When the tide turned .MithviFF-Part 17 updt Pg32

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Parm

@Parm.

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Posted: 12 years ago

#121

Usha my dear another brilliant addition to your wonderful story!

I truly like how you made the reason for Ramu making up the story about Miu and Sudha being dead and the reason for them to have the need to run away in the first place quite believe. In fact not only did you incorporate the reason for the child marriage and subsequently the reason for mother and daughter to run away but you also took care of the issue of why Ramu lied about them being dead, the reason behind the bellman's paralysis and subsequent reason for Kalki to blame everything on Miu and despise Sudha. Plus you managed to exonerate everyone in the process except for the draconian (love that description of him by the way) Sarpanch and the unfortunately backward thinking villagers (whom I guess we can't really blame because of their ignorance).

Absolutely fantastic and I really can't see why you didn't like it! I think the CV's should be "borrowing a chapter or two, oh heck who am I kidding, they might as well "borrow" the whole thing from you.

P.S. Thanks for the PM, truly looking forward to the next installment of "When the Tide Turned".

Waiting impatiently (I mean patiently😆)
Yours truly,
Parm

Edited by Parm. - 12 years ago

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Posted: 12 years ago

#122

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rusha4003

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Posted: 12 years ago

#123

Originally posted by: Absoluv
nice job Usha dear...loved the update...waiting to see how MITHVI face each other...in your story and in the show as welll...😉

Thanks Paro ... am waiting for Mithvi faceoff too ... 😊

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rusha4003

@rusha4003

Dazzler

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Posted: 12 years ago

#124

Originally posted by: sue_21
Wow Usha! Loved how you portrayed the deep,dark secret of 20 years! 👏I hope the CVs give us a similar solid reason behind the childhood marriage of Mithvi!! Please update soon.. and there was no Mithvi today.. so waiting to read more of Mithvi in the next chapter!!!😛

Thanks for liking the update Sue ... I was worried it would turn out OTT ...!

Yes, there was no Mithvi ... becos they both have resolved to avoid each other (in my story) 😆 ... but soon ... they have to face it ! 😆

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rusha4003

@rusha4003

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Posted: 12 years ago

#125

Originally posted by: hangok
ohh god this was great, this could be the real reason, i would love it when datta would know that his wife and daughter are still alive and he would know where they live and it would be better, when he would be in contact with sudha only that miu wouldnt know it... i think right now, im going crazy😃

by the way miu, that night was not only magical for you, it was for us even magical to imagine you with prithvi😉

usha you are great👏
by the way thanks for pm

Thanks Bennu ... thanks for liking the update and also the reason I described ... !

I'm glad you foud the night magical, just like MIu did ! 😉

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rusha4003

@rusha4003

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Posted: 12 years ago

#126

Originally posted by: kushalkidewaani
Loved it...
New to your story so please begin PMing :)

Welcome to my SS!

Thanks for reading and liking, Kushal ... I will PM when I update ! 😊

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rusha4003

@rusha4003

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Posted: 12 years ago

#127

Originally posted by: mariyakamran
superb. the story was portrayed very well. this 20 years old story is now going to change mithvi life ☺️

can't wait for more

Thanks Mariya ... yes this 20 year story is going to change Mithvi's life ! 😊

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rusha4003

@rusha4003

Dazzler

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Posted: 12 years ago

#128

Originally posted by: Shell16
Excellent progression of the story. I liked how you introduced Sudha and Mui's story. I believe you have done a wonderful job of explaining the entire incident. Not sure how the CVs will deal with the story. I hope they do it justice the way you have here.

I like the idea of Sudha fleeing the village to protect Meera from a child marriage...I like it a lot.

Can't wait for how you deal with Prithvi and Meera's reactoin to the news of their marriage! Lol

More Please!

Awww... thanks Shelly ... glad you liked the explanation of "20 years ago" ... I admit it was giving me nightmares ... 😆 ... I was sooo worried it would turn out OTT ...

I wanted it to be horrifying and seem real and yet not over the top !

That was quite some tight rope walking for me ... 😆

Now... Mithvi's reaction is another major part ... I want it to be like WOW ... dont know if I can achieve that ! 😆

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rusha4003

@rusha4003

Dazzler

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Posted: 12 years ago

#129

Originally posted by: Parm.
Usha my dear another brilliant addition to your wonderful story!

I truly like how you made the reason for Ramu making up the story about Miu and Sudha being dead and the reason for them to have the need to run away in the first place quite believe. In fact not only did you incorporate the reason for the child marriage and subsequently the reason for mother and daughter to run away but you also took care of the issue of why Ramu lied about them being dead, the reason behind the bellman's paralysis and subsequent reason for Kalki to blame everything on Miu and despise Sudha. Plus you managed to exonerate everyone in the process except for the draconian (love that description of him by the way) Sarpanch and the unfortunately backward thinking villagers (whom I guess we can't really blame because of their ignorance).

Absolutely fantastic and I really can't see why you didn't like it! I think the CV's should be "borrowing a chapter or two, oh heck who am I kidding, they might as well "borrow" the whole thing from you.

P.S. Thanks for the PM, truly looking forward to the next installment of "When the Tide Turned".

Waiting impatiently (I mean patiently😆)
Yours truly,
Parm

Thank you sooo much Parm ... you have summed up your reaction to the update so well ... now I can breath easy ... 😆 ...

I was worried it would turn out melodramatic and OTT ... I prefer subtlety in my writing ... I had to write and edit that part many times ... 😆

Thanks for the generous compliments dear ...

Now I can peacefully think about the next part ! 😊