NOVEL~*Hiding behind a Stranger*~THREAD 22- Chapter 27 (2 pts)-9th FEB - Page 129

Originally posted by: karkuzhali

My dearest young Banjaras, Kausi, Bindu , Shruti, B. Prasad, Harshu, Rose, Mitu, Lashy, Sandhya, Sri...

I am enjoying your beautiful interaction in the thread, which I imagine is like this...

Sachu Patti

Periyamma/ Aunty.

Originally posted by: karkuzhali

My Remix Rhyme:

The original:

There was a farmer who had a dog

And Bingo was his name- O

B-I-N-G-O,

B-I-N-G-O

B-I-N-G-O

And Bingo was his name-O!

My Version:

We read a novel which is a historical romance

And H B A S is its title - O

H-B-A-S

H-B-A-S

H-B-A-S

And H B A S is its title - O!

In it is a Hero who is very strong and brave

And Akbar is his name - O!

A-K-B-A-R

A-K-B-A-R

A-K-B-A-R

And Akbar is his name - O!

There is an heiress who is pretty and clever

And Heera is her name - O!

H-E-E-R-A

H-E-E-R-A

H-E-E-R-A

And Heera is her name - O!

There is a sidekick who is evil and wicked

And Khalil is his name - O!

K-HA-L-I-L

K-HA-L-I-L

K-HA-L-I-L

And Khalil is his name -O!

We have our author who is loved by all

And Lashy is her name -O!

L-A-S-H-Y

L-A-S-H-Y

L-A-S-H-Y

And Lashy is her name-O!

Karkuzhali.

Originally posted by: roseraja1915

Originally posted by: Kuki715

Hurt

My love for you was plain to see It was written all over me A love so strong Could not be wrong It should last an eternity Now it's just a memory I've asked you why a thousand times But lies filled your every line Loyalty took you away from me Happiness l'll never see My heart was filled with so much love I tried to bring you back to me Good-bye was all you said to me Of life's woes that is the one That tore my heart and drained my soul When the one you love will not stay All you'll do is cry each day Your mind is lost There are no thoughts The joys of life that move your heart Are gone right at the start Now pain was there for all to see Even my parents abandoned me The pain continues to this day When will it go away? Words were spoken to touch your heart But indifference closed that part Lies and deceit right from the start Cruelty came from your heart Lies are what you said me They hurt both you and me Love like mine you will not find It's gotten stronger over time You know you're wrong in what you do Does life have any meaning to you? Hurt is what you gave to me For you we'll have to wait and see... Copied and edited.. Its my maiden attempt. Don't know how apt it is 🤔. Found some parts mirroring Heera's state so posted 😛

Originally posted by: melovesja

I didn't had rite to fall for the mission
It's not right to choose between loyalty for
Whom, I am faulty but what's my fault when
My heart so stubborn to believe .
I always kept it under high guard in shell
of my hard heart but it's ran to rightful
Owner and betray me for no fault mine
My Heart so stubborn to understand.
How much I tried to stay away even leave the
unique Topaz to lock away to keep away
Memory of Mesmerizing Hazels away but
My heart So stubborn to leave away.
Keeps you in thoughts whole day and
Dreamt about his women in night
My heart so stubborn to fall
Hard for my women...
Each meeting I Pretended Hard With
poised face because I never wants to Hurt
You but my heart so stubborn kept stealing
Glance at stable of your addictive smile.
My lips moved a little and hand curved to Adab
As feel family at feast and speak through eyes
The gesture of thanks but my heart so stubborn
Jumped out at pink hue on your cheek.
I behaved business alike at step of Shrine
And stay unruffled while you wiped tear at
Sleeve but my heart so stubborn fulfilled
His wish at canal to touch your cheek.
When my subconscious mind lost control over
And took you in my arms what I feel all the time
And my heart so stubborn convey silently convey
Everything what I hidden so long from you.
I wanted to marry you to gave a name to our relation
But destiny played so hard, most important was
Your safety but my heart so stubborn
Had trust on you to not move in life.
With no other option left to get through,
Masked my feelings and keep your happiness
At prior I turned you away but my heart so stubborn
Became jealous at reality of you to see as other's.
Moved from all sweet memory to complete
Call of duty with thought to forgot as part of life but
Ah! my heart so stubborn took you along
As companion of my lone journey .

Enjoyed All your presence in parnagrah and relived you
In every nook and corner of Palace but my heart so
Stubborn stopped at vary sight of your painting to
Revived the feel, touch of your velvety skin at canal.
I rode so fast to renew the farmaan and planned to
Fulfils the dream to serve parnagrahis well but
When heard his shahiba's safety at stack my heart
So stubborn became restless to save you.
feel the joy at turn off the proposal my mind make sure of your
safety forever but you know what my shahiba my heart so
stubborn become a traitor in front of Huzoor and announced
You as my family, when I make you my bride with his blessings.
I left with challenge to save you and be practical for next
Moved to stop the brute in playground of mine but no
Sign of you falls so hard to bare and my heart so stubborn
Feel helpless and dying as I lost all.
Angeles guided me at cry of your word and knowledge
of whole life came at rescue in anxious time
After saw you safe I am at peace but my heart
So stubborn wanted to feel life in you.
I cradled you in my arms in front of everyone's shocked
Eyes and slept into our world to care for your health
But my heart so stubborn, be a waiver at your scar and
Wanted to say sorry for turned you away.
Each mark on your body told me what you went through
And felt immense pain at your vulnerable say but to
My surprise my heart so stubborn wanted to pour all his
Love and care when I meet you again.
To answer your query what you asked chocked and dropped
All guard of moral, feel Intense heart bit in your presence
My heart so stubborn, be adamant to confess Shahiba there's
Nothing else that I recall so fondly ever since...
Bag all uncertainty with me to bring you back from
Unknowing world of unconsciousness I left your side
To step into real world but heart so stubborn happily ready to
Answer in person,Still bit with little hope to be with you..
I know how you feel to see your love as a traitor
In front of you with deal for lifetime but what is my fault tell
Me O My love when my heart so stubborn wants to
see you safe in front of my eyes for lifelong.
What is my fault tell my shahiba if my heart
So stubborn become Yours FOREVER...

Originally posted by: divyavm

Writer-e-khaas,

Hope you had a great vacation and time off. Now that you are well rested, you have to quickly update us on what happens in Chapter 28 ;)

On Chapter 27 - what can I say? It was such a gripping, cinematic chapter. The pace of writing was quick, with longer sentences balanced with shorter phrases. The writing mirrored the race against time it was describing. From the first sentence, I felt I was part of the same race as th two parts flew by. In addition to the anxiety of how Akbar will find Harka, I had the added anxiety of whether you would leave us with a cliffhanger before your vacation. But, you were a samathu chellam and did no such thing.

As I have been saying, in the last few chapters I have enjoyed the parallelism, where our leads have been separated but joined together in spirit. That continues to be the theme of my take for this chapter.

(1) Joined in prayer: As Harka calls out to Ma Bhavani, to save her people, Akbar calls out to his Khuda to save his Harka. This is one of the most beautiful touches I like; that in these moments of stress, they both look up to God and once their prayer is answered, always show gratitude.

(2) Joined in spirit to fight with every inch they have: Harka fought every pain amd blindness to stay afloat for her people, just as Akbar roamed like a madman, hungry, sleepless, and calloused to save Harka. It was not till the very last minute that Harka's spirit began to really sink, only to rise again with Akbar's arrival. After all, it was his "just stay safe" that accompanied her even in what felt like her last moments.

(3) Joined in instincts: As Akbar looked to Mother Nature to confirm his instincts that Harka was around somewhere, Harka instinctively knew it was the Marwari racer that could save them and used all her strength to send off the horse that would be the answer to Akbar's search and her prayer.

(4) Joined in tact in dealing with Khalil: Harka's ploy to buy time with the farmaan was as well aimed as the arrow that Akbar perfectly timed and angled to stop Khalil from his evil designs on Harka. I particularly liked how Harka played on Khalil's rivalry with this "best officer" without knowing the depth of their animosity.

(5) Joined in healing: I wasn't sure if healing is the right word. But the distant fright that there was no life remaining. The frantic search for pulse, which was the only glimmer of hope. The protective embrace, this time with a shawl. To the gentle temple resting on the ornament on her forehead. What a parallel image to the canal scene. Then, it was Harka's arrival that had given life to him; here, it was Akbar's arrival that had given life to her.

At the canal, Akbar had no hope that Harka could be his, and even now he knows Harka may never accept him in the same way. So, what will Harka's reaction be when she awakes? Only Lashy can reveal in Chapter 28.

20 days you said? I assume we are already on day 18? If only, time could race as quickly as Baahadur.

In any case, thanks writer-e-khaas for a beautiful chapter. The last scene left a silly smile on my face - what tenderness, care, and affection. It's still there- the silly smile that is. No matter what Harka's immediate reaction will be, somehow I know Harka will undertand Akbar, eventually. Even in her weak state, she knew Akbar could never be on the same side as Khalil.