Chap 14 on Pg 136 Entrapment : An Extremely Dark Advni FF - Page 16

Originally posted by: neverlandspirit

Excuse me for replying so late...I am sorry!

Right off the bat I want to address how possessive Advay is. Of course this is nothing new, Advay was possessive in your other FF too, but somehow that was endearing to see. It was cute.

Here, in ENTRAPMENT, it is almost sinister. It something that makes my toes curl in fear. There was nothing soft, nothing adorable. And I have to give you a around of ovation because you did such a remarkable job with it.

This Advay gave me shivers, in all the dark ways. It showed that he means business! This isn't a pastel colored fairytale. IT WAS AMAZING!

Thansk Mehvish for such a lengthy review, loving these. Yeah you are right, the Advays of Predator and Entrapment are stark opposites. This Advay is not mushy cuddly, TBH does he even kiss her??🤔, hmm yeah maybe he does HAHA!! No he does, but there is a huge diff, you will see.

This Advay gives me shivers too, No this deffo no a fairytale and even a grimm one HAHA!!!

Oh, Chandini! You cutie pie! 'You have blood on you...' That part was hilarious! It bought a nice relief to the story.

Oh thank god u found it hilarious, PHEW !!! This was one part that scared me when i wrote the story, as i thought readers might say eeewww , too gross, to have a convo like this and that too in a temple. But I wanted to make a point, first that this story is going to touch the taboo, convos bet Advay and Chandini are going to be strange and unclean at times if u see what i mean. and also wanted to say to what extent she felt intimidated that she let out such a profound info on thier first meet, and that too in a temple.

The part where Advay says she can never say his name...I don't know why but I instantly thought that he means that in a very BDMStic way. That would be some domineering!☺️ That sentences oozed Power and domination!

Yes it is, it is in a BDMSish way, but its also my own personal dig at the Indian culture of women not being allowed to take thier husbands first name, I do and i have faced ...still face a lot fo criticism. My MIL even to this day flinches ever so slightly when i call her son i.e my pet monkey 😆😆😉, by his first name. My mum and nan used to hound me when i was newly married to my hubby, they would feel ashamed of thier upbringing since i blatantly called my other half by his name. I have never heard any woman in our circles, except for a couple of us rebels, who refer to thier hubbys by first name.So this is my dig too at out culture, trying to say in a way that India and the countries of the sub continent, are male dominated society, where the man is the master, like LITERALLY !!! it is a dommish society.

But in context to the story, yes he doesnt want her say his name in a dommish way, but he eventually lets her say it. That is beautiful when he lets her say it.. i have written that part, and its too emotional. 😳

There first meeting set such a wonderful platform for the story, it straight away gives us the taste os tension, bitterness and confusion, while also giving us the proper background of the characters, so there is really no way we can side with one character.

I agree, the fact that they are Mahatns makes a temple for a rendezvous an obvious choice for a first meeting. A lot happened in that temple, love blossomed yet murders were executed. so that will remain the heart of the story. A constant reminder that murder and deceit happened in a pure place, with the ganges flowing to one side, which shows how monstrous humans have become TBH. no love for god and absolutely no ounce of humanity left anymore.

Yes siding with the characters, Hmm that is going to be a difficult one, I am still unable to side with anyone. They are both right and beautiful in their own ways. Advay is a beautiful man, his flaws gives a character to his persona.

thanks yaar, i am glad u liked the story and loved the COVER !!! 😳🤗

It goes without saying, but it was a great chapter!