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Posted: 9 years ago
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Sorry I can't read hindi that much so have no idea what's it's saying
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: vickysinghalwal



hey dear
1 st thankx yr for comment and support
and 2nd
i only watch MTV ky2 bs in Indian TV series rather than i watch Hollywood TV series
and i got this idea from SUPERNATURAL Hollywood TV series
thnx once again😊


ohh okk...bt still thnx fr makin me cherish those vampires agn:)
n welks:) i love supernatural stories so wud keep lovin n supporting d story:)
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Shahnazzie101

Sorry I can't read hindi that much so have no idea what's it's saying



if u don't understand hindi then how u watch ky2
that is also coming in hindi

or from next time vese bhi i m writing in both hindi an english
i hope u don't hv any pro.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Toshna_1522


ohh okk...bt still thnx fr makin me cherish those vampires agn:)
n welks:) i love supernatural stories so wud keep lovin n supporting d story:)



u wlcm yr
all the boys like adventures jaha tk me janta hu
today i will post new part😛
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Update soon yaar I can't wait more. Superb story good start update fast & PM me.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: dhillon90

Interstng prologue
Continue soon



thanku
today part1😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: bkzha

Update soon yaar I can't wait more. Superb story good start update fast & PM me.



thanku ji
okay i will pm u😊
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Posted: 9 years ago
#58



i know i am very late

sorry for that guys

plz forgive me

here i come for part 1

plz read it and tell me how is it


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Thanku 1st all of u so so much love, u guys give me a very good response from my previous part,

i specialy want t thanku those u like and comment my prolouge so much


rockstarlover, pratidhwani, simran_walia, shailikajparekh, 05091122, Vidhiarora1, MADHVIMADHU, Rageshparamu, Cuteprincess6, nusrat300895, Snehasn, kitkat5756, Myra_parthholic, sadiya51, Hudah18, iqra286, manan_eku, A12609z, butterfly7, HTA111, Angel_manan, Lovelylav7, sharon.babu, piyu008, Toshna_1522, cutypie04, dhillon90, kimnana, Danny92, AMAR_LOVE, -ChitraRocking-, MysticRiver, rima4ever,

thanku all of u


NOTE- i know many of u have problem from by hindi words so i make it in english
i hope now u guys don't have any problem, if their is any tell me directly i will give solution promise

now read part 1 and tell me how is it


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Part 1



ETNA TIME KYU LAG RAHA HAI JALDI SE NICHE LEKE AAO USSE, MUHARAT KA TIME NIKLA JA RHA HAI


They hear this and all the girls inside nandins room get scared to hear angry voice of their boss (SARDAR)


Nandini didn't ready for this she is trying to escape from their grip , she is praying to her ayyii appaa again and again to save her life from these animals


Then the girls who came inside the room make her ready forcefully in a white cloth (u can imagine nandini when we wear white cloth on New Year when her dress got burn).


Tears are beaming inside her eyes she is so helpless. She is praying to god send someone for her help but don't know god have other plans for her.


She thought that today is her last day. She will die for her dads cruel work, he will make his power more strong and try to rule the world after it. He will make full world of darkness.


She is thinking to make his plan unsuccessful because she doesn't to end this world because of her dad and somewhere because of her. Because she is also part of it na her dad make his power scarifies her daughter life.


She is looking here and there to search something. Suddenly she saw that there is washroom and whose window is open because its night time and where nandini is living this time is a drak place. And ther order of their boss to those girls to make bath of nandini in the presence of light of moon. So they open the window for her bath and they forgot to close it back.


She saw a ray of hope that she can save her life if she runs from that window somehow.


Nandini turns towards the girls and said


Nandini: I want to go to washroom its emergency.


Girls: no u wants going anywhere, u didn't here boss angry voice. If we are late 5 min more then he will kill all of us, and vese bhi u have to die today itself, u can control sometime then u have to never go fr anything and laughs evils with each other


Nandini got hurt by their words very much but she said


Nandini: I want go now itself, I can't control it anymore if u guys didn't want to I will do pee inside this cloth and then u will make to wear me another one and that will take more time rather than using a washroom for some emergency.


Girls: (horrified) NOOO, u can't do pee inside this, u go but come past we don't want to die today in place of u.


Nandini: yeah I will and goes inside the washroom.


Nandini feel that her hope is winning somehow.


She goes inside and saw that her cloths which she is wearing before is laying down on the Flore and she saw that there is a wiper all so placed whose handle is made by steel and very thick.


She closed the door of washroom and turn on the water she took that wiper and block the door by it then she changes her cloths in previous cloths. Then she saw that the window is high and her height is low how will she reach there. Then she looks in washroom and saw hanger she took It and knot it with her white cloth.


Then she threw it in that window but that hanger didn't reach to window.


All this work make some noise and the girls are getting restless because from last 5 min nandini is inside the room. And when they hear the noise inside they said


Girls: nandini what is noice of it?


nandini hear the voice from inside and scare but she clam herself and said


nandini: I got trip due to this hanger fall down but I am fine coming in 5 min


Girls: okay come soon we r getting late and they take sigh of relief.


They don't know what is up to nandini and what wonder is waiting for them.


Nandini to herself


Nandini: u can do this for you nandini. If u will not rum from this window then u have to die from the hand of your dad


She saw bucket and got idea


She took that bucket and put below the window and climbs up upon it and then threw that hanger and this time it is not come back. It got fit between the wall and window.


Then she climb up on the window and by that cloths and saw that other side open inside the forest and she can hear the voice from inside the forest of animals.


She took that cloth and put it outside she climb down from window to the other side and but didn't reach till ground so she jump from their and fall down on the ground.


Her ankle got sprain due to jump and she can't move. Tears are coming out from her mouth and noise of crying come from her mouths. She place her hand on her mouth so that she can contol her cry otherwise she will again trap inside the darkness.


Inside the room girls notice that 5 min is over and nandini didn't come outside they go near gate of washroom and put their ear on gate but can't hear from inside only one voice coming from inside


Voice of water flowing


They called her name


Girls: nandini


No answer


Again in high tone: nandini come outside we are getting late


But again got no response


They got scared and horrified because if something happen to her then they all die.


They again and again knocking the gate in high pitch and shouting voice


Nandini nandini nandini


Outside the window when nandini hears these voices she got scared and she thought that if she will not run this time than she will die that for sure


She makes herself stand somehow but her feet don't help her, tears are coming out from her eyes.


Then she start run with that pain to save her life.


When she is running she is without sleepers and her feet get more hurt due to stones and pieces of glasses blood is coming out from her feets but she is running without any care because she has to save her life.


On the other side nandinis dad and boss of all the demons are waiting and also very much angry because girls are taking so much time in coming out side


And the time of scarifies nandini in front of the god of darkness is start and he knows if this work is not done in this time then it will opposite effect and he recalls her wife's words


JIS LADKI KO TUM MAR K APNI SAKTIYA BADANA CHAHTE HO WO LADKI HI TUMHARA ANT KAREGI. AUR YE MERE DIL SE NIKLI HUYI SACH BAT HAI


He got horrified suddenly and said to guards


BOSS: guards go and check y these girls are taking so much time. And take them out now itself. In which condition I don't care, go now he ordered


Guards: ji sardaar(BOSS)


Guards went inside and saw that all the girls are pale and horrified and banging the door of washroom they ask


Guards: y r u taking so much time, sardaar is angry with u, now come nowitself other wise today is last day of u all


Girls: what can we do, nandini went inside the washroom but didn't come out till. She didn't response us, we don't know what happen her, we have she is fine otherwise we will be died


Guards: open the door then


Girls: it is locked from inside


Guards went inside running


Guards: sardar sardar sardar


Sardar: what happen, I said u to take them out, y u come alone angrily


Guards: they joins hand and said sardar nandini bitiya is inside the washroom but didn't come out till yet and she didn't response our questions


Sardar: nandini u don't know what r u doing he said angrily and went inside the room of nandini


He saw that the room is locked and nandini is not coming outside till.


He went near and said


Sardar: nandini come out otherwise consequences is not good for u but didn't got any response


Sardar: nandini u wait and watch that now what I will do with u.


He orderd: take the spare key from my room


A guard goes and come with key and opens the door


But the door is still not opens


They saw that door is blocked from inside


Now they all got horrified because they don't know what is upto nandini


Sardar: break the got dam it door. In angry high pitch voice


Guards: they push the door and it breaks in 5 6 attempts


When they all went inside they all got shocked to not find nandini inside


Then they all looks everywhere and notice that


They pipe of water is on and water is flowing and saw a bucket under the window and window also open and the light of moon is coming inside.


And then they all saw that a white cloth is also hanging that window.


Now it is clear to them all that she runs from the window.


They all don't know what they will do


And they all waiting for the outburst of their sardar and looking at his face


Sardar from a very long time looking towards window and then suddenly


Sardar: NANDINIII


In a very high and loud and angry and many emotion full voice


All the guards and girls are got scared by this angry voice and waiting for consequences


Suddenly sardar turns towards the girls angryily and his eyes become red and fire is coming outside from it


They all are looking horrified towards him and they girls are most scares they all know today is last day from them


They all


Girls: sardar plz forgive us, we don't know she will run, she said she want to go for pee otherwise she will to in pee when u will do that POOJA


But sardar didn't listen them and The the fire from from his eyes reach to that girls


Suddenly all the girls are burning in fire and they all shouting


No no


Help help


Bachao bachho


And then they all got burnt inside they fire of anger


Then he looks towards his guards and


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PreCap Part 2 : Maniks Entry

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sorry guys in this chapter also i didn't give to maniks entry but i promise i will give in next chapter, i have thought his entry in a very special way i know u guys will it,

so for know about it


u have to give me response

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Edited by vickysinghalwal - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Res...
Will unres at night...

Lo ji raat hogayi so time to unres

UNRES...

Update was super amazing... Finally wid lot of difficulty nandu ran away... Thnk God..
Oh god bechaari ko leg mey sprain hogaya bt listening to noise frm inside she somehow managed to run..as the leg pain was less painful then getting murdered by her own father...!!
Seriously her father naa kyaa kahu main unkaa.. He is damn cruel.. A big time monster, evil, devil, shaitaan..
. Jst to be powerful he is ready to sacrifice his own daughter...
He killed the girls by spiiting fire frm his eyes.. Interesting...
I thought aap manik ki entry karaa dogey.. Bt koi ni will wait till nxt update for his entry..
Ek baari manik ko nandu ki life mey aajaaney do Sardaar ji fir dekhnaa kyaa haal kartaa hain woh aapkaaa...

Ur story is damn interesting vai... I jst loved it frm my bottom of the heart..
Its exciting n interesting...

Continue soon n agar late huye naa toh agli baari chotu saa comment dungi.. Soch lenaaa..
Update accha thaa.. Aisaa kuch likh kar vaag jaaungi..😉

Keep the gud work vai
Stay blessed...
Edited by _Myrah_ - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Awsm update
Eagerly waiting for next update 😊
Cont soon...

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