Akdha TS: The Stupid Challenge Completed (30/11/2016) - Page 7

Originally posted by: binduprasad41

payu
first os than bi update and now this
good good carry on

>> he he..

no doubt I love your work

>> Love ya!🤗

something so different from other stories
which we enjoy reading with out worry

>> you find this story different or you're talking about all stories?😆

title really suit this ts

>> yeah..⭐️

interesting concept dear

>> Thankyou Bindu😊

and I am glad both husband and wife not boyfriend and girlfriend

>> ha ha..

both jodha and jalal are headstrong
just because of their ego they can't forget their stupid challenge
>>yep..😉

yes both deeply in love
both know each other too well
even after 5 years of marriage both craving for each other
I really like this in both of them

>> haina

poor jodha she really trying hard to control her desire
of course how can she control
after all jalal is deliciously handsome na
in my payu language

>> 😆

I love the way you describe jalal
something so unique you said that we can't ignore

>> And what's that?

both jodha and jalal can't totally ignore each other
both keep an eye in each other movement
I guess jalal also trying very very hard to control himself
>> Yes.. Yes.. Yes..

he just wanted to teach some lesson to his lady love
>> He just want to win the challenge..

he cares for her when he notice sadness in her eye
how affectionately he put his hand on her hand
this single gesture telling us lot
how much she meant to him
>> Right dear.. They both are madly in love with each other ❤️

this part is all about jodha POV now I am waiting for jalal POV

>> Sorry dear.. This story has only jo's pov.😊

I don't know who going to won this challenge but in the end both won in their own sweet way

>> How sweet!❤️

waiting eagerly for next part
thanks for pm

Originally posted by: lashy

Payal... It's difficult for me to review without quoting you dear.. but I'll try

>> I am so sorry lashy.. I'll remove don't copy code today though I don't think next update has anything good that you would want to quote.😆

Let me start by saying I absolutely LOVED whatever you've written so far.. actually, I think I am going to go so far to say that it's probably something I enjoyed reading most in the forum over the past week... just something different... a different kind of spice, you may call it! Neither too dark not too mushy mushy!

>>> OMG.. OMG.. OMG..😲

The deal-clincher was the fact that it's been husband and wife.. and it's rare to find this sort of chemistry between husband and wife (please don't make it dark or sad after this) even 5 years after marriage! Loved it.. 😉

>>> Yes.. I heard and have seen that after marriage, sex is regarded as a daily routine and not have to do anything with love shove. But I want such relationship with my husband after my marriage.❤️

why dark or sad??😲 It's a simple story, dear..

Your Jalal is amazing here... a stubborn handsome devil☺️.. but obviously devoted to his wife [killer combo]

And she's insanely in love with him too (please don't change this equation😡!)

>>> Yes dear.. but why would I change this equation? Why are you thinking like that?😕😆

Did I see a blue - eyes... is that that FSOG effect?😉

>>> It's Ekta's statement effect🤣

Ok Let me tell you something.. I was too surprised when I read this..😆 I usually write in my diary when I sit alone. That time I write,completely getting myself in place of that character specially when I am writing in girl's pov.. I wrote this os, one month back. Actually that time, I wrote blue eyes and blue suit.. but here I wrote black suit.

Reason for this explanation is. the question you asked about "Hungry", "Very"

So I didn't write this thing, remembering any other scene from any novel or movie but reading your comment I realized the same thing I saw in fifty shades movie. But there situation was completely different and ana actually asked for food..😆

She asked"Hungry" and grey answered" very" that's it.

So now you decide whether I deserve👏 or not.😆 because I just wrote what came that time, in my mind.

Anyway, there are certain things he does, like hold her hand when she becomes sad (that was possibly the best bit - when she wonders if she doesn't have the effect on him, she had 5 years ago!)

>>> Thankyou dear.. She wanted him to touch her but his control saddened her.. I think it's very crucial thing in a relationship. when everything is normal, then obviously one would like to come close to his/her partner but when husband/bf, don't do any such thing then gf/wife usually feared that her husband/bf has lost interest in her. That's what I feel.😛

Then, the way he meets eyes with her and then goes back to chatting with his friends - that plastered a grin on my face..

>> Really.?😃

But and a big big but.. the BESTEST part for me was

'Hungry?'

'Very!'

'Let's feed you then!'

Best tease-lines I've read in a long time - is it 100% your imagination or inspired from elsewhere?

If 100% yours, then take this '👏'

>>> I explained this,above..😆 but " Lets feed you then is completely new to me"😆

And please don't leave this half way yaar... earnest request!

>>> Request!😲 I know why you're saying this.. I will not take long and finish season 1 of god in next 4 updates..

Originally posted by: binduprasad41

yes of course
I understand its easy say something
but you post yesterday only this ts so it take time na for everyone to read and comment
so many writers are posting their stories may be that's why
I thinking about positive side
may be everybody in vocation mood when they come back they definitely loves your work
than likes also increase sometime likes button also don't work on time na
I hope you understand what I am trying to say
I just wanted to cheer up my payu nothing much you know
love you

Originally posted by: swetiii

amazing chappi payu di
loved it
Jo challenged Jalal
& now regretting
🤣
update asap
😉

Originally posted by: lashy

Shy coming!☺️

But I agree with Bindup's words... abt why response may be slow😳

Wait for 2 days... I think it'll cross 55-60🤗