MG OS UNFORGIVABLE SIN Updated on 7-7-2014

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Hi friends,


Here I just try to write an os but in a lyrical way. Though it was not in a potery. But the song which I choose is very important in this OS. So I have a request to all of you please don't skip the lyrics. To feel the subject it is very necessary that you read each and every word of song too along with the update.


Love you all 😳
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Posted: 11 years ago
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UNFOGIVABLE SIN


AVOIDENCE, humilation, insult, tears and rage are the only gift Princess Geetakshi get from her marriage. Daily she face his rage and abusive word. He wont leave a chance to express his rage towards her. After all she is only his prize he get after defeating her father. A doll send by her father on the name of compromise. Still she wont hate him and accept this drama done on the name of marriage. She even accept him as her husband,but Maan only brought her to satisfy his ego. He never looked at her with love. Always treated her just mere salve of his. She never complaints and do her all duties.

Kyun na bole mo se mohan kyun
Hai roothe roothe mohan yun
Kaise manaaun haai kaise manaau
Kyun na bole mo se mohan kyun
Hai roothe roothe mohan kyun
Kaise manaaun haai kaise manaau
Un binn kate naa raina
Unn binn aawe na ik pal chaina
Unn bin jeeun tto kaise main jeeu'n haay..
Bahe naina,Bhare morey Naina
Jhare morey naina
Mohe naina sune naahi kehna, bahe morey naina
Bahe naina Bhare morey Naina
Jhare morey naina
Mohe naina sune naahi kehna, bahe morey naina

Geetaksi tried harder to change his rudness towards her. Poor solu wont understand what wrong she had done. Her little heart is so soft towards everyone that she wont able to kept anger for anyone,so how for him. He is her husband.

Maan is filled with rage. Even his won not calmed him. Once Geetakshi's father insult him. That graved like a pine in his heart. He vowed to destroy him and he done it but still his anger never pasify. He insult Geetakshi day and night. Days converted in a month and month in months. But no change in his behaviour come. Infact it increased day by day.

Destiny too like helped him in tourtering her and add more pain to her life. She is bearing his rudness and abusive words. And that is just not enough,destiny bring Ruprekha in her life. She came Aryanagar,his city and become dancer to his court. But their relation not bounds there. Maan start spending his nights with her. He knew it will give more pain to Geetakshi and loved doing this only.

Haan Naino ke dwaare aane ke waade baandhe
Aise bolo kaahe
Chokhat pe dil ki aahat rakhi hai
taako pe hai torey saaye
Unn binn unhe manaye
Unn bin kabhi jo unko rijhaaye
Unn bin chhale hai mora ye jiya
Bahe naina Bhare morey Naina
Jhare morey naina
Mohe naina sune naahi kehna,
bahe morey naina
Bahe naina Bhare morey Naina
Jhare morey naina
Mohe naina sune naahi kehna,
bahe morey naina
Haan


Geetakshi too bear it all but on the day of karwachuth. She demands him to came though only for few minutes. That moments Maan is with Ruprekha. He feld annoyed how dare she summon him. Maan went but not only to scold her.

He even threw the plate from her hands. 'tumhari himmat b kaise hui hume aadesh dene ki.' Maan grasped her firmly from her hairs. She winced in pain. Tears rolling from her eyes but failed to melt him. He was so blind in his revenge that not able to see her love for him. He pushed her away and kicked away her all preprations,leaving her alone and insulted.

Few more days passed. Fortunately Geetakshi saw Ruprekha with someone. She followed them secreatly and cames to know about the conspiracy against Maan. She alerts him but he just ignore her. For him she is not more then dust.

She wants to protect him so start keeping her eye on ruprekha. And finally the day come when she determined to convert her words into an action. Maan drunk so much and reach to an intoxic state. He was half laying on the chair,when ruprekha pulled her long knief to stab in his heart. The edge was already dipped in poision. She raised her hand and attack with full force,but her eyes popped out when Geetakshi came in between and knief stabbed in her delicate body. Her shriek broke his intoxination. His eyes too widened with shock. Blood is oozing out at full pace from her wound. Maan holds her as she is falling. Her vision going blurred and due to the effect of poision blood start coming from her mouth too.

MAAN dragged out the knief from her body and threwit on rooprekha. It will stabbed in her back as she was running from there. Maan shouts and all guards came inside. He commands them to brought raj vaidye.(doc)

Komal badi hai saansan ki dori
Roothe se bhi toot jaaye
Baawan tarah se jee ko manaaya
Khoje ajaunh tori raahe
Unn bin unhe main paaun
Unn bin unhe main garwa lagaaun
Unn bin unhe mora jee lage haay...
Bahe naina Bhare morey Naina
Jhare morey naina
Mohe naina sune naahi kehna,bahe morey naina
Bahe naina Bhare morey Naina
Jhare morey naina
Mohe naina sune naahi kehna, bahe morey naina
Bahe naina Bhare morey Naina
Jhare morey naina
Mohe naina sune naahi kehna, bahe morey naina
Bahe naina Bhare morey Naina
Jhare morey naina
Mohe naina sune naahi kehna, bahe morey naina


'Geetakshi aankhe kholo.',Maan pleading her to keep her eyes open,but poision mixeing with her blood at fulll pace and her eyes turn dizzy.

He hold the area of her wound to stop bleeding but no use. So ghe shout again on his guards why for tooking so much time in bringing doc.

'koi labh nahi hai maharaj. Ab bahut der ho chuki hai.' she said in a broken voice.

'kuchh nahi hoga. Geetakshi himmat rakho. Abhi raajvaidye aa jayenge.' He is consoling but not confirmed to whom. To her or to himself that he get a second chance to rectify his all sins,of tourturing pure and innocent soul unnecessarily.

She smiles. 'humesha maine apki aankho ye dekhna chaha jo aaj hai. Agar mujhe ye pata hota ki meri mrityu pe hi milna hai to pehle hi main mrityu ko gale laga leti. Ab koi shikayat nahi hai. Bas sukoon hai ki in antim shano me aap mere pas hai.' She had no complaints no issue just a happiness of dying in his arms.

He snuggled her. 'kuchh nahi hoga tume.' he repeating again and again,till he found that her breath stop falling on her chest. He parted her to glance her face. She closed her eyes for forever,leaving this world behind which is full of hatred. Doc came. He checked her pulse and lowered his head.

He asked for forgiveness and declared her dead. Maan cried as loud as much he can but it was his punishment for his Unforgivable Sins. She left him alone with his remorse only.

Her body turned into ashes but her love for him live with him to tormented him to death. His life become his biggest punishment.

'jab tum pas thi kabhi tumhare pyar ki kadar nahi ki. Aaj tumhare bina ye jeevan bhoj hai,lekin ye saanse hi ab meri saza hai.'


she died to make him a good human being. A better king and she sucedded in that. Maan become a very good king taking care of his people. He spread happiness to his peopleand kept darkness and loliness for himself. Years passed but he never gave her place to anyone in his life. All his ministers pleads for second marraige but he stick with her burdned and lonely life...


ALL STORIES ARE NOT TURNED INTO A LOVE SAGA.

"BADNASEEB HOTE HAI JINHE PYAR NAHI MILTA,

LEKIN UNSE ZADA BADNASEEB HOTE HAI WO JINHE SACHHA PYAR TO MILTA HAI PAR WO USKI KADAR NAHI KARTE OR KHO DETE HAI..."



Edited by richa_kapoor - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Congos 4 ur os
Edited by _CookieMonster_ - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Indeed all stories doesn't end on happy note...
Geetankashi by sacrificing her life gave meaning to maans life...
Want read small ss on this concept but this time maan on geet place
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Muje end ni acha laga
I hate d end overall story achi thi
Muje iske end pe itna Rona ni aya Jitna ye soch ke ke apne ye story likhi kaise muje yad hai ek bar apne sad story padi thi ap roye the Bahut as u don't like sad ending
Pls it's a request age se aisi story mat likhna
I cried a lot may pe ap ko pata ho main kyu roya
Story Bahut achi likhi gayi thi gane ke sath vo hi end suit karta hai kash main end change kar sakti
I m really sorry if Une hurted by my cmnt but Jo mere dil mein aya kehe diya
I m extremely sorry if anybody or u r hurted
Pls it's my request nt to write a story like this
Ab story ki bat geetakshi ke sath maan ne Bahut bura kiya maan ko saza milni chayie thi aur aise mili
Well written all d emotion but nt liked d end sorry 😭
Edited by lovemaaneet90 - 11 years ago
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Posted: 11 years ago
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very emotional os 😭
supperb richu
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Posted: 11 years ago
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So sad part.. Maan got in his life.. what he deserved.. but Geetaksi she didn't deserve this poor girl.. he tortured her still she gave her life for him.. she loved him truly.. life doesn't ive second chance.. really... 😭
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Posted: 11 years ago
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Awesome story ready made me cry u said right all saga doesnot have a happy ending
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Posted: 11 years ago
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i hate u 😭
tune subah subah muje pm kiya
for me maaneet means happy ending
and u broke my heart 🄺
muje kuch nai pata bus tu zinda kar geet ko
part 2 likh 😔
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that was a brilliant story
short n sweet
with heavy emotions n left the pain instilled after reading it
gud work dear

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