The Dawn of Twilight- A MaNan OS

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Posted: 10 years ago
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Let me start with a fair warning, I wrote this OS on my flight today, so I think it can be improved, but it was a concept that came to me after Mon's epi


It was 7pm, oh, how she loved this time of day, enticing in its slow dance towards midnight.
She loved sitting by the small window, that overlooked the rose gardens surrounding the house.Their fresh fragrant bloom always took her back to the past, those days of gay reckless abandon. She was 17, when she first met him, a dew-eyed, rosy cheeked small town girl whose head was filled with dreams of a normal life, he was a snobbish, elitist boy for whom the world had no rules.
It was almost hate at the first sight, she thought, a hate that was all powering in its passion. Oh how they had clashed,clashed like two opposing forces that could only repel each other at that point of time. How had it turned to love?, the all consuming love of their lives, a love that seems to have even transcended death.
He had gone five years back, in typical Manik style, in a blaze of sudden quick death at the twilight of dawn. Even in death Manik Malhotra was a showman. " Nandu" he had whispered, " Fireflies, so beautiful", a beautiful smile lining his face and then just like that he was gone, taking the dark and her light with him.

The little girl skipped into the room with her little guitar strapped onto her back. " Nandu Dadi. look at me, Mein hoon Monster" she ordered imperiously. The old woman smiled, her wrinkles extending across her face as she did. She is all Manik, she chuckled, the imperious tone, the confident "I'll take on the world" smirk. "Ayyappa", the little girl exclaimed, "I cant get this song right Dadi", a small frown now lining her rosy cheeks. Nandu's frown ,that's what Manik had called it. He loved teasing her about it . " all you did was frown at me Nandu" he had laughed as he recounted all times she frowned at him during their initial days. " And now all I want you to do is frown at me", he had chuckled loudly, earning a disapproving smirk from her that made him double over in laughter.

The sudden buzzing, and the room had lit up, a vision of golden lights hovering around her. She felt him before she saw him, after all her heart had skipped a beat, he still made her feel like that young 17 year old from SPACE. Time had passed by slowly in the last five years but atlast , the fireflies had come for her after all, come to take her home finally. She smiled into the darkness, a radiant smile of joy, one that could have illuminated the sun and more. "Fireflies, so beautiful" she whispered and just like that she was gone, gone into the dawn of twilight.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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"Fireflies, so beautiful!"
That was so sweet and cute Catty! <3 it!

* alright, alright I'm going to sleep now. 😆*
Edited by miss_bennet - 10 years ago
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Originally posted by: miss_bennet

"Fireflies, so beautiful!"

That was so sweet and cute Catty! <3 it!



I was imagining them growing old together and beyond😭
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Tears well in my eyes CC!! Love that seemed to transcend death! Beautiful piece ❤️
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Posted: 10 years ago
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A beautiful OS👏

I really liked the concept of the story and how the fireflies yet again play a role
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Posted: 10 years ago
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So beautiful... Such a beautiful os dear. It is so serene, so divine! Nandu a dadi eh? And dear Manik... 'Fireflies... So beautiful' this was so sweet. Fireflies again...i'm starting to luv them. Altogether a wonderful piece of writing!
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Oh...oh.

OH.

When the part came of Manik sudden death, I cursed silently. Death used to be my favorite subject, I loved using my words to separate lovers at a young age, be it by the eternal distance of death or putting in different corners of the world. But reading it here, just the mere mention of a Nandini without Manik...my heart broke.

God, Catty. This was beautiful. beautifully thought, beautifully written. A wonderful, wonderful read. He didn't just go..he lived a full life with her and went. It took her five years but she was there where he was. And the fireflies were with them. Just...wow. I loved it, simply put, I loved it.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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gosh this was beautiful Catty
Manik and Nandini's bond with the fireflies..I m into tears now😭
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Posted: 10 years ago
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@CC - read this just now. If there were moist eyes, I so blame you.😆
So beautiful and honest👏. I just fireflies, his death - numbing and uplifting. You wrote love here.
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Posted: 10 years ago
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Mind blowing Caty
It's so touching!

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