Dedicated to Sharmi - That Fuming Night

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Posted: 17 years ago
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This one is especially for Sharmi. Sharmi, on your special request, here is a narration of the night that left us all totally devastated and fuming. and left many people believing Dev forced himself on her. here is a version of it that seemed what shreya missed to show in the serial. what to say, they are no good to handle any show.

We start from where Dev holds Kaajjal's hand while she is leaving and she frees her hand from his rudely.

As soon as Kaajjal throws away his hand and frees hers, Dev feels as if his life has come to a stand still. His breathing stops and he could not believe his senses. 'yeh haath, jis ko thamnay kay liyay tum itna beqarar thi Kaajjal, aj tumhain us ka ehsaas bhi pasand nahi. Koee inti jaldi kaisay badal sakta hai .. kaisay.' He closes his eyes, and then opens them. His eyes rests on his cold dejected hand and tears are almost ready to fall.

"ab tumhain meray haath ka ehsaas bhi nahi pasand Kaajjal," he asks in a broken tone, almost lifeless

"nahi," Kaajjal is in no mood of seriousness. Looks like she wants to ignite Dev to make him show her his wildness and madness. A side, which she loves. She has always loved the angry Dev, who holds her, grabs her, and marks her his with just one touch. However, her 'nahi,' came as an explosion to Dev's ears. He could not believe what he just heard, but after what he saw today, he had less doubts on what she was saying,

"pooch sakta hoon kuin," he asks in a harsh tone, almost reaching a point where Kaajjal wants him to be.

"pata nahi," once again Kaajjal shows her indifference, wanting Dev to hold her, grab her, and make her his in the wildest possible way. And Dev is done taking this nonsense. He can't take her indifference any more. He can't take her attitude any more. He can't bear the thought of her touching another man, or even thinking about someone else. He instantly grabs her arms and turns her around, almost pulling her towards her.

"Dev," Kaajjal looks at him, but there is no surprise, because this is why she had been showing all this indifference. His possessive touch on her arms, his passionate look, and his heated contact with her body sends electric waves down her spine. She is waiting for him to crush her to him, she is waiting for him to throw her on the bed and love her, show her his madness and his nee to love her. She is still thinking, when Dev's question brings her to a standstill.

"kuin kay tum kisi aur say pyar karti ho," Dev roars like a leopard and Kaajjal goes blank. 'What is he talking about, main kisi aur say pyar. What the hell,' her mind shouts,

"Dev tum kya keh rahay ho," she babbles, but it was too late. Dev was already at a point of no return. For past few days, he had wanted to talk to her soooo bad, but she never gave him a chance. Even a moment ago, he wanted to talk, just listen to her saying one more time that she loves him, but in vain. And now he is in no mood of listening or talking.

"kya wo mujh say zyada acha hai Kaajjal," Kaajjal is trying to say something but Dev roars again, leaving her breathless. He pulls her to him, almost crushing her,

"bolo Kaajjal, jawab do. Kaun si kami reh gaee … jo wo puri karta hai aur main nahi kar sakta," Dev is speaking without thinking, he is mad crazy and burning with jealousy.

"Dev, yeh tu kya kar rahay ho, choro," Kaajjal wiggles in his arms.

"no, I wont," Dev shouts, "I will show you what I can give you Kaajjal, and trust me, you will end up begging for more." He takes the pallo of her sari off her shoulder and pulls it back, almost twisting Kaajjal around a couple of times. Her sari is off and he throws it on the ground.

"Dev, what is wrong with you," Kaajjal mutters, but deep down in her heart she wants Dev to keep showing her this madness. She had ignited this fire in him ever since he entered the room. She did not answer his any questions right, only to make him angry and go wild with wanting her, and she is getting exactly that. Her heart smiles, but her only concern, Dev words, 'kuin kay tum kisi aur say pyar karti ho, kya wo mujh say zyada acha hai Kaajjal' these are the only words that are hunting her.

Once again, Dev grabs her, his arms around her waist, crushing her to him fiercely,

"jawab do Kaajjal, wo tumhain kya day sakta hai jo main nahi dai sakta?" Dev says in a hateful tone.

"kaun? Dev kya keh rahay ho?" Kaajjal is clueless, but Dev doesn't care. He throws her on the bed. She gets hold of her and looks up at him,

"Dev please," but Dev ignores her pleas and moves forward. He bends on her, grabbing both her hands, and pushing them back on the bed. Kaajjal is pinned down, breathless and afraid. Afraid because Dev is talking about another man, what is he talking about? She doesn't have an answer to that.

Dev is looking at her with hate and anger, and Kaajjal's heart although beating hard at Dev's anger, is loosing control at his possessive touch. His touch is sending electric waves down her spine and she is loosing control.

This is till what we saw on TV. Although I added a little of my version, but till here we saw. Now the portion below is what we did not see, and I assume is what the scene meant to be like.

"Dev please," Kaajjal pleads, almost resisting

"nahi Kaajjal, nahi." Dev shouts, still pinning her beneath him. "main tumhain bataon ga pyar kaisay hota hai, aur tumhain itna deewana kar doon ga kay is kay baad tum sirf mujhay maango gi. Sirf mujhay, samjhi tum," Dev press her hands further more in the bed at the last two words. His words were said in anger, but they are working like an ecstasy pill on Kaajjal. Kaajjal is loosing control, seeing Dev in this possessive avatar. This is what she likes about this man, his anger and possessiveness. After all, she had known this side of him for a long time and has loved it as well.

Dev can take her right there and then, but he is holding back, just pinning her beneath him, but he doesn't move an inch. 'how can I touch her without her consent. I cannot get any closer than this unless Kaajjal agrees. I can't force myself on her.' his heart and mind shouts, and his senses comes back. 'I can't do this.' His minds starts working at the speed of light and his grip on her softens. Kaajjal immediately senses his loosening grip and holds her breath, 'no, I don't want you to stop Dev. No!!! Please love me, don't leave me like a fish out of water. Please. Love me Dev, just love Me.' but Dev loosen his grip and starts to get up. Disgusted with his own self and her. But Kaajjal holds his hand, and doesn't let him get up completely. He almost falls back on her. Kaajjal is pinned beneath him completely, and the weight of his body drives her crazy with wanting more.

The moment Dev falls on her, their eyes meet, and the spark sparkles one more time. Dev finds the eyes of the same girl he had loved soooo madly. He sees the same love in Kaajjal's eyes, the same desire he had seen on the wedding night. And he starts loosing control. His hatred was intense, but this moment was too precious. Kaajjal is looking up at him, eyes locked in his, and begging her with her eyes to love her completely. 'How can I not love her? How?' Dev heart whispers and he feels himself flowing along the current of love and desire.

Dev is still thinking, when Kaajjal speaks,

"Show me Dev! Show me the madness you wanted to show me. Show me what you meant when you said, 'main tumhain bataon ga pyar kaisay hota hai, aur tumhain itna deewana kar doon ga kay is kay baad tum sirf mujhay maango gi.' " her voice is seductive, her body is begging him to love her. She lifts her hands and gently caresses his lips with her fingers.

"Why do you care Kaajjal?" Dev asks in a broken tone, almost giving into the sensation of the moment, "why?"

"Because I want you." She pulls him to her, "now," she touches her lips to his gently, "with all the passion and wildness you were showing a minute ago. I want it all." she hold him tightly and closes her eyes. Lifting her lips a little, giving him all rights to claim her any way he wants.

Dev is confused. However, his love for her once again claims him, and he is lost in the depths of his love.

"I love you Kaajjal," Dev whispers, and claims her lips. Kaajjal responds madly, as if she was a fish and Dev was her water, and they are lost in a passionate moment where love is the mastermind of every gesture.

Edited by thesaint148 - 17 years ago

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Sharmii thumbnail
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Haiiiiiii......


Thank you for dedicating the scene to me... 👏 👏 👏 But more than that...You write sooo beautifully...Be it any scene any chracter...

WOW!!! 😳 😳 😳

And also I think I watch this serial for three reason..
APu
Kaajjal sarees
and best of all Kashish di's Fan Fics!!! 👏
Between I love to see dev and kaajjal from your eyes...Cause you truly love them!!! 😳
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Posted: 17 years ago
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👏 thanks kashu....you gave it a good interpretation...and we all hope thats what it was....really hope so...

once again thanks for a enchanting description of the scene ...i agree sharmii...no on lile kashu to read a bittersweet DPS- anger and hate , love and passion 😳
you have done it again...sweetoo...

but i still feel he did it with hate...maybe there was passion and kajus helpless desire...whatever...which gave in....howver...the next day devs eyes looked...dull...with hatred...he wnated kaju dead...no two 😭 ways, he hd gone beyond that point called sanity....that woman had driven him..there...and he went along....due to his own...dark self...choosing to believe shivansh...remember...guys evrybody has a choice...dev had one too - to believe shivansh or not...his own jealousy, the overhwelming evidence seen thru his jealous eyes, his possessive ness making him obsessive ....and forgetting the 10 months of what he felt for Kaju...forgetton everything....

perhaps part of his love dies when NTmom did...remember the etxremes he went thru and the pther half now...

maybe all that is left is a cold ruthless, 😭 shell filled with bitter hatred, acid 😭 😭 😭 ...and in the end he will go back to his first love PAyal 😳 ....

for the track he is wlaking on can only lead to destruction. 😕 ..adi is dead, kaju second...unless he gets there on time...and he will be in jail for their murders... 😕 .unless he sees yhe CD first like bobby did in humraaz...maybe they do a special preview in prison 😆 😆

i dont think we will see the old DPS back again...

DEv-kaajjal story is the end...
sammy 😕
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Aww Kashish u r a sweetheart dear 😳 😳 ...how brilliantly u hv explained this scene 👏 ...I wish u were the screenplay and dialogue writer of this serial 😳 😳 ...I m sure this is exactly what the makers would hv thought of showing 😛 ..that in the beginning kaajjal might hv felt the pain as dev was tightly grabbing his hands 😳 ...but later in the heat of the moment she must hv definitely submitted herself into the wild arms of Dev 😳 😳 ...and also kajal was in a complete naughty mood that day 😉 which indicated that she was actually waiting for dev to get wild and make love to her 😛 😛 ...I really love this saree taking out business of dev in most of the FFs by you,Sammy and Autumn 😉 😆 😛 ....Now how about a beach house tabela drama narration Kashish 😛 😛
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: Sharmii

Haiiiiiii......


Thank you for dedicating the scene to me... 👏 👏 👏 But more than that...You write sooo beautifully...Be it any scene any chracter...

WOW!!! 😳 😳 😳

And also I think I watch this serial for three reason..
APu
Kaajjal sarees
and best of all Kashish di's Fan Fics!!! 👏
Between I love to see dev and kaajjal from your eyes...Cause you truly love them!!! 😳

Tee Hee...I watch them for more reasons than you do...

Apu

Dev

Devu

Kashish's FF Ramayan style katha's........😉

And free for all Dart-rangers.....😆

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Posted: 17 years ago
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Kashish.......meri jaan....I know how I will keep you distracted from Devu...

On your days with Devu...I will ask you to write lambe-lambe FF's and then whisk your Devu away..... 😆

I know that you know that we all at the forum know.....

you are the BEST!!!!!!! 😉

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Posted: 17 years ago
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the scene should be exactly like this ......................a v v v v great job!!!!!!!i loved it!!!! 😊 😊
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Kashish jannu very good! 👏 👏 👏

G88 details! 😳 Good job! 😳
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Verry well written! Great job Kashu!!!! 👏

Zareen.
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Posted: 17 years ago
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Originally posted by: Sharmii

Haiiiiiii......


Thank you for dedicating the scene to me... 👏 👏 👏 But more than that...You write sooo beautifully...Be it any scene any chracter...

WOW!!! 😳 😳 😳

And also I think I watch this serial for three reason..
APu
Kaajjal sarees
and best of all Kashish di's Fan Fics!!! 👏
Between I love to see dev and kaajjal from your eyes...Cause you truly love them!!! 😳

awww my dear sharmi, thankyou sooo much honey. it was just for you, oon ur special request. i hope u liked it.

thank you for this amazing compliment, "I love to see dev and kaajjal from your eyes...Cause you truly love them!!!" i really love the and so it hurts even hard to see this nonsense on tv.

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