MaNan TS - Planned Destiny! Chap 2(B) pg21/26th Feb - Page 2

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Posted: 9 years ago
#11
Very nice prolouge
beautifully written
looking forward for it
continue soon
take care
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Posted: 9 years ago
#12
Well its a one shot but still I felt like its a bit similar to the story my world's king by musical tie
But I'm sure u must have a different concept and the situation
So do write further
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Posted: 9 years ago
#13
Ofcourse u should continue...
Wl b waitng fr it
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Posted: 9 years ago
#14
Plzz continue soon...and do pm me plzz...
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hi start seems to be good , it might turn intresting , but romantic relation between student n teacher somehow looks bit odd .If Manik is just mentor its fine then in case let Nandu not adress him sir .exce0t for this i think iy would be intresting one.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Chap 1 (A):

In a dark room

Manik was sitting in his room with his guitar & was thinking about his life. Why his life was not normal like others? Why he was kept devoid of any love? Didn't he deserve happiness, love, care in his life? Even after being the hearthrob of millions of fans, even after getting soo much love by his fans he still craved for LOVE in his life. The Love which would fill his emptiness, the love which would give him all the happiness. Although he showed attitude, he was arrogant but deep down he felt like this world is full of selfish people & no one cares about anyone!!

His father had died when he was 5yrs old. His mother Nyonika had broken after her husbands death. Although she loved Manik alot but after such a loss she could never recover from it so she always keeps herself busy in her business. But she always had a check on Manik- what he is doing? What he wants? When he cries? When he is lonely?
All of it...but never had the courage to go to him & say that 'Manik I love you & I'm sorry!! I'll always be there for you!!'

All these thoughts were broken by Cabir who entered his room.
Cabir "Oyee pankaj udas!! Kya jab dekho tab muh latka ke baitha hota hai...kabhi to iss bechare ki madat kar"😭

Manik "Nautanki band kar aur bata kya kiya madhubala ne?? Ya phir tune?"

Cabir "Haww Manik tu mera dost hai ya uska...jab bhi apni problem lekar tere paas aata hoon to humesha tu uski hi side leta hai...dekhli teri dosti!!" (Wiping fake tears)

Manik "Main kya karu tera Cabir?? Seriously kitna pakata hai tu...madhubala ka kitna gehra asar ho raha hai tere dimaag par."

Cabir "Hehe!! Woh toh meri madhubala hai hi aisi..ekdam item"😉

Manik "Whatever!!"

Cabir "Acha chal ab bata kya soch raha tha??"

Manik "About my life! Which is nothing but completely useless, empty. Pata nahi kabhi koi mujhse pyaar karne wala milega bhi ya nahi"

Cabir "Manik dekh Destiny has everthing planned. Ofcourse tere liye bhi koi to hogi hi to tujhe selflessly pyaar karegi. Tu tension mat le. I'm there na main dhoond ke launga teri laila😉

Manik hugged Cabir & said "Cabir yaar!! Thankyou so much. Ek tu hu hai jiske saath main sirf Manik banke baath kar sakta hu...warna toh sab..."

Cabir "Achaa chod woh sab..abhi madhubala ko pata chala na ki tu phirse sad hai to pata nahi konsa drama karegi tujhe manane ke liye. Isilye mere bhai apna mood thik karo aur chalo hum bahar jaa rahe hai"

Manik smiled on this & they got ready & went out for some fun!!

Manik had his brother his best friend Cabir with whom he shared all his worries. Cabir never complained about it infact he used to feel his pain. He nevr judged Manik & stood by his side through thick & thin!! Cabir always tries to bring Manik out of this darkness but everytime he fails to do so. He also knew that Nyonika loves Manik alot. But none of them tried to talk to each other. Both mother-son duo was equally stubborn.

Cabir was in a relationship with Navya. He loved her alot. He had shared evrything about Manik with her but also had took a promise from her to not disclose it to anyone. Apart from this Navya & Manik also shared a special bond of brother-sister. Navya could see the loneliness in Maniks life. She also suggested Manik to give a try to a relationship but he never felt like.

About relationship,Manik had nevr ever been in a relationship. Many girls used to throw themselves on him but he never gave attention to anyone coz he knew some were after him for his money while some due to his charms. He waited for that Ms. SPECIAL ONE to enter his life.



In an isolated place


A girl was sitting in her room & crying badly. She was alone in her house. There was no one to look after her. She was studying in SPACE academy which is the best for musicians. But as her financial condition was weak she used to work in an orpanage.

As she was too drowned in pool of tears suddenly the loud tone of her ringtone brought her back to reality. She picked up her phone.

"Helloo nandu kaha hai yaar tu?? Kabse phone try kar rahi hu tera?? Tu thik to hai naa??"

Yes she was Nandini Murthy!!

Nandini "Mukti main bas nikal hi rahi thi & tu chinta mat kar main theek hoon. Woh bas mera phone room me tha aur main hall mein thi isilye.."

Mukti sensed from her voice that she was not well.

Mukti "Achaa ok !! Par rehne de aaj colg nahi hai... aaj vaise bhi holiday hai..bhul gayi naaa. Aur abhi main tere ghar aa rahi hu"

Nandini panicked as when she will see her in such a state then she'll get tensed so she said "Aah..woh..mukti ghar...ghar mat aa...mujhe kuch kaam hai toh main...main bahar jaa rahi hu"

Mukti " Nandu mujhe kuch nhi pata main aa rahi hoon bass" with this she disconnected the call.

Nandini "Mukti..Muku..sun toh...kaat diya...uff aiyapaa ab kya karu" she said looking upwards making a cute pout.

After some time bell rang & Nandini opened the door. She was shocked to see Navya along with Mukti.

"Navu??"

"Haan jii main..kyu?? Main nahi aa sakti muku ke saath??"

"Nahi aisa nahi hai...woh to main bass.."

Mukti "Achaa ok chal ab andar to aane de"

Nandini "Ohh haa sorry come"

The trio went inside & settled on the couch. Nandini went to the kitchen to get some water for them. After she came both started their interrogation as they had already noticed her red puffy eyes which clearly shows she had been crying.

Navya "Nandu...kyu tum abhi bhi apne aap ko takleef de rahi ho?"

Nandini was shocked with this sudden question so she covered up "Navya kya bol rahi ho tum?? Aisa kuch nhi hai."

Mukti "Tu humse jhut nhi bop sakti yeh baat tu achese jaanti hai...toh koshish bhi mat kar"

Nandini started crying now as she could no longer hide her emotions from her two best friends. While sobbing "Main kya karu mukti...woh..woh..aadmi aaj bhi...muj...mujhe chain se jeene nahi deta. Us...usne aaj...mujhe call kiya...aur kaha ki...ki main music chod du...warna woh...wohh..." she couldn't complete her sentence & started crying badly. Mukti & Navya hugged her.

Mukti got angry & said "That jerk! Main use chodungi nahi...uski himmat kaise hui...aur tune bhi hume nhi bataya nandu Kyu haar baar tu akeli sab kuch sehna chahti hai?? Kya tu hume apna nhi manti??"

Navya "Haa nandu mukti sahi keh rahi hai..hum dono hai naa tumhare saath aur tum kaise bhool jati ho tumhare do do bodyguard jaise bhai ko??" She said dramatically & nandu giggled a little due to which MukYa got relieved a little.

Nandini "Sholly Muku...Sholly Navu...I promise aage se main har baat tum dono se share karungi..paka..Nandu promise"

MukYa smiled on her childish behaviour which they couldnt resist. So going all Aww! over her they took her in a bone crushing hug.

After breaking the hug Navya said "Nandu tujhe pata hai destiny is all planned. Aur tu dekhna tere liye bhi ek aisa ladka bana hoga jo tujhe selflessly pyaar karega. Aur woh jaldihi teri jindagi mein aayega."

Mukti & Navya were Nandinis bestest friends. They were aware of her cruel past & could sense her pain. They were always there for her when she needed them. It was the NavNiTi bond which could never be broken!! Till eternity!!



Hogaya! Kaisa laga batana mujhe...aapke comments se hi mujhe pata chalega ki aage likhu ke nahi. So jaldi jaldi lambi comments karna.
Thankyou!!
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Posted: 9 years ago
#17
Shit...I am so sorry I completely forgot to comment ...
Sorry. .
It is really a nyc concept. .
Really excited for next
Do update soon
Waiting eagerly
Thanks for pm
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Posted: 9 years ago
#18
Nice part
continue soon
thanks for pm
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#19
Amazing and very nice concept...
Its really very interesting...
I like it...
Looking forward to it...
Continue soon...
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Posted: 9 years ago
#20
nice concept
looking forward to see what was
nandu past
and manik deserves happiness na
did they knew each other as navya is a common friend na??
continue soon
waiting for the next part

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