Takin back My Love- DeviRaj FF ( part 4 updtd 20 jan)

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Part 1 - pg 1
Part 2 - pg 1
Part 3 - pg 3
Part 4 - PG 4

Part 1
It was the last straw.
They had done it!
She was done with the Rajawats!
She had tried, so hard but alas. This haveli indeed is cursed!
Tears continued to trickle down but she had decided to give up on her stupid belief of changing things for better.
She teared apart the mangalsutra as her heart also shattered to pieces. She rubbed the cursed vermillion off, she was not going to let her life be destroyed for the love that could never be hers!
She stepped out of her underground cellar pulling her suitcase.
On reaching the hall, she found masa waiting.
' Sadistic woman', Devi thought and smiled begrudgingly.
" Katthe ja rhi hai?" Masa asked smirking.
" To my home", Devi replied staring right back.
" You may have came here against my wish but you can't leave, my revenge is st.."
" You, your revenge and your plottings can enjoy themselves. I am leaving and no one can stop me", she replied with an air of finality.
" Badi zabaan chale hai thaari..." Urmi raised her hand to but was given a reality check instead.
Devi caught her wrist and twisted it behind her back making her writhe in pain.
" Chhod..." She wiggled but in vain.
Devi twister her hand even tighter while Urmi cried.
" Mhari Urmi ko chhod Varna tu na jaane hai ki thare sath ke hoga!" Bansuri shouted coming forward to her daughter's rescue.
She imitated Urmi and raised her hand but Devi was on a roll.
She pushed Urmi away and caught hold of bansuri's hand and twisted it the same way making her yelp in pain.
Maasa's face scrunched while Urmi tended to her aching wrist.
" Tujhme badi jaan aa gyi hai!" Masa hissed in a venom laced voice.
Devi smirked and pushed bansuri towards the floor.
" Honestly, I wanted to leave peacefully but I forgot that the women of This house love drama", she mocked.
Masa took a step forward when Devi face palmed her.
" Stop right there! These two might have survived my grip but your old bones will definitely crack!" Devi warned menacingly.
Her emotions were running astray.
" Devrani baisa!"
Devi turned around to see Kesar rushing in her direction.
" jethanisa, you were the only one who stood by me but I'll have to leave, the air in this house is just too toxic!"
" And you should leave with me. This house and it's members can never give you anything other than torture and insults!" Devi pleaded.
" No Devrani baisa, my life is here only", Kesar smiled sadly.
Devi let go of her hand and grabbing her suitcase proceeded towards the main door.
However her steps were halted when his silhouette emerged from the opposite direction.
Flashes of all those beautiful times passed in her eyes, but what followed was a nightmare of tortures and soul breaks she underwent because of him.
What good was love without trust.
She stepped in his direction and stopped right in front of him.
Taking his hand, she pushed his palm open and placed papers in it.
He looked at the them confused and asked in a commanding tone.
" What are these papers!?"
" Divorce papers", she replied in a flat voice and turned to pick her suitcase.
Her strong facade was slipping fast. Tears were on the verge of breaking through but she would not let her resolve weaken.
She had dared to dream with open eyes and she had paid a heavy price for it!
Adhiraj was shocked. Something in his chest pained but he ignored it.
" I have signed these already so..."
" I won't give you divorce!" He exclaimed, his voice desperate.
She turned around on catching the desperation in his voice. She had hope against hope!
" Juti hai tu, sar par mat naach", he threatened dumping the papers aside.
She had to be an idiot. Just how many heartbreaks would it take for her to learn her lesson!
Without responding, she picked her luggage and stepped towards the main door.
Adhi's eyes widened at her insolence. She dared defy him!
Gripping her wrist, he pulled her towards himself.
Their eyes met. He looked away for reasons unknown.
" You can't leave", he shouted pulling her closer.
" you are hurting me", she spoke but he didn't budge.
" Leave me", she asked again but to no avail.
Her anger spiked. This man was the root of all her troubles.
" Bloody leave me alone!" She shouted and pushed him away with full force.
He faltered in his steps but managed somehow.
He looked at her shocked. Never had she reacted in such a way!
" Enough is enough! I am trying to control my anger here so please let me Go", she requested clapping her hands together in front of him.
He didn't budge and she took it as her cue to leave but she was wrong.
His minions stood on the door blocking her route.
And her patience deserted her.
" I was trying to be patient here but you people won't understand things the easy way huh! Fine!! You have no right to stop me here. Law grants me full authority to live my life my way. If you continue to refuse, police will have to intervene!" She threatened.
" Sujangarh ke sarkar bhi hum hai or kanoon bhi", Adhiraj thundered.
" Mr Rajawat, Sujangarh may be your fort but ACP of Jaipur ain't your pet, he is my father's dear friend. So if you continue to be stubborn, he will intervene and things won't end well for you", she quipped back.
" You will throw me in Jail!?" He asked, his voice a mixture of dejection and anger.
She ignored that hurt in his voice. He had hurt her enough!
" I won't mind. And why you only! I might as well file a case of domestic violence against you all!"
This enraged Adhi. She was accusing his masa too.
" Control your anger! Why? Truth stung! Oh! I am sorry...you are a blind fool. You can't see the truth, you only see what Heera Rajawat makes you see, Mr. Foolish Shravan Kumar!" She spat.
" You are crossing your limit!" He warned.
" I hope you won't, Mr Rajawat! Things have changed. You have seen the Perfect wife I was but I will show just how dangerous a woman I can be", she pointed in his direction.
Adhiraj didn't want her to leave. His heart wanted to reach out to her but he didn't bother to hear it.
"Hope to hear an order from court soon!", she warned and stepped towards Adhi again.
His eyes widened when she leaned awfully close. Unknown to him, she had slid the mangalsutra in his coat pocket.
" You will realise your folly one day, Adhiraj", she whispered with all the love she had for him. She was going to shed the last ounce of love in her heart here and now.
His eyes widened. She had taken his first name in such a love filled voice.
She backed away and started leaving. He had lost the will to stop her but masa was not done yet.
" Laadesar...don't let her escape, she robbed your hard earned money, threatened your life and tried to kill m..."
" Will you stop Heera Rajawat!" Devi shouted and turned around.
" Aren't you tired of playing this revenge drama! Don't poison your son at least. He is yours so please don't spoil his innocence! "
" Chori..." Adhi warned.
Devi looked at the man for whom she was fighting. He didn't care! She didn't too anymore!
" Mr Rajawat...I am fighting for your sake! I should give you a reality check too...
You married me FORCEFULLY for some revenge that I had no clue about. You Forced me to live in inhumane conditions. I had to serve you as Maid! If that wasn't enough you Burned Me" she shouted making Adhi flinch at the memory.
" That's not all, Masa and your bhabhisa went on to burn my face off..that too by a cracker!"
His eyes widened and he turned to look at maasa who looked away.
"Please! Don't act as if you didn't know! Then you started using my luck for your selfish beliefs and dumped me away like a rag doll when whatever was between us started making no sense to you! If masa said, I am wrong than I am wrong and that's that!!! Have you got no conscience of your own!!?" She accused as tears trickled down.
" I was accused of trying to poison your Mother! I made the food. The food had poison but it was never proved that I was the one that put poison in food! But why will you think like that, you needed a scapegoat to blame and that was me, the Chauhan!"
Adhi didn't speak a word. Masa tried to intervene but he silenced her.
" Bol" he coerced her and kept standing.
" But for your sake, I went on to drink the cough syrup that you thought was poison. It had poison! but when was it ever proved that someone hadn't messed with its contents!? But why would you think like that! I make up for the perfect target after all!".
" And finally I was thrown in the cellar again! I paid such a heavy price for having trusted myself! I paid with my dreams! I got scarred for saving your Mother that day when she had forced my legs to bleed! I had to be an idiot that I took the attacks aimed at you! I am such an idiot for coming back", Devi breakdown and fell to the floor.
" I was a fool that I started seeing future with you! I returned for you because I Loved You Adhiraj...I Loved You...", she whispered in the end.
Her words resonated in his ears.
' I loved you'
" But I have realised that you are not worth My love and efforts", she stood up wiping her tears.
" And yes masa, you are one selfish woman. Your ego matters the most! In your thirst for revenge you forced your son to marry me! Then when he started accepting me as wife you started plotting...first against me, then against your own son and finally you turned suicidal! You want your son to yourself and that's the jest of it!".
Masa fisted her hands and glared at Devi but she just smirked.
" And one last thing! You all have some heavy misunderstandings regarding one another...let me clear them as a farewell gift", Devi chuckled & stepped towards masa.
" You think that Urmi and bansuri are your faithful lap dogs! But they are after your money", masa's eyes widened and she turned to the duo.
" And Urmi, you think that by marrying Adhi you can rule over this Havelli!! How wishful! Masa has and will always rule over his mind".
" And Mr Rajawat, your biggest shield is you masa according to you but she is a two edged sword that hangs on your neck every time. If you ever bother to go against her wishes, her sword won't hesitate from piercing you! And demo toh apko mil hi chuka hai... "
Saying that, Devi switched on the voice recorder on her phone and masa's voice boomed across the hall, her confession of getting Adhiraj attacked...
His eyes widened in disbelief while she stepped outside the Rajawat haveli mouthing,
" I've given You too much,
I'm takin back my Love"

Kaisa tha...
Claps and likes are welcome😆
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Fantabulous! Nish!
Outstanding! It was as if the entire scene played infront of my eyes! How I wish this happens in reality

Alas, we know this can't happen but atleast your OS gave me something to cheer about in an otherwise bad week of the show. Never have I seen a male lead actually slap the female lead! He needn't have done that
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Posted: 7 years ago
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This was awesome. I hope everything comes true except the slapping maasa part cus I don't see devi doing that.
Very nicely done! You penned all our thoughts :)
Thanks
Please write lots more
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Originally posted by: Santiago24

Fantabulous! Nish!

Outstanding! It was as if the entire scene played infront of my eyes! How I wish this happens in reality

Alas, we know this can't happen but atleast your OS gave me something to cheer about in an otherwise bad week of the show. Never have I seen a male lead actually slap the female lead! He needn't have done that
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Thanks 😉
You are my true friend😆, always commenting and motivating me
Don't u wrry, one day will come in serial when Devi will leave him and he'll realise how empty he is widout her
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Originally posted by: Pagalpinky

This was awesome. I hope everything comes true except the slapping maasa part cus I don't see devi doing that.
Very nicely done! You penned all our thoughts :)
Thanks
Please write lots more


Masa wasn't slapped at all😆 Devi just threatened to snap her wrist if masa dared to raise her hand.
Urmi nd bansuri raised their hands on her but got their wrists twisted instead😃
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Its mindblowing. ...loved it...thank u so sooo much dear...if you are free tell me dear we can replace jeet gayi piya more cv's and will appoint you there...keep writing more ee. ...
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Originally posted by: vinlora

Its mindblowing. ...loved it...thank u so sooo much dear...if you are free tell me dear we can replace jeet gayi piya more cv's and will appoint you there...keep writing more ee. ...

Glad to know that you liked it😛
Me...at CVS place🤪
If that happens, I'll fill serial with romance and romance
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This is Christmas gift for you all!😃
So be generous with this Santa😆 and rain hoard of likes and comments😃

Part 2

"Bitto, what are you doing?" The man shouted for the umpteenth time as he enterred her room.
The woman in question shut the laptop that instant, startled.
" Ha...chote Kakosa..vo..main...I..I...am ready", she stuttered worried on seeing his inquisitive eyes.
" What did you hide?" He asked stepping towards the laptop.
" Kuch...bhi..i...nhi", she stammered again.
He sighed. It's been a week since she returned but her odd ball behavior was worrying the entire family.
She often spaced out, used to skip meals, shed tears and yes, would often switch off her phone or laptop when any one of the family will pop up suddenly.
But they decided against asking her because she had overcome the biggest hurdle of her life.
But today he will get to know the secret she was hiding.
" Open your laptop bitto" he ordered.
But she stayed mum. Exasperated he took the laptop and threatened to break it.
" Nhiii..." she shouted and snatched the laptop surprising him.
Her shriek invited attention of her Buasa and kakisa also as they came rushing in.
" Fine", he relented seeing her pale face and asked, " Get ready... your flight is at 4".
She nodded and scurried off.
" What happened?" Radha asked.
" We will know soon", whispering that he called for Krishu.
" Open Didi's laptop".
As she pressed the enter button, after typing the password, their eyes went wide as the main screen popped open.
The wallpaper...it was Him.
Kakosa sat down and started checking every file, when a folder named " Private" caught his eye and he clicked it open.
His eyes widened in disbelief. The folder was full of 'His' photos...sleeping, angry, scowling, smiling and the list went on...
" Kakosa", the trio turned around as Devi snatched the laptop.
" Bitto ye sab..." He asked worried.
He looked at her. She had laptop pressed to her as if her life depended on it.
'Oh God! And he thought that she had left her miseries behind but she..
" You fell for Adhiraj! " Kakosa announced. Devi looked away and Buasa closed her eyes in disbelief.
" How could you! Only thing he had given you is pain!" Buasa asked shaking her.
Devi didn't reply.
" It must be infatuation...attraction maybe, it is not love...you hear me...it is not love.." Buasa repeated, scared that her life will also become colorless like her.
" I love Him " Devi replied removing buasa's hands.
" If not Him, then there will be no one".
Kakosa fell on the bed, shattered. Years ago, his sister was destroyed by this very love and now his Bitto too!
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Adhi's head reeled.
It's been a week of loneliness, a tiresome week when his world had started to crash.
That voice was Masa's! And Kesar bhabhisa had told him too that she had seen Masa meeting those thugs!
He had refused to believe it and had decided to get proofs about Devi's involvement in all those attacks on him.
He did find proofs alright. BUT they proved that Shekhar had cheated him on Masa's order, they proved that Urmi had thrown the potted plant on him and made him slip on stairs on Masa's order, they proved that Masa had poisoned Herself, THEY PROVED THAT HE WAS BETRAYED BY HIS MASA!!
He remembered Her. Her smiles, her pranks, her silly jokes. God what had he done!!
" I loved you"
He had lost that one woman who had Loved him even after his abuses. That one woman who risked her life endless times to save His. That woman who drank poison without complaining!!
A dull ache resurfaced in his chest.
Was it because of losing Her!?
He had an inkling as to why masa took such drastic steps but her plottings did no change.
He had never hated Devi or her family! He just wanted to see his mother happy.
Even that day when he thought that Devi had poisoned his mother, he wasn't able to muster even an ounce of hatred against her because deep within, his belief in her was unshaken.
" Why am I feeling betrayed!? "
" Masa did what she felt was right. She didn't like her and so...but why am I feeling so restless! Isn't it good that Devi has returned to her happy life finally! Why am I missing her? " He shouted exasperated at his messed emotions and threw the vase on the floor.
Shouldn't it be better if things stayed the way they are? Masa will be happy and Devi, too. But Why can't I envision myself being happy!!?
" Laadesar", masa came rushing and took his bleeding hand in hers.
He snatched it back angrily.
' Ah! So he was hurt that she had tried to hurt him, he was feeling betrayed that she used the love he had for her against Devi!'
Urmi gulped. She knew the reason why he did that. He knew the truth after all.
" Masa tu ja yaha SE!" He ordered and turned away.
" Par..."
" Main hi chala jata hu!" He whispered and left.
Masa was shocked at his behaviour but was absolutely clueless nonetheless.
Adhiraj found himself in the underground cellar.
"Why am I here!" He whispered and slipped onto the abandoned floor and reminisced the only morning he woke up here.
He chuckled. It was because Her so called 'roommates' raided his heaven and he was forced to seek Her Room.
.
.
.
Why?
Why?
Why is it just Devi in his thoughts?
And why was his heart beating as if giving an ominous warning!?
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Devi had left for her college, this evening.
The Chauhan house was unusually silent.
Few hours earlier
" I hope that Bitto will be fine! " Avantika sighed leaning on the chair.
Bharat shook his head.
" Avantika, Bharat ji...come quickly! " Radha shouted.
Perplexed, they looked at each other and jumping from their seats, hurried to Radha.
" What happened!?" Bharat asked quizzically.
" ye...vo...Devi ka..laptop..." Radha stammered horrified, pointing towards the dustbin in Devi's room.
Bharat and Avantika looked in the aforementioned direction.
And gasped in horror. That very laptop that Devi had held onto with her dear life was broken beyond repair.
" Who did this?!" Radha asked.
" Bitto!" Bharat whispered and remembered her red swollen eyes when they were bidding her bye at airport gate.
She had cried but not because she was leaving them but because she had destroyed the only memories she had of Him.
" What did the Rajawats do?" Avantika shouted, being able to understand the pain Devi underwent while breaking the laptop.
" What have you done Adhiraj!? " </ITALICS>
Edited by nish_vir - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
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This is so good! Please do continue soon, there aren't enough stories on this forum!
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Wish the CVS took inspiration from this.
Much better than what we see on actual show.. go on give more updates 😊

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