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You are most welcome. One of the benefits of proofreading your chapter is that I get to read first lol. But as i always i save my likes and dislikes for the comments part.
You know I was debating in my mind that who fights more or starts argument more and also who leaves the other tongue-tied. But, I realized that both of them are to blame in fights and both of them have sharp tongue and their minds are even sharper. This is one of the main thing of your story that I love because in this story both charatcers are at par with each other. In many stories that I have read on IF, I have seen that mostly Jalal is shown shrewder or smarter than jodha but in RKG, one cannot decide which one is better than other and that is very unique of your story. All of these can be seen clearly throughout your sotry especially i this chapter.
I also feel bad for both of them soemtimes because they both are clearly in love with each other but cannot admit to each other or even accept themselves. I really liked tge part when he picks her up and then she sleeps in his arms. I also liked how you described when she gets scared and starts screaming and then realizes and handles the situation. And the boat was beautifully described. The entire part where both of them come close to each other and almost have a real kiss was hot. I loved the flute part- it seemed the atmosphere was so divine. I am reallly excited about the man who is going to meet radha. this is going to be a roller coaster ride. But, seriously, what was wrong with Jalal, he proposes her to be his concubine. he must be out of his mind. seriously, he someitmes does not really know what is he talking baout considering how radha is.
I really cannot wait for next chapter. pleaseee write soon.
Kabhi Neem Neem Kabhi Shahad Shahad
Anupamaa
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