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Posted: 8 years ago
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@Ria, Sowieee not going to edit😛🤣 Yush, we will have detail discussion on AT in respect to JODI name😛 and really like your writing style, everything is presented in such a manner and just felt compelled to read till the end, not daring to skip a single line. The best point, their inner emotions were explained to par excellence...loved reading, muaahhh!!! 👏
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: romaila

@Ria, Sowieee not going to edit😛🤣 Yush, we will have detail discussion on AT in respect to JODI name😛 and really like your writing style, everything is presented in such a manner and just felt compelled to read till the end, not daring to skip a single line. The best point, their inner emotions were explained to par excellence...loved reading, muaahhh!!! 👏

Abhi too we can't spam on AT... 🤣...

Edited by BabyHimavari - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: BabyHimavari

Abhi too we can't spam on AT... 🤣...


Thoda...Thoda spam karenge na🤣 Cya there later!
Chalo got to know you are on my side😛😛😛...pulls your cheeks😳🤗
Edited by romaila - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: burn-shine-live

Awesome update..

Meera , name is good👍🏼
Their Nok-jhok
Even I want to know Rangeela ki loyalty ne 180 degree turn kaise le liya😛🤣
Love ho Gaya hoga

Update soon..

Thanks a lot kajal...glad that you are liking them..😳...
and girl name is also approved... mann i was so tensed...😆😆
hugss..🤗
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: sawaira

Haye, so wish watching something like this in the show and perfect girl like Meera for Rangeela👍🏼
Awesome update and interesting start.
Next update please!

Thx a lot..😛
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Thank you for this wonderful FF.
Rangeela and Meera.
Update soon.
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Posted: 8 years ago
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OMG! Wow Ria ...amazing start brilliant chapter and I loved the fact that the narrator is Meera..Would love to hear from Rangeela though 😳 and I know that would come eventually ...

The concept is really intriguing and the dialogues are apt!

Loved it <3

waiting for the next update and please make it soon 😛 warna bin taar ka current laga dungi 🤣
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Originally posted by: BabyHimavari

Thanks a lot kajal...glad that you are liking them..😳...
and girl name is also approved... mann i was so tensed...😆😆
hugss..🤗

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Posted: 8 years ago
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Ch-2

"MEERA!!!..."

And my feet immediately stopped on the exit, thumping my heart in heavy pace as I heard my actual name after long from someone's mouth. It was long... so long... I didn't remember when someone called me by that name. For these past one month I was living the identity of someone else. I was almost about to forget that who actually I am. Meera!!.. A girl who choose to fight her own destiny rather than accepting the harsh reality!!

Slowly I turned back from the doorstep. He was standing at the same position beside the bone fire. The flames had created a light and dark contrast on his feature. He was so silent than usual, watching over me with his sharp eyes, as if trying to peer into my mind. That was awkward, really awkward!! That breathless silent, the uneven thumping of heart as I looked into his eyes and felt the shiver running down my back getting caught by it's unknown intensity.

I still remember the moment when we first met that dangerous yet odd personality and at the very time his eyes was the first thing which caught me. For the past months going through the rivalry I get to notice him closely enough. He had been always a puzzle to me, sometimes ruthlessly unkind and heartless, sometimes just like a child especially when he was with his bosom friends.

The odd silence was getting on my nerves and the chill too. Taking a huge breath I looked away. My chest felt so tight at the moment as if I was not taking breath at all.

"Kya huya?!..." his voice looked a bit stammered when he talked after that odd prolonged silence and made me look back to his face again. He seemed a bit confused too by his expression as he was scratching his hairs.

"Yee bhi thara asli naam naa hain kya?!" he asked with a little annoyed voice.

"Nahin!!... Woo..." even I was feeling confused at the moment. I was not getting what to say to him, "Woo main bas soch rahi thi...tumhe kaise pata chala... maine too kabhi tumhe bataya nahin..." my question sounded somehow stupid.

"woo...thari saheliyan thare koo issi naam se too bulati thi..." he answered with that same awkward voice. Silence again grasped us for a little while. After a moment I remembered that I was about to leave the place. So I again turned behind to go out of the place.

"Ohh madam.,,, Ruko..." I just stepped out and his irritating voice hit again. Though I had least interest to stop, I couldn't escape the natural authority of his command. He stormed at my side and looked towards me with annoyance and anger mixed expression.

"Bawali ho gayi hain key?!!.." he asked with quite irritated voice, "Kab se bole jaa raha hoon bahar mat jaa khatra hain... Thare koo sunayi nahin deta?!!"

"haan offcourse mujhe sunayi deta hain..." I said greeting my teeth, "But tumhare sath yahan rahene se too acha hain ki main bahar jaa kee risk le loon!!"

"Acha?!!... Risk lena hain aap ko?!!" he said with that hidden sarcasm in his annoyed voice, "Jaaoo... saukh se jaoo... acha hain... Mhara bhi dimag pak gaya hain free kaa lecture sun ke..." he looked away making an annoyed face crossing his hands on his chest. Throwing him an angry glance I stepped out from the place finally and rushed down the stony stair steps which were leading me down the hill. It was a real tough task, The night was dark and there was not a single light. For some moment I almost lost my track. But anyhow I found again. The light of flames from the cave was clearing my pathway for while but at the moment it was gone too. I looked back and couldn't found anything rather than darkness and the night sky above. I understood that I was far away from the cave. For a moment I stopped as I remembered his face again. He looked annoyed when he let me go, more than that he seemed conceited. I might be wrong too for the second fact.

I took a deep breath and composed myself. I couldn't waste my time thinking about the unnecessary things. I didn't know why my heart was feeling heavy, it was grasping me from the very moment he told me to leave the place.

However I moved forward. My long ghaghra was making a big obstacle on my pathway rather than anything. As I was rushing down holding the big hem I was feeling like scrapping away its bottom part so that I could have some comfort, just like I used to do in my childhood days but at the very moment I couldn't laugh inwardly on my stupid thoughts. Mahnn!!...

My sixth sense alerted me as I heard some footsteps coming on my way. I was startled for a while. But soon I understood that I had to hide. My eyes got habituated with the darkness at that time and I could slightly visualize the surroundings. I could see a huge boulder at the side of my track. I quickly moved behind it and waited there holding my breath and pounding heart. Soon I saw some people reaching there with tourches in their hand, and the metallic body of AK 47 they were holding gleamed in the torch light. My heart bit stopped for a moment in tension. They must be some of those goon who were searching for me everywhere.

"Arey lallan?!.. Thara dimag kharap hoo gaya hain key?!" I could listen to their voice from my hiding place, "Gaon kaa rasta chor ke idhar pahari pe dhundne ayya hain?!...arey woo chori idhar kaise ayegi?!"

"Arey chup sey... Yaad nahin malik nee kya kahan tha?!... Chappa chappa chan maarna hain... Chori hain too iss kaa matlab yee naa ki asani se mil jave gi..." Another frustrated voice spoke. I heard their footstep moving each and every places and I was seating on my hiding place breathlessly.

"Pata nahin... Is time pe rangeela kidhar gayab hoo gaya... agar woo rahete too humein itni bhaga dauri thori naa karna parta..." an irritated voice hit my ear surprising me for a while. So they really didn't know Rageela's whereabouts. He brought me there on his own!!... But Why?!!...

"Arey woo chori idhar nahin sey...chalo.. niche chalte hain!!..." another voice suggested.

"Nahi... abhi bhi upar dekhna baki hain... thare koo yaad nahin... is pahari ke upar ek gufa sey... Chupne ke liye khari jagah sey woo..." that man named lallan speaks.

"haan chalo... upar dhundte hain..." I heard their joint agreement. A slight worry rose in my mind as I heard them going towards the cave. I hoped Rangeeela left the place by the time. But at the very next moment I thought that why the heck I was bothering about him? Even if those goon find him up there they were surely not going to harm him at all. He was their Malik's KHASS after all.

Some moment ago when the footstep got faint enough I stood up leaving a big breath. I paced quickly on my pathway but damn to my long ghaghra... It got strangled with something and I fell hard on my face.

"Ouch!!..." I couldn't stop the loud moan came out of my mouth. Damnnn!!!... Why didn't I changed the dress before running away.

I stood up cleaning up myself. I could feel burn near my knee but I ignored them for a while. I was about to go back on my track but again the sound of footsteps hit my ear. Again a cold wave hit my back as I understood that they were coming back. They might have heard the sound of my fall. I was stuck badly at the place. There was not a single place to hide around. I understood that I have to rush down the mountain before they catches me which seemed totally impossible. I was still in a good height and if I rush madly in the darkness I could fell down on stones again causing a fatal injury.

The footstep sounds were reaching nearby and I had to do something quick. At some distance I could see the hilly slope which might provide me a shelter. Without thinking hard I rushed to that place. But as I reached there I understood that it was impossible to even put a single step on the steep slope and there was a huge gorge underneath. I understood that I was stuck badly.

"Koond jaao...!" A known thick voice almost thumped my heart as it spoke to my ear. My step got misplaced out of shock and I was almost about to slip down the deep gorge. But a firm hand caught me before that.

Edited by BabyHimavari - 8 years ago
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Posted: 8 years ago
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Awesome update...and said before am loving your writing style and the detailed explanation on the emotion part👏

Acha what is Kund jao?😕 Ek baat bolo, u know Haryanvi?😲

This hide and seek, her running away from him and Him trying to protect her from malik k gunde is worth reading! Something I would love watching in the show but with a new girl in town-obviously!😳

Dono ko zara kopche mein thodi der aur rakhna...u know maal milne ka chances high hote hain😛

Next update soon 😎

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