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Hello me hearties! (I had an overdose of Pirates of the Caribbean this weekend)

I am back with an OS after my NK saga. Like most of you, I had always wished that the makers of the show had given Akash more footage in the serial.

After their marriage, there was never any emphasis on Payal & Akash's love life or interaction. This is my take; an idea that had bloomed in my mind when Khushi had left for Buaji's as the 6 month contract neared it's end date. Hope you like it.

English translation as usual available right after this one. Me hearties, read and comment.😊

Pining for Payal

"When I am with you, we stay up all night,

When you're not here, I can't get to sleep.

Praise God for these two insomnias!

And the difference between them."

~ From Essential Rumi by Coleman Barks

A beautiful Sunday in June was just getting off to a glorious start; the sunlight streamed into the bedroom lighting it up. Akash turned in his bed, and shielding his eyes reached for his glasses.

"Itna ujala kyun hain. aaj to Sunday hai, aur Paayal ko pata hai ki mein Sundays ko der tak sota hun. tho aaj phir? " Akash pondered why Payal had not pulled the drapes closed per her habit as he squinted at the clock. It was time to get up. Strange! It was the norm for Payal to rouse him from his slumber at this time; her delicate fingers tousling his hair as her musical voice rang in his ears. He smiled at the thought of the sweet morning moments that invariable followed every wakeup call on Sundays. It was tradition, a ritual and for the first time in over a year of being married, they were breaking tradition. He would get ready, find her and then collect his dues with interest.

"What if she was not well?" Since the advent of the final trimester of her pregnancy, Payal's mood had been increasingly unpredictable. Concern now clouding his brain, he rolled out of bed and headed to shower.

"Mere kapde? Arre yeh kya? Payal to ab tak iron karke yahan par ready rakhti', par aaj?" he frowned as he tried to recall when was the last time he had to lay out his clothes before he went into the bathroom for a shower. Quickly pulling on the least crumpled shirt over his head, he headed down to join the family. "Good morning Khushiji, Paapa!" he called out cheerily "Bhai kahaan hain?"

"Aapko pata hain na Jiju, Arnavji to Sunday ke din jogging aur kasrat ke baad, apna poora dyaan apne pyaare paudon pe nichaavar karte hain" said Khushi smiling as she set a plate of aloo and poori in front of Akash. "Waise hume pata hain, ki Sunday ke din, jiji aapka Naashta apke kamre me parosti hain, par aaj ke din aapko yehin Khaana padega", she said and was about to turn away when she caught a thunderstruck expression on Akash's face.

Pausing mid stride Khushi turned around and asked him with a naughty gleam in her eyes,"Waise jijaji, aapko yaad to hain na ki kal dupair ko jiji buaji ki yahan gayi thi, unke saat ek do din bita ne ke liye."

"Haaan Haa Haa Haan Khushi ji, bilkul yaad hain. Aur sahi bhi hai. who toda aajkal emotional ho rahi hai, with the pregnancy, toh mein ne hi usse kaha ki buaji ke yahan ek do din ruk jaye" Akash blurted out.

"Arrey Bituwa, ek do din ke liye gayi hai, poore zindagi ke liye nahin, Samjyo" chuckled Manohar not in the least bit fooled by his son's attempts to mask his disappointment.

In that instance, it stuck Akash with a blinding flash, how much of a habit Payal had become. Unlike Khushiji, Payal had never gone to Gupta house by herself, so not having her around in Shantivan seemed very unusual and strange to him. It was as if he were missing a limb. He had been so busy the past few months that he had barely spent any quality time with Payal. But with AR's Fashion Show complete, he had looked forward to resuming their comfortable and sweet routine interactions. In his eagerness he had completely forgotten the little conversation they had had a week back; Payal discussing her overnight trip to buaji's to catch up with her friend who was visiting from Lucknow, and him agreeing to what now seemed a suicidal plan.

Akash was not a selfish man, but when it came to Payal, he felt he had the prerogative to exercise exclusive rights, and now that could hardly be labeled as selfish. "Damn! He should have invited the Guptas and the visiting friend to Shantivan instead. Or have had Payal visit them during the daytime while he was at work, so she could be with him when he was back in the evenings". Mentally berating himself for his lack of foresight and presence of mind, Akash pushed away his half eaten breakfast and walked away in self disgust

To state that the rest of the day passed excruciatingly slowly for Akash, would be an understatement. The withered flowers in the vase in their bedroom reminded him of her absence, Delhi's FM that belted out the golden oldies took him back in time when they had swayed to the meliflous songs of the 50s and 60s one such Sunday and Mid-morning he caught himself wandering off into the kitchen in search of Payal.

Tortured as he was with constant reminders of Payal at every turn, he had at lunch time, habitually reached out to hold Payal's hand under the table and had found Dhruv's instead.

The incident made him the target of even more jibes from his little brother and Di who aided by Khushiji had made it their lives' mission to poke fun at him and pull his leg all day. By tea time Akash was on the verge of storming out of the house to fetch Payal back home, a-la-ASR, or invent an excuse to stay back at Gupta residence, when Khushiji accosted him and led him to the sitting area to join the rest for tea.

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"Hari Parkas! Mera Jueice kahaan hai. Ee Khoon bhari taang maternities home kya gayi, hamra to kauno khayal hi naahin rakat hai. Hello, Hai, Bye, Bye" Manorama sniffed.

"Such Kahat rahe Manorama. Jab Payal bitiya eehan thi, itni khamosh rahti; kisi ko pata nahin laga ki kitna sab ki Khayal rakhti thi. Ab Lakshmi kohi leejiye, kaisan gham ke mare, din bhar kuch nahin khaayi. Payal bitiya ke saat roj ki tarah aaj jo goomne nahin gayi na, yehe liye!" said Naani as she patted her pet goat fondly on the head.

"Haan! chai time ka bhi kuch bhi to mazaa nahin aaraha hai, jiji ke bagair" sighed Khushi leaning back to rest her head against Arnavji's knees, drawing comfort from his firm fingers that immediately stroked her hair.

Akash shifted in his seat, as his yearning to see Payal increased in geometrical proportions propelled by the words of his mother and Daadi. Vivid mental images of him smothering her in a bear hug and kissing her senseless rose unbidden as the family added fuel to the fire inside him.

"Waise Akash, Aap to Khafi miss karte honge na Payalji ko. Kyon na phone karle" suggested Anjali Di in a seemingly guileless tone.

Akash's hopes rose and he quickly got up, "Ha haan di, mein zara", and then blushed as he caught the merry twinkle in her eyes before stammering "who mein phone, apne room mein'''.bhool gaya '...tho '.. mein''.."

"Haan, haan, koi baat nahin Akash, hum samaj the hain, '' giggled Anjali nudging Dhruv who was almost choking on his tea at the look on his brother's face. It was at this inopportune moment that Akash's cell phone chose to ring merrily. Mentally damning the caller to hell, Akash pulled the traitorous instrument out of his pocket and switched it off after ascertaining it was not Payal.

Embarrassment put a silly grin on his face and explanations simply stuttered on his tongue while his family burst into peals of laughter, and Manorama huffed up with a scandalized expression on her face at her son's plight. Even Arnav could not suppress a snigger; his brother was too nice for his own good, and despite years of experience with the antics of his madcap family, was none the wiser.

Akash had no sooner slumped back into the couch and tossed the offending cell phone on the table with a scowl, than it began to ring again, the flashing LCD announcing that it was from Payal this time. In a trice Manorama claimed the phone, and started relating a long list of her woes, the various things that she had to adjust to since Payal was not here to take care of her.

Naani and Manohar exchanged quiet smiles as they looked at Manorama, and Akash. For all her 'Sasuma talk', Manorama had missed Payal almost as much as, if not more than her son had. Blithely unmindful of her son's separation anxiety she hogged the phone for what seemed like eons to Akash.

"Payalji, accha, bahut mazaa aaya hoga na. Nahin nahin, Akash appko bilkul bhi miss nahin karahen hain, Aap chahe tho do teen din aur ruk jayiye" sang Anjali who had claimed the phone from Maami. Akash's mouth fell open in horror at the thought of Payal being away for a few more days. He squirmed in his seat and wished he had left the damn phone in his room for real, at least he could have escaped under the pretext of getting it and would have had a nice long chat with his Payal. Instead he had become the lampoon of the week at the hands of his Di and family.

He caught sight of Arnav's expression of utter disbelief as his bhai raised a single eyebrow pointedly at Akash, urging him to be a man and do something about the situation at hand.

"That's it!" Decided Akash springing up to his feet, He had to take a leaf out of his Bhai's book, and stake his claim. "I'll take it now if you don't mind" he said stepping in between His Di and little brother Dhruv, snatching the phone before Dhruv could get it from Di. "You see, mein Payal ko subah se khafi miss kar rahan hoon, and seeing as I have provided you enough fun, mein ab yeh call apne room mein leta hoon. Thank you very much" and he sprinted up the steps quickly, before he lost his nerve, crooning in the phone to his Payalji.

The family looked on with their mouths wide open at the gentlest of the Raizada's defiant stance, while Arnav's lips tilted in a lopsided smile as he approvingly muttered, "Not bad Akash."

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Posted: 12 years ago
#2

Note to Readers:

Hello me hearties! (I had an overdose of Pirates of the Caribbean this weekend)

I am back with an OS after my NK saga. Like most of you, I had always wished that the makers of the show had given Akash more footage in the serial. After their marriage, there was never any emphasis on Payal & Akash's love life or interaction.

This is my take; an idea that had bloomed in my mind when Khushi had left for Buaji's as the 6 month contract neared it's end date. Hope you like it.

Me hearties, read and comment.😊

Pining for Payal (English)

"When I am with you, we stay up all night,

When you're not here, I can't get to sleep.

Praise God for these two insomnias!

And the difference between them."

~ From Essential Rumi by Coleman Barks

A beautiful Sunday in June was just getting off to a glorious start; the sunlight streamed into the bedroom lighting it up. Akash turned in his bed, and shielding his eyes reached for his glasses. "Why is it so bright in here. Today is Sunday and Payal knows to keep the drapes closed since, I sleep in late on Sundays? Then, How come today '..? " Akash pondered as he squinted at the clock. It was time to get up. Strange! It was the norm for Payal to rouse him from his slumber at this time; her delicate fingers tousling his hair as her musical voice rang in his ears. He smiled at the thought of the sweet morning moments that invariable followed every wakeup call on Sundays. It was tradition, a ritual and for the first time in over a year of being married, they were breaking tradition. He would get ready, find her and then collect his dues with interest.


"What if she were not well?" Since the advent of the final trimester of her pregnancy, Payal's mood had been increasingly unpredictable. Concern now clouding his brain, he rolled out of bed and headed to shower. "Where are my clothes? This is strange and highly irregular of Payal to forget laying out my clothes. What is the matter today?" He frowned as he tried to recall when was the last time he had to lay out his clothes before he went into the bathroom for a shower.

Quickly pulling on the least crumpled shirt over his head, he headed down to join the family. "Good morning Khushiji, Paapa!" he called out cheerily "Where is bhai?"

"Oh! He finished his jogging and work out and in keeping with his Sunday tradition, he is busy showering his plants with his attention and love" said Khushi smiling as she set a plate of aloo and poori in front of Akash. "By the by jijaji, I know that jiji normally serves you breakfast in your room on Sundays. For today though you have to make do with eating at the dining table", she said and was about to turn away when she caught a thunderstruck expression on Akash's face.

Pausing mid stride Khushi turned around and asked him with a naughty gleam in her eyes,"You do remember that Payal jiji is not home. She had left last afternoon for buaji's house to spend a couple of days there." "Bbb but of of ofcourse Khushi ji. I do remember. Infact I had welcomed the idea and encouraged her to go, given her shifting moods during the final trimester of her pregnancy" Akash blurted out. "She is gone for a couple of days son. Not for eternity. Cheer up!" chuckled Manohar not in the least bit fooled by his son's attempts to mask his disappointment.

In that instance, it stuck Akash with a blinding flash, how much of a habit Payal had become. Unlike Khushiji, Payal had never gone to Gupta house by herself, so not having her around in Shantivan seemed very unusual and strange to him. It was as if he was missing a limb. He had been so busy the past few months that he had barely spent any quality time with Payal. But with AR's Fashion Show complete, he had looked forward to resuming their customary tete a tete. In his eagerness he had completely forgotten the little conversation they had had a week back; Payal discussing her overnight trip to buaji's to catch up with her friend who was visiting from Lucknow, and him agreeing to what now seemed a suicidal plan.

Akash was not a selfish man, but when it came to Payal, he felt he had the prerogative to exercise exclusive rights, and now that could hardly be labeled as selfish. "Damn! He should have invited the Guptas and the visiting friend to Shantivan instead. Or have had Payal visit them during the daytime while he was at work, so she could be with him when he was back in the evenings and on Sundays". Mentally berating himself for his lack of foresight and presence of mind, Akash pushed away his half eaten breakfast and walked away in self disgust

To say that the rest of the day passed excruciatingly slowly for Akash, would be an understatement. The withered flowers in the vase in their bedroom reminded him of her absence, Delhi's FM that belted out the golden oldies took him back in time when they had swayed to the meliflous songs of the 50s and 60s one such Sunday and Mid-morning he caught himself wandering off into the kitchen in search of Payal.

Tortured as he was with constant reminders of Payal at every turn, he had at lunch time, habitually reached out to hold Payal's hand under the table and had found Dhruv's instead. The incident made him the target of even more jibes from his little brother and Di who aided by Khushiji had made it their lives' mission to poke fun at him and pull his leg all day. By tea time Akash was on the verge of storming out of the house to fetch Payal back home, a-la-ASR, or invent an excuse to stay back at Gupta residence, when Khushiji accosted him and led him to the sitting area to join the rest for tea.

*********************

"Hari Parkas! Where is my jueice. With Khoon bhari Taang(Payal) away at her maternities home, there is no one who looks after me. Hello, Hai, Bye, Bye" Manorama sniffed. "Indeed Manorama. When Payal was around, she quietly and unobtrusively attended to all of us and took care of our smallest needs. It is when she is gone and we miss those little caring touches that we realize how much she had enmeshed with our lives! Even Lakshmi refuses to eat, since she missed her usual walks with Payal today" said Naani as she patted her pet goat fondly on the head. "True! Even tea time is no fun, without jiji" sighed Khushi leaning back to rest her head against Arnavji's knees, drawing comfort from his firm fingers that immediately stroked her hair.

Akash shifted in his seat, as his yearning to see Payal increased in geometrical proportions propelled by the words of his mother and Daadi. Vivid mental images of him smothering her in a bear hug and kissing her senseless rose unbidden as the family added fuel to the fire inside him.

"I am sure you must be pining for Payalji, Akash. Why not call her up?" suggested Anjali Di in a seemingly guileless tone. Akash's hopes rose, as he quickly got up, "Yeaah, Yeah that's what I I was about to, l l let me ' gg go'", and then blushed as he caught the merry twinkle in her eyes and stammered "Aaah! The ph phone, in my room'''.I forgot '...the phone I mean '.. in my room''.."

"Yeah! Yeah, No worries Akash, I can understand, it does happen when one misses one's dearest," giggled Anjali nudging Dhruv who was choking on his tea at the look on his brother's face. It was at this inopportune moment that Akash's cell phone chose to ring merrily. Mentally damning the caller to hell, Akash pulled the traitorous instrument out of his pocket and switched it off after ascertaining it was not Payal; Embarrassment put a silly grin on his face and explanations simply stuttered on his tongue as his family burst into peals of laughter, and Manorama huffed up with a scandalized expression on her face at her son's plight. Even Arnav could not suppress a snigger; his brother was too nice for his own good, and despite years of experience with the antics of his madcap family, was none the wiser.

Akash had no sooner slumped back into the couch and tossed the offending cell phone on the table with a scowl, than it began to ring again, the flashing LCD announcing that it was from Payal. In a trice Manorama claimed the phone, and started relating a long list of her woes, the various things that she had to adjust to since Payal was not here to take care of her. Naani and Manohar exchanged quiet smiles as they looked at Manorama. Her feigned tough mother-in-law stance aside, Manorama had missed Payal almost as much as, if not more than her son had. Blithely unmindful of her son's separation anxiety she hogged the phone for what seemed like eons to Akash.

"Payalji, Really! You don't say! Must have been a lot of fun. Oh! Don't you worry about Akash, he is fine. Oh no, not at all. He is not missing you at all. In fact, If you ask me, you should stay back a couple of more days at buaji's" sang Anjali who had claimed the phone from Maami. Akash's mouth fell open in horror at the thought of Payal being away for a few more days. He squirmed in his seat and wished he had left the damn phone in his room for real, at least he could have escaped under the pretext of getting it and would have had a nice long chat with his Payal. Instead he had now become the lampoon of the week at the hands of his Di and family. He caught sight of Arnav's expression of utter disbelief as his bhai raised a single eyebrow pointedly at Akash, urging him to be a man and do something about the situation at hand.

"That's it!" Decided Akash springing up to his feet, He had to take a leaf out of his Bhai's book, and stake his claim. "I'll take it now if you don't mind" he said stepping in neatly between his Di and little brother Dhruv, snatching the phone before Dhruv could get it from Di. "You see, I have missed my wife terribly all day, and seeing as I provided you enough fun for the day, I will take this call in the privacy of my room. Thank you very much" and he sprinted up the steps quickly, before he lost his nerve, crooning in the phone to his Payalji.

The family looked on with their mouths wide open at the gentlest of Raizada's defiant stance, while Arnav's lips tilted in a lopsided smile as he approvingly muttered, "Not bad Akash."

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Edited by ForLoveofBarun - 11 years ago
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reswa!!!! first place, yippee!!!!!

unres -

Dil khush kar di, Dopplyji!! Akash's frustration reminded me of my own Vignette 'Ahem'... the poor soul is too nice for his own good...hain naah? And Payal is a habit to the Raizadas... a gentle soothing, background presence...

Btw, it seems I missed out on your Dhruv appearing back at Shantivan... when did that happen? In Serendipity? Have to catch up... and he reminds me of my version of Dhruv, a naughty version of ASR... lol... oh how I wish both of us could somehow apparate ourselves under an invisibility cloak to Shantivan and live there among ASR's plants... 😳 😉

See, I kept my promise!!! I got first place, even!!!! Now, looking forward to your Anjali story and Dhruv story... I'll not be writing a Dhruv-saga anytime soon, so go ahead...

love you, my Dopply!!! I am one proud fake-mommy... seeing how I had given birth to "Published-Author Indu"!! 😃
Edited by Appurs - 12 years ago
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Originally posted by: Appurs

reswa!!!! first place, yippee!!!!!

unres -

Dil khush kar di, Dopplyji!! Akash's frustration reminded me of my own Vignette 'Ahem'... the poor soul is too nice for his own good...hain naah? And Payal is a habit to the Raizadas... a gentle soothing, background presence...

Btw, it seems I missed out on your Dhruv appearing back at Shantivan... when did that happen? In Serendipity? Have to catch up... and he reminds me of my version of Dhruv, a naughty version of ASR... lol... oh how I wish both of us could somehow apparate ourselves under an invisibility cloak to Shantivan and live there among ASR's plants... 😳 😉

See, I kept my promise!!! I got first place, even!!!! Now, looking forward to your Anjali story and Dhruv story... I'll not be writing a Dhruv-saga anytime soon, so go ahead...

love you, my Dopply!!! I am one proud fake-mommy... seeing how I had given birth to "Published-Author Indu"!! 😃


Yeah! finally! You did keep your word. Yep Dhruv makes his appearance in Serendipity. It'll be a while before my Dhruv's saga hits these pages as well. I am with you in wishing I were in RM. Yep Dhruv is a naughtier version - a hybrid of ASR and Akash to some extent, with NK thrown in, but in a very scanty dose.

Hum kitne ajeeb hain! Hain na! Hope to keep seeing you in these pages, love you too my mallu Dopply!🤗 and yes I owe you thanks for rplying to my preview, otherwise like I said, I would have never posted.
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good one yar!! nice to see a different os😛😛
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Superb OS dear, finally Akash learnt something from ASR and behaved like one! Poor Akash, whole family was having fun on his behalf and that made this OS very realistic, sweet & adorable. Well done 😊
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Posted: 12 years ago
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This is good...Aakash finally took a leaf out of his Bhai's book and snatched the phone 😆
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Nice story. Loved reading it. Do you have your index anywhere that I can read sometime. I too wish the creatives utilized Payal and Akash more after the marriage but instead we got Bubbly track for Akash.
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Arreee!! When did you update?? I was waiting for you to update! I did not receive your PM! I accidentally saw it! That's alright, at least I saw it!
Coming to this update, it was wonderful! I always wanted to see more of Akash and Payal in the show! Their characters were totally wasted, and it's not just about screen space, they did not have anything to do! It was so stupid, a guy like Akash who was the most obedient one went against his mother's wishes to marry the girl that he loves and still couldn't stand up for her ever! The CV's and the writers should have been more careful with that! Anyhow, you gave us this beautiful story and now we could actually imagine how romance could have been between them!
I loved the quote with which you started this chapter! Beautiful! Poor Akash, he forgot that Payal had gone to her mother's house! The beginning was very well written, the way you described their habits and schedule! I felt so sorry for him, although it was very amusing as well! And that dining table part where Akash holds Dhruv's hand was hilarious! I also liked how even Maami was missing Payal so much! Everyone was missing her! The Raizada mansion surely is very silent without the Bahus! Everybody was teasing Akash, poor guy he had to deal with his wife not being with him and also tolerate his siblings' continuous teasing! I also liked how you so beautifully captured the small moment between Arnav Khushi when she just leans onto him and he caresses her hair!
I loved the last part! Finally Akash spoke up! He should have done that much before! This was fantastic! Wonderfully written! Please come up with another OS soon! Stay blessed! 😊 😊
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LOL 😆 Poor Akash. He must be thankful to have Arnav as his bhai. We have always seen and read many such situations on Arnav and Khushi but never before on Payash. Though they were a very important part of the story in the beginning but as u said after their marriage it seemed they didn't exist anymore. This was a beautifully written Payash story. Although its focus was on Payash u also gave us a sneak peak of Arnav and Khushi's love and their happy life together. Also the way Arnav helped his brother silently reflected the bond Arnav and Akash shared. Loved the OS. Thanks for the PM :)

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