Posted:
thank u dear for u feedback...yes I do agree about longer paragraph n will try to keep them short n crisp the next time😃I really like your story and your portrayal of everything. Your writing style is great. There aren't any mistakes that disturb the story or the reading experience. the only thing I would say is perhaps just splitting the paragraph into smaller paragraphs because these (I felt) were maybe a little long but then again if you like this, thats totally fine as I said, this isn't a big deal and your story and your writing are the main thing here.
Mannat Har Khushi Paane Ki
Veer Hanuman
