ViDha two shots : An endless love (part 2 updated. Page 3) - Page 3

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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hii guys.. Once again nandita here. First of all thank you so much for appreciating my first OS on vidha. I know i am late. Actually i am a bit busy these days. Sorry for late.
Here goes the next part.:

She was coming upwards. Viplav was lost in her but he felt a sharp pain as he recalled her harsh words for him. He didn't want to. be blamed again.
"She doesn't want me in her life... I shouldn't face her.." He thought and started walking towards his car.
But a sweet voice called him from behind.
"Wakil Saab... Rukiyee.."
He stood their frozen as he heard her voice.
"Did she called me???.." He thought.
"No no.. I must have been mistaken.." He started walking again.
"Why he is not responding??" She thought and called him again " Suniye Viplav babu".
He didn't wanted to stop so he continue walking...
" Ajeeb hi ladka hai...Rakshas kahika" dhanii murmured,being annoyed.
She called him on the top of her voice for the last time "are suno na..VIPLAV...Ruk jaoo... VIPLAV.".
Viplav's heart skipped a bit.. As Dhani took his name.. He slowly turned behind and saw her standing with a annoyed face.
"Tumhe Sunai nahi deta hai ka???" She asked him.
"Bolo kya bolna hai..." He said with a stern face.
She hesitated a little and finally spoke up " Hume tumse mafii mangni hai.."
Viplav could not believe his ears.
"Is this girl really asking for forgiveness..!!!" He thought.
As he stood there silent she continued politely with guilt in her voice "hume maaf kar dijiye wakil Sab... Humne hamesha apko galat samjha. Hamari galtio ke liye hum mafi chahate hai."
His face brightened up with a mischievous smile.
''Viplav ki mafii itni asani se nahi milti rajkumari ji..hamara 1 shaft hai" He said
"Shart...!!kaisa shart..!!" She asked being confusgrin
"Aj se tum Hume rakshas nahi... Wakil Saab vi nahi.. Srif Viplav kaheke pukarogi..only then i will forgive you" He said.
Her eyes got widened..she tried to protest but couldn't. And she finally nodded in agreement.
"Hume maaf kardo vi..viplav.." She fumbled and managed to say somehow.
"My name never sounds so melodious.." He thought.
"Chalo maaf kar diya tumhe..hamara dil bohot bara hai.." Viplav said with a grin
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Dhani heave a sigh of relief as he forgave her that easily.she was trying hard to escape from his gaze which was fixed upon her.
"Achha to hum chalte hain.." She said without looking at him.
She was about to go..but destiny had some other plan...
Her leg slipped due to the water on the ghat.
Viplav was too quick to react.
He caught her in no time. Her arms circling his neck. Her eyes closed tightly due to the fear of falling...her trembling lips...her
rosy cheeks.. For the first time viplav observed her so closely and realised yes she was beautiful.
she seemed the picture of perfection to him. Her innocent face and sudden closeness create such a aura that Viplav forget to breath.
she seemed the picture of perfection to him. Her innocent face and sudden closeness create such a aura that Viplav forget to breath.
Though her eyes were closed she could understand it was him only. She was too timid to open her eyes.somewhere deep in her heart she was feeling safe. Though she didn't wanted to accepted..she also knew that he was her saviour.
Their hearts pounds next to each other as he hold her closed to him.
Finally Dhani gathered all his courage and opened her eyes.
But when his deep brown eyes met with her Hazel ones.. They forgot everything.

PS:,for the first time i have tried to write a romantic scene. Don't know how was it. Please do comment and let me know.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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From rakshas to vakil babu to viplav baby and finally to viplav... I Liked this transition. And then the slip and the catch..amazing and extremely romantic. Well done.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: stranger2rose

From rakshas to vakil babu to viplav baby and finally to viplav... I Liked this transition. And then the slip and the catch..amazing and extremely romantic. Well done.

Thank you so much dear. :) ur comment means a lot.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Wow what a wonderfully written OS ,Nandu u made me float in their dreamland,lovely yaar😳😳
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: rerose

Wow what a wonderfully written OS ,Nandu u made me float in their dreamland,lovely yaar😳😳

Thank you so much pretty dear.just saw ur comment. :)
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Posted: 9 years ago
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It was a two shots Tarun. So it ended here. As two part is over. 'Soon i will come with a new story.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Nandita123

It was a two shots Tarun. So it ended here. As two part is over. 'Soon i will come with a new story.


kk we will wait for it...😳
Edited by tarun1234567 - 9 years ago
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Posted: 9 years ago
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nandita.. got here finally.. and glad I read you romantic..os.. I enjoyed it was light ,informal and quite romantic.. the dialogues were great.. it was romance..when he picks and chooses what he wants her to call him.. by his first name ! her reluctance and shyness is what created romance.. of course ,the slip ,trip and ending up in his arms in rescue position is the ultimate romance!!
well done for your romantic tale.. thanks for the pm.. and nandita do write more.. if your heart tells you too.. much love hammie.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Originally posted by: Hamlet53

nandita.. got here finally.. and glad I read you romantic..os.. I enjoyed it was light ,informal and quite romantic.. the dialogues were great.. it was romance..when he picks and chooses what he wants her to call him.. by his first name ! her reluctance and shyness is what created romance.. of course ,the slip ,trip and ending up in his arms in rescue position is the ultimate romance!!
well done for your romantic tale.. thanks for the pm.. and nandita do write more.. if your heart tells you too.. much love hammie.


your comments are true inspiration hammie. thank you..thank you so much for such a detailed comment and inspiring me to write more.
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Posted: 9 years ago
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Hi...
Beautiful post...👏👏
Please cont writing..😊

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