Adni FF Burning Love chapter 1 updated

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Hello

This is my first FF on Adni
This FF is based on the dark intense love story which was never delievered or completely ruined by the makers
Hope u all will like it
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Posted: 8 years ago
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INDEX

Prologue- Page 1
Chapter 1 - Page 2
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Prologue

The story starts on a full moon night view with a monologue

"Wo din abhi tak bhula nahin. 16 saal beet gaye us din ki baad par phir bhi aisa lag raha hai ki kal ki hi baat thi. Mujhse bola gaya hai ki sab kuch bhool kar aage

bhar, aur maine aisa hi kiya taaki main wapas aake woh kahaani khatam karoon jo us din shuru hui. Ab tumse milne ki intezaar hai

Tumhara
-------------"

"That day was never forgotten. 16 years have passed since that day and it feels like as if it was only yesterday . I was told to forget everything and move on and I

did only to return and complete the story that started on that day. Now I'm waiting to meet you

Yours
------------"


Hope you like it

This is my first time writing in Hindi. If I made any mistake then I'm sorry as Hindi is not my language

And if the title is not good feel free to suggest a good name

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Congrats on your 1st story
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Interesting start dear.
Continue soon please.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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It's the story that matters dear.
Don't worry if you don't know Hindi. Just skip the Hindi dialogs then and stick to the story in English only.
Good start of the story, at a time when everything is falling apart in the Show and this Forum .
Keep up your spirits high and continue with your writing.
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Hello dear continue soon please
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Show is ending in 3 days
So will wait for the story
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Chapter 1

The sun was warm. On a bright day, people were seen everywhere in the city of Allahabad with some who seemed dressed as what seems to be for an occasion. There stood a group of men having a conversion between them.

Man A- today is a very big day

Man B- yeah a big day

Man C - what big day

Man A - don't you know

Man C - no

MAN B- looks like you have not been here long in this city

Man A- I will tell you, there is a big puja in the shiv Mandir

Men C- oh ok what special about this puja

Man B - the special thing about this puja is that it is held once every 16 years

Man C- why 16 years, is there a reason

Man A and B look at each other and then Man A says "well we don't know the reason but since it is a big puja so everyone is looking forward to it"

Man C -okay

Man B - why are we talking about this puja and stuff let's talk about something else

A little far yet next to them stood a person hearing their conversation. He then leaves the place and goes to a deserted area and takes out his cell phone and dials a number


In a house somewhere a room is shown where Advay is standing in a dark room in front of a picture. His phone rings

Advay - hello

Caller - hello sir

Advay oh, tell me

Caller says something muted

Advay - okay keep an eye on everything there

Caller - yes sir

Advay - I'm coming over there

Advay ends the call and comes closer to a side wall and drops a curtain on a picture and says "I'm coming to burn u with me


A mansion is seen and a balcony of the second floor is shown, Chandni is seen standing next to a pillar, watching a beautiful chandelier, shining its lights on the living area. She says "I make sure the chandelier stands 12 feet above the ground every time, just like you told me Dev. Where are you Dev, I miss you

She then goes to the other side of the balcony that has a view of a beautiful garden. Shilpa comes to her and says "Jiji the Maha Aarti will start soon. Hearing this, Chandni gets tensed.


Cut to the temple, where the priest and some people have started preparing for the Maha Aarti. The priests are checking the elements required for the Aarti and the people were busy decorating the temple with flowers and were coloring the route for the Maha Aarti.

Indrani is seen entering the temple and the people decorating the temple welcome her with (high) respect. Indrani goes to the priest. The priest welcomes her and Indrani asks about the preparation for the Maha Aarti. The priest says "Everything is ready, there is the special flowers that is left which will arrive soon

Back at the mansion, Chandni goes to a room and sees her father trying to select a shawl for his suit (sorry don't know the name of it in hindi). She goes to him and selects the green shawl for him. He looks at her and she forwards him the shawl and he takes it. She then gives him some paper book for the Puja and also she makes him wear his shoes and all the while he keeps looking at her. Chandni says "You like to sit at ghat and see sunset, you have sugar, and eat laddoos by hiding, I know you wrote two love letters. He says "You know a lot about me, who are you. Chandni says "I'm your daughter Chandni.

Chandni then calls Shilpa. Shilpa then comes and Chandni tells her to tell the driver to take her father to the temple. Shilpa leaves and Chandni takes her father to the living room. Then Shilpa comes and escorts Chandni's father to the car.

Chandni goes back to the balcony and sits on a chair and sees the flower garden admiring its beauty. Mamaji comes and says "you have sent your father. When will you go? Chandni sees him and gets tensed.

A car is seen moving on the route leading to the Mandir. Advay is seen in the car watching the road looking sad and lost. He says "This city has changed a lot since the last time I was here.

Just then the car stops at the Mandir's entrance. Advay gets down the car and tells the driver "You know where to stop, right? The driver says "Yes sir. Advay says "Good. The car leaves and Advay makes his way to the Mandir. Advay says "This city destroyed my life, took my parents away, my name, everything. Advay enters the Mandir and looks around and he seems like he is reliving his past as his eyes are filled with sadness. He says, "But now, I'm back to make them pay for what happened 16 years back. My life was burned 16 years ago, but now I won't burn alone, but you'll burn with me too, Chandni Yash Narayan Vashisth. Welcome to Hell Chandni.

Far away from Advay, Shakun is seen looking at a temple door which is closed, she says "Big sis, your fate is so strong and I can't wait to get it in my hands. Once I get it, then you won't be able to order us around like idiots. Kajal is seen coming to her saying "What are you saying, Shakun. Shakun says "I was wondering if this door will open this time. Kajal says "What does your stars say? Shakun says "The stars say that when the time is right, the doors will open. Kajal laugh and says "Lip-stick ki kasam, this door won't open like that, Chandni should come here to get the door open Shakun says "How will Chandni come here as she haven't stepped out of the house for a long time. Kajal says "Yes, she was only at home, and she always says she's afraid to get out of home. Shakun says "Of course she'll be afraid as she can't see people questioning her.

Just then Indrani comes and looks at both of them sharply. Indrani says "These 3 days are very important, as this day comes once every 16 years. Shakun says "Will the door open this time? Indrani says "Yes it should open this time as we can't afford to make any mistake. Last time we made a mistake and the door was not opened but this time there won't be any chance for it. Kajal looks at Shakun and Shakun says "Do you think Chandni will come? Indrani says "Yes she will come, she has to come cause if Chandni won't come then our reality will get exposed, so Chandni has to come at any cost.

Back at the mansion. Chandni is tensed and holds a side of her saree tightly. Mamaji comes and sits on a chair next to her. He says "Chandni, when will you go to the Mandir? Chandni looks at him teary eyes and says "Mamaji, you know I can't go, Mamaji says "I know, but you have to go, as it is important. Chandni starts crying and says "I'm afraid, I just can't go. Mamaji says "But my dear, you should go, cause if you don't go then problem will fall on your father. Chandni says "On father. Mamaji says "Yes, for your father's sake you should go.

In the Mandir two people are seen walking tensed, the priest notices them and calls them to him. They come to him; the priest asks them "What's the matter, what happened? One of the two men says something to the priest (Muted). The priest gets shocked.

TBC

Note:

I hope you will like it, as it is same as the series, I only made some slight changes, and of course I have omitted the Murti falling scene.

I would like u guys to suggest me how to make Advay, Veer meet the first time, (AS the Murti falling scene is omitted) or should I make them meet way later in the series.

I would like to know if u would like me to go slowly episode by episode or to jump forward at some point. or you want me to change my story completely.

Edited by saito - 7 years ago
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Posted: 7 years ago
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Dear,I will suggest you to change the story ,write it ,shape it,decorate it on your own way,but make it as an AdNi love story.That's what most of the reader's will love,I think.😳

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