new ff-pyaar jo kabhi na mitthe.[updated;name changed]

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Posted: 11 years ago
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guyz...
i was a silent reader till date of this forum.had done a short ff on samud.and now i wud like to write something on our very own ashlok,the story will be a continuation from the current track.i hope to complete by one week.so u can assume the lengths of the posts.i wud update the first part probably on monday.looking forward to all ur support!


pyaar jo kabhi na mithe!
chapter 1 on page 2
chapter 2 on page 3 and 4
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Posted: 11 years ago
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welcome dear n yes write on ashlok
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all the best dear...waiting for ur work
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welcome to the forum 🤗 we are looking forward to your story
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so guyz,here i am.posting the first chapter.well i have nothing new in this chapter as it is based on the latest on location videos and assumptions.so,here it goes:
first chapter-in the pits!!
shlok couldn't see a thing and how wud he?all the mud was on him,all that he cud hear at the moment was aastha's laughter.
aastha had pulled shlok along with her to the pit.shlok hadn't thght of that.he turned back to look at his wife and for a few moments was lost in her laughter.her hazel eyes where tears had brimmed up because of her laughter,her hair,which had leaves on it but still was perfect than ever.shlok had a sudden urge to go and pick away those leaves with his hands.but then he remembered why they were there and started fuming with anger.
"how dare u?",he growled and was about to snatch her but aastha cud predict his instincts well and so she jumped back.
"how dare me?really mr.shlok agnihothri?tht's ur say?i didn't do anything.u culdn't even manage my weight?shame on u",she hisssed with a sense of contempt.
shlok knew that any further discussion on the matter wud result only in his defeat so he changed the topic fast'"how do u think we wud climb up?"
"should we call the dog back?maybe he can help us up",aastha was not in a mood to give up.
now, that was more than enough for shlok.he went to aastha and grabbed her hands.he cud see her squirming in pain and smirked.
"now, now, mrs.shlok agnihothri do stop that attitude or else u know what wud happen to ur baba,hena?"
aastha just gave him a furious look.after all her dad's life hanged in this wretched man's hands.she just went on her way to luk 4 smthing so that they cud climb up.shlok too retreated with that evil smirk still lying on his face.
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oh ,writing this ff is difficult than i thought.i wud update the remaining portion of the first chapter after a few hours,do cmmnt ur views on the start.plz...scroll down for more
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Welcome to the forum and nice start
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k 2 encouraging cmmnts and a few sbs has lighted my spirits,now back to the workshop.
shlok had managed to reach up by somehow climbing,now it was aastha's turn.inside the pit he had seen her foot bleeding badly.smthing pinched his mind on seeing that.that is why without any further drama he had lifted aastha out of the pit.
"thanks",aastha murmured.
"just let it be",growled shlok .
aastha just followed him,
"if it weren't for u we wud have reached goa by now",shlok grumbled.
"oh really?yea and by now u wud have ,i don't know probably killed me by now,right?"aastha had tears in her eyes.
now killing and dying was 2 words shlok hated.maybe because of swathi,but he really hated those two words .
shlok turned swiftly and pulled aastha towards him,"why do u want me to kil u huh?"
"i have no interest in dying in ur hands,mr. shlok agnihothri.the only thing i'm interested is in getting home as fast as possible."
"i'm sure u won't mind bathing a little,right sweetheart?"
aastha culdn't get what shlok meant by that.and before she cud understand that shlok had pushed her into the nearby pond.
"help,help!!shlok..."aastha was in a frenzy.
"don't worry sweety,u know how to swim right?",shlok said with his back towards aastha,who by now was sinking,"of course u wud know.a girl who knows how to say lies so efficiently shud also know how to swim"with these words shlok turned back.the sight he saw caught his breath.
aastha was drowning,literally.she was panting back and forth.
"AASTHA...!!"
shlok jumped into the pond.
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now that's enough for today.plz drop ur cmmnts on whether i shud continue or not.today's chapter was a little boring ,i know.but i promise to better my writing skills further.😊😃
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Posted: 11 years ago
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nice start
ok so mr shlok does care for her
do update soon
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guyz studies r interrupting my thght process.i'd write the story only after a gap.i'm really srry.until thn bye😭

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