thanks for pm
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ALL THE BEST FOR UR EXAMS. DO WELL😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
#30
It's amazing update dear...
But y her parents r like that!??
Thnxx for the pm..
Continue soon...
Looking forward to read further parts...
& good luck for ur exams dear..

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