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COLOGY

@COLOGY

Rocker

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Posted: 11 years ago

Does this have any more parts?

I actually felt like watchng a complete movie, ofcourse only in Maan's POV !

I liked the flow of events... sometimes it becomes difficult to incorporate everything in one chapter then elaborating them in parts... i'd be pleased if you make this OS with more parts :)

Couldn't get what was in Geet's expression of hate for Maan! May be i'd wait for you to explain or those amazing ppl with lots of brain to dissect each para n make me understand😆

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BloodDiamond

@BloodDiamond

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

Was he assigned to kill or save ? very intriguing .

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kaamchorni

@kaamchorni

Voyager

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Posted: 11 years ago

😲

You have to give me a moment after writing something so powerful.

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If there was ever any doubt that music is the natural companion of stories, you've shattered it. Without a single sound, I heard it all.

I don't quite know how to word this without sounding psychotic but every part of this piece is full of beauty, even the destruction at the end. It was like watching everything in a beautiful, slow motion - a perfect way to describe the first half but pretty morbid for the second.

You write in such a way that I am stood right there, watching in awe and struck dumb with horror, only able to stare as you make the world fall apart so poetically.

I hope that doesn't sound too insane.

Edited by kaamchorni - 11 years ago

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Hibernated

Posted: 11 years ago

Wow!

The senselessness of violence scattered like blood on a pristine and pure relationship.

I loved the use of the piano to portray each part of their journey together, from their start to their end.

Foz, I am loving these short pieces so much.

Wonderful writing.👏

Edited by dqno1 - 11 years ago

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Flame_of_Forest

@Flame_of_Forest

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

beautiful and emotional one...the piano resonating his heart and mind state...

did not get whether he killed her as she was the witness of his deeds...or was he serving for the country and she was victim of war or something...but whatever may be the reason, he loved her so much that he could not keep himself away from her and chooses the same fate as hers...

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Flame_of_Forest

@Flame_of_Forest

Dazzler

Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: Flame_of_Forest
beautiful and emotional one...the piano resonating his heart and mind state...

did not get whether he killed her as she was the witness of his deeds...or was he serving for the country and she was victim of war or something...but whatever may be the reason, he loved her so much that he could not keep himself away from her and chooses the same fate as hers...

oh.. was she the one behind the bomb blast...😲

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Kalam.

@Kalam.

Explorer

Posted: 11 years ago

Originally posted by: COLOGY
Does this have any more parts?
I actually felt like watchng a complete movie, ofcourse only in Maan's POV !

I liked the flow of events... sometimes it becomes difficult to incorporate everything in one chapter then elaborating them in parts... i'd be pleased if you make this OS with more parts :)

Couldn't get what was in Geet's expression of hate for Maan! May be i'd wait for you to explain or those amazing ppl with lots of brain to dissect each para n make me understand😆

It's a one shot but I am contemplating a few more parts to recall the story from her point of view...

Well the basic premise of the story is they were in love but war & conflict tore them apart - she became the citizen, he became the soldier and they were on opposing sides... as the innocent, she sees it from her perspective and the inhumane torture of so many civilians... it would be difficult for one not to express dislike towards the enemy... It wasn't hatred reflected in her eyes though. They were in love before things turned horribly sour... do you think love can so easily shift into hatred? Perhaps it can, given the circumstance... I'd like to know what you think :)

Thank you for the comment :)

Originally posted by: BloodDiamond
Was he assigned to kill or save ? very intriguing .

Originally to kill - he was a soldier of the opposition... but I guess he did end up saving her in the end, in his own way...

Originally posted by: kaamchorni
😲

You have to give me a moment after writing something so powerful.

- -

If there was ever any doubt that music is the natural companion of stories, you've shattered it. Without a single sound, I heard it all.

I don't quite know how to word this without sounding psychotic but every part of this piece is full of beauty, even the destruction at the end. It was like watching everything in a beautiful, slow motion - a perfect way to describe the first half but pretty morbid for the second.

You write in such a way that I am stood right there, watching in awe and struck dumb with horror, only able to stare as you make the world fall apart so poetically.

I hope that doesn't sound too insane.

If the story left you speechless, your comment has left me speechless. It is not insane at all, and I genuinely don't know what to say. Thank you, it honestly means the world to me.

Originally posted by: dqno1
Wow!

The senselessness of violence scattered like blood on a pristine and pure relationship.

I loved the use of the piano to portray each part of their journey together, from their start to their end.

Foz, I am loving these short pieces so much.

Wonderful writing.👏

Thank you so much Avi. Coming from a wonderful writer as yourself, this is a compliment I will remember very fondly.

Originally posted by: Flame_of_Forest

oh.. was she the one behind the bomb blast...😲

Your second assumption is correct - he was serving the country, she was the victim. All is fair in love and war as they say... perhaps a little too fair in this case...