Chap 14 on Pg 136 Entrapment : An Extremely Dark Advni FF - Page 105

Originally posted by: neverlandspirit

After significantly calming myself down from the last update, I think I liked this Advay, of course there were some hints towards his not to lovely motive but I can't be angry on him for that, that is the whole plot of the story.

But he really was lovely in these updates.

"I am impressed with myself...looks like I have done decent damage." ❤️❤️

(Shh, but is that foreshadowing?!)

I semi wanted to punch him in the face but the urge wasn't as bad as the last time! 😆

Hello Mehvish my lovely, so good to have a detailed review from you 😳, though i realised that you do read on wattpad too...I am really flattered ❤️

Good to know that you have calmed down now and are once again in love with Advay...tho i cant promise if you wont hate him in my next update or the next or the next ...HAHA!!! TBH i too hate him one part and then cant help but love him in another ...i have been like this ever since I started writing him.

WRT to the kiss and the aftermath...UFF, from my perspective...I am unable to decide if whether he played and manipulated her in the first kiss, that part is truly unclear to me too even tho i wrote it 😆, so for him to speak of how sore her lips I think its jsut his Kinky side playing out...tho he too is on the fence about what he truly wants from his life IMO.

My absolute ABSOLUTE ABSOLUTE favorite part of this update was Murli actually wanting to warn Chandini of her inevitable doom and all following conversation between them.

A lot of authors have used the saga of the moth and fire with that of love. But you really bought in a fresh perspective to it, for me at least. I think so because when Authors use this analogy usually the moth (lover) knows that the fire (lover) is going to ruin them. They are aware of their end.

You however added a nice freshness to it. Chandni talks about about the way the moth flies towards the fire even after years and eons of evolution, THAT WAS PERFECT! Because she is the perfect MOTH! She will turn and choose Advay even after all his flaws and anger and misdeeds! You wrote that so beautifully!

Yeah Brilliant !!! I loved it too..I loved that entire sequence and it actually made me emotional while I was writing it and also when i re read it before posting...What was also heart wrenching was the timing of it all...She is over the moon, she has been kissed by this man she is falling for...but he only speaks of the damage to her lips and manipulates her further to go speak to her mother... not for once does he say last night meant a lot to me etc... but she is oblivious to all this as she is in her own la la land... to top it we have Murli hinting at her ...yet it all falls on deaf ears, and she is flitting around the kitchen floating in her fantasy world, when Indrani and PP play the dirty trick and shatter her fantasy and ruthlessly drag her back to reality...The entire scene was gut wrenching for me TBH

Speaking of Fire and moth, thanks a lot for liking my perspective.. truly means a lot. Yes she is a true moth, hence why she not only loves her flame but also defends him and on the contrary says that his grief is greater than her own doom😳, a true perfect moth for sure.

Coming to the Illusion analogy...Shiz! I have so much to say! And ironically no words to describe them! But let me attempt anyway...

Chandni sobbing in Advay's arm that her life is an illusion, was so sad and heart wrenching...

I fear the day when "My life is a mirage" becomes "I am the mirage" for Chandni.

So far she feels that Happiness, peace and love in life is an illusion, an unattainable destination. But soon, going by the plot of the story, the sentence will be altered to a point where she may feel that it wasn't her life but she herself is the illusion. That, Chandni doesn't exist. She is just a pauper in the hands of Indrani and a means to achieve revenge at Advay's hand.

I never want her to question her own Identity...her own Existence!🥱

But you know what! I do! Because Advay will handle it and make it all alright!❤️ (Also that would be a good opportunity to make him cry tears of blood, as you promised!😆)

Oh wow I loved ur take yet again on the illusion thing 👏👏👏, never thought of I am a mirage ...perspective.. Tho when i think abt it, its so true eventually when the truth is out Chandini will question abt who she truly is, a pawn in Indrani's hands or a means for Advay to fulfil his revenge... so I think it will be interesting to watch and see what happens there and how it plays out...Or maybe i already know 😉😉, and maybe I might shock you all with my take on the story yet again😆...but no matter how teh story unfolds it will bring out a stronger Chandini for sure... as she has to realise how illusory her life has always been. SO thanks again fro this fresh take on the mirage concept...as of Advay he will cry tears of blood ...I am a sadist like that 😆😃

Also, I could go on and on about Advay only celebrating death days! That was deep! SO MUCH PAIN!😭 (I think I have to things concise... so I'll save space here and come back to it later)

Coming to the birthday celebrations! It went to from 0 to sixty real fast! I was giggling at the sibling cuteness and then you bought me to tears...i cried! How cruel has Indrani been to Chandni?! How can someone be so ruthless? Chandini is her Step-daughter...daughter!

Note: The way Advay roared "Murli leave the decorations!" That made me shiver. It was HOT! God!That was HOT AND POWERFUL!

I am eagerly looking forward to Advay's and Indrani's face-off! Both hurt Chandini and both will justify why and GOD! ITS GOING TO BE AMAZING!!!

Oh u cried, Oh my lovely ...give us a hug 🤗, it jsut show how sweet and pure hearted you are to be so deeply affected by what Indrani did to Chandini...Yes she is a witch ...a diabolical bitch in my story and i hate her guts...but i wanted to see her extremely dark in teh show too hence why i am writing her as this dark, it is needed IMO... and also justifies why Chandini is so meek and timid, as her mother is so patronising and dominating, hence Chandini has naturally turned into a submissive, tho she wasnt like that as a child.

Ind Vay face offs will have, are bound to happen, and we will see some fire works for sure when these two lock their horns ...I had hoped we would get this in th show, given how Powerful Ritu was as Indrani...but sadly we never got see the true magnificence of Indrani play out... menacing ..yet magnificent.

Indrani and PP played such a sick trick on Chandni and really put her in a tough spot.

Oh please...they are disgusting people...but that whats add teh spice to the story 😆

Okay, I think I can elaborate more on Advay and his celebrating only death days.

I cant even image how much pain he must be in, to only value the day of his death. That is so sad.

But I think he should be celebrating everyday of his life if he is in that much pain, because you die a little everyday.

You celebrate your birthday only once a year but you can celebrate everyday as being one day closer to your death...I think Advay should look at this in this way until Chandni teaches him to celebrate everyday with happiness and not think of the death.

I so taotally agree with you on this one my lovely, we all die a little everyday ..every minute.. hence we must celebrate every moment of our lives ...as we dont know whats in store tomorrow...it best we make the most of the NOW !!!! U are right, we must always only think about what we have now instead of fretting over what we dont have ...dwell in the present instead of fretting over the past...But like you said Advay is in a lot of pain, he has seen a lot of death and deceit that life has somwhat lost its charm for him...so hopefully Chadnini can bring back that light in his heart ... she can light his path just like her name and take away his darkness

Thanks agains love for all the kind words and for taking the time out to write such detailed analysis to my chapters and for giving her fresh prespective...thanks a lot ❤️

❤️ Chitra

Marvelous update as always!

Loved it!

With much love,

Mehvish!❤️

Originally posted by: Annujam23

Hmmm!!!
Beautiful update that is slowly building up to floodgates being opened ... a monster , who's full of pain , anger , angst n seeking revenge yet tormented hugely by his heart wrenching love for his soulmate , who is yet to realize it ... n herself too ...!!! Currently he's alone on this painful journey ...!! Once she comes to know the truth about him n herself it's going to be one emotional rollercoaster ride...!!!!
Sigh! Sigh! Sigh !

Hi my love, sorry about the late reply, have been busy writing the updates 😳.

OH u are so right, yes Advay is a monster, but yet as you rightly say he is tormented ...and that whats tugs at the heart...and his love for her is what will break our hearts ...along with his 😳...Like i said at the start of this story, that his intense love will be our weakness as readers, hence why we wont find his actions wrong,H hmmm.TBh i dont think he does anything morally wrong TBH...Hmmm he does but somehow it feels right 😆😆, that the charisma of our Advay,...but together they will take us on a heart wrenching emotional rollercoster for sure...so lets brace ourselves.

Murli being the epitome of devoted loyal bro cum friend ...again reminds me of unwavering devotion Nandi has for his Lord ...
He's going to be yo young between the lord and his mata / bhabhi though unflinching loyalty to his master will be his mainstay ...!!!

Oh wow this is incredible...TBH in teh future there is a scene where Murli is sitting at Advay's feet and I got the same feeling, that he is the perfect Nandi ...and again there is another scene when he sits Chandini's feet... u will see it when it plays out ... its a heart wrenching update... it will happen later in teh story ... But thanks for bringing this analogy out...Murli is the one who is totally in a fix as he cannot choose between his lord and his mother...and he has his reasons for that which he tells later 😳

Chandini is still in the natal stage ... reminds me of sati who was in love with her lord though still human ... waiting for her beautiful yet painful evolution to self realization 😭 😭 😭 ...!!!

I totally agree, but she will evolve and will find her strength for sure 😃

Advay is complicated man for sure but his life life has been one complicated mess but he's still Bholenath , angry though ... !!!! Only way for Chandini to unite with him and he succumbing to her love completely is penance ...which here it's going to be one whirlpool of incredible pain , pleasure , emotional torture as they are both helpless in their unconditional love for each other ... that is going to be heart wrenching for poor us 😭 😭 ... I'll be yo yoing massively for sure 😆 😆

HAHA i totally agree this love saga is going to be one heart wrenching experience for the readers, actually i have bawled my eyes out almost every chapter that i have written, and it only gets even more emotional as the chapters progresse...TBH i knw this is abt BDSM also, but like i said it is only one aspect of the story and my humble attempt at showing that intense sexual acts such as these are extremely emotional and deeply unsettling ... the bond that one forges in these kinds of acts is out of teh world... as trust is paramount ...so is it going to be easy to trust the man you hate and is it going to easy to not break the woman you love to hate...and hate to love.. HAHA!!! thats the crux of the story to some extent... but it plays out beautifully because at the end of the day they are soul mates...who have been lovers since time immemorial ...and so have to find solace in each other...but will it be a happy story...no ...its an emotional story ... thats all i can say... 😳

thansk again love for your lovely comment, I am sorry o am yet to reply to teh one u left on Wattpad...will do in shortly ... once i get a moment to catch my breath 😆😆, i am updating predator next...so my fingers have been flying all over my keyboard..😆

thansk again for taking the time to write such detailed reviews and for giving us a beautiful Shiv shakti perspective to this story ... 🤗

❤️ Chitra

PS is Aqqo also your username ???

Originally posted by: Gargi.G

Hi Chitra,

I could not reply on last few chapters, life got in the way. But I have loved them as usual. I like how the characters are growing. Specially the bit with Mahakaal puja. It would be lovely to see how Chandni reacts when she comes to know about it. Also I see how Chandni is trying to fight her own set of rules, she has learned from day one. Even though Advya wants her to submit to him but somehow he is making her stand for herself too.

Again all my perspective. Loved the chapters. Also I can feel that you love writing these characters as much as we love reading them. So kudos to you.

GG