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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: india05

wow kashish.. u have written this part so beautifully.. I hope the creatives think in the sam elines and make it happen.. 👏 ..Please continue soon..
May be u can add the cliff scene as the climax inthe next part..

Kaju will just run out and not listen to Adi also and she will run towards a cliff.. Here in the hospital adi will explain the memeory loss and feel guilty and apologize to Dev and tell Dev jao apne kaajjal ko Roklo.. and our DPS will run the marathon and scream for kaajjal and the famous meeting point where Kaju will think Dev ne muj par kya ilzaam lagaya..Mujhe jeene ka haq nahi hai and just when she is about to jump (jyoti's famous suicidegiri)..DPS will hold her back.. 😳 ..
Just some tips for ur next part 😆 😆 😆

hehehhehe, thanks shanti for wonderful tips 😊 dont worry i wont disappoint you. its going to be this and more 😉

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Posted: 18 years ago
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once again great job kashish 👏 👏
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Posted: 18 years ago
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OH MY GOSH Kashish!! that was jus mindblowing, wonderful n n..fantabulous gurl!!!👏 ..lol..ohh i m jus out of words n totally speechless...
Now Shreya people shud really hire u...im serious!!...
plzz do continue..im waiting anxiously..

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Posted: 18 years ago
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wow...you just gave two very beautiful and well written episodes.......wow....just amazing......you have some great writing abilities.....

job well done 👏
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: Aliza*

OH MY GOSH Kashish!! that was jus mindblowing, wonderful n n..fantabulous gurl!!!👏 ..lol..ohh i m jus out of words n totally speechless...
Now Shreya people shud really hire u...im serious!!...
plzz do continue..im waiting anxiously..

Aliza my darling thankyou soo much for such lovely words. i am truly honored and excited to now write the next part. will post it by tomorrow, hopefuly.

hmmmm, lagta hai ab shreya people ko application day hi daity hoon 😉

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: Indian_girl_18

wow...you just gave two very beautiful and well written episodes.......wow....just amazing......you have some great writing abilities.....

job well done 👏

Thankyou Jessi, i am honored with your lovely words. 😊

Kashish

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Oh dear ... another beautiful post ... flowing with right words and emotions 👏 . I really hope sony guys takes your script and bring these scenes quickly rather than ragging us with Kajjals lost memory 😡 . We must take a stone and throw on her head so that she may regain her dumb memory which remembers only goats 🤢 🤢

Very well written Kashish . must say that you express things so well that i can actually picturize the whole situation . Pls pls give us the next post soon .

Have a great day my dear script writer and do give us scripts to cherish ( like you always do ) .

With millions of love & hugs , Roopa
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Posted: 18 years ago
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Originally posted by: roopa_s

Oh dear ... another beautiful post ... flowing with right words and emotions 👏 . I really hope sony guys takes your script and bring these scenes quickly rather than ragging us with Kajjals lost memory 😡 . We must take a stone and throw on her head so that she may regain her dumb memory which remembers only goats 🤢 🤢

Very well written Kashish . must say that you express things so well that i can actually picturize the whole situation . Pls pls give us the next post soon .

Have a great day my dear script writer and do give us scripts to cherish ( like you always do ) .

With millions of love & hugs , Roopa

Roopa darling, so u finally read. thanyou soo much hun, and i will update on friday afternoon (US Time)

ufff, dev ko jitna pain mila hai us say bohat kum hain yeh alfaz yar. bohat kam.

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Posted: 18 years ago
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Ok guys, this is the last part, when all confusions are over and sun is shinning bright again.

Part 3

"Get out Kaajjal," Dev almost shouts this time, the same DPS way; authoritative and commanding.

This brings sudden tears to Kaajjal, she sobs and runs from the room, but right then Aditya enters, for he has seen and heard everything, and he knew it's his time to play a role and mend broken relationships.

She almost bumps into him but holds herself. Aditya looks at her crying face and then at Dev, and Dev panics,'O God, now what will I tell him, why Kaajjal is crying. kahin Kaajjal ki izzat pay koee aanch na aa jayay. Mujhay apnay aap ko sambhalna ho ga.' Dev is still worried for Kaajjal and her honor. He bends his eyes to look away from Aditya.

"main andar aa sakta hoon." Aditya asks, still standing at the door.

"sure, come in." Dev looks up. Kaajjal has her eyes bent and waiting for Aditya to leave the way so she can step outside,

"aap aik minute andar aayain gi, mujhay aap donon say kuch baat karni hain." Aditya looks to Kaajjal. She looks up at Aditya and wonders once again, 'who is he?' She silently comes back in the room and stands next to the window.

"main kuch kehna chahta hoon Dev," Aditya starts. Dev gives him an inquisitive look.

"main nay aap logon ki baat sun li, I know I shouldn't have, but I did." Aditya looks at dev and then Kaajjal, and Dev's heart skips a beat. 'o God, now Aditya will come to know about me and Kaajjal, o Gannu bhaiyya apni Kaajjal ki izzat rakhiyay ga. Yeh us ka pati hai, aur meri wajah say in kay rishtay main koee darar aayay…. Is gunah say bacha laina mujhay Gannu bhaiyya.' Dev prays silently.

Kaajjal, is still wondering who he is and she speaks,

"Lek … lekin … aap hain kaun? main aap ko nahi janti, kya Dev aap ko jantay hain?" Kaajjal looks at Aditya and then Dev for some hint. And Dev feels as if the floor is slipping off his feet. 'what???????? What the hell is going on????' Dev is speechless.

"Kaajjal yeh tum kya keh rahi ho, yeh tumharay pati …" Dev stammers with words here.

"pati!!!!" Kaajjal gets a shock of her life. She looks at Aditya and then Dev, and then back to Aditya with eyes wide open and mouth almost open with shock and disbelief, "kaun hain aap?" she says in a fearful tone, and looks at Dev,

"Dev, main tu inhain janti bhi nahi. Mujhay nahi pata yeh kaun hain." And Dev panics at hearing this. 'ok if somebody doesn't tell me what is going on here, I will go insane.' His mind shouts.Aditya sees this disbelief on both their faces and thinks it as the right time to tell everything.

"yeh theek keh rahi hain Dev,"

"what" Dev's disbelief is shouting from his face, and Kaajjal, poor thing is just standing there wondering and trying to make sense of it all.

Aditya narrates the entire story to both of them. Dev couldn't believe his ears, and Kaajjal, she is in a state of shock. Her feet are getting weak, as if they won't support her body. She holds the nearby wall to support herself, but in vain, and as if her legs melted like jelly, she drops on the floor, taking support of the wall to hold her there. Dev can't bear this sight, for everything is crystal clear to him now. 'aur main nay Kaajjal ko itna bura bhalla keh diya, na jantay huyay kay wo khud kitni takleef main thi.' Dev's heart cries, 'aik baar phir main nay apni Kaajjal ko pehshannay main ghalti kar di,' and Dev's closes his eyes at this as if not able to tolerate his own mistakes.

And aout Aditya, Dev is in a midst of mixed emotions for him. on one hand he wants to thank him for saving Kaajjal, but on the other hand he wants to slap him hard for misleading Kaajjal into a fake relationship. There were soo many question's sooo many complains, however, right now the most important person is Kaajjal. 'I will deal with Aditya later, right now, I have to take care of Kaajjal,' He sees her breaking like this and steps down the bed, 'bas bohat hua, aaj yeh duri khatam ho kay rahay gi. Apni Kaajjal ko duniya ki sari khushian doon ga main. Har khushi …. ' Dev walks to her with a determined look and love in his eyes; for misconceptions were gone and he was able to see his love once again, sitting there, waiting for him to claim.

Kaajjal is still in a state of shock, 'I have lived with another man as his wife. Wife??? Aisa kaisay ho gaya. Kaisay? Main tu anjanay main bhi Dev ko dhoka nahi de sakti, phir yeh sab kaisay hwa???' Kaajjal is questioning her self, but she is not ready to forgive herself. 'itni bari ghalti, itna bara gunnah. Main nay Dev ko apna pati mana tha, phir kisi ghair kay saath aik chat kay neechay, itnay arsay …..' tears start rolling down her cheek. 'kaisa pyar tha mera? main nay Dev ko dekh kay bhi nahi pehchana. Har lamha takleef di, yahan tak kay meri shadi kisi aur say ……' she can't even bear the thought, she sobs, 'til til marta raha mera Dev, aur main kisi aur ki bahoon main …. Itna bara gunnah kaisay ho gaya mujha say …' she rests her head on the wall, 'kuin Gannu bhaiyya, kuin kiya aap nay aisa. Apni behan ki mohabbat pay itna bara ilzaam kaisay aanay diya aap nay. Gawah thay aap meri mohabbat ki pakeezgi kay, phir kuin Gannu bhaiyya. Is say tu behtar hota kay aao mujhay jaan say maar daitay. Par ab, main tu Dev ka samna bhi nahi kar paoon gi. Kaisay nazrain milaon gi us say … jis ko khuda bana kay pooja, ussi ko pehchannay say inkaar kar diya. Jis ki khushion ka liyay har lamha dua mangi, ussi ki khushian cheen leen.' Kaajjal's heart is shedding a zillion tears, her whole being is crying. Her tears are rolling at an unbelievable speed, as if they will drown the whole world today. 'main apnay aap ko maaf nahi kar sakti, kabhi nahi.' She is still lost in her stray of thoughts, when Dev bends and puts his hand on her shoulder,

"Kaajjal," he calls her with the same love, the same passion, the same feeling of belonging to each other. Kaajjal can sense it in his touch, can feel it in his every move, in his every breath, 'nahi, main Dev kay qabil nahi hoon …. Nahi' her mind shouts,

"mujahy pat chouo Dev, main tumharay qabil nahi hoon." And Kaajjal starts crying out loud. Dev heart is torn into pieces, for he can't see her cry like this, break like this, and his heart shouts, 'kya tum meray qabil nahi ho? Aisa socha bhi kaisay tum nay Kaajjal, tum tu meri zindagi ho, meri ibadat ho …. Main tu tumharay baghair kuch nahi.' And he tightens his grip on her shoulder,

"nahi Kaajjal, aisa nahi kaho," Dev says in a soft soothing voice, for he just doesn't want to stress her any further. But Kaajjal is not ready to listen, 'I can't bear the thought that I have lived with another man, and have stepped into his arms. I can't forgive my self for even thinking about someone else, memory loss or no memory loss. I was Dev's and my heart and my body should have known that. I have betrayed him. I have betrayed my love, and I deserves to be punished.' Thoughts are crossing her mind with a speed of light,

"bas Kaajjal, khatam huyay judai kay din. Ab say har lamha tum meri bahoon main raho gi. Sari duniya say chupa kay rakhoon ga tumhain, har nazar say bacha kay, bas apni bahoon main." He moves his hand around her shoulder to bring her close to him, but she pushes his hand

"nahi Dev, main is qabil nahi hoon." And she stands up at this, and walks to Aditya. Dev looks at her walking to Aditya, and his heart skips a beat. Kaajjal stands in front of him and looks at him for a second, and then she lifts her hand and gives him a tight slap.

"I was suffering from memory loss, I was ill, I was not in my senses, but were you not in your senses as well??" Kaajjal is glaring at him, and Aditya is shocked, for he has seen this side of Kaajjal for the first time. "how dare you think of marrying me, a girl who was lost and not in her sense??? Is this your definition of helping? Is this how you help a helpless girl?" Kaajjal is soo angry that her eyes are all red and her face is burning with rage.

"mujh say shadi karnay ka khayal aa gaya aap ko, lekin meray ghar walon ko dhoondnay ka khayal nahi aaya aap ko? Meray ateet ko jaannay kay liyay aap nay koee qadam nahi uthaya, aur mujhay shadi kay mandap pay lay gayay." Tears are rolling down her eyes, anger and passion at its max. "Dev kay siwa koee aur mujhay haath lagayay tu main apnay jism kay us hissay ko kaat kay phaink doon gi …. main sirf Dev ki hoon, sunna aap nay, sirf Dev ki!! Mera roam roam Dev ka hai, meri saansain sirf Dev kay liyay chalti hain, mera dil sirf Dev kay liyay dhadakta hai, meri ragoon main khoon sirf Dev kay liyay dorta hai, Dev hai tu main hoon warna mera koee wajood nahi." She is shouting at Aditya, "Meri jaan bachanay kay liyay aap ka bohat bohat shukriya, lekin" she sobs, "lekin agar yehi karma that u mar janay diya hota mujhay." She breaks down, "mar janay diya hota!!! Main aap ko kabhi maaf nahi karoon gi, kabhi nahi." Her pain is beyond belief, beyond words, she is completely shattered while confessing what Dev means to her, and Dev is still standing there next to the window and witnessing her sudden burst of love ad emotions for him. Dev's heart breaths a sigh of relief; for the first time in many many days, he felt genuinely happy. This is what he had longed to hear from Kaajjal ever since he stepped in bhadrapur. Kaajjal's love for him and her mad confession is making him the proudest man in the world, for he knows right now no one can be luckier and happier than him. His Kaajjal is back to him, and now he will love her and keep her safe in his arms. He is looking at Kaajjal with soo much love in his eyes that its overflowing!!! He is lost in his love and Kaajjal's cries brings him back to his senses. He can't bear to see her in any more pain and quickly moves forward and holds her from her shoulders,

"Kaajjal, bas karo, itna ghussa theek nahi hai" Kaajjal feels Dev's touch, she feels his love and concern for her, and closes her eyes, tears are rolling down her eyes and she looses herself in his touch for one last time, and rests her head on his bent forehead,

"mujhay maaf kar daina Dev, mujhay maaf kar daina," she almost whispers, as if these were her last words, and she steps out of Dev's hold and blindly runs towards the door.

"Kaajjal … Kaajjal…." Dev shouts and runs after her, for he can sense that she is up to something drastic. Aditya also runs after them.

Kaajjal runs and takes the elevator to the rooftop. Dev sees Kaajjal entering the elevator and calls her name. He runs to her, and just before he can stop the elevator, their eyes met one last time, and the door closes on them, both on either side of the door. Somehow Dev knows she is going to the roof (after all he knows his Kaajjal). He is crazily pushing the button to get another elevator, 'come on ….. come on God damit," he almost says it aloud, and the elevator door opens.

Kaajjal gets out of the elevator and starts walking towards the roof. Flashes of all the times they had spent together crosses her mind. She enter the roof door and starts moving towards the edge. Once again, flashes of their beautiful moments together crosses her mind, and her tears are just not ready to stop. She is completely broken, shattered, lost, and moving towards the punishment that she had chosen for her self. Just then, Dev enters the roof door, and sees Kaajjal ….

"Kaajjal," he shouts, and Kaajjal turns her head.

"Kaajjal ruk jao," he comes to a halt, his feet frozen to the ground. "Kaajjal, ruk jao please.…." He shouts.

Kaajjal looks at him with tears in her eyes and just nods her head in a gesture of NOooooooooo and starts running towards the edge.

"Kaajjal," he runs after her, "Kaajjal ruk jao, tumhain meri kasam."

But Kaajjal is not ready to listen. She is determined to punish her self for torturing Dev like this. Kaajjal is almost there, but Dev's speed was faster than her and just when she was about to climb the edge, Dev brings her to a halt.

"stop it Kaajjal," Dev turns her around to face him, but Kaajjal is hysterical,

"chor do mujhay dev! Mujhay mar janay do … mujhay mar janay do," Kaajjal is crying and shouting at the same time,

"Kaajjaalllllllll," Dev is trying to calm her down, but Kaajjal is not ready to listen,

"main tumharay qabil nahi hoon Dev. main kisi aur aadmi kay saath, itnay dinon, aik chat kay neechay …. Nahi Dev, mujhay haath na lagao, mar janay do mujhay." Kaajjal is hysterical and breaking with every word. And Dev feels his heart going to her, for he doesn't care. All he wants is his Kaajjal back in his life, and all he wants is to give her the happiness he had promised her.

"Kaajjal, I don't care … tum meri ho, bas yehi baat zaroori hai. Tum meri zindagi ho Kaajjal, main tumhain kuch nahi honay doon ga," Dev is also screaming to make his point.

"nahi Dev, nahi," Kaajjal is hysterically trying to free herself from his hold. And there …… Dev slaps her J, a slap which is full of passion and love, a slap which is such a beautiful DK signature ... and Kaajjal comes to a still. Her head is bent on the other side, and she very slowly stands herself straight. She is no more resisting Dev, instead she just starts crying madly, loud and completely broken. And Dev's heart melts, he can't see his Kaajjal in pain.

"Kaajjal," he lifts her face up so that he can see in her eyes, for he knows, she needs assurance, and he was determined to give her that. "Kaajjal, tum meray paas ho, meri ho, aur mujhay kuch nahi chahiyay. Main nay tumhain jitna dukh pohnchaya us ki saza bhi tu mujhay milni hi thi na. Waisay bhi, tumharay Gannu bhaiyya janntay thay, tum tu mujhay dukh do gi nahi, tu unhon nay is tarah mujhay saza day di," he is looking deep in her eyes, and gives a very faint smile. But Kaajjal is still crying and he brings her in his embrace. "ssshhhhh, bas karo. Ab hum saath hain, aur yeh khushi ki wajah hai. Ab main tumhain kabhi kaeen nahi janay doon ga Kaajjal, kabhi nahi." His grip tightens around her, "bohat tadpa hoon main Kaajjal, bohat tadpa hoon is lamhay kay liyay. Dil hazaroon baar toota hai Kaajjal, ankhain kaee bar roee hain tumhara saath panay kay liyay, ab yeh saath kabhi nahi choroon ga. tum meri ho, sirf meri Kaajjal, bas yehi sach hai, aur yehi meray jeenay ki wajha." He is still holding her tight and close to her.

"magar Dev, anjanay main hi sahi, main nay apnay pyar ko sharminda kar diya …" Kaajjal sobs at this,

"nahi," they both turn at the voice and finds Aditya there. "aap nay apnay pyar ko sharminda nahi kiya." Aditya walks towards them, and Kaajjal wants to kill him. She tries to turn her back to him, but Dev stops her, "hum aik chat kay neechay zaroor rahay, lekin hamara fasla kabhi kum nahi hwa." Aditya is in front of them.

"main nay hamesha aap ki izzat ki, aur aap hi ki sehat kay liyay, yeh jhoot jiya. Lekin kabhi is ka faida nahi uthaya." Aditya talks with immense sincerity. "yeh sach hai, kay janay anjanay mujhay aap say pyar ho gaya," and Kaajjal looks at him with disbelief, "lekin yeh bhi sach hai kay main nay kabhi aap ko haath nahi lagaya. Mujh pay yaqeen na aayay tu Raghav say pooch lijiyay. Us nay har lamha dekha hai, shaid aap ko us ki baat pay yaqeen aa jayay." Aditya looks at dev and Kaajjal, with regret in his eyes, but respect for their love. "aap donon ka pyar dekh kay aik baat tu saaf hai, aap donon aik doosray kay liyay banay hain." he shifts his gaze at Kaajjal, "Kaajjal, jis izzat kay saath aap meray ghar aayeen theen, ussi izzat kay saath aap wapas ja rahi hain." Aditya says with truthfulness in his voice and eyes. "bas itna hi kahoon ga, mujhay apni nazroon say na giraiyay ga." Aditya is restless and both Dev and Kaajjal can sense his restlessness. "Kaajjal mujhay maaf kar daina, main aap ko dukh nahi daina chahta tha, lekin anjanay main shaid yeh ghalti ho gaee mujh say." Aditya says, and Dev can see his sincerity in his voice and body language. Aditya turns around and starts walking,

"Aditya" Dev calls his name and he comes to a halt. Dev walks up to him such that they are face-to-face, "mujhay meri Kaajjal mil gaee, aur mujhay kuch nahi chahiyay. Meri zindagi main nafrat ki koee jagah nahi, kuin kay Kaajjal nay itna pyar bhar diya hai meri duniya main kay aur kisi cheez ki jagah baqi nahi rahi. Aap nay meri Kaajjal ki jaan bachaee, is kay liyay main sari umr aap ka ehsanmand rahoon ga. Thankyou" and Aditya breathes a sigh of relief, for he is genuinely happy to see broken bridges mended between Dev and Kaajjal, and to see that Dev had forgiven him.

Episode Ends ….

Edited by thesaint148 - 18 years ago
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Kashish that was sweet, cute, passionate, excellent superb, and more but Kashish that was a GR8 JOB !!! you are the best writer and creative.

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