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Posted: 3 years ago
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After patching up Shivi with Rajeev, now Sai thinks to patch up with her Modak!

Thinking about her husband's behaviour with her and introspecting her past, an idea striked her which will not only make Virat forgive her but also accept his own flaws.

On the wedding day of her dear Shivani bua and Rajeev, she thought to herself ''either l will get my love today or will get a closure to the chapter named Virat Chavan" . With a determined face she was waiting for her special guest. Virat who was noticing her, thought to himself as Sai cooking up something again. Here Rivani were taking their pheraas which reminded Sairat of their own auspicious moments, but Virat let his ego overpower his love for Sai and put up a face of being totally unaffected. Rivani's marriage ended with the entry of Neil, bestest buddy of Sai in Gadchiroli. Seeing him, Sai's face lit up as she met him after five long years. She ran to Neil who was standing with his hands wide open welcoming Sai. Neil felt all weight over himself as he saw Sai fainted in his arms, fear clearly visible in his eyes he was patting her cheeks to get her up but in vain. First of all Virat was confused seeing Sai clinging to a unknown person and then top of that Sai being unconscious in someone else's arms turned Virat green eyed. He ran to Neil and snatched away Sai asking her to get up, "Sai tumhe kya hua hai utho", were the only words escaping from Virat's mouth. Neil being practical asked to call a doctor and take her to room. But being a stuck-up Virat said in rage-filled voice, " ye meri biwi hai tum mujhe nahi bataoge ki mujhe kya karna hai, aur tum ho kon?" To which Neil replied, " Ye waqt tumhari bakwaas sunne ka nahi hai mujhe Sai ko dekhna hai please side hato aur apni jhuti hamdardi dikhana band karo". To take the matter in control, Pulkit jeeju came running and asked Virat to take her up and check upon her until he comes. Virat lifted his wife not before giving a death glare to Neil and went up. Pulkit jeeju after checking Sai congratulated the whole Chavans for promoting themselves.This was a thunderclap for Virat, he thought to himself, " mere aur Sai ke bich mai aisa koi rishta hi nahi hai , to fir Sai pregnant kaise ho sakti hai? " Shock was an understatement for Chavanins more precisely Pakhi didi. Although all elders were happy and excited for the arrival of a little member in their family. Didi mumbled with horror, "Viraaahhht!!! tum aisa kaise kar sakte ho?" Observing the expressions of Virat, didi started to spit out venom, " ye bachha tumhara nahi ho sakta Virat, Ye ladki tumhe dhoka de rahi hai, dekha nahi aaj kaise iss anjaan aadmi ke saath chipak rahi thi, ho sakta hai ye isika bachaa ho!" This statement of his so called best friend had sown the seed of mistrust. But it depends on Virat whether to water the seed or uproot it forever. Composing himself a little, " mai akele Sai se baat Krna chahta hoon" . Knowing the upcoming storm, everyone left silently. Slowly Sai opened her eyes to see an enraged Virat staring her with bloodshot eyes.

V : Congratulations Sai hum, oh sorry! tum aai banane wali ho!

S: Fir aap bhi baba banane wale hai, kya aap khush nahi hai?

V: Sai ye tum achhe se janti ho ki hamare beech aisa koi rishta tha hi nhi, to fir ye bachha kaise? (Held her arm tightly) kiska hai ye bachha? (Raising his voice)Jawaab do Sai mujhe!

S: Chodiye mujhe dard ho raha hai.

V: Tumhara dard uss dard ke saamne kuch bhi nahi hai jo tumne mujhe diya hai, tum ek dhokebaaz , characterless ladki ho.

S : Bass!!!( showing her hand) Waah! Mr. Chavan Waah !( Slow claps) jo insaan vishwas ke misal deta hai uska bharosa kahan gaya? Aapko ek pal nahi laga mere character par sawal uthane ke liye. Par maine jab aapko kisi aur ka pati batate sunna, kisi aur ke bachhe ka baap batate suna, mujhe aap par koi shak nahi hona chahiye lekin aap ek khabar par jo jhuti bhi ho sakti hai uspar mera character certificate bana sakte hai? Ye doughlapan kyu? Aap keh rahe hai mujhe aap par bharosa nahi par kya aap mujh par bharosa karte hai?, ek baar nahi har- bar aap mere upar shak karte hai, mujh se, hamare rishte se dusron ko ehimiyat dete hai aur mujh se ye umeed karte hai ki mai saamne Rakhi cheezo ko, sabuton ko nazarandaaz karu aur aap par aankh band karke bharosa karu?

Virat was dumbstruck at Sai's words , he knew very well that each and every word was true. He was at loss of words. He never realised his own mistakes but kept on blaming Sai for not understanding him,but did he gave any clarification about his priorities and actions. He realised that he was not the only one to suffer but his Sai also had faced a lot. She was with everyone yet lonely.

Sai continued, aap kab tak waade ke pichhe chupenge , kya aap koi mahapurush hai Jo sabko waada dete firte hai aur wo bhi aise ki koi bohot bade danveer ho. Kisi ko sanyas lene ka waada dete hai to kisi ke bachhe ho laane ki waada dete hai. Kabhi socha hai ki aap ke iss harkat se logon par kya asar pad raha hai? Humari dosti se phele aap mujh par hamesha shak karte the, mere baaton se upar aapko baaki gharwalon ki baat lagti thi, thik hai! maine sabke liye aap ko maaf kiya. Par hamare dost banne ke baad bhi aapne mere haazar baar puchhne par Shruti ke baare mai kuchh nahi bola. Aur Han aapki chahiti dost ko kaise bhul jau wo to ek moka nahi chodti aapko mere khilaf bhadkane ke liye fir bhi aap unhe aapko chhune dete hai, khana lane dete hai. Aap unhe ye kyu yaad nahi karwate ki wo Mrs Samrat hai Mrs Virat nahi! Ya aapko ye sab achha lagta hai? Attention milta hai na bhabhi se? (Virat nodded his head sideways) Aapko hamara rishta khatam hona manzoor tha par Shruti kon hai wo batana nahi. Aapki justification kya thi? Han! Tumhari safety and reputation. Par aapke sach na batane par bhi mujhe khatra tha aur meri izzat bhi uchhali gayi. Agar Sada ne mujhe aapke aane se phele hi maar diya hota to, mere saath kuch galat kar diya hota to? Aap kya karte ? Mai daave ke saath keh sakti hoon tab bhi aap waade ke peeche hi chupte.

Virat was drowning in guilt with each passing second. The air around him seemed to be accusive of him for breaking a pure soul to this extent.

S: Aap apne bhabhi ke saath ek ghar mai bhi rahe to aap dudh se Dhule hue maryada Purushottam, lekin mere dost ne mujhe pani pila diya to mai characterless? Huh! Aap hamesa mujhse apni gunaahon ke liye maafi mangte hai aur mai, kitni bewakoof thi! Jo har baar aapko maaf kar diya, mujhe to aapse sikhna chaiye ki gussa aur nafrat kisse kehte hai?Mai pichle ek mahine se apni atmasamaan ko daav par lagake, apne dard ko chupake ghut-ghutke jee rahi hoon aur aap aap aise bhaav kha rahe hai jaise aapki koi galti hai hi nahi. Ek rishte ko kamyaab karne ke liye dono taraf se effort lagana jaruri hota hai par abb aur nahi mai bhul gayi thi ki mai Sai Joshi hoon jo sirf sahi ka saath deti hai aur apne atmasamaan ko sabse upar rakhti hai, pyaar se bhi.

Virat 's face got a spark back in his face, he wanted to confirm if he heard right! Like he got a ray of hope in a hopeless sea.!

Sai got up from her bed and started packing her bags.

Virat thought this is the last chance to have his Sai back, if she will go away today then she will never return back to him!

V: Sai mai tumse bohot pyaar karta hoon!!! ( Sai's hand stopped) Mai naahi tumhe kisi aur ke saath dekh sakta hoon nahi tumse dur reh sakta hoon. Hum aksar jisse pyaar karte hai usse ye ummid karte hai ki wo hume na bole hi samajh Jaye , kisi ki baat ka farak pade ya na pade par uski har baat aapke dil mai pathar ki lakeer ban jaati hai. Maine bhi tumse yahi ummed ki thi par mai ye bhul gaya tha ki pyaar vishwas, samman, Lagaav ,saath, khushi ka mohtaj hota hai, jiska maine tumhe koi ehsaas nahi karwaya tha. Mai kuchh badal to nahi sakta par sudhar jarur sakta hoon. Tumhara dil bohot bada hai kya tum mujhe ek aur moka dogi please? ( He fell on his knees and cried bitterly).

Sai knew both were at fault, she at being impulsive , reaching at conclusions without analysing the situations and believing at it blindly whereas Virat being short -tempered loses the ability to think practically. But the bond between them was something very special, which destiny, Nature and their own souls had made which cannot be broke apart by some evil eyes or they themselves.

Sai also went to the level of Virat and wiped away his tears.

S: Virat Sir, galti hum dono se hui hai, hum nahi communicate karte hai nahi ek dushre ko itne achhe se samjhate hai jisse misunderstandings itni badh jati hai jo hum ek dusre se dur kar deta hai. Abb hum ek dure ko sudharenge , we will evolve together . Mai chahti hoon hum dil se jude deal se nhi. I love you Virat Sir!!!❤️ Itna jitna aap soch bhi nahi sakte.

V: I love you more Sai!! ( Sai pouted), We will start afresh!Par Pulkit ne ye kyu kaha ki tum pregnant ho?

S: Ye hamara plan tha(winks) aapko aapki galti ka ehsaas dilane ke liye KJ. Isse pehle aapka jalkuda mode on ho jaye to mai bata deti hoon Neil mera bhai jaisa hai jisse mai bachpan mai Rakhi bandhti thi, fir wo America shift ho gye aur l lost contact with him. And holi ke din hum market mai mile the.

V: Ohhh... Ek minute tumne mujhe jalkuda kaha?

Sai : Han! Koi shak hai kya?

V : Tumhe to mai and he started chasing Sai causing to fall above Sai on the bed . He leaned closer and kissed away all the miseries of their relation promising togetherness till eternity.

And someone outside the door feels everything shattered and goes away shedding tears as everything came to an end be it the false hopes or conspiracies for winning back her two days yoga retreat love back.

The End!!!

Forgive me if something is illogical.🤧 Reviews are always welcome.

Thankyou!

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Posted: 3 years ago
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It is not illogical at all! Sai can completely do this and it is needed to start a conversation. cornering Virat is the only way to get him speak at this time as he is hiding in his hurt.


I loved the conversation where they addressed the mistakes on both the sides. Loved the dialogues in Hindi. It brings out emotions too well.


Wonderful plot and dialogues. Loved it. ❤️


PS: you could have named the story 'Jalkukda" :D

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Posted: 3 years ago
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I really emjoyed this. Very nicely written. The V of the show also needs a reality check and a mirror held up to him like you've done in this OS. Please write more! This was really great! 👍😊

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Wow this is so good. The way Sai started asking relevant questions to Virat and showing him the mirror, that was super. Just super!

And no re. Nothing was illogical. The flow was smooth as well. 👍🏼

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Oh you changed the title! Haha 😂

It will grab eyeballs for sure

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Thankyou so much saditl for the review❤️.

I was also confused about the title. Thankyou for the suggestion.

Glad that you liked it.😊



Sorry l cannot tag you.

Edited by Khushi_Raghav - 3 years ago
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Posted: 3 years ago
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Feel happy that you liked this work. I appreciate for taking out your precious time and reviewing. Thankyou so much Neerja !!!

We cannot expect anything more other than toxicity and dominant attitude of ML.😑

Means a lot, will surely come up with another one.

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Thankyou so much for the compliment Nutmeg, it made my day to hear that!!!

I neither know anyone's name nor can tag anyone so using this username, hope you all would not feel offended.


But I can guarantee that l was much more logical than the makers!😂 Totally logical or not l don't know.

But l believe you so this was logical.😁

Edited by Khushi_Raghav - 3 years ago
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Posted: 3 years ago
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This is so good.

V definitely needs to hear all this and much more.


Aur aise khurafati ideas Sai ko hi aa sakte hai 😆

Thank you for this 😊

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Posted: 3 years ago
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Yea, V needs to listen much more this is just a threshold for Sai's outbrust ( like a mountain and a mouse) but I tried to touch every boundaries. Baaki sab maine Sai par chhod diya, l know she will bone repair V if he repeats the same mistake or takes a wrong step.😂


I am satisfied to know that you liked this work! Thankyou for Moor your reviews.❤️

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