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Very interesting start Vrinda. 👏

Congratulations on another successful story!!!🤗

I see that your style of writing has drastically changed too. Very gripping. Quick moving. Though there is a lot to unfold yet.👍🏼

It was a sad scene to see Jodha in that drunk state, requesting a baby off men in the club. And the men around waiting to take advantage of the opportunity.🤢 Now, Jalal is no saint himself. Had he not fallen for Jodha at first glance, he might have taken a woman up on her request... well maybe yes, stopped himself at some point... but the intent was definitely there.

And had it not been for Jodha, I don't think he was going to step forward to save her from the bunch of men eyeing her. Well, at least at first glimpses it didn't seem so...

Then again, he is a grey-shaded dude and I dig grey. What's the fun in reading about saints anyway?😉

Sitting on my VIP longue, I looked around in the club to find someone for tonight. I took a deep sip of my drink

Loved the start😉

"No, you are not good to give me a baby." My head snapped in the direction of the sweetest voice I had ever heard.

Loved the way you introduced her here. A very hatke intro, isn't it?😊

I heard her sweet voice and cursed the man standing in front of her, avoiding my view. I shifted a little on my seat with a hope to see her face but damn the man was so massive.

👏

angel with brown hair and an almond shaped face. Her skin was so pale and rosy just like a rose. Her green eyes...jeans and a T-shirt with flip flops... sat in Indian style on bar counter. She was just rare! Very rare!

"She will fit perfectly in your body," my inner demon said.

Interesting

"So, tell me, mister. Will you give me a baby?" She innocently pointed her finger towards the man, who was previously blocking my view.

"Sure, baby, just come with me and I will give you a lot of babies."

"Then, are you good for her?" my inner demon spoke sarcastically.

Very interesting😉

"No, you are not good. Your face color is so dark. I want my baby to be fair like me," I heard her say and the smirk on my face widened.

Ah hah!😛

"So, now tell me, who will give me a baby?" She pointed towards the group of men, who looked at her hungrily.

Not able to take this scene anymore, I stood up from my seat and moved towards her. I wanted to see what she would say after seeing me.

"Can I give you a baby?" I asked her, smirking widely. I pushed my hands inside my pocket, giving my best look which no girl could deny.

Loved the way he swooped in. An unusual saviour he turned out to be.

She looked at me up and down with amusement before turning her face. What! She turned her face away from me? That happened for the first time. At this very movement, I knew she was rare and this rare diamond was mine. Just mine!

I smiled seeing her smile. She was not some one night stand type, but she was the one with whom one could spend his entire life.

"Will you give me a baby?" she asked me with innocent eyes which were filled with pain. My heart pricked while hearing her pained voice.

"Yes, I will give you a baby." I slowly stroked her cheeks and I could feel my little friend down there getting excited.

Control yourself, Jalal, she was not the type, who would be happy to find you beside her in the morning. You have to make her yours with love and patience.

I somehow liked this banter. Even though there were many obvious shades of sadness in it...

"You are so into yourself." She pouted. "You want baby to be just like you."

"Don't you want my baby like me?" I asked.

I want my baby to be happy... not sad like me."

A tear spilled from her eye

Can I get one more before we can start the baby making process?"

"Woo! I am in air. You see, I am in air."

Awww

"What is your name? How can I be so stupid to not ask the man who will give me my baby his name?" She runs her hand in her hair and looked at me.

"Jalal." I smiled at her before shifting her to the passenger seat of my car and buckled her.

"So, when will you give me a baby?"

"Soon, sweetheart." I smiled at her before she dozed off on the car seat.

Double aww (though I realise such a reality is nothing really to be awed about)

It hurt seeing her like this. Why was she so eager to have a baby? And who would snatch a baby from her?

She was so good. She was nothing like my one nights.

"Ouch!" she cried in pain and that is when I came back to reality. How could I take her advantage?

Thank God!

Gosh! This girl was so innocent, still too hot!

Nice wording👍🏼

All of a sudden, she started to sob and I looked at her in shock. Never in my life had I ever felt so bad and useless seeing sobbing women.

A smile automatically appeared on my lips, looking at her sleeping beside me.

Finally, I had found her!

A lightbulb moment. And from what I see, couldn't have come at a better place in the story... 👏

I reopened my eyes to look at those mesmerizing blue ones, which were filled with concern. Concern, my foot! My eyes traveled down till they reached his bare chest.

"As far as I remember, someone was quite eager to sleep with someone to have a baby," he mocked.

"We didn't have sex last night." He sighed heavily, then patted my cheeks. "I have just brought you home to protect you from the hungry eyes present in the club."

"But why will you bring me home? And why the heck I am in your clothes and you are wearing nothing?" I poked my finger in his chest, glaring at him. His chest felt so soft against my finger.

Hee hee😉

He called me innocent! Not even my family had called me innocent.

This one line said so much!

Who was he? Why was he taking so much care of me? Even my family had thought of me as an extra baggage.

I looked at him again, noticing him smile at me. I also smiled back, my real smile after a month before gulping down the pills.

Again...

Why did his wink affect me so much? I thought my heart had become immune to all this, then why the hell was I blushing?

😳

My life had been always a risk. What would I lose if I spent some more time with a stranger?

All these hidden clauses that spoke of the real tragedies in her life... of how much she'd gone through and of how much what she'd gone through had affected her

A white shirt and a black pant, looking so handsome. I had never seen someone like him. Not even my father, brother, or my crush.

Interesting... I wonder why she keeps going back to her father and brother when looking at a handsome man? Has she been abused in some way😕 I mean I can see that she's been emotionally abused... but physically and sexually too?😕

Not having any other option, I used his and brush my teeth.

Arre tho use finger na..

"I do have maids, don't worry." He chuckled. "But I love to cook for myself."

The quintessential rich guy who likes to show off his cooking skills?😎

What! I knew it. I just knew it. Why would anyone treat me well without wanting anything in return? Finally, he showed his true colors by asking me to stay with him.

All men were the same!

Wait and watch Jo!

A very very very interesting start and style of narration Vrinda. Better than prince, I must say... please do continue... and do so regularly so that we don't lose touch with the storyline and characters! 😳Wishing you all the best🤗