A different take on Birthday Night OS

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Hey guys 🤗🤗 this is my first story so do give me some pointers for improvement if you can please 😊😊 it will start from the scene where Sai showed Virat his grey hair.


Sai made Virat sit on the chair infront of the mirror. Sai teasingly says Dekhiye aapke na safed baal aane vale h iska matlab toh yhi h na ke aap buddhe hone vale h.


Virat is shocked hearing that but before he could say anything Sai further says Aur vaise bhi Grahpravesh vale din kaku ne bhi toh kaha tha ke mein aapse aadhi umar ki hu , toh tab mein the 18 years ki toh aap approx 36 years ke hue na aur iss hisab se toh lagbhag jab apne 12th pass kia hoga tab toh mein paida he hui hongi 😜😜 and then turned her face to side to hide her grin. Still in shocked state Virat asked her Sai...mein.....mein tumhe 36 years ka lagta hu !?!? Sai enjoying Virat's shock asked him innocently Kyu ? Aap nhi ho ? * gasp * matlab app isse bhi jyada old ho ? Bappa ! Yeh kis buddhe se shaadi ho gyi meri.


If Virat was shocked before then now there are no words to describe his shocked state. But before he could say anything Sai bursted into peals of laughter.

Sai sees the incredulous and hysterical look on Virat's face and can't control herself and bursted out laughing. She goes to stand beside the chair and pulled Virat's cheeks and says Aww ! Virat Sir aao kitne cute ho ! Virat's cheeks turned red and his eyes widened , he stammered Huh ! Mein.....me..mein cute hu !?!? Still giggling Sai says Aur nhi toh kya ? Mein toh aapko chida rhi thi par aap toh serious aur shocked ho gye * giggles * shakal dekhne chaiye thi apni .

Virat questioned incredulously Mazak ??? Sai says Aur nhi toh kya ? Aapko nhi pata kya aap kitne bade ho ? Aur vaise bhi aap jo har samay kehte rhte h na ki mein bacchi hu aur aap bade mature h usi baat ka badla le rhi thi aapki tang khichkar 😝😝

Virat then hopefully asked her Toh tumhe mein buddha nhi lagta ?? Sai being oblivious to Virat's plight says Of course not Virat sir !! Jyada se jyada 26-27 years ke honge aap aur iss age mein koi buddha hota h kya and rolled her eyes and sits on the dressing table.

Virat seeing Sai in answering mode decided to clear all his confusion and non - chalantly says Ha voh toh h par tumse toh thoda jyada bada hu na isleye puch raha tha. Sai rolled her eyes again and says Offo ! Aapne suna nhi h kya ki umar mein kya rakha hai soch milni chahiye aur aap koi mujhse bohot jyada mature nhi h voh toh aap humesha yeh Khadus aur Sadu sa face banake rakhte h na isleye log aapko jyada mature samajte h par aap mein bhi koi kam bachpana nhi h and looks at him teasingly.

Virat is delighted hearing Sai words and decide to take the conversation further but before he can say anything Sai spoke something.

Sai is having a wonderful conversation with her Virat sir today as she is very happy with his surprise on her birthday but then suddenly she sees a shadow moving at the bottom of the door of their bedroom and gets irritated.

Sai huffed in irritation and says quietly Lo aa gyi chokidarni didi , humari personal watchman ! Virat look at her questionedly and says Personal watchman ??? Sai gave him a deadpan look and says flatly Aapki best friend ke alawa koi aur h jo humare room ki chokidari karta h !?!? and pointed at the door towards the shadow.

Now it's Virat's turn to become irritated , Pakhi is getting more and more annoying day by day and he is getting more furious at her interruptions between him and his wife even after warning her to not do that again and again. And he won't deny that chokidarni didi is a very apt name for Pakhi.

Both Sai and Virat get up from the chair and the table and moved towards the door to give Pakhi a piece of mind. Sai opens the door and crossed her arms and glared at Pakhi with Virat behind her glaring at Pakhi too. Pakhi jumped when the door opened suddenly and get scared when she looked at the glaring couple and starts thinking quickly for a excuse and stammered Umm....voh...voh mein ha..hawa kha rhi thi yha khule mein and tries to not look into their eyes. Sai becomes more furious listening to the lame excuse and stepped forward and pointed her finger at her to tell her how much she believes her pathetic excuse but suddenly stopped and takes a deep breath , looks into Pakhi's eyes and says Fayda he nhi h kuch kehne ka shrugs and goes into the room. Virat first looks at Sai surprised then himself gives Pakhi a look and says I agree ! and turns around and goes inside slamming the door at her face and shuts the curtains. Pakhi looks at the door gobsmacked for 5 mins straight and then runs towards her room crying and feeling insulted like always.

Inside the room Virat says Aaj lagta h suraj paschim se nikla h tabhi toh aaj tum bina kuch bole chup chap andar aa gyi , gussa bhi nhi kiya aakhir ye chamatkar kaise hua badbad Devi !? Sai already irritated because of Pakhi gets more irritated by Virat's words and turns around and says angrily Agar kuch bolne ka fayda ho toh bolu na aapki best friend pe aaj tak kisi baat ka koi farak pada h kya ? Nhi na toh mein kyu apni energy waste karu aur vaise bhi ab toh aadat ho gayi hai mujhe unki inn harkato ki !! and turns away from him and goes near the bed and scathingly says Aur vaise bhi aapko bhi toh bura lag jata na agar mein aapki pyaari best friend se kuch kh deti * huffs * best friend toh biwi ke beizzati karti rhe tab toh chup rehte h ha par agar biwi best friend ko kuch bol de toh O ho ! Jo gussa aata h ! Actually sara gussa toh mujhi par aata h na !!? and glares at Virat angrily.

Virat seeing her son angry curses himself in mind and runs towards her to pacify his wife but he slipped and fell on the bed along with Sai with him on top of her.

Sai yelps when she falls on the bed suddenly and opened her eyes and gets lost into her husband's intense brown eyes. They share a intense eyelock with each other. Virat moves his hand near her face a tucks a strand of hair behind her ear. Sai is feeling butterflies in her stomach because of the close proximity with Virat and starts blushing. She tries to avert her eyes to prevent her from getting completely lost in Virat's eyes. She squirms a little and stammers Aa...ab uth...uthne ke liye invitation chaiye kya aapko hathiye mu... mujhe saans lene mein pareshani ho rhi h her words bring Virat back to reality and he moves away quickly and mutters a apology.

They remain awkward and shy for a while when Virat suddenly says Are dekho kitna late ho gya h sona nhi h kya tumhe college bhi toh jana h chalo chalo ab so jate h !! Sai murmurs her agreement still feeling shy and starts making the pillow wall.

Virat who have moved towards his side sees the pillow wall and gets irritated and says Yeh Singarh Kila banana jaruri h kya !? Tum phle he itni jagah par soti ho aur upar se ye inta sara space cover kar leta h ! Tumhe mujhpe bharosa nhi h kya !? Sai forgets her shyness and answer back to him Are isme bharose vali konsi baat h ? Aur mein jyada jagah gherti hu ? Khena kya chate h aap ? Aur ye pillow wall aapke liye bana tha mere liye nhi ! Bhul gye kya !? Virat says Mere liye ??? Sai says Aur nhi toh kya uss din mera ye halka sa haath aapke upar aa gaya tha toh apki neend khul gyi thi na aur mujhe toh vaise bhi neend mein haath paer chalane ki aadat h agar kabhi galti se aapko lag gyi toh mujhse ladange ki mene kithe jor se maara aapko ! Chui mui kahi ke !

Virat though offended at her words suddenly get a idea and says Toh ye pillow wall agar mere liye h toh mein he kh rha hu ise hata do mujhe kam space ki vajah se neend nhi aati h aur promise mein tumse kuch nhi kahunga aur vaise bhi mein ek police officer hu meri fauladi body par yeh tumhare nazuk haath paron se koi farak nahi padega !! Sai is still annoyed with his previous comments doesn't pays much attention and says Han toh khud he hata lejeye and lays on the bed and sleeps turning away from him.

Virat is very surprised and delighted that his idea worked do a little victory dance and lays down to sleep himself quickly fearing she will change her mind and turns off the lights and close his eyes with a smile on his face.

In the middle of night Virat wakes up and finds his wife half cuddling to him with her hand on his stomach and head half on his shoulder but today instead of removing her hand he turns around and puts his arm around her waist and her head on his shoulder and cuddles with her. He falls asleep again with a content smile , only one thought in his mind Ab mujhe bhi neend mein haath paer chalane ke aadat ho gyi h.


The End !!

So please ignore if there are any grammatical mistakes and don't throw tomatoes at me however I won't mind chocolates 😜😜




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Posted: 4 years ago
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Lovely!!!

Many forgotten sweet stuffs were there!!! 💝💝

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Originally posted by: KashishSingh27

Hey guys 🤗🤗 this is my first story so do give me some pointers for improvement if you can please 😊😊 it will start from the scene where Sai showed Virat his grey hair.


Sai made Virat sit on the chair infront of the mirror. Sai teasingly says Dekhiye aapke na safed baal aane vale h iska matlab toh yhi h na ke aap buddhe hone vale h.


Virat is shocked hearing that but before he could say anything Sai further says Aur vaise bhi Grahpravesh vale din kaku ne bhi toh kaha tha ke mein aapse aadhi umar ki hu , toh tab mein the 18 years ki toh aap approx 36 years ke hue na aur iss hisab se toh lagbhag jab apne 12th pass kia hoga tab toh mein paida he hui hongi 😜😜 and then turned her face to side to hide her grin. Still in shocked state Virat asked her Sai...mein.....mein tumhe 36 years ka lagta hu !?!? Sai enjoying Virat's shock asked him innocently Kyu ? Aap nhi ho ? * gasp * matlab app isse bhi jyada old ho ? Bappa ! Yeh kis buddhe se shaadi ho gyi meri.


If Virat was shocked before then now there are no words to describe his shocked state. But before he could say anything Sai bursted into peals of laughter.

Sai sees the incredulous and hysterical look on Virat's face and can't control herself and bursted out laughing. She goes to stand beside the chair and pulled Virat's cheeks and says Aww ! Virat Sir aao kitne cute ho ! Virat's cheeks turned red and his eyes widened , he stammered Huh ! Mein.....me..mein cute hu !?!? Still giggling Sai says Aur nhi toh kya ? Mein toh aapko chida rhi thi par aap toh serious aur shocked ho gye * giggles * shakal dekhne chaiye thi apni .

Virat questioned incredulously Mazak ??? Sai says Aur nhi toh kya ? Aapko nhi pata kya aap kitne bade ho ? Aur vaise bhi aap jo har samay kehte rhte h na ki mein bacchi hu aur aap bade mature h usi baat ka badla le rhi thi aapki tang khichkar 😝😝

Virat then hopefully asked her Toh tumhe mein buddha nhi lagta ?? Sai being oblivious to Virat's plight says Of course not Virat sir !! Jyada se jyada 26-27 years ke honge aap aur iss age mein koi buddha hota h kya and rolled her eyes and sits on the dressing table.

Virat seeing Sai in answering mode decided to clear all his confusion and non - chalantly says Ha voh toh h par tumse toh thoda jyada bada hu na isleye puch raha tha. Sai rolled her eyes again and says Offo ! Aapne suna nhi h kya ki umar mein kya rakha hai soch milni chahiye aur aap koi mujhse bohot jyada mature nhi h voh toh aap humesha yeh Khadus aur Sadu sa face banake rakhte h na isleye log aapko jyada mature samajte h par aap mein bhi koi kam bachpana nhi h and looks at him teasingly.

Virat is delighted hearing Sai words and decide to take the conversation further but before he can say anything Sai spoke something.

Sai is having a wonderful conversation with her Virat sir today as she is very happy with his surprise on her birthday but then suddenly she sees a shadow moving at the bottom of the door of their bedroom and gets irritated.

Sai huffed in irritation and says quietly Lo aa gyi chokidarni didi , humari personal watchman ! Virat look at her questionedly and says Personal watchman ??? Sai gave him a deadpan look and says flatly Aapki best friend ke alawa koi aur h jo humare room ki chokidari karta h !?!? and pointed at the door towards the shadow.

Now it's Virat's turn to become irritated , Pakhi is getting more and more annoying day by day and he is getting more furious at her interruptions between him and his wife even after warning her to not do that again and again. And he won't deny that chokidarni didi is a very apt name for Pakhi.

Both Sai and Virat get up from the chair and the table and moved towards the door to give Pakhi a piece of mind. Sai opens the door and crossed her arms and glared at Pakhi with Virat behind her glaring at Pakhi too. Pakhi jumped when the door opened suddenly and get scared when she looked at the glaring couple and starts thinking quickly for a excuse and stammered Umm....voh...voh mein ha..hawa kha rhi thi yha khule mein and tries to not look into their eyes. Sai becomes more furious listening to the lame excuse and stepped forward and pointed her finger at her to tell her how much she believes her pathetic excuse but suddenly stopped and takes a deep breath , looks into Pakhi's eyes and says Fayda he nhi h kuch kehne ka shrugs and goes into the room. Virat first looks at Sai surprised then himself gives Pakhi a look and says I agree ! and turns around and goes inside slamming the door at her face and shuts the curtains. Pakhi looks at the door gobsmacked for 5 mins straight and then runs towards her room crying and feeling insulted like always.

Inside the room Virat says Aaj lagta h suraj paschim se nikla h tabhi toh aaj tum bina kuch bole chup chap andar aa gyi , gussa bhi nhi kiya aakhir ye chamatkar kaise hua badbad Devi !? Sai already irritated because of Pakhi gets more irritated by Virat's words and turns around and says angrily Agar kuch bolne ka fayda ho toh bolu na aapki best friend pe aaj tak kisi baat ka koi farak pada h kya ? Nhi na toh mein kyu apni energy waste karu aur vaise bhi ab toh aadat ho gayi hai mujhe unki inn harkato ki !! and turns away from him and goes near the bed and scathingly says Aur vaise bhi aapko bhi toh bura lag jata na agar mein aapki pyaari best friend se kuch kh deti * huffs * best friend toh biwi ke beizzati karti rhe tab toh chup rehte h ha par agar biwi best friend ko kuch bol de toh O ho ! Jo gussa aata h ! Actually sara gussa toh mujhi par aata h na !!? and glares at Virat angrily.

Virat seeing her son angry curses himself in mind and runs towards her to pacify his wife but he slipped and fell on the bed along with Sai with him on top of her.

Sai yelps when she falls on the bed suddenly and opened her eyes and gets lost into her husband's intense brown eyes. They share a intense eyelock with each other. Virat moves his hand near her face a tucks a strand of hair behind her ear. Sai is feeling butterflies in her stomach because of the close proximity with Virat and starts blushing. She tries to avert her eyes to prevent her from getting completely lost in Virat's eyes. She squirms a little and stammers Aa...ab uth...uthne ke liye invitation chaiye kya aapko hathiye mu... mujhe saans lene mein pareshani ho rhi h her words bring Virat back to reality and he moves away quickly and mutters a apology.

They remain awkward and shy for a while when Virat suddenly says Are dekho kitna late ho gya h sona nhi h kya tumhe college bhi toh jana h chalo chalo ab so jate h !! Sai murmurs her agreement still feeling shy and starts making the pillow wall.

Virat who have moved towards his side sees the pillow wall and gets irritated and says Yeh Singarh Kila banana jaruri h kya !? Tum phle he itni jagah par soti ho aur upar se ye inta sara space cover kar leta h ! Tumhe mujhpe bharosa nhi h kya !? Sai forgets her shyness and answer back to him Are isme bharose vali konsi baat h ? Aur mein jyada jagah gherti hu ? Khena kya chate h aap ? Aur ye pillow wall aapke liye bana tha mere liye nhi ! Bhul gye kya !? Virat says Mere liye ??? Sai says Aur nhi toh kya uss din mera ye halka sa haath aapke upar aa gaya tha toh apki neend khul gyi thi na aur mujhe toh vaise bhi neend mein haath paer chalane ki aadat h agar kabhi galti se aapko lag gyi toh mujhse ladange ki mene kithe jor se maara aapko ! Chui mui kahi ke !

Virat though offended at her words suddenly get a idea and says Toh ye pillow wall agar mere liye h toh mein he kh rha hu ise hata do mujhe kam space ki vajah se neend nhi aati h aur promise mein tumse kuch nhi kahunga aur vaise bhi mein ek police officer hu meri fauladi body par yeh tumhare nazuk haath paron se koi farak nahi padega !! Sai is still annoyed with his previous comments doesn't pays much attention and says Han toh khud he hata lejeye and lays on the bed and sleeps turning away from him.

Virat is very surprised and delighted that his idea worked do a little victory dance and lays down to sleep himself quickly fearing she will change her mind and turns off the lights and close his eyes with a smile on his face.

In the middle of night Virat wakes up and finds his wife half cuddling to him with her hand on his stomach and head half on his shoulder but today instead of removing her hand he turns around and puts his arm around her waist and her head on his shoulder and cuddles with her. He falls asleep again with a content smile , only one thought in his mind Ab mujhe bhi neend mein haath paer chalane ke aadat ho gyi h.


The End !!

So please ignore if there are any grammatical mistakes and don't throw tomatoes at me however I won't mind chocolates 😜😜




I loved it. It was very cute and very light OS. Just what we needed right now.

You are a brilliant writer. Would love to read more of your stories❤

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Posted: 4 years ago
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such a cute update kashish.....

chowkidarni didi

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Ohh that was such a cute OS. 😳

The nok jhok, the fight, the teasing, the anger... all in one. 😆

Veeru the smart boy. ☺️

Just loved how he said that he also has learned to use his hands and legs. ☺️ Bahana bahana to touch biwi. 🤣

It was nice reading. Do write more. 👍🏼

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Originally posted by: ShipIsSailing

I loved it. It was very cute and very light OS. Just what we needed right now.

You are a brilliant writer. Would love to read more of your stories❤

Thank you 🤗🤗 it's my first story and your words are very encouraging.

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Originally posted by: MuguetDScorpion

Ohh that was such a cute OS. 😳

The nok jhok, the fight, the teasing, the anger... all in one. 😆

Veeru the smart boy. ☺️

Just loved how he said that he also has learned to use his hands and legs. ☺️ Bahana bahana to touch biwi. 🤣

It was nice reading. Do write more. 👍🏼

Thank you 🤗

Sairat won't be Sairat without nok jhok and teasing 😝 aur gussa toh dono ko he bohot aata hai 🤣

He really is very smart 🤭

His mind runs very fast when it comes to his wifey 😝😝

Thank you again ☺️

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Such a cute, cute take, Kashish!!!!

Instead of that painful sequence, now this one will stay inside my brain...

Awww....🤗

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Posted: 4 years ago
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Loved it...I wish this is how it happened in the show

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Posted: 4 years ago
#10

This is such an adorable take!!! You should write more often

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